FF: PALLAVI by Jalebi Jane SEE NOTE PAGE 117 - Page 49

Originally posted by: SONIA441

Epi-20

First things first, thanks for improving my vocabulary with the synonyms of Desertion😆 . I love reading your Sulochana scenes. They're so well-crafted. How efficiently she provided information regarding Pallavi's marital status. I'm sure Raghav would also need to learn that efficiency from her🤣 .

Thank you for your thoughtfully detailed comments. They are a gift to me.

Sulochana is so interesting to me. In ITV, secondary characters---particularly older females are not written with much subtlety. They are nurturing or villainous. They are sacrificing or grasping. They are supportive of the heroine or destructive. I hope in a small way I can make her more 3D. In MHRW, after she was exposed in the abortion lie, I thought she was at her most layered. I loved those scenes.

Originally posted by: SONIA441

Epi-21

Ohh! And did I tell you that I do want an episode filled with just their talks in my previous comments. Thank You Thank You for giving me that here & since I read 3 parts b2b I'm too much in a daze now

I love that Pallavi here's smart enough to ask of his help & knows she can do only so much without guidance & also not make it sound like a complete one-sided task .

Dialogue-filled scenes are my fave as well. I want hero and heroine to talk lots, to bait and seduce each other through language. That is the most fun.

Originally posted by: SONIA441

Epi-22

I like how Baji RAO has been Pallavi's mentor as an idol & Raghav RAO will be in real life. I absolutely loved the light-hearted way Krishna turns Pallavi's serious conversations into. You have created a gem of a person . So Raghav'll definitely find out a lot about Mandar but will he be able to figure out the equation with Pallavi. And if so, how is this gonna change his equations with her?? Interesting! Clapping my hands in glee😎

Thank you---Krishna is such a gorgeous character to write. She's insightful, naive, loyal, funny---and bright as a button. Love her. She really deserves her own tale and her own hero. Perhaps some day . . .

Originally posted by: SONIA441

Also I have a suggestion if I may, please ignore if it doesn't work for you. You can try putting a shorter Precap rather than a significant portion of your updates. For eg: for Epi-22, you could have tried to just post - "Raghav turned to the window, and looking at the twinkling lights of the city below, he said, “I’m afraid I might end up being Baji Rao’s second lover.” "

Thank you for the suggestion. I'll keep that in mind.

And thank you for reading my work so closely.

Originally posted by: nautankitadka

Thank you so much for including an investigation on Mandar in this update! 👍🏼

It is wonderful that Raghav now wants to dig deeper into her past, it will lead him to make the connection between the ring and her, and figure out why she was so interested in it, coz she does not come across as a thief in any sense. I love how Pallavi tells Krishna everything just like Raghav tells Farhad everything, the parallel has not explored in the show as much so I appreciate reading about it. As for the intrigue on Baji Rao Malhar, love it!! He was a great commander of the Maratha forces, and an extremely respected soul, apart from his love story, and RR becoming 'Mastani' is a funny notion 😆

Look forward to more!! 😳

Thank you, Sister. You are so right---the ring the ring the ring!---we must always keep coming back to where it all began.

Things escalated rather quickly when Raghav announced his aspirations to become Mastani---I'm not sure how that will turn out. I wasn't prepared for that. These surprises are the most fun part of being a writer. Though they can throw a nice plot out of the window, I always follow where the character takes me because he/she knows best.

Aside: In my first FF written almost a decade ago I was not prepared for how characters can take over a tale---as a new writer, it terrified me---but over time I realized that the exhilaration of being without a net was also the thrill of writing. I do start with a rough plot but I am also happy to discard it if something more interesting comes along.

Originally posted by: thebluewhale

I have a feeling Ms. Raje is going to play a role in this love story. Pallavi had an inheritance. Where did it come from? Who were her family? Is she connected to Ms.Raje?

That ring which came from Royals was that Ms.Raje s family?

What if her change of heart and extending an invitation to Raghav was not just because of what Raghav said in Mumbai?

Has she seen and recognized that ring?

That is wonderful-fabulous! I did introduce Mrs Raje with intention---so I'm so glad you are giving her importance though she does not yet have such prominence. But the birthday party will give way to what you allude to above. Thank you, Sister---for your speculations and ideas.

Forget the show, your story is MHRW for me now! This is so exciting and engaging ❤

Originally posted by: ReemShah

Raghav will find out that Mandhaar is alive through his investigation and will go to meet Pallavi with all pomp and attitude saying "Your husband is still alive."

and Pallavi will be like"Meh..I already know" Raghav's reaction would be priceless then😂😂

Truly said as Farhad is to Raghav, the same is Krishna to Pallavi- friends, sibling, their keeper or confident, supporter and secret weapon.

Raghav is already intrigued by Pallavi and her actions and as of Pallavi-she's focused on her goal and no one else

Can't wait for more

I love that: "Meh...I already know." This is where I wish I could borrow MHRW cast/crew for a day and have them speak my lines. That would be gold!

I like your use of the word 'intrigue' --- I think they are both intrigued by each other. Perhaps Raghav who is more experienced can see further down the road. For Pallavi there is attraction---but left on her own, she won't act on it. But if he does---will she follow? hmmm

Wow what an update!

I love Pallavi and Krishna they’re amazing and I love how Pallavi told everything to Krishna.

In hindsight this wedding gave her parents, amazing friends and a lover (soon)

Oo so it’ll all be revealed after Mansi’s wedding!!

Baji Rao’s second lover, oh my.

Farhad’s shock that he wants to have sex with 18th century character.

Originally posted by: hapc

“He had resisted but finally agreed when she told him that Krishna was her secret weapon—her Farhad.” This statement did justice to Raghav-Farhad and Pallavi-Krishna. In fact this episode was actually only scenes of the two pairs and that was amazing. Krishna is so supportive of her didi and wants to avenge her ..how sweet.. both of them truly love each other. Raghav Rao is falling in love! I didn’t expect it to be so early but I am interested. Farhad’s reply was hilarious. So now Raghav is going to investigate Mandhar.. hmm I wonder what he finds and what he thinks then..

Yes, Sister---you are absolutely right. Things escalated a bit too quickly for Mr Rao---it came as a bit of a surprise to Jalebi Jane as well :-) But---he is a man of thirty-five---he knows what chemistry is. However, I suspect he is not thinking love. I could be wrong but I sense he is thinking "I would like to take this widow to bed." And maybe---in his view---as a widow, she might be open to a purely physical relationship.

A few episodes he was accusing her of putting on disguises to bring a thrill to her life---knowing she is a widow, he might feel that his instinct was correct. She's a young widow, maybe sexually lonely . . .

Let's see what happens. I don't think I am ready to write from his POV yet but Farhad may tell us more ;-)

Originally posted by: AnjuRish

So he will figure out how Mandhar has cheated her from.ghe investigation ..so will he use it to his advantage or will be soften towards her ? My bet is on the former

Thanks for updating everyday..in this devastation all I hear is sad news and positive news are low.

I am doing a volunteer duty to coordinate things for friends and their fam in quarantine. Calling/ mss 3 times to check on them. Also doing some other coordinations also.

So FF and my baby are my escape for a few hours

I commend you for doing all you can. This situation is heartbreaking. Truly alarming. To be honest, I've decided to stop reading about it this weekend because it's just---!

Glad I can divert your for a few minutes a day.

Keep up your work. And stay safe.

Originally posted by: LyssaPie

Wow what an update!

I love Pallavi and Krishna they’re amazing and I love how Pallavi told everything to Krishna.

In hindsight this wedding gave her parents, amazing friends and a lover (soon)

Oo so it’ll all be revealed after Mansi’s wedding!!

Baji Rao’s second lover, oh my.

Farhad’s shock that he wants to have sex with 18th century character.

Thank you, Sister.

What a nice observation---that from the nightmare of marrying a bigamist scoundrel thief---she landed in a place where she gained a loving mother, a loyal friend, a business mentor---and perhaps soon an incredible lover ;-) Well done, Pallavi!

Originally posted by: Apukar

Forget the show, your story is MHRW for me now! This is so exciting and engaging ❤

Wow! What a generous comment, Sister.

Imagine a big smile on my face.