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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

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Posted: 9 years ago

#721

Sapna 🤗

I am back with my apology begging cap in hand! Am working my way through so much good stuff I have missed so hope like Saku you will forgive my staged comments? I have now read up to chapter 5, having provided some comments on the earlier chapters. I meant to read only 1 chapter, post comments and then carry on but as soon as I started on 3, could not stop util 4 and 5 were read too! This is so gripping! They way you are building up characters and not rushing, is what I really like .Laksh we established was a mole and that too planted by Durga Prasad and now the mystery deepens. I loved the part where Sanskaar is tangentially mentioned through Swara's memories. So a locked cupboard that is now a nightmare but the placing of Swara there by Sanskaar was to protect her it seems. And I like the hints given about the dynamics of how Laksh seems to really resent Sanskaar. The whole scene with the sniper in the market was nicely done! And Durga Prasad here is so much more expressive about his son than in the show. Very interesting and cannot wait for the next layers to unfold to find out who Philomena is and what the connect with Sanskaar is. Will be back with comments on the next set. If this is annoying, please say and I will wait until I can draft all comment at once 😳

Lots of love xoxo

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foresight

@foresight

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#722

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
Sapna 🤗
I am back with my apology begging cap in hand! Am working my way through so much good stuff I have missed so hope like Saku you will forgive my staged comments? I have now read up to chapter 5, having provided some comments on the earlier chapters. I meant to read only 1 chapter, post comments and then carry on but as soon as I started on 3, could not stop util 4 and 5 were read too! This is so gripping! They way you are building up characters and not rushing, is what I really like .Laksh we established was a mole and that too planted by Durga Prasad and now the mystery deepens. I loved the part where Sanskaar is tangentially mentioned through Swara's memories. So a locked cupboard that is now a nightmare but the placing of Swara there by Sanskaar was to protect her it seems. And I like the hints given about the dynamics of how Laksh seems to really resent Sanskaar. The whole scene with the sniper in the market was nicely done! And Durga Prasad here is so much more expressive about his son than in the show. Very interesting and cannot wait for the next layers to unfold to find out who Philomena is and what the connect with Sanskaar is. Will be back with comments on the next set. If this is annoying, please say and I will wait until I can draft all comment at once 😳

Lots of love xoxo

Hey shru...really sorry for the late reply...🤗

Please don't apologise for this...it is really sweet of you to take the time regularly to read the story. I know how bay it can get at work...I am going through the same phase, so all is understood.

Laksh is a mole alright...but one that had infiltrated himself on his own rather than on advice of DP.sanskar and Swara share a special bond. They were very close friends before he went away. Laksh knows sanskar intimately and has his reason why he wouldn't want sanskar to come out in the open. DP has a soft corner for his family. Thanks so much for likely how the characters are being developed and that shipper scene 😃

You will find out about phill end soon...Laksh is out to dig skeletons. He isn't going to let it go.

Looking forward to your next set of comments. Would love to read them.

Take care xoxo

Edited by foresight - 9 years ago

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amimus

@amimus

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#723

What a story and must say brilliant execution as well. Not once since I started reading did I feel like keeping my phone down and read it later.

I love thrillers and mysteries and this one had both as well as loads of romance.

Love reading your stories they are so different and good. Waiting now for next update on Pawn series.

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Zephyr8

@Zephyr8

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#724

Read this one at one go. Loved the Sanskar Laksh twist. Going through your other work. Do keep writing.

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foresight

@foresight

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#725

Originally posted by: amimus
What a story and must say brilliant execution as well. Not once since I started reading did I feel like keeping my phone down and read it later.
I love thrillers and mysteries and this one had both as well as loads of romance.

Love reading your stories they are so different and good. Waiting now for next update on Pawn series.

thanks so much for your wonderful comments. i am really sorry i haven't been as prompt at replying back. please forgive me for that.

it was really a delight to read that you couldnt keep your phone down until this one was finished. that means a lot to me as writer. a big thanks for saying that. i love mysteries to ...that is the one genre i love the most. 😃

thanks for liking my stories and saying that they are different and good 🤗

you might want to message angelpureness for pawn series. she does write some amazing one doesnt she. she will love to know about it

Edited by foresight - 9 years ago