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Posted: 16 years ago
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But nothing registered in his mind. All his thoughts were concentrated on one person in the world right then, who was lying injured in the next room.

thats so powerfull..once u r in love and u genuinely feel that ur life is incomplete without that one person..when some one else matters more than ur own self........thats what is ur state of mind then....

Shaking his head in disbelief, Raj sat down on the chair nearby. Running his fingers through his hair, he nearly whispered

aha now i can imagine that gesture so welll its so typical of our handsome dude raj😳

'Sanjay, I will never forget the sight all my life. Kranti lying injured in that tunnel, bleeding profusely. At that goddamn moment, a realization struck me. That I had to keep her alive, not for her sake, but for my own selfish motives. I realized that I couldn't live without her. All the days of bickering and driving each other insane were like a haze – they had no shape, no sound, no meaning. Though we were away from each other for so long, yet it's like an unknown bind that we share. I have always known deep inside my heart that she is there for me, maybe not with me, but definitely with me. So the idea of her being away ... '

rachna i really loved this part...way u described emotion..and its true realization like this strikes in utter sense of loss......am loving this emotional raj....its so easy to imagine.....ur story telling is very gripping ...i love it😳

'I can't let her get away from me Sanjay. I haven't given her anything at all. Even our marriage was a sham. We got married to get even with each other. Look where it has brought us. I couldn't even protect my wife.'

aww he says he has not given her anything ...he wants to protect her, even in serila they were able to portray the emotions right but unfortunately they could not hold it and they lost plots too often ,despite that these words do justice to story of raj and kranti as we would hope it to do justice to this unusual and powerfull love story

He knelt down on the floor, on the side she was facing, his eyes searching for hers, which were now closed, carefully guarded by her eyelashes, resting on her cheeks. Not believing his luck, he traced his finger lightly across her right cheek, almost expecting her to flinch. Tears welled up in his eyes as he felt the warmth seeping through her skin. It was as if his prayer had been answered.

juts one word rachna beautifull....................
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Posted: 16 years ago
#72
He tiptoed towards her bed, not wanting to wake her up. It was a strange dichotomy because all that his heart really wanted was for her to be awake. Raj sat down on the chair nearby and looked intently. She was in deep slumber. He noticed that the quilt covering her was thrown away sideways and realized that she had regained consciousness in between. He gently covered her with the quilt again, taking care not to touch her bandaged shoulder.
what i like in ur ff is it seems liek continuation of soap because to me ff has to be continuation and it has to have a connection .......wiht serial itself ...this emotional raj..his care in touching kranti....his gentleness is so so like how gavie portrayed in rajbir...kudos to u for capturing thsi sweetness of their relationship😳
so she screamed for him rajbir.......thanks re is kranti ko thoda likable banadiya doosri wali ne mera bahut khoon piya re😆 jokes apart it is the depth of subtle trust she had in him that he will protect her forever😳 u r story i svery emotional rachna i liked way u showed the hands intertwined...her tears...i loved when he said i did come kranti........he did not let her down he did come
pyaar koi bol nahi
pyaar aawaaz nahi
ek khamoshi hai sunti hai kaha karti hai
na yeh bujhti hai ,na rukti hai ,na thehri hai kahin..
noor ki boond hai sadiyon se baha karti hai...
sirf ehsaas hai yeh ..........
and now what happened in these past months i need to know hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...
waiting for ur next update......
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Posted: 16 years ago
#73
rachna thanks a lot hunnie for this sweet itsy bitsy update............😊😊
I must say yaar this FF has bewitched me......................😳😳
you know something I have fallen for this raj..............😉😉
he is there for kranti whenever she is in distress and acts instantly...............
I could feel the tide of emotions flowing ............
love the way you weave the emotional threads............
👍🏼
and kranti is smart enough to gauge that it was raj who rescued her.................
I am waiting for the next part.....................




Edited by namita25 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#74
Rachna ur R & k r deep examination of self love in themselves
which is making them stronger
so beautiful u r portrait them
Wait 4 next part ssssssssooooooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn


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Posted: 16 years ago
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thanxxxxxxxxx a lot 4 such a nice nd quick update...........................
chalo thoda suspense to khula aakhir 1 month se ho kya raha tha............
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Posted: 16 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: sami01

But nothing registered in his mind. All his thoughts were concentrated on one person in the world right then, who was lying injured in the next room.

thats so powerfull..once u r in love and u genuinely feel that ur life is incomplete without that one person..when some one else matters more than ur own self........thats what is ur state of mind then....

Yes it's true. One's beloved occupies our heart and soul then ...

Shaking his head in disbelief, Raj sat down on the chair nearby. Running his fingers through his hair, he nearly whispered

aha now i can imagine that gesture so welll its so typical of our handsome dude raj😳

Handsome! my foot! 😆😉😳

'Sanjay, I will never forget the sight all my life. Kranti lying injured in that tunnel, bleeding profusely. At that goddamn moment, a realization struck me. That I had to keep her alive, not for her sake, but for my own selfish motives. I realized that I couldn't live without her. All the days of bickering and driving each other insane were like a haze ' they had no shape, no sound, no meaning. Though we were away from each other for so long, yet it's like an unknown bind that we share. I have always known deep inside my heart that she is there for me, maybe not with me, but definitely with me. So the idea of her being away ... '

rachna i really loved this part...way u described emotion..and its true realization like this strikes in utter sense of loss......am loving this emotional raj....its so easy to imagine.....ur story telling is very gripping ...i love it😳

Thanks a lot Doc. Love is selfish too.

'I can't let her get away from me Sanjay. I haven't given her anything at all. Even our marriage was a sham. We got married to get even with each other. Look where it has brought us. I couldn't even protect my wife.'

aww he says he has not given her anything ...he wants to protect her, even in serial they were able to portray the emotions right but unfortunately they could not hold it and they lost plots too often ,despite that these words do justice to story of raj and kranti as we would hope it to do justice to this unusual and powerfull love story

I feel so sorry that they could not hold the story together, after having seen a few brief initial episodes. MRD would have beena dhamaka if they had kept to a tight plot. 😕

He knelt down on the floor, on the side she was facing, his eyes searching for hers, which were now closed, carefully guarded by her eyelashes, resting on her cheeks. Not believing his luck, he traced his finger lightly across her right cheek, almost expecting her to flinch. Tears welled up in his eyes as he felt the warmth seeping through her skin. It was as if his prayer had been answered.

juts one word rachna beautifull....................

Yep .. my Kranti is! 😃😳



Thanks for reading and letting me know where I got stuck.😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: sami01

He tiptoed towards her bed, not wanting to wake her up. It was a strange dichotomy because all that his heart really wanted was for her to be awake. Raj sat down on the chair nearby and looked intently. She was in deep slumber. He noticed that the quilt covering her was thrown away sideways and realized that she had regained consciousness in between. He gently covered her with the quilt again, taking care not to touch her bandaged shoulder.

what i like in ur ff is it seems liek continuation of soap because to me ff has to be continuation and it has to have a connection .......wiht serial itself ...this emotional raj..his care in touching kranti....his gentleness is so so like how gavie portrayed in rajbir...kudos to u for capturing thsi sweetness of their relationship😳

Thank you ji. And yes the connection needs to stay - both between story as well as characters. And yes I agree both Gavie and Prabhleen did a fine job. 😳😆
so she screamed for him rajbir.......thanks re is kranti ko thoda likable banadiya doosri wali ne mera bahut khoon piya re😆

Wapis le tu yeh line. 🤔😲

jokes apart it is the depth of subtle trust she had in him that he will protect her forever😳 u r story i svery emotional rachna i liked way u showed the hands intertwined...her tears...i loved when he said i did come kranti........he did not let her down he did come

Sam, there relationship and every aspect is about being subtle ...



pyaar koi bol nahi
pyaar aawaaz nahi
ek khamoshi hai sunti hai kaha karti hai
na yeh bujhti hai ,na rukti hai ,na thehri hai kahin..
noor ki boond hai sadiyon se baha karti hai...
sirf ehsaas hai yeh ..........

and now what happened in these past months i need to know hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...
waiting for ur next update......



Let me think about what should I write happened in between. 😆😉
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Posted: 16 years ago
#78

Originally posted by: namita25

rachna thanks a lot hunnie for this sweet itsy bitsy update............😊😊

😆 I know it's itsy bitsy .... 😉
I knowI must say yaar this FF has bewitched me......................😳😳

😆 Now I am also becoming a witch.
Now I a you know something I have fallen for this raj..............😉😉

Really? What a surprise! 😲😉 But why? 😳
he is there for kranti whenever she is in distress and acts instantly...............
I could feel the tide of emotions flowing ............

Thank you. Hope he keeps his emotions flowing perfectly.

love the way you weave the emotional threads............👍🏼Thanks 😳


and kranti is smart enough to gauge that it was raj who rescued her.................

She is smart enough Dear. They didn't let her grow in the serial.

I am waiting for the next part.....................


In a day or two.
😆

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Posted: 16 years ago
#79

Originally posted by: sasha722

Rachna ur R & k r deep examination of self love in themselves
which is making them stronger
so beautiful u r portrait them
Wait 4 next part ssssssssooooooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn



Yes Sasha, that's the beauty of their relationship. Subtlety, poignancy and deep, intense love. 😊

Thanks a lot. Will update in a day or two.
poetic thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: akashruti12

thanxxxxxxxxx a lot 4 such a nice nd quick update...........................

chalo thoda suspense to khula aakhir 1 month se ho kya raha tha............



HI Shruti,

Thanks for reading. 😛

A lot of ground needs to be covered now. IN between period needs to be covered as well.

Hope to update soon.



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