Pehla Nasha- a short story on ArMan - Page 4

Originally posted by: stefanandre

Niki, when might we expect the next update of your FF😃 please do not take too long😭

Originally posted by: bonnefille

😃❤️

Oooh Niki I 'lovvve' you! No wait I have a huge crush on you! 😆Ye mera promotion hua ki demotion?😆

Loved it...I was the best thing in the short story! Wasn't I? 😉 Ja ja!! Hud!😛

You brought in great mix of romance and humour and by making us part of the latter, you made me connect to the story even more strongly. When I read the introduction, I hoped it wouldn't change the characteristics of Archana and Manav and I wasn't let down. Despite a different setting, Manav and Archana were as endearingly beautiful as they were created 'by mistake' by the CVs. I still do not get in what 'genious' moment did they sketch ArMan? They were plain brilliant momentarily. Oh I recall, they copied. Whatever, we were lucky to have Manav and Archana for us. I was ROFLing when I read this.. but it's so true- the first 6 months of the show were bloody brilliant, after that it has all been a mess!

I have always admired the way you add little nuances of gestures, the conscientious stream of thought and pleasantness to your writing. This short story screams all that, tuned all together as a beautiful rhyme. My God, Bonne you do such good analysis! Am not saying it bcos you praised me but rather bcos of the way you noticed my style and the little things in it and commented on it!

Since its an open ending, I did imagine Archana and Manav to remain out of touch till Manav is in Dubai. And then destiny has to bring them together...their marriage to be an opportunity to fall in love all over again. Hmm.. interesting!

Originally posted by: johncena2003

Wowww must say amazing..i really enjoy each and every sentence which is really well written by u and the way u describe all archana friends 😉is really outstanding i cant control my laugh when i thought about all archana friends😆...very well written hats of to u👏

Originally posted by: ahaanfan

Wow!That was so good.⭐️Thankyou!!
Keep rocking and entertaining us with your fantastic write-ups👍🏼Will try to.. hopefully I will get some more ideas..
Missing my old Arman😍Me too... miss them so much.😭

Again thanks a lot for the treat😃

Originally posted by: suan

Oh NIkita,🤗

What a dear you are to us deprived Sushita fans, and what a talent!👏Awww...😳

Loved, loved, loved it.

Never doubt your instincts regarding your writing skills.

Firstly, let me say, the parts that included us, some of your forum friends...hilarious!🤣🤣🤣

You were spot on with your portrayal of us and you had me 🤣 like crazy.

I took so long to read your story because I kept laughing and laughing with the sections where we were included.😆Much as I love ArMan, I have to admit that I LOVED writing that part like hell!

You have read us perfectly Nikita.

I especially loved the "translation please part"😆, and that you remembered that Divya was my translator.😆Oh yes, I wonder what the translator will say once she reads it.😛

We were interwoven in the story so expertly and naturally, as if we were a part of the source of your inspiration for this OS...PR.🤗

From the moment you mentioned "him" at the beginning of the story in relation to why Archana was so determined to catch that specific train everyday, I knew it was because of Manav.😊Who else could it be.. as Tanya Di used to say, God made her with a stamp on her head- "Made for Manav Deshmukh".😆

Loved that you introduced Manav with that memorable train scene reminiscent of the early PR.

Loved how you described Manav, just after the first flashback.

Loved Archana's introspection re her feelings for Manav here.

The "O re Piya" part...awww. 😍

I could clearly see them performing at the Ganpati Ustav function.

Brought back great memories.I loved that dance performance so much.. it really looked like a dream sequence.. especially the end part where he gets down on one knee and kisses her hand.. Ankita looked out of the world... such a beautiful girl!!😍

Arman's conversation in the cafe was so cute and real, in terms of how a couple would be on their first date.- minus the gang of girls!!😆

I also found it so sweet that you included the Trini word "liming" in your story.😊Yes, I read it on the forum, you were explaining the meaning to Varun or Varsha Di (one of them) and I liked it.

Made me feel proud.

Loved how Archana's friends "supported" her throughout the story.😆ArMan are incomplete without their huge gang of supporters, after all!😃

The end was beautiful, intriguing, and different. in that you left it open as you said.

We can imagine whatever we want in terms of the ending.

This is stuff that great writers are made of...you keep us intrigued and guessing, wanting more.

I would love a continuation of this story, of Arman as younger people with different dreams and hopes than they have in either PR or your FF.👍🏼I'm not sure whether I will write a continuation, right now I just want to read what all of predict about what happened next!

Great job again Nikita and God bless you and your talent.🤗Thankyou Di!