Deepak's emotions -Ek Pita ka Dard - Page 4

Originally posted by: kriya17

great work urmi di

thanks for the reply dear...

Woww Urmi...this was so touching!!!you made me cry!😭
awesome sweetz!

Originally posted by: rituloveskmh

Woww Urmi...this was so touching!!!you made me cry!😭
awesome sweetz!

thank you for reading my post and for such sweet comments ritz..

that is such an emotional post so beautifully written👏

Originally posted by: TheRoopsy

that is such an emotional post so beautifully written👏

thank you for your sweet reply dear...

It's brought tears in my eyes Urmi... I like deepak - the actor playing him is so sweet, teddy bear types, don't understand why mita always worries about his reactions...

Coming to your poem, it has captured the essence of the episode - wish cvs spent more time on these scenes than rama plotting...

Please write more and write often :-)

thanks for the pm :-)

Originally posted by: barbie2011

Hey All;

The turmoil that deepak is going thru right now had moved me a lot,i have tried to portray the pain and hurt that Deepak issuffering thru my poem.. I hope I have done justice to his emotions. Just a word before you read, this piece of writing is probably the most emotional of all my poems so far...it has so much pain that it is just unbearable, i dont know how Deepak is able to bear this pain...

EK Ummed Kesaath ghar se nikala tha,

Apni beti ke aankhon ke aanson jo pochne the,

Yakeen tha ki Gautam se ekbaar mulakat karlunga;

To koi na koi raasta jaroor nikal hi aayega,

Lekin ye kya dikha diya waqt ne mujhe,

Jaise saari umeed tutkar kar bikhar si gayi..

Jo Shak, Jo Dard main jhutlana chahta tha,

wo hi Kadva sach bankar mere smane aakar khada ho gaya tha;

Haan maine Gautam ko ek ladki , anjan ladki ke saath..

Haste Muskurate aur kuch jyada hi kareeb se ghulte -milte dekha..

Aankhon par jaise yakeen hi nahi ho raha tha,

Aur mera dil jaise dard se bhilakh utha tha,

Mann to kiya ki abhi jaakar gautam ko rok lu,

Is giri hui harkat ke liye , use sabke samne sazza du,

Lekin phir gudiya ka chehra aankhon ke samne aagaya,

Aur maine apne gusse ko, aur naarazgi ko wahi rokliya,

Tamasha banakar bhi kya matlab ikalta,

Aakhir meri beti aur poti ki zindagi ka jo sawaal tha...

Bada hi nazook sa mod hai, isse samabhlkar hi suljhana tha...

Badi mushkil se khud ko sambhal kar main wapas ghar pahoncha,

Raaste bhar jaise main apne kadamo ghasit raha tha...

Aankhon dekha sach maine meeta ko sunaya,

Darr gayi thi wo bhi,

Par jaane kyun is sach ko man hi nahi rahi thi,

Mujhe shayad koi galatfemi hui hai, aisa use lag raha tha,

Kaise samjhata use, main bhi ek baap hun,

Insaan ko pehchanane ki samajh hai mujhme..

Phir, maine apni nazaroon se apni naarazgi bayaan kar hi di

Apni betiya ko kya kahun, kaise kahun,

Yehi samajh nahi aaraha tha,

sab kuch kahin khatam na ho jaye

Is soch se dil betha jaa raha tha..

Tabhi ek aas lekar renu mere paas aayi,

Mere aur gautam ki mulakat ke baare main sach jaanan tha use...

Baat badi ghambhir thi, par usko chupakar to kuh nahi milta,

isliye badi himmat jutakar maine renu ko sab sach batahi diya,

Jaise koi kaanch girte hi tutjaata hai,

Usi tarah renu bhi ekdum se tut hi gayi

Uske aanson dekhkar, mere bhi aansu ruk nahi rahe the,

Lekin phir maine apni himmat banayi rakhi,

Mere sahare ki jarroorat thi use,

Us waqt main kaise kamzoor pad sakta tha..

Meeta ki baaton par yakin nahin tha muhes,

Par shayad ek aur mauka miljaye is shadi ko

Isi umeed se maine, meeta ki baaton main apna yakeen dikhaya

Apni beti ko apne kandhe ka sahar de,

keh to diya tha maine ki" Papa sab kuch thik kardenge"

Par kaise yehi samajh nahi aaraha hai..

Aaj pehle baar khud ko bahot majboor paa raha hun main...

Kash kahin se koi umeed dikhjaye,

Aur main ek baar phir apni bitiya aur gudiya ki zindagi sawaaar dun...

For the first time I have tried to portray for someone other than Navya..i hope you guys enjoy reading it.

Please press the LIKE button if you like my poem.

I'll look forward to all your replies,advices/comments as always...

Love you all

awesum..i'm luving it 👏

Awesome shayari as always urmi 😊

Even though I have missed watching Navya this entire week, i have been able to visualize it thru' the wonderful posts in the forum...

You have wonderfully expressed Deepak's feelings and truly very emotional one...
Keep writing wonderful lines and u can try to write a poem on daadi's feelings and I know u r the best person to write emotional shayaris...

awhhh (:

hey barbie...very touching lines...its so painful to go thru what navyas dad is going thru..esp after he has seen renu's pain n hurt n the creep gautam flirting..i just cant think of my dad going thru something like that...its so tough to be in his shoes...he has to be strong for the ladies n silently bear the pain ...a daughter whom he has brought up so close to his heart...he gave away n now the very hands which he thot wud be the safest is crunching it all...hope he does not have to see any sadness for navya...if ananth messes up things n navys gets into heartbreak, then deepak wud be the most hurt!!