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Posted: 8 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: WriterAtHeart
Nice OS dear Viji.
It was quite realistic one for me, the way Sanskar decided a year separation for them, the way he didnt want Swara to change overnight but atleast wanted her to take efforts, the way he asked her to meet him only and only if she wants him as much as he wants her!!! Liked it a lot

- Ani

Hey Ani 🤗

Sanskaar is always the consummate realist, no? He knows very well that Swara cannot change her quirks so quickly. And he genuinely does not want to change who she is, fundamentally as a person. But yes, he definitely wants and expects her to treat their relationship with the importance and seriousness that it deserves. While it is undeniable that Swara loves Sanskaar; it is also equally undeniable that for her, there are a whole lot of other issues, other relationships which take precedence, a lot of the time. To sum it up succinctly, Sanskaar is an important part of Swara's world. Swara is the centre of Sanskaar's universe. Therein lies the difference.

Sanskaar, as ever, leaves the choice to Swara. Either she needs to figure out how to give him the importance , the adoration and faith that he truly dseves; the centrality that their relationship really requires. Else if she feels she would rather keep orchestrating events in others' lives, prioritising and showing solidarity to others at the cost of their own relationship ----then she needs to realize, that both of them have very different expectations from their bond.

Glad you loved this OS.

Cheers

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: soumya04
perfect decision by sanskar👏 swara really deserve this. i want them to part their ways in show also, then their separate journey especially swara. you know i can't justify most of her actions but i am totally biased towards her, want really a sensible story for her, but possible nahi lagta show me😡

Hey Soumya 🤗

Very true yaar. I'm not sure what the serial track will show, but I do want Sanskaar to take a firm stand even after this "Abhimanyu / Lakshya" issue gets sorted and Lakshya returns home. Swara needs to realize that she cannot treat her marriage as she has done, walking out on her husband to 'show solidarity' with her sister. A marriage cannot be held hostage to another's relationship. Cannot be subordinated in importance to another bond. Doing so was folly and frankly, an irresponsible and wounding act. She needs to realize that, feel remorseful for it, and most importantly, effect a course correction for the future.

A convenient patch up without addressing this key quirk in Swara's mind would mean, that they next time a similar situation arises, she could again take her marital relationship for granted. Marriage is not a game or debate of right versus wrong. I devoutly hope and pray they show her realizing this crucial fact. Else, what would she learn from these painful months of separation?

Lots of Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

#43

My Dearest Lucky, Nivi, Piya, Khushi, Nupur, Nynu and Saku...🤗

Please do bear with me for some delay in my individual replies. I need to collect my thoughts for a revert that will do justice to your very moving comments. You've all made me feel on top of the world...Love you Ladies. 🤗

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: lucky.m

😭😭😭..Viji .. My Sanskaar ..My heart is bleeding .. I need some chocolate and no doubts lady you are possessed by Sanskaar ..No other way you can pen down such a piece of utter perfection one after another on Sanskaar. I was almost close to breaking down ..Man this is painful.

*Sigh* .. Swara never changes .I so expected her reaction to be like that 🤢

A low bow for you darlin..I totally get how draining it would have been for you feel that anguish pain and every fiber of Sanskaar's heart ..Jahapana tussi Grt ho ..👏⭐️👏.I need more time to compose my thoughts.Will be back

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Lucky

Lucky my dear 🤗🤗

Though I feel bad I made you feel close to breaking down when you read this, I also feel immensely touched that I could make you feel Sanskaar's pain and anguish. 😳

And that was a HUGE compliment you gave me, yaar. I am just floating around, feeling so immensely touched and blessed that you felt I manage to capture Sanskaar's emotions and thoughts well. I always say, he is the most layered and compelling character on the show. And to be able to do justice to his feelings in a fic---that really is a privilege.

This was very emotional to write, I felt quite upset, I must admit. But feeling better now...all the warmth and love showered on this piece by my Dearest pals, has really made my weekend. 🤗

Love you loads

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: Nivijo
Viji,
Now I'm sure that u r possessed by the sanskar aatma. Wonderful piece of work, dearie. I loved it. It was high time that sanskar take a stand for himself in the show. He needs to get what he deserves. Right from the childhood, there was an empty space in him craving for love and affection. Of course, he was given the affection but I think that was a very tiny part of the whole which he was supposed to receive. Are u going to give another part where swara realizes what sanskar said and takes a decision. Waiting for that if u r free. 🤗 for the pm.
Love u loads
Nivi

Nivi my dear 🤗🤗

Feel so touched by our warm words yaar. Really made my weekend special. 😳 I really hope Sanskaar stands up for himself in the show too. I genuinely feel he is such a strong and wonderful character, who has managed to spur himself on to such great achievements, despite not being given the support and love from his family that he truly deserved. He must have yearned so much for that deep, unconditional adoration and faith from Swara...the same which he lavished on her so devotedly and patently. But alas...here too, he did not get a true reciprocation of his deep, dedicated emotions. 😕

Swara loves him very much, I have no doubts on that score. But the issue is, Sanskaar is a part, an important part no doubt, of her world. But she is the very centre of his universe, and she shattered him with that decision she took, 6 months ago.

I do envision Swara in this fic making the right choice, and going out to meet Sanskaar in Australia. Sanskaar doesn't want to ever change her innate, fundamental nature. He knows she will always want to set things right for people around her, and will be eager and willing to spend a lot of time on those missions and endeavors. But he wants her to realize, that their love for each other, their marriage, cannot and should not be taken lightly. She absolutely cannot hold their marriage hostage or of secondary importance, to others' relationships. I am sure, Swara would see the rightness and the wisdom of this condition of Sanskaar's. There has to be some clear understanding, which will be the foundation of their future bliss, after all. 😳☺️

I am so very touched you want me to write another shot to depict Swara's final decision to agree with Sanskaar ...but at the moment, I prefer you leave this with the tentative, yet lovely light of hope gently dawning. Some things are better left to our imaginations. 😳😊

I will be resuming work on 'Games People Play ' soon, after a break of a few days. And then, I need to start work on an SS I have planned, an action/ crime thriller which I have tentatively titled 'The Memories of Midnight '. 😊😉 This is based on a plot idea which Sanya had sent me. She had very sweetly asked that I flesh it out and develop it into an SS. 😳

Lots of Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: svg98
Hey Viji..
Read it all in a go..but it was so so painful..you brought tears to my eyes..the anguish, the pain..it was is if I was feeling it just by reading it..I can't even imagine what Sanskar must have gone through..if sometimes doubt if Swara ever feels this kind of anguish being apart from Sanskar and I knw somewhere she does then why she hurts him every time..
Speechless..you make me every time..painf and heartbreaking..

Would soon be back after reading it once more and unres in detail..
P.S.you are superb..just always keep writing..
Love,
Piya

Hey Piya dear 🤗

As I've told you before, I always cherish your feedback. It makes me feel so very touched and blessed to know that this piece made you feel Sanskaar's pain, heartbreak and anguish. I felt bad hat it brought tears to your eyes. ...but glad in a sense that I had done justice to the depth of Sanskaar's emotions. 😳

Swara does love Sanskaar, we all know that. But somewhere, the issue is that he is a part, an important part of her life, her world. But she is the very center of his universe. They need to arrive at an understanding there. She needs to start placing his interests and their relationship; on top of her priority list a lot more times, if not most of the time.

Let's hope she figures it out, because this lovely pair truly is magical. 😳☺️

Lots of Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: StarySKY

Viji 🤗

I am speechless .. I have no words to say ..
It is so beautifully written ..
I loved it ..
In fact .. At some parts I was in trears ..

Sanskar pain and anguish ..
All this blame for something he didn't do .. the way he got hurt from the persons he love and adore the most ..
I am very upset with Swara and so with Ap and Dp though I don't blame them - Ap and Dp - there is a different between been a son and Like a son ( I don't blame them for choosing Laksh over Sanskar without hesitation .. I can't blame parents for choosing their own ... but yeah it is hurts but Sanskar need to live with it )

I loved Rp , Sujata and Uttara stand with Sanskar .. the way his mother and sister tried to protect him from been pained again by Swara ..

I loved Sanskar frim stand .. Swara really need something like this to wake her up .. ( I am very upset with Swara and I don't know how the Cvs will solve this mess )

Viji .. thank you for this Story 👏👏
* a bow down *

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Khushi

My Dearest Khushi 🤗

Am immensely touched by your warm words yaar. I am so very happy to hear that you loved this OS. I feel bad to hear you were at tears during certain stretches, but then I also feel moved and blessed that you felt you could really sense Sanskaar's pain. 😳☺️

I too agree that one can't really blame AP or DP for feeling more attached to their own children. That's a natural, biological hard wired response after all. Where I fault them, is not for always favoring Adarsh and especially Lakshya, but for always pretending that Sanskaar means as much to them as their own sons. A fact which is clearly untrue. ...

Poor Sanskaar has always had that feeling of emptiness ad yearning within, that he came down in the list of priorities, for those whom he adored. And he would never have thought that the one he adored and cherished above all else, would also treat their relationship as being of secondary importance. ...😭

I wanted to show how RP, Sujju and Uttara stand by Sanskaar at this difficult time. They certainly feel protective of him.

I also feel that in the serial, Sanskaar needs to make his side of things clear. A reconciliation without resolving the rather different ways they each view their relationship, is not conducive for a long lasting solution. Swara needs to realize that her decision of 6 months back was a terribly bad one, that she had wounded Sanskaar so badly. She needs to learn that she has to place a lot more faith in their relationship, needs to place Sanskaar's interests, and their marriage, foremost in her list of priorities at least a lot of the time. She needs to adore Sanskaar the way he cherishes her, it wouldn't do for her to hold their relationship hostage to the fate of others' relationship.

I devoutly hope and pray she realizes. 😳☺️

Loads of Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: Nupur_5

And you made me cry Viji. You are supremely talented dear, no doubt on that!

And right now what I want so damn much is Sanskaar leaving this mad house, his hypocrite family & Swara after Laksh truth comes out specially if this family & Swara blame Sanskaar for Laksh's imaginary death!
I just want Sanskaar to leave all of them & go away till they realize their mistakes, crime actually, and thoroughly apologize!
This is so painful and with every word, every sentence, I cried for Sanskaar! This is so agonizing!
I said before also that Sanskaar have real bad luck regarding family & relations!

Swara! I'm totally fed up! I don't recognize her anymore! Can't can't understand her!
Why she is so different, have different rules towards & for Sanskaar regarding love, care, belief, trust, faith, anger, forgiveness, every emotion!

I never thought that I will ever be this much angry, heartbroken, irritated & frustrated with half of my most favorite & loved OTP which I loved, love & will always love so ferociously!

This piece is so beautiful Viji, no wonder on this, after all it came from you! Will wait for you to come with another, then one more, then...
Well I know I'm greedy about SwaSan ;)

Loads of love & hugs <3

My Dearest Nupur 🤗🤗

I've said this before, you are one of the buddies whose feedback I always cherish. I love your very analytical and insightful takes 😳☺️.

I am so immensely moved to hear that you loved this OS. The fact that this made you cry a bit...felt bad about that, but as you would understand, I also felt happy in a sense, that I could portray Sanskaar's raw and painful emotions in a way you found so touching. 😳

Sanskaar really has not had that level of genuine adoration and faith from his family...and now sadly, even from Swara he has not had that potent level of adoration and near worship, which he showers on her.

I was very glad to hear of the new spoiler now, which contradicts the earlier one. It seems that Swara will console Sanskaar when he blames himself for Lakshya's death. She will not be condemning him as what was reported earlier. That's very good news indeed, but I still wonder why she doesn't go back to him then? Why she blamed him 6 months ago when Lakshya went missing? 😕😭 I know that Sanskaar said he would not accept her back, but I guess we all (Swara included), know that he would be overjoyed if she actually felt remorseful for abandoning him, and said she wanted them to reunite, that she wanted to assuage his anguish. I really hope we get to see a moving, tender scene like this too, where Swara repents for her fateful decision 6 months back.

I will be starting work on 'Games People Play ' after a short break, dear. 😳 And after that, I will be starting an SS in the action/ crime thriller space. I have tentatively titled it 'Memories of Midnight '. 😳 Sanya had sent me the basic plot idea, she had sweetly asked me to flesh it out into a complete SS. I loved the plot a lot. 😳

Loads of Love . ...and once again, your feedback means a lot. 🤗

Viji