Pehla Nasha- a short story on ArMan - Page 5

Originally posted by: Jaishankar

Wonderful wonderful Niki...You should be the CV for PR -2 with this storyline..It will break all TRP records...Beautifully done...👏

Kindly continue written more and more brings a huge smile on all ur faces..

Archu's friends was too good...😆 and the way you have constructed Arman story each and every way I can imagine it ,wow Niki fantastic ⭐️.

Niki next time please include us too..Since Manav is little devoid of friends ,kindly include me as his friend next time..😆 would love to see that ..

Thanks once again Niki..Keep writing more and more dear...👍🏼

Niki, Fantastic.. Finally I have completed reading it after getting lots of scoldings from my mom, as she was questioning me what are you looking in ur mobile and giving that smile? 😆Happens with me very often too when I'm watching some segment of Sushita- my Mom thinks I'm crazy.
And you reminded me of my 2yrs journey from Dombivli to Thane going to college.. Just the difference between Archana and Me was, getting a seat was always a dream for me.. Also I was not able to look into the other compartments like Archana as all the ladies pounced on me and never gave me to look left or right...🤣😆I think all the people who travel with locals will be able to associate with that.. me too. Sometimes the crowd crushes you sooo badly- once they pushed me so bad that I was forced out of the compartment on the wrong station.😆

Coming back to the story, you have wonderfully described the first crush. Also you have very well described Manav Archana as two innocent and shy person.. Who felt for eachother but they denied it.. And the ladies convo was just hilarious..🤣 U have included everything what a story demands humour, romance, emotions..etc Glad you liked it! Thankyou!

All the characterization, and your wonderful write up gave the story a realistic touch. I am telling you seriously you should start writing books, I will be the first one to buy them. Also you will give all the other writers a tough competition You are a very talented girl. God bless you. Keep writing more.I really I can do that one day Ashu.. no wait.. I can do that.. par kuch idea to mile.. aur time bhi.. aur😕.. khair chhodo.

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@ Niki .yes yes Niki you fully deserve it dear 👍🏼 we are waiting for the next love portion of Arman.Really felt yaar even 10% of your story had CV's thought we would have really enjoyed PR even more...Waiting eagerly for another fun-filled ,love potent of Arman 😉.

Originally posted by: poas

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I'm soo glad you liked all those scenes, and the lines spoken by your character. 😆 I tried to make it sound like you only.😳

There is actually no next part, I had planned to leave an open ending- you use your imagination and tell me what happened next!😃

no no we willnt do it.pls niki u do it bc i think everyone has her/his own style so u can continue it with ur own way please😃

Originally posted by: lunza

awww ... the ArMan in your stories always transports me back to the PR episodes of 2009 😍 ...

so shy , so simple , so beautiful ...

and sheeshh ... all of archu's friends were so in character .. just like how we are in the forum ..🤣

Ashu got the best lines 😆 :

"Hmm.." said Ashu, looking up from her phone. "Do you want me to find out more about him?"

Everyone glared at her.

"What? I'm confident of my stalking skills, that is all."

and hehe ... even here jia and I are fighting for a piece of su- erm .. manav .. ☺️

"Yeah don't blame the poor guy!" echoed Lunza. "Erm.. Archana, does he wear similar shirts everyday, with three top buttons open?"

Archana nodded.

"Well, then if you don't talk to him soon, I'm inviting him for a coffee date for myself!!"

Jia gave an evil look to Lunza. "And I'm getting ready to ruin your coffee date.. he's either Archu's or mine!!! Buzz off!!"

🤣 ...

thanx niki .. that was lovely yaar ...

and uh ... I guess both go their separate ways ... story jumps a few years ...

Archu completes her education , Manav is financially stable , and maybe managed to graduate too ( now dont ask me how many years pass.. ) ...

so .. Manav comes back just when they are searching a groom for archu ... and by coincidence ... even manav's family is searching for a girl ...

both are uneasy about the whole groom/bride searching .. since both still remember each other ...

but they are in for a very pleasant surprise 😃 ...

so yeah , thats how i imagine the story would have moved forward...

Originally posted by: Tanyaz

Niki , I read the first part ..It is awesome ...Thankyou Di!

I just loved it so much ..How romantic ..This time you are looking from Archana's angle and it is just so nice to see her dreaming about someone this way ...Yes, even though PR reloaded is an FF for both, for some reason, some members felt it was more of Manav's story and written from his point of view- maybe bcos I started the FF from his point of view and wrote more about him in the beginning. So this time, I decided I would start with Archana first and write about Manav later. In other words, decided to give her more space.

And the whole description of Manav is excellent , as always ...

Lunza did tell me that yo uhad mentioned some of the forum members and iit was so cute to read that bit ..

Niki , remember yo uonce did this hilarious piece on kidnapping Manav by the forum members ...Oh tha twas also so good ...Oh how can I forget that! I had so much fun writing it, and we had so much fun discussing it later... good old days of PR forum when all members debated discussed but at the end of the day sat and laughed together.

It was reall ynice to read this ..Brings back the romance angle of PR back which is hardly there anymore in the show ... 🤢

Bu twe all have our memories and yo udo such a good job with these stories ...

Will read the second and the third part too and let you know ..

Thank God Vinod dada put her back in school..

Niki if you were writing PR script , it would have been a super duper hit ,that much I am sure of ...Sigh! I wish.

Originally posted by: gremlin.

"I will send a pigeon with the postcard.. kabootar ja ja ja.."

"Translation please?" whispered Sharon. "Pigeon go go go!" hissed Divya quickly. "What is that supposed to mean?" frowned Sharon. "Shhh!!!"

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Okay...okay, so I was reading it, I still am, but this bit cracked me up so bad that I had to come here and laugh it off...Pigeon go go go...LMAO! 🤣 🤣

Okay be back after reading the whole thing and oh it's a complete delight up till where I read by the way, Niks! 😛

Niks 🤗

vowww wat a beautifully n authentically written story 👍🏼 hats off to u nikita 👏 i just didnt liked da story but loved so much n adored it a lott i felt keep on reading again n again n da best apart (obviously apart frm our beloved couple "arman" or "sushita") i really liked frnds of archu lol 😆😉 after so many days i felt m reliving da original "arman" scenes ...a big thank u n a hug for writting dis beautifull story n one req do write da next parts too plzz !!!!!!!😊

Originally posted by: Swati_

Niks 🤗

I LOVE,LOVE,LOVE you 🤗 (um...guess have said it many times 😳 )

Awww...This was such a cute story...Loved it

Huh...reminded me of my crush ...when i was in 4th std think...😳

Their innocent talks, uneasiness, their date...awww...

Manav's blushing, gulping, smile,twinkle in his eyes...how much i miss my Manav

I wish i meet someone like him someday hopefully 😍

Lunzi and Jia ,though i dont come to the forum often now but still do not forget that you both still have competition from me as well 😈 If Archu doesnt get him me still there to do Chance pe Dance 😳

Me too get some weird ideas these days like Archu watching Iss pyar ko kya naam doon 😆

Thanks for writing this Niks...

Love you...Miss you hon 🤗

Swatiii!!!!!

I missed you!! 🤗Where were you? Why don't you come to the forum these days?