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Posted: 7 years ago
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Nice explanation by Neil to convince Mowgli 😆

Avni ka kya hoga sakti hai ! If anyone starts about Ali she can speak for whole day .

This was a nice walk down the memory lane . Avni throwing him in waters as he brought Mitali in between their fight . This has to happen 😆 in turn he pulled her in and result she is sick 😆
That hotel manager was quite embarrassing them 😳😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Wow superb yaar enjoying reading this wat we couldn't see on show we are enjoying it through your story kudos yaar
Will wait for next update😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Chapter 6

Avni was sneezing continuously and at the same time angry with Neil. Neil wanted to bring a soup for his wifey, but she was not ready to take any 'ehsaan ' from her husband. Finally after much insistence she had one spoon from his hands. A constant stare from his wife, forced Neil to ask " ab mujhe hi ghurati rahogi, yaa soup pe lougi, ek toh tumhari itni cheekh, mujhe toh dar hai ki kanhi tum bimar na pad jao. Nahi toh pura honeymoon kharab ho jayega".

That taunt was enough to force Avni to take the bowl from him and she replied "mein khud kaa lungi, tumhe meri chinta karni ke zaroorat nahi hai". A cold war had sliently creeped in between the two. Hence, she avoided her low temperature fever going without medicines as it seemed irrelevant.

They travelled as per the itinerary ,but Neil was not happy as they honeymoon was turning out as per his expectations. Whatever talk was done was through gestures. Sometimes he spoke to himself "Mitali hoti toh alteast itna toh bor nahi karti"

As per their travel plan on the 5th day they had a 1 day visit to a nearby island in Mauratius. Being near the equator , the island had been witnessing hot summer from last 1 week so a heavy rain was expected in coming days. AvNeil boarded a small jetty with small handbag which had some biscuits and some other stuff. Everyday a call was made to Khanna house to update how was their honeymoon going on, but since today was a day in island and hence a skip was expected on the same.

Avni was already angry with Neil, as he was ignoring her from last few days. It was alone when she went for shopping. It was alone when she went for couple of sight seeing. Only the water sports they did together. But it seemed more or less like they were on a forced trip. Avni was in dressed in a white off shoulder dress while Neil in his denim shirt and jeans. Since the area was partially habituated by the local African tribe, they were instructed not to go inside the island.

Neil was not ready to talk with her, after multiple attempts, Avni decided to have a walk on the island alone. Without mobile network in this remote place, soon she lost her way back they were asked to be present in evening. Neil was all the more worried where was his wifey. No network, how to search her. As the sun was ready to touch the sea , it was time for tourists to get back in jetty.


As Avni was missing, he already updated that he would not board the jetty until he finds his wife by next morning. Though dangerous to stay in night, he decided to take the risk. He shouted out her name but she was no where to be found. The rainy clouds had already started to pour and in the thick rain forest it was not easy to find her. All dark , his constant shouts were also becoming feeble as time passed by.

It was already 10 pm local time, when he hit her . Angered and worried at same time, he asked "Avni kahan thi tum, mein kab se tumhe pagalo ki tarah dhund raha hoon. Yahan naa network hai naa kuch . Ek toh yahan raat ko rukna dangeruous hai Agar tumhe ho jata toh". She didn't want to talk to him, but it was necessary to reply " Kuch ho jata toh hone dete. Kya zaroorat thi yahan aane ki. Nahi chaiye tumhara ehsaan. Mein thik hoon Neil."

By the time they met, she was already drenched in rain, shivering in high fever. Crying, feeling helpless how to find her way back to jetty. But it was necessary to stay strong in front of Neil as no 'eshan ' has to be taken . Neil scoffed "Agar maine saath rehna nahi tha, toh honeymoon pe aayi kyun tum mere saath. Lekin ab mein tumhe akela nahi chod sakta. tumhe chahe pasand aaye yaa naa aaye I will not leave you alone. Halat dekhi hai apni bukhar se tap rahi ho tum, roo rahi hoo, akhir baat kya hai kuch toh bolo".

As he tried to hold her in his arms, while resenting she slowly lost her consciousness. Since, it was raining heavily, it was no use to go inside the island or even light a fire . The only way to keep her warm was body to body heat transfer. He arranged few banana leaves and with help of broken branches and sticks he build a small tent like structure. Soon he removed his shirt and Avni's top remembering the last time they had shared the body warmth in the same way at gazebo. He did the same, she lied unconscious in his embarace, while his body radiated the heat to keep both of them warm. While repeatedly saying "mein tumhe ek bar kho chuka hoon, ab nahin. Kuch nahi hoga Avni tumhe. Mein tumhe kuch nahi hone dunga"


It was already 5 am in the morning the rain had stopped , only to find Avni weaning Neil denim shirt, she asked " Neil kal raat ko kya hua humare beech". Seeing his wife heatlhy, he was not in a mood to let her go easily , he said " wahi hua jo abhi tak ho jana chaiye tha , Mausam mastana tha, raat mein ek deewana tha, aur phir humse khata hogayi ". Avni couldn't believe her ears that even in this state of hers, he could do such a thing, she retorted "Neil tum mere saath aisa kaise kar sakte ho".

Neil turned his back and said "ab kya kar sakte hai kya nahi who toh nahi pata, jab halat hi humare bas mein nahi the wifey". Avni knew that he was bluffing so she added " thik hai naa Neil, jo hona tha ho gaya. Hum honeymoon pe jis purpose ke liye aaye the , ek chota baby ab woh bhi aajayega. Mowgli, mummyji, papap ji sab ghar pe kitne khush honge"

Neil knew their talk were going in wrong direction so he replied "hum dono ke beech raat ko kuch nahi hua , woh toh kal raat ko tumhe bahut tez fever tha so I was giving you body heat ". Avni smiled and said " I know , ki mera Neil mera saath aisa kar hi nahi sakta. Chalo ab jetty aane wali hai lets go. I don't wanna live any further in this haunted island". As left a small smile broke on Neil face as he murmered " abhi nahi toh kabhi kisi aur din sahi , ho sakta hai hum kareeb aajaye"


As they reached back to their hotel in morning, the receptionist ask them to call back to Mumbai. AvNeil freshened up and after breakfast a call was made , where Shweta was crying and asked them both to come quickly back to Mumbai as Prakash had suffered a minor heart attack

Neil was taken aback with the news, his father who seemed hail and hearty , how come this could occur. Avni meanwhile search for the earliest departure tickets to Mumbai. As they boarded the flights, Avni knew she had to stay strong in the coming period of time as she was expecting a breakdown from Shweta who was alone handing all the situation and also from Neil. Neil was shocked and was not responding as he himself could believe what the uncertain future holded for him.
Edited by njain16385 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Wow loving it yaar and kahani mein twist Prakash isn't good
Turmoil in relationship I have captured very well thanks yaar again cos these were some minute things that I missed watching in show and glad am reading it through u r ff
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hey read all parts in one go it's really good and I liked how you recreated the old episode scenes in this present situation of avNeil

P.s:don't get me wrong but I don't like the way Neil keep on makes Mitali Jaap we already had enough of her in the show itself though she is not Physically present I didn't like the way Neil compared Mitali with Avni its as if like he is missing Mitali like kaash mitali hoti wala vibes you know Na our old Neil would never do that so please it's just a request/suggestion in upcoming chapters please avoid using mitali's name and comparison it feels like Neil is actually not happy with Avni please mend their relationship i believe their love will surpass any ego or misunderstanding I expect this epilogue to bring them closer not to pull apart from each other further
I hope I didn't hurt you I just felt like sharing my point of view as a reader

Edited by Chocolatebond - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Why the hell he is bringing Mitali in between their talks ? Agar itne shauk hai toh usi ke saath aa jata ! After all his repenting and regreting for not trusting her and going to marry Mitali as a punishment this whole mentioning Mitali feels like he is not interested in Avni . It is purely annoying and what can be expected from Avni in return . She will be supreme annoyed and mad on him . Ab toh pura trip karab ho gaya as Prakash has suffered heart attack ! Looks like Neil will take up the business as he has completed his MBA.
Sorry to have hurt you .
Edited by AgnesFan - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Absolutely loved all your chapters...👏
Brilliant Work ⭐️
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Posted: 7 years ago
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All d chapters r well written.I can imagine all d scenes thank you for these updates😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Chapter 7

Neil and Avni were back in Khanna house,and when Shweta saw both of them, she hugged Neil saying " dekh naa Neil tere papa ko kya hogaya, yeh toh bilkul thik the toh phir yeh heart attack kaise aagaya" . Neil calmed her down " ab hum aagaye hai naa,kuch nahi hoga papa ko"calming shweta down and holding Avni's hand tightly indicating that they both have to face this situation together.

Soon a doctor came to see Prakask who told "inko kaam ka stress bahut tha pichle kuch dino se, aur inhone apne badhte cholestrol level pe dhyan nahi diya ,isliye yeh sab ho gaya. Mein kuch dawayein de deta hoon, don't worry he will be fine". The only person Neil trusted to handle this situation well was his wife, so he replied "thik hai doctor, Avni tum inse kaunsi dawai kab deni hai, aur khane mein kya kya dena hai sab ache se samjh lo, kyunki ab se papa ka health department tumhe hi handle karna hai".

As Avni nodded in response, soon Neil left for his room upstairs. Avni heard every word from doctor carefully and soon went up to their room to see Neil crying. Avni holded him and asked "Neil kya hua tumhe ,tum ro kyo rahe ho. Sab kuch theek ho jayega. Mein apne papa ko kuch nahi hone dungi"

Neil hugged her tightly and replied " mein janta hoon Avni,tum papa ko kuch nahi hone dogi.kyunki tumse achi care unki koi kar hi nahi sakta.par mein isliye ro raha hoon, ki jabse papa ne khanna industries start ki, woh kabhi apni business ki problem ghar lekar nahi aaye. I use to think,ki sab thik chal raha hai. Par woh kitne stress mein the. Kitna irresponsible beta hoon na mein unka"holding Avni tightly in his embrace.

Avni knew he was feeling guilty now, but it was time to me more practical. She said cupping his face " Neil tum irresponsible nahi ho. Papa ne apni problems tumse kabhi isliye nahi share ki hogi kyunki unhe lagta hoga ki yeh woh khud hi handle kar lenge. Aur phir jab se tumhara carrer start hua,pehle juhi ki wajah se tum ACP bane,bhir mere jaane ke bad RJ with late night shifts. Tum dono ke pass ek dusre ke liye time hi kahan tha. Anyways Neil, ab hum dono milkar har mushkil ka samna karenge,har burai se milkar ladenge mein hoon tumhare saath".


Those words from Avni were enough to bring a smile on Neil's face giving him back the power and strength which he was missing.

As planned, Neil left early next morning to find what was going on in khanna industries,while Avni took care of home right from giving boiled vegetables, to preparing juices , she took ownership of everything. Meanwhile Shweta helped Mowgli in his studies and his other needs

Few presentations and meetings were organized to know how was the business done, the perfomance, financal forecasting ,share market perfomance,logistics supply and marketing .Neil saw everything and wanted to handle it alone,but a worry about his father wouldn't let him work properly. On hearing voice ofAvni,he use to get enough strength and assurance that all was well .

As Neil got busy with his new corporate life. He didn't got much time to spend with his family. As days passed by,everything in business was having smooth run.

Gradually, Prakash health also saw a drastic improvement. His cholestrol levels were under control now, even the doctors were surprised with the magical drop, as Neil proudly said "its all because of my wife". And Shweta affirmed in response.

He went upstairs in search of Avni,who just had a bath and was getting ready seated beside the dressing table. Dressed in blue saree and pink off shoulder blouse she looked beautiful, but his eyes were stuck on the magalsutra. He asked " Avni yeh tumne kab pehna". From the time they had returned from honeymoon Avni always wore high collar tops and skirt, and somehow Neil missed to see the mangalsutra,but today in saree it got highlighted. Avni replied "last time tumne mujhe yeh diya tha,aur promise kiya tha ki ab mein isse kabhi tutne nahi dunga. Aaj wahi promise mein tumse karti hoon, ki ab yeh mangalsutra mein kabhi nahi tutne dungi. "

As Neil gazed his wifey happily,she turned to put sindoor on her head, when he said "Avni, stop". As he turned her to face him, he said "may I". Avni nodded her head, filling her maang with sindoor, with an unspoken promise that from now on their love will get more stronger and nothing will be able to break their bond.


Edited by njain16385 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Awesome one
Loved it a lot
Plz continue soon.

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