Sanskaar's Monologues II--'The Edge of Chaos' OS Updated Page 1

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

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Posted: 8 years ago

#61

Hi Viji and Nyna,

This conversation reminds me of Shru's Despatches series..

I have a request. Please start a new post with these.. I am sure a number of us would love it. I have only seen OS or TS..but this is unique.

A letter and a reply.. A reply to that again.. Sounds like a great concept to me.. And to title it, I have complete trust on both of you that you will find an apt word to title this writing style.

Cheers

Sharon

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Nupur

@Nupur_5

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum

My Dearest Nupur 🤗🤗

I've said this before, you are one of the buddies whose feedback I always cherish. I love your very analytical and insightful takes 😳☺️.

I am so immensely moved to hear that you loved this OS. The fact that this made you cry a bit...felt bad about that, but as you would understand, I also felt happy in a sense, that I could portray Sanskaar's raw and painful emotions in a way you found so touching. 😳

Sanskaar really has not had that level of genuine adoration and faith from his family...and now sadly, even from Swara he has not had that potent level of adoration and near worship, which he showers on her.

I was very glad to hear of the new spoiler now, which contradicts the earlier one. It seems that Swara will console Sanskaar when he blames himself for Lakshya's death. She will not be condemning him as what was reported earlier. That's very good news indeed, but I still wonder why she doesn't go back to him then? Why she blamed him 6 months ago when Lakshya went missing? 😕😭 I know that Sanskaar said he would not accept her back, but I guess we all (Swara included), know that he would be overjoyed if she actually felt remorseful for abandoning him, and said she wanted them to reunite, that she wanted to assuage his anguish. I really hope we get to see a moving, tender scene like this too, where Swara repents for her fateful decision 6 months back.

I will be starting work on 'Games People Play ' after a short break, dear. 😳 And after that, I will be starting an SS in the action/ crime thriller space. I have tentatively titled it 'Memories of Midnight '. 😳 Sanya had sent me the basic plot idea, she had sweetly asked me to flesh it out into a complete SS. I loved the plot a lot. 😳

Loads of Love . ...and once again, your feedback means a lot. 🤗

Viji

Aww Viji, you made me blush

Yes it was our fervent hope & wish to get Swara soothing Sanskaar after Laksh's assumed death news come out! So yes I'm happy that Swara won't blame Sanskaar!

Bt it made me question Viji & I said that on the OLV thread as well. I'm copying it again...

On OLV Swara says: Sanskaar tumne kuch nehi kiya, tumhare wajah se kuch nehi hua!

It's a very good thing, ofcourse, but I want to know WHY NOW? Specifically WHY ALL OF A SUDDEN?

Swara blamed Sanskaar 6 months back even when Laksh was only gayab, she broke & walked out of their relationship! And in these 6 months, she didn't realized her own mistakes! Heck she thinks & believes she was/is right & Sanskaar is responsible for whatever happened with Laksh! 6 months back & since then Sanskaar is wrong according to her! Till yesterday she was repeatedly saying to Ragini that Ragini is not responsible for her & Sanskaar's broken relationship but Sanskaar is responsible for Laksh's state!

Then how all of a sudden this statement that Sanskaar is not at faults & he has nothing to do with Laksh or his disappearance? Why this sudden change of mind?

This kind of trust or faith needs gradual realizations! It can't happen drastically, specially what Swara did and said 6 months back & since then!

I really can't understand Swara anymore!

Viji, I'm eagerly waiting for 'Games People Play' & 'Memories Of Midnight' (I like the name btw)!

Loads of love & hugs <3

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Aheli

@iam_aheli_98

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Posted: 8 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum

My Dearest Aheli🤗

Am very thrilled to know that you loved this OS so very much. And chotu comment or long comment...I always cherish feedback from pals.🤗

Lots of Love

Viji

I'm glad u liked it. 😆 😳

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

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Posted: 8 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: Sakura24

Hi again dearest, 🤗🤗

I can imagine how straining this might have been to write. it's not everyday that you find a character as agreeable as Sanskar and then have him drowning in pain as a daily routine either. I just find it so compelling to feel for him and on the same time wonder why it is so hard for Swara to love this man as he deserves.

I find it amazing how deeply you feature his emotions, how well you define his many complicated layers. It seems as if you have unlocked the core that is Sanskar and sheer agony is bleeding out. I have always known you're one extraordinary writer...but here I find you breaking your very own records once more.
I totally agree on Mr. and Mrs. Durga Prasad part. The subtle change of being a son and being like a son...Such a poisonous reality in Sanskar's life.

IT had so many emotions when you said some bonds are slipping away and some he is gathering closer. I love Sujata and Uttara more for sure...you compelled me to do that.

There can be nothing I agree with more than the conclusion. It is so satisfying at the moment. Leaving Swara to suffer a little, letting her acknowledge that she is incomplete without him. You know toda durdh...toda nami toda sa wo adurapan... The much needed break to retrieve things.

I adore Sanskar's take here. He has taken the first step too many a time. Now she would have to take one too and he will be waiting, hoping yet she has to take that one step away from her unrealistic bubble and towards him. powerful ending to say the least.

Before I go, here's a toast for no more missions! God I really can take this saas bahu aur CID any more. glad Sanskar put his foot down.
Cheers to hopes, and waiting!
Cheers yo reality!

Loads of love ,
Saku

My Dearest Kid Sis Saku 🤗🤗

You know how much I always cherish your feedback. 😳 ☺️ So to have you say that you loved this OS, that you adored the way Sanskaar's deep and heartfelt emotions were portrayed, meant a lot. I was literally floating between the Stratosphere and Ionosphere when I read your feedback 😳, felt so very touched and blessed by your warm words, sweetheart. 🤗

This piece, as well as the earlier Monologues part I had written, plus the OS 'The Color Black', 'Solaris Rising' and 'The Color Green' as well to a certain extent, were all very emotional to write. Dealing as they did with Sanskaar's immense pain and heartbreak. I am very touched that you loved these, that you felt they did justice to the depth and intensity of his emotions. That was a huge compliment, as you know, I consider Sanskaar the most compelling and layered character in the serial.

DP and AP: I agree with you completely. While they do love Sanskaar in their own way, for him he is a nephew and that's it. That's perfectly understandable perhaps, any parent would normally favor their own children. What gets to me is the way they keep pretending otherwise, that Sanskaar means just as much to them as Adarsh and Lucky---when that is very clearly not the case. Especially where Lucky is concerned, it is amply clear that they have a very different set of rules for him (far, far more indulgent), than were Sanskaar is concerned.

I am so very happy to know that you loved the ending. Yes, indeed; I do feel it is time Sanskaar took that decision of taking a step back; giving the choice to Swara as to the perspective she needs to have. He of course, does not want her to change her fundamental nature. She will always be empathetic, overtly concerned with the well being of those around her. She will always spend more time than the average person would, on endeavors and missions to make things right for others, in the lives of those whom she loves. That is all fine. But she needs to realize that in the course of that, she cannot and should not take her marriage, and the person who has stood by her like a rock, for granted. Always subordinating that relationship to other relationships, is not judicious at all. In fact, it has caused grievous hurt to Sanskaar, which she should realize and not go down the same path again.

Cheers to Swara undertaking 'reunite SwaSan'/ 'manao pati' mission with more verve and devotion than the inevitable 'prove Abhi is Lucky' mission. 😉 😆

Loads of Love,

-----Viji

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

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Posted: 8 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: showrav24
Hello viji dear🤗
How r u? sorry for late reply
I like what u write dear u tell my pov on sanskar pov. i also want sanskar leave mm after laksh return no body deserve his love. i like what reason u show for swara return to sanskar & that sanskar point out to her😡 i mean can u just not think about sanskar once.for me whatever reason they will show for swara's this decision before leap & her behavior after leap she need to try hard to make me like her like before but i have a doubt on that cvs is expert on that they will make her right & sanskar wrong. iwant sanskar stick his decision like u describe.
everybody is gaga land for their tashan but for me its total waste i like that swasan intensity their chemistry but tashan is totally baseless & its destroy swasan half.
i wish something like this happen in the show but i have zero expectation.
u continue ur beautiful work dear
Bye
Love u🤗❤️

My Dear Showrav 🤗🤗

No need at all to say 'Sorry' yaar...remember Sanskaar's friendship code. 😊 In any case, I always say there is nothing termed a 'late' comment. I am just very happy that my pals read and comment when time permits.

I completely agree with you, I think Sanskaar needs to make his stand clear and probably leave Maheshwari House, after Lakshya 'returns' as 'Abhi'. I am very sure AP will again blame him once the 'news' of Lakshya's 'death' comes out. And possibly DP might not support him or speak in his favor, either. I feel irritated with this constant scapegoating of Sanskaar, whatever the eventuality. And whatever good he does for the family is scarcely even acknowledged.

Regarding Swara---I was very glad to hear about the revised precaps that she would console Sanskaar, when the news of Lakshya's 'death' comes out. The earlier spoilers/ previews were that she also would blame him! 🤢 But the point is, if she feels correctly that he is not to blame for what happened to Lakshya, why did she blame him for his disappearance 6 months ago? Why did she take such a harsh decision of leaving with him in order to show solidarity with Ragini; a step which she knew would hurt Sanskaar immensely? It was punishing him for no fault of his---and Swara needs to realize that. Merely stating that Sanskaar is not at fault now (which indeed he is not), is not enough. She does need to realize where she went wrong and correct a few aspects of her impulsive desire to keep on undertaking 'missions', as well. She is empathetic and a very good soul by nature, and she would always want to ensure the well being of those around her. But she needs to realize that she cannot take her marriage for granted either.

Lots of Love,

----Viji

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

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Posted: 8 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: luana
Take ur own time dear 😃

Hi Ramisa,

I replied on Page 9. 😊

Cheers

Viji

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

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Posted: 8 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: Sparkler8
Hi Viji,
Brilliant writing once again.. Kudos to you, girl!

I am glad, even clapping, as I read Sanskaar shout back, I don not understand. I am glad he took that decision, for him, his family and for them, for their marriage.

The best paragraph for me was when you describe the heart break in such distinct words that one can really visualize the organ put of the body, bleeding yet playing his emotions.

Thank you for the pm. Keep writing!

Cheers
Sharon

My Dear Sharon 😳 🤗

Your very warm words about my writing really made my day yesterday. Ensured my Monday morning blues were non existent. 😉 I am really touched that you found the portrayal of Sanskaar's intense anguish and heartbreak so apt and moving. Sanskaar is such a layered, fascinating personality that to be told I managed to do justice in portraying his emotions, is a lovely compliment indeed. 😳 ☺️

I hope to keep writing---just need a small break to recharge before I start work again on the SwaSan fics I had mentioned to you. Hope to read more works from you as well. 🤗

Love,

----Viji

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krishuuuuuuuuuu

@krishuuuuuuuuuu

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#68

Viji dear...

Ahhh sanky...what should i say about him...you just said it all..minute n major detailing to everything...how one feels...how ones behave..what ones need...you just penned it with such ease...i just cant imagine the amount of effort you done to create this master piece..it was sheer brilliant...sanky's monologues n last swasan convo just killed me slowly slowly...but truth is bitter..it was bitter for swara..how painfull it was for both i can imagine..a little biased towards sanky..he was in loads of pain..but ..he took good n harsh decision in the end...just cherished this completely...

Enough said about sanky...n update...as i said u have said enough...i just want to say that ur INCREDIBLE AND MARVELLOUS writer viji...i will say i again n again..still wont get tired...love u loads..till moon n back..wish u all the health..success n wealth in life dear...ameen...

Kissy n hugs

Talia

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: krishuuu
Viji dear...
Ahhh sanky...what should i say about him...you just said it all..minute n major detailing to everything...how one feels...how ones behave..what ones need...you just penned it with such ease...i just cant imagine the amount of effort you done to create this master piece..it was sheer brilliant...sanky's monologues n last swasan convo just killed me slowly slowly...but truth is bitter..it was bitter for swara..how painfull it was for both i can imagine..a little biased towards sanky..he was in loads of pain..but ..he took good n harsh decision in the end...just cherished this completely...

Enough said about sanky...n update...as i said u have said enough...i just want to say that ur INCREDIBLE AND MARVELLOUS writer viji...i will say i again n again..still wont get tired...love u loads..till moon n back..wish u all the health..success n wealth in life dear...ameen...

Kissy n hugs
Talia

Talia my dear pal...🤗🤗

I was so immensely touched by the warmth and love in your comment, I was frankly at a loss for words. You really made my weekend, yaar. 😳 ☺️

To be told that I managed to do justice to portraying Sanskaar's emotions, his innermost pain, anguish and his deepest desires and wishes----that is the ultimate compliment. He really is such a fascinating, layered and compelling personality; with so many facets, edges and shades to his nature. It was a privilege to attempt to write about his thoughts and emotions, and I had put a lot of my heart and soul into it. I feel immensely blessed and humbled that you loved it so much.

That concluding scene between SwaSan was very emotional for me to write---I was in tears, frankly after I had completed it. Am so very touched to know that you loved it, Talia. And I am just going all ☺️ at your very warm wishes and words of appreciation. Wish you immense happiness and contentment too. 🤗

Lots of Love,

----Viji