Last Chance. A Rikara ss (updated part 8)

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi! I am new to this forum and this is my first approach on Rikara. I'll try to update this three shots fast. I hope you like it. Any form of positive criticism is welcome.
Warning: This three shots is absolutely clichd.
In this three shots, Anika and Gauri have come to know that they are real sisters, all thanks to Shivaay who investigated Gauri's life. He also knew the real reason behind Rikara's marriage but had not confronted Omkara regarding the same as he wanted Om to tell him first. Everyone in the family had happily accepted the recent changes except Omkara who still hated Gauri. This is the background of my TS. Here goes the first shot...
In Omkara's room.
O - Tumhe kya lagta hain Gauri ki tum Anika bhabhi ki behen ban gayi ho toh main tumhe maaf kar dunga? Are mujhe toh yeh soch kar ghinn aa raha hain ki bhabi ko jab pata chalega ki unki behen kitni giri huyi kisam ki ladki hain unhe kitna afsos hoga. Tum bhi toh us Nayantara aur Swetlana ki tarah ho. Sirf paiso ke liye logo ka ghar ujaarne wali.
Gauri had heard enough. The girl who never let anyone raise a finger on her was being insulted about her own character from the person she loved the most, her husband. She had let Om ruin her self worth but not this time. Tears pooled her eyes as she kept on hearing those false accusations that felt like whiplash everytime she heard them. Not anymore.
G- BAS!! She covered her ears with her hands as she shouted.
Omkara was shocked. The girl who never looked at him in the eye had finally raised her voice. Omkara stood petrified as Gauri continued.
G-Bahot sunli maine aapki bakwas ab aur nahi. Kitni baar kahu aapse ki main nirdosh hu. Maine koi galat kaam nahi kiya. Kitna rou, kitna bhi sar peetlu aap mera yakeen kabhi nahi karenge. Apko wahi dikhta haain jo aap dekhna chahte hain. Wohi samjhenge jo apko samajhna hain. Aapko yahin lagta hain na ki main ek jahil auraat hu? Thik hain. Main hu characterless. Us Sultana aur mujhmein koi fark nahi. Khush???
Gauri sat down on the bed with a thud looking straight into Omkara's eyes. Her eyes were fiery red and for the first time Omkara could understand what her eyes said. It was not anger or sadness. It was just hopelessness. The determination in her doe like eyes was gone. It was blank, absolutely devoid of any other emotion. Something that Omkara was not used to. The eyes that spoke volumes was suddenly silent. This tugged a string in Omkara's heart but his ego crushed it down to celebrate his final victory.
Omakara smirked.
O- Galat ho tum Gauri. Bohot galat. Tum Swetlana jaisi nahi ho. Swetlana toh bas ek chalbaaz aurat thi jisse dusro ka ghar todna aata tha. Tum toh dusro ki jaan lene se bhi nahi hichkichati. Woh cheater thi aur tum ek khooni ho. Woh tumse lakh guna behtaar hain Gauri Sharma.
Gauri looked down at her feet. Perhaps he was correct. She was the reason why Thakurain had killed herself. The crime she had committed was no less than murder. She was a murderer. Suddenly Gauri started feeling suffocated. The burden of taking someone's life was too heavy for her to bear. She slowly got up to her feet and looked at Omkara. Her eyes held an indecipherable emotion. She stared at him for a few seconds and then started walking towards the door.
Omkara was waiting for a reply, waiting for some reaction. A reaction that never came. He looked towards Gauri's retreating figure. She looked defeated and that gave him joy, he thought it did.
O - Ja kaha rahi ho tum? Apne paap ka bojh halka karne? Agar tumhe zara sa bhi pachtawa hain toh ek ehsaan karna. Kal ki puja mein maat aana. Ab bahu ho is gharki toh jaane ke liye bhi nahi keh sakta kyunki mere parivaar ko tumse bohot pyaar hain especially bhabi ko. Par main nahi chahta ki mera naam ek khooni ke saath jud jaaye. Samjhi tum??
Omkara got no response. He waited for a few moments. Nothing. He turned around to see the room empty. Gauri was gone.
O ( frustrared )- Yeh ladki!!!! Bhaad mein jaaye.
Omkara waited for her to return but when she did not even after two hours he was worried.
O - Kaha chali gayi yeh? Bhaag toh nahi gayi? Nahi itni badi jayedaad chodke nahi jayegi. Huh. Ro rahi hogi kahi baethke. Mujhe kya yeh kahi bhi jaaye. Maar...nahi use kuch huya toh bhabi seh nahi payegi. Pata nahi kya jaadu kiya hain sab pe.
Omakara laid down on the bed. He closed his eyes to sleep but the image of Gauri's hopeless eyes flashed in front of him. He sat up with a jolt.
O- Kya musibat hain. Ek toh chain se jeene nahi deti ab sone bhi nahi degi yeh aafat.
He forced himself back on bed and closed his eyes desperately trying to get rid of those haunting images. Finally he succeeded and fell into deep slumber.
Next morning.
The morning was eerily silent for Omakara. There was no chirping of birds. No tingling of bangles or that sweet voice that called him every morning waking him up from his sleep. Omkara squinted as the harsh sunrays entering the room from the window woke him up.
O- Gauri parde laga do!!!
No response.
Omkara slowly got up and looked around. No sign of Gauri. He checked the bathroom she was not there.
Maybe she is downstairs for the puja. Omakara thought.
O- Kaha tha usse mujhe uske saath puja main nahi baithna. Lagta hain mujhe hi kuch karna padega.
Omkara quickly showered and went downstairs. The house was being beautifully decorated under the supervision of Bua Maa for the Puja. All the family members were running around getting themselves ready. Omkara tried to look for Gauri but failed to get a glimpse of her.
Bua Maa (B) - Aree mera Omki-Shomki taiyaar hogaya. Kitna handsome lag raha hain. Nazar na lage.
Bua maa stared fussing around Omkara and rest of the Oberoi clan gathered around to watch the fun.
Jhanvi (J)- Are Om tum yahan ho. Gauri abhi tak taiyyar nahi huyi? Late ho raha hain beta bulake lao use.
Omkara was confused.
O-Woh niche nahi aayi???
Anika (A) - Nahi toh. Hum sab subha se yehi hain bas Gauri aur tum nahi the...
O- Par woh toh kamre main nahi hain I checked.
Shivaay (S)- Gayi kaha phir?
A- Room mein nahi thi? Tum dono ka phirse jhagda huya kya?
Here Omkara was tensed.
Kahi sach mein toh bhaag nahi gayi. He thought. He mentally cursed her for abandoning him in this situation.
B - Are Om kyu humesha taang karta hain meri bahu ko??? Gussa ho gayi na. Chal koi nahi usse dhundte hain aur phir use tu manale na. Samjha? Puja bhi karni hain. Sab milke jaldi dhundo use.
All of the Oberoi family started searching for Gauri. She was no where to be found. Everyone was tensed.
O- Yeh ladki bhi na. Kisi ke baare mein nahi sochti. Are jis family ne use itna pyaar diya use chodne se pehle unke izzat ka toh kheyal karti. Aaj itna bada function hain agar yeh sach mein bhaag gayi hain toh kya jawab dunga mein sabko? Sach face karne ka bhi dum nahi hain aur kehti hain main Dabanng Gauri hu. Kayar kahi ki.
The thought of Gauri running away really irked Omkara and not knowing the reason behind his feelings irritated him even more.
Shivaay noticed Omkara talking to himself. He found Gauri's sudden disappearance very fishy. He thought that time had finally come to confront Omkara.
S- Om, Gauri kahan hain?
O - Mujhe kaise pata hoga ki woh kaha hain?
S- Juth mat bol Om!!
Shivaay s shout made everyone halt in their places.
O- Shivaay!!
S - Mujhe laga tha ke tum dono ke beech jo bhi problems hain woh tum aapas mein lipta loge. Maine yeh nahi socha tha ke mera bhai apni hi biwi ko chupa ke rakhega because he is ashamed of her.
J- Shivaay yeh tum kya bole ja rahe ho.
O- Shivaay you don't know anything.
S- Mujhe sab pata hain Om. Sab kuch. Jab mein Gauri ke bare mein janne ke liye Barailley gaya tha tab se mujhe sab pata hain.
O- Tum Barailley gaaye the???
S- Toh tujhe kya lagta hain mujhe Gauri aur Anika ke behen hone ka pura confirmation kaha mila? Tabhi mujhe tum dono ki saari sacchai ka pata chal gaya tha.
A- Kaisi sacchai Shivaay? Kya bol kya rahe ho tum.
Shivaay narrated the whole incident of Rikara's marriage. Everyone was shocked.
S- Main toh wait kar raha tha ki kab Om aake mujhe sab sacchai bataye par...
O- Phir toh tumhe teh bhi pata hoga ki meri shaadi ek khooni se huyi hain. Jo ek nirdosh ki maut ki zimmedar hain.Aur phir bhi tum mujhse us khooni ke liye lad rahe ho Shivaay?
B- Khooni? Kaun khooni?
O- Haan Buaa Maa khooni. Gauri kuch paiso ke liye Kali Thakur se shaadi karne ke liye taiyar ho gayi jis ke karan Thakurain ne suicide kar liya. Aisi ladki ko khooni nahi toh aur kya kahu main?
S - Par Omkara yeh saach nahi hain. Kali Thakur ne Gauri ki maa ke jaan ke badle usse shadi karni chahi. She was forced into it.
Omkara was stunned by the answer. He refused to believe that his assumptions were false.
O- Yeh Gauri ka aur ek jhooth hain Shivaay. Pata nahi usne tumhe kya samjhaya hain...
S- Gauri ne mujhe kuch nahi kaha Om. Use toh yeh bhi nahi pata ki mujhe sab pata hain. Yeh sab mujhe Barailley ja ke pata chala. Ab toh sach sabke samne hain ab use lekar aao Om.
Omkara stood there in silence trying to digest the bare truth that had been thrown towards him like a dagger. Gauri was right. He was a selfish man. He blamed an innocent soul, called her a gold digger, a murderer and even stooped down enough to question her character. Her tear filled orbs flashed before his eyes. Those defeated eyes. He had to find her. Apologise.
Omkara! Omkara! Someone's shouting brought Omkara out of his thoughts.
O- Shivaay! Mujhe use dhoondh nikalna hain. Kal mujhse gussa hokar woh nikal gayi thi. Is..iska matlab woh saari raat ghar ke bahar rahi.
S- Kya kaha kaal tumne use. Shivaay roared in anger.
Omkara narrated the incident and before he could complete he felt a blow on his face.
Anika had slapped him.
A- How could you Omkara??? Agar meri behen ko kuch bhi huya main tumhe zindagi bhar maaf nahi karungi.
Omkara fell down on his knees, silent tears rolling down his face.
O- Mu..mujhe use dhoondhna hain...Shivaay use dhoondhna hain mujhe. Agar use kuch bhi huya mein kya karunga??? Uski maafi ke bina kaise...kaise ji paunga. Please. Om started panicking and he broke down.
However angry Shivaay might be he could not tolerate to see his brother in such a state.
S- Om. Om!!! He pulled Omkara up.
S- Woh compound se bahar nahi gayi hogi. Kyunki secuity tab hume inform kar deta. Yehi kahi hogi woh Om chalo dhund nikale use.
Omkara quickly wiped his face and started running outside the mansion. Everyone else too joined Om in his quest to find Gauri.
Omkara frantically started searching for her. Every nook and corner of the whole property. He left no stone unturned. But failed. There was no sign of her. Like she had just vanished into thin air. Defeated, Omkara sat on the ground, tears once again making their way down his cheeks. He closed his eyes letting them flow freely. As soon as he closed those black orbs the image of Gauri's smiling face flashed before his eyes. Her way of talking. Her catch phrase. Her Dabanng style. Her shocked eyes whenever he held her close while saving her or while trying to inflict some sort of pain. Slowly the happy images turned into fake smiles, teared up eyes and her tired face. Lastly those haunting defeated eyes of hers that had looked at him one last time before she had disappeared from his life. Once again Omkara jolted his eyes open. That last memory made his heart cold and his body shiver in an uncanny way like it was a bad omen. Omkara tried to remember the last time he had seen Gauri truly happy. His thoughts went back to their first meet in Barailley when they had first met and she had run his car over by a bulldozer. That joy of triumph in her eyes was perhaps the last time he had seen her happy. Ofcourse he had seen him as Chulbul but somehow his heart did not take that into consideration. A smile adorned his sad face as he recollected his memories with Chulbul and how Gauri had so fearlessly taken on herself every blow that had dared to come on Omkara.
His reverie was broken by Anika's crying shout, a noise that made his heart grip in fear. He rushes towards the source of the noise and what he saw there was enough to break his whole existence into a million pieces...

A cliffhanger. I hope you enjoyed till here. Part is on page 2.
Part 3 : Pg 3




Edited by Rudy1999 - 8 years ago

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Can we have Omkaara repenting for one more update?
The way he carelessly accuses Gauri of things are quite hurtful to Gauri and she doesnt deserve this.

Other than that this quite good

Also could you cooperate the dialogues in the story instead of being O: "..." A: "..." not that it isnt good it just breaks the flow of the story.

Other than that, kudos. Hope you stick around and write more.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I know circumstance can make anyone behave rude but this rude anyone can but judging and telling her to die is really a rude not rude it's like your soul is died too...
I hope omkara wont regret
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Very interesting. Looking forward to the next update.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This was fantastic... I loved ittt! Now I won't be able to sleep till the time I don't know what happens next lol ! But goood jobbb!
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This is too good . Update soon
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Awesome concept
Shivaay knows everything
I wonder if Om is such a sensitive person
How can he hurt.gauri till this extent

She was so broken
He made her believe she is a murderer
Glad shivaay made him realise everything
Ankia's slap was needed
Omkara deserved that

I wonder how Gauri is
U left at cliffhanger
Now waiting eagerly for next part
Update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice start. I wonder what happen. Please update soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi. Here is the second part of my story.



Shot 2 :

Gauri was lying on the floor of the outhouse storeroom her head on Anika's lap, who was continuously patting her then pale yellow cheeks, calling her name , demanding her to get up.
Rest of the Oberoi's had gathered around by then on hearing Anika's loud sobs and pleas. She looked utterly devastated and same was the condition of all others in the room. But Omkara's was worse. Watching his chirpy chiraiyya lying lifelessly on the cold stone floor made something in his heart stir with immense grief. Her once rosy face had an ugly yellow hue. Her bright , almost reflective eyes were closed. The smile that once adorned her face was gone and had been replaced by a grim, dark expression. But what caught Omkara's absolute attention was her plump pink lips which had turned into a light shade of purple, almost blue.
A thought or better said a possibility struck Omkara's mind at a lightening speed. Had she poisoned herself??? The mere thought of Gauri taking such a grave decision made Omkara's body cold. His eyes widened in fear, fear of losing her forever. He immediately bent down, hovering over Gauri's cold and limp body, almost snatching her from Anika's lap.
Gauri!!! Gauri!!! Please utho. Yeh kya natak laga ke rakha haain haan??? Sabko darane ka theka lekar rakha hain kya tumne?? Omkara half scolded, half cried. His voice choked as tears made their way down his jet black orbs yet again.
Mazak bohot huya Gauri!! He almost shouted getting no reaction from the girl who otherwise annoyed him to eternity.
Om humein use hospital lejana chahiye , came Shivaay's heavy and emotionless voice. Only Shivaay knew how much he wanted to break down right then. Of all the people in the house he loved Gauri the most, maybe even more than Anika. She had him wrapped around her little finger the moment she had called him Bade Bhaiyya. He loved his new found little sister even more than his own. But someone in the house had to keep his calm. And being the eldest he took that responsibility upon himself.
Om please isse pehle ki bohot der...
Shivaay could not complete his words. The look that Omkara gave him made him fear his younger brother for the first time in his life. It was almost like Lord Shiva had opened his third eye. He looked almost insane. Picking up Gauri at a lightening speed he rushed out of the house. The whole family almost running after him immediately.
Omkara did not wait for anyone. Securing Gauri's cold and lifeless body with the seatbelt on the passenger seat he drove to the hospital like a madman. He did not care about breaking the traffic rules. Heck he would even run someone over if they came in front of his vehicle. All he cared about right then was saving Gauri's life. Rest of the world was dead to him.
The fifteen minute drive from the mansion to the hospital felt like forever to Omkara. Only he knew how he had managed to drive. Tears clouded up his eyes ,blocking his vision, everytime he looked at his chiraiyya.
His. Where did that come from? At that moment the word felt so correct. Gauri was his. His to annoy. She was his to torture. His to pain. His to lo...
Omkara stopped dead on his tracks. What was he thinking? Brushing aside his irrational thoughts he picked up Gauri and rushed towards the hospital. Carrying her in his arms made him feel an odd sense of fulfilment. When Gauri was put down on the stretcher and rushed to the emergency, Omkara felt almost empty. Like a piece of his soul was being ripped away from his body. He followed the doctors urgently towards the Emergency room but the nurses stopped him outside. Cold white rage filled Omkara.
Mujhe andaar jana hain please. Woh meri patni hain. Omkara shouted.
Dekhiye abhi unka check up chal raha hain. Koi bhi allowed nahi hain. Pati bhi nahi. One of the nurses replied.
Aplog samajh kyun nahi rahe. Use meri zaroorat hain. Hatiye aap. Omkara pushed the nurses trying to get inside
Dekhiye Mr...
OM!!!! Shivaay's voice made Omkara stop.
He pulled Omkara away from the nurses.
Kar kya rahe ho tum!! Shivaay exclaimed.
Dekho na Shivaay yeh log mujhe aandar jaane nahi de rahe. Gauri akeli hain waha. Agar uthke humein se kisiko nahi dekhegi toh darr jayegi woh. Use waise bhi hospital nahi pasand. Omkara cried.
Shivaay was pleasantly surprised with Omkara's answer and so was everyone else around. They had reached the hospital only a few minutes after Om and witnessed his absolute insanity.
Kuch nahi hoga usse. Tu bhool gaya Dabangg Gauri haain woh. Shivaay half joked trying to lighten the atmosphere.
Omkara did not smile. His watery eyes just displayed Gauri's fallen figure. He could not remember her smile anymore. The image of her lifeless body on Anika's lap haunted him.
Omkara paced around the hospital corridor with the urgency of a caged lion. The family knew not to disturb him as he was not in his senses.
As soon as the doctor came out of the emergency room Omkara almost pounced on him demanding an explanation about what had happened to his not so dear wife.
Doctor please bataiyye meri Gauri ko kab tak hosh aayega. Woh thik ttoh hain na? Main milne jau usse? Kuch chinta ki baat toh nahi nain na??? Omkara shot one question after the other without letting the doctor speak.
OM!! UNHE BOLNE KA MAUKA DO!
This time Jhanvi shouted at her son. She understood his pitiable condition but he was making the matters worse.
The doctor was visibly scared.
Dekhiye unhe ek dangerous drug inject kiya gaya gain. It is a case of attempt to murder. Humne unhe antidote de toh diya hain but I don't think it'll work. The patient has slipped into coma. Woh toh accha huya ki yeh time pe hospital pahuch gayi warna we would have lost...
Omkara did not let the doctor complete. He gripped his collar and pushed him to the nearest wall.
What do you mean ke she is in coma??? I want my wife back all healthy, doctor. Aggar use kuch bhi huya na toh I'll sue this entire hospital. Samjhe tum??? Do anything but bring her back to me.
The doctor was gasping for breath.
Omkara!!Stop it Om!! Everyone tried to release the doctor from his grip but his hold was like iron.
The doctor would die if Omkara did not release him soon.
Not knowing what to do everyone in the room started panicking. Trying to pull Om away was useless. He was blinded by rage.
Omkara tumhe Gauri ki kasam choddo doctor ko.
Anika's words did the job. Omkara's grip loosened. He staggered back muttering sorry and sat down on the hospital floor. Covering his face with his palms, Omkara sobbed. His body shook violently.
Jhanvi sat down beside her broken son trying to console him.
Kuch nahi hoga beta Gauri ko. She is strong . Woh fight karegi. She'll come back to us, to you.
Woh nahi aayegi Mom. Woh nahi ayegi. Omkara said between his sobs.
Woh gussa hain mujhse. Maine kaha tha use zeher kha ke maar...
Omkara left his words incomplete as he reminisced the day of the Kuldevi Puja when he had asked her to do anything but sit down with him in the puja. How mercilessly he had asked her to kill herself and wished that she would leave him alone.
She had done so. Left him alone to die in his own guilt of pushing her towards death.
Agar maine usse jhagda nahi kiya hota woh room se nahi nikalti. She would have been okay today Mom. Maine Use dhakel diya maut ke muh mein.Ab woh kabhi wapas nahi ayegi. Omkara cried hugging his mom.
Sahi kaha tumne Omkara...
Anika... Shivaay tried to stop his wife from speaking. But today she would not stop. Anika had been an orphan all her life and when she got back her only sister, she was snatched away from her again. She would not spare the person who was responsible for her sister's current situation.
Nahi Shivaay mat rokiye mujhe. Mujhe aaj meri behen ke gunhegar se baat karni hain. Woh admi jisse meri behen ne selflessly pyaar kiya. Jis ke liye woh sari duniye se lad pari. Apne jaan ki baazi lagadi. Aur us aadmi ne kya kiya? Dum ghot diya meri behen ki khusiyo ka. Use bina saach jaane blame karta raha. Aur meri bholi behen sirf khush hone kka natak karti rahi. Bojh uthati rahi us crime ka jo usne kiya hi nahi. Tum khuni kehte the na use Omkara? Khuni toh tum ho. You. You killed my sister's happiness. You made her a living corpse!!!
Anika sat on a nearby chair not being able to control the overflowing emotions.
Anika aisa maat bolo...Shivaay retorted trying to side with his brother even though he somewhat agreed with Anika. But he knew that it would make the matter worse. It would create a rift in the family.
Nahi Shivaay, bhabi sahi keh rahi hain. Omkara slowly got up to his feet.
Unka aur Gauri ka gunhegar sirf main hu. But I promise bhabi jisne bhi Gauri ke saath yeh ghinoni harkat karni chahi main uski jaan le kar rahunga. Uske baad ap mujhe jo saza dengi woh manzoor hain.
Omkara had a light of determination in his eyes. He would not let the one who had harmed his chiraiyya live in peace. He would find him even if he had to dig up the earth.
Shivaay was scared. The expression on his brother's face was indecipherable. He looked like a lion ready to kill. He looked incredibly calm just like the one before a storm.
Shivaay worried that his brother would again sink into depression or even drugs.
Omkara had started walking towards the hospital's exit.
Om... Shivaay tried to call his brother back.
Omkara turned around and looked at his brother. Then he replied to Shivaay as if he had read his mind.
Chinta maat karo Shivaay main aisa kuch nahi karunga jisse meri jaan ko khatra ho. Maine Chulbul se wada kiya tha.
Omkara gave him a sad smile and walked away.
Everyone looked at his retreating figure half relieved and half tensed.

The next part will be updated soon. Thank you for all the reviews. I hope you are liking my story.











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Posted: 8 years ago
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Could Omkara suffer a little more for all the venom that he spewed... unbearable really... but loved the beginning n the cliff hanger... thanks for this take

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