Zindegi ke Safar mein-(tera mera sath rahe)Pg 20 - Page 10

Ohhh superb SD u so good in writing whether it is funny or sad!!
this post made to feel more bad for Arman:(..i hope we get to see this kind of scene in future.

OMG SD !! u always made me cry as you make me laugh too much !! bt now I'm crying because of the sadness !! u rock man !! keep on writing !!
Sad or comic, u r the best ! I wish creeatives/writers read this story 😳

Very emotional story yaar. Well written.
they may not even get time to talk to each other after this.

This above line was touching and sad.

Another gem SD bt it ws really sad 😭 exactly wat Archana nd Manav must be wanting to convey to each other bt the CVs dnt hve the same talent that u hve hence theirs hardly any convo betn them after so much has happnd not even a word.

wow..another master piece from u SD. hats off 👏

What a masterpiece SD, too good!!!

Thank you all.

Sagaai Mubarak Ho

As Manav decides to get engaged to Shravani, Archana goes to Manav and tells him that she wants to go home. As shown on PR, Manav was almost speechless and didn't say about his feeling. Here is my way of imagining the scene.

Manav is getting ready for his garage. Archana comes up.

Archana- Manav..main ghar ja rahi hun..izajat nahin mang rahi hun aap ko bas bata rahi hun

Manav- main tumhe chhod dun? tum ab bhi chal nahin pa rahi

Archana- zakhm abhi bhare nahin hai! waqt ke sath sath yeh zakhm bhar jayenge phir dard kam ho jayega. Aap sagaai ki tayaari karo, main nikalti hun

Manav- yeh nahin puchhogi main khush hun ya nahin

Archana- wohi cheezen puchhi jati hain jo pata nahin hoti

Manav- nahin..kuch cheezen pata hoke bhi puchhi jati hain..kyun ki insaan wo saamnewale se sunna chahta hai

Archana- ab us sab ka waqt chala gaya hai..aur mujhe aap se kuch nahin puchhna

Manav- tumhe lagta hai main khushi khushi yeh sagaai kar raha hun?

Archana- mujhe bas itna pata hai aap yeh sagaai kar rahe ho..aur is baat ko na aap na main jhhotla sakte hain

Manav- Archana mujhe maaf kar do

Archana- aap ko kisne keh diya aap ne koi galati ki hai ya aap ne mere sath nainsaafi ki hai? Is liye maafi mangne ka sawal nahin aata

Manav- Archana tum itni achhi kyun ho? (aankhon mein aansoo)

Archana- ab bas bhi karo na Archana ka naam lena..ab sab kuch khatam ho chuka hai..main jati hun (leaves the house and manav follows her. When Archana takes the auto, Manav gets in)

Archana- kyun aa rahe ho Manav?

Manav- kam se kam train ke paas to chhodne do tumhe

( Archana doesn't say anything. Manav keeps looking at her. They reach the station. Go to the platform)

Manav-thodi der yahan bench pe baithogi mere sath

Archana- par kyun Manav?

Manav- bas meri khatir

(both sit down)

Manav- ( aankhon mein aansoo) Archana

Archana- aap ki aankhon mein aansoo? aap ko pata hai ab yeh aansoo kuch maaine nahin rakhte

Manav- tum bhi to ro rahi thi..aur shayad ab is liye nahin ro rahi kyun aansso such gaye hain tumhare

Archana- manav ab aap ko jana chahiye. aaj aap ki sagaai hai.aur aise roti hui shakal wahan mat banana..aansoo pochh do

Manav- tum poch do

( Archana khadi hoke apni saree se manav ke aansso pochhti hai. Suddenly Manav hugs her and starts crying like a baby)

Archana- yeh kya kar rahe ho Manav..koi aise rota hai bhala? dekho kitne log hamen dekh rahe hain

Manav- main tumhare bina nahin jee sakta ..mujhe tumhare bina nahin jeena

(Archana is trying her best to make manav laugh)

Archana- Manav ab rona band karoge bhi!!kya aap bhi na ladkiyon ki tarah rote ho

Manav-( can't stop his tears)

Archana- dekho un chhote bachhon ko..aap pe has rahe hain. aur keh rahe hai uncle ro rahe hain. Aise koi rota hai kya

Manav- main kuch nahin janta..mujhe bas Archana chahiye

Archana- mil jayegi Archana..ab khush?

Manav- sach?

Archana- sach

Manav- par kaise?

Archana- agle janam mein aur kya!(Archana is trying to laugh..but she is a poor actor! she is also crying)

Manav- tum jhooth keh rahi ho

Archana- achha is janam mein hi chahiye aap ko Archana?

Manav- haan abhi isi waqt aur hamesha keliye ( embraces her again)

( manav is just crying like a child jis se Archana jhooth bolke samjhana chahti hai par manav apni zid pe ada hai..usse bas Archana chahiye. Dono aanssoon mein bhige hue hain.)

Archana- aisi zid kyun karte ho Manav jo main kabhi poori nahin kar sakti

Manav- main kya karun Archana

Archana- pehle to rona band karo..warna log sochenge main aap ko jabardasti kahin bhaga le ja rahi hun ( trying to laugh)

Manav- mujhe bhaga le jao..mujhe behosh kar do. fir le jao mujhe door bahut door..jahan koi na ho.

Archana-chhi ..ek ladki aapko bhaga le jayegi?aap bhi na mazak karte ho

Manav- mujhe tumhare sath jeena hai

Archana-mujhe nahin jeena aap ke sath? aap chale jao

Manav-kya keh rahi ho..main manta hun main galat hun..apni aai ko khush karne keliye maine un halaton mein yeh faisala liya hai( bit aggressive now) main gunehgaar hun.par aakhir ek insaan hi to hun. ghar keliye maine wo faisala le to liya..par kya kisi ne yeh janne ki koshish ki Manav ko kya chahiye..manav ki khushi kis mein hai. maine zindegi mein agar kisi ko apne dil mein basaya hai wo sirf tum ho. tum meri zindegi ho..tumhare bina mera kuch bhi nahi hai. Tumhari jagah koi le nahin sakta.Archana agar tumhare sath main jee nahin saka to main mar jaunga

Archana- aisi baatein nahin karte Manav..aapko apna ghar chalana hai..apne aap ko sambhalo..aur mujhe kuch nahin sunna uske upar.shravani ab aap ki haqiqat hai aur main aap ki biti hui zindegi ki ek hissa hun..mujhe bhul jana aap keliye behtar hoga

Manav- koi mujh se meri jaan ko alag kar de aur fir kahe tu jee le..yeh namumkin hai Archana..mujhe chhodke mat jao

Archana- maine kabhi aapko chhodna nahin chaha manav..ab halat hi kuch aise hain ki aapka aur mera ek sath jeena namumkin hai

Manav- lekin ek sath mar sakte hain

Archana- nahin aap ko apne naye parivar keliye jeena padega aur mujhe mere wajood keliye jeena padega

Manav- tum mere bina nahin reh paogi

Archana- kisne kaha aap ko yeh? Main Jee paungi. Har roz roungi. har pal aap ke bare mein sochungi. aap ke sath jitney bhi waqt bitaye wo yaad kar kar ke marte dam tak jeeti rahungi..aapke paas to nayi zindegi hai..jeene ka naya bahana hai..mere paas to kuch bhi nahin. mujhe jane do manav..mujhe jeene ki ek nayi wajeh dhoondne do

Manav- nayi wajeh

Archana- ghabrao mat..main fir se shaadi nahin kar rahi hun. lekin apne peiron mein khadi hona chahti hun. apne liye jeena chahti hun

Manav- aur main ab se koi nahi tumhara

Archana- aap mere sab kuch ho..par main aap ki koi nahin rahi..yeh man lo Archana aap keliye mar gayi. Ab main ja rahi hun. aur raat ko wapas aa jaungi aapke ghar, lekin jaisa ki aapki honewali patni chahti hai aap mujhse ab kabhi bhi baat nahin karoge na ki meri taraf dekhoge

Manav- yeh sab likha tha apni kismet mein ( crying again)

Archana- ab aap rona band karo..apni patni ke jeete ji sagaai aap kar rahe ho aur khud ro rahe ho..yeh kaisa insaaf hai manav..rona to mujhe chahiye..matam to mujhe manani chahiye apni barbaadi ki.bas aur kuch nahin kehna..mujhe aap se ek wada chahiye

Manav- main koi wada nahin karunga..kabhi marte hue aadmi ko wada karte dekha hai

Archana- aap ko jeena padega apne gharwalon ke sath..yeh wada karo mujh se..aapko meri kasam..agar kabhi ek pal keliye bhi maine aapko pyar kiya aapko us pyar ka wasta..aur aapko aap ki Sagaai Mubarak Ho

(Archana catches a train. Manav wahin khada reh jata hai aur train chhut jati hai)

Very emotional and touchy one SD bhai...😭
Very well written.

thanks Ai I tried to bring out a bold and brave character in Archu, who can live the life on her own conditions. Thanks to her mom Sulo, she can never stay at her house with Manju and manav is all set to desert her (whatever the reasons may be). So she has to be strong enough.