FF:Benaam Ek Rishta||discontinued|| - Page 56

Originally posted by: prncz

Hi Missy n Daya heya bbe .. finally ur coment😃 ,,, was waitign for BER for a long time , for sme reason this FF is etcehd in my kind ,, i love this concept and they way u girls r presenting it .awesome👏 aww thnx hun...sorry 2 keep u [all] waiting 4 so long

ok 1st n foremost the poetry u write missy is always a wonderful read , i love readign them and appreciating them gee cheers hun😳😳

Chala jauga mehfilon se tanhai mein
Aur phir dhoondhuga mehfilon ko hi tanhai mein

wah wah .👏 missy that is awesom ,,and ofcoursee Hammie pointed out ,,paimana and dutta that ws awesome too ,,, thnks hammie for pointing it out thnku so much raj..yep d above lines r lyk mde 4 dutta inih <3 😳😳 nd yeh thnx 2 hammie 4 pointing it out..ddnt thought any1 wud realy notice it lol😳

as far as the story is ,, thoer dancce was the highpoint and may be the turing point in their life..both have now realised the feelign they have for each other is more than friendship ...lest see ow they accpt it ,, ofcourse NAkku will fall 1st but how and whn will Aur gadha realsie and accpte is a big Q yep ur right naku wil realise 1st..maybe she alredy has...but out gadha toh phir gadha hai...aur apna gadhapan kabhi nahi chode ga lmao...but i love dat bout him <3😉😳😳

waitign for your next , i lost the opton of askign for an earlier update, as i myself am late, but still i hope you all update fast ,, hahaha god u wer supder duper late!!! evn later den us..now dat rely is a record been broken lmao!! haha dw nxt update wil b up probs nxt week...dayas wrote sum of it alredy..😳😳

luv u both we bth luv u2 sweetie.xoxo

Raj

Originally posted by: meriyaar

firstly, how can u say this was a long update ! coz it reli wasn't, i was expecting it to be longer. eeek sory hun..ikno it wasnt long lol finki i wrote d 'long' part at the end accidiently lol😆 nd i was expecting 2 write a longer update but had 2 update so left it der anyhow it was a fab update as usual. thnku😃 tasha startin to feel things for eachother good to know soon their love will blossom. haha yep they finaly hav😉😳😆hop you update soon this time! oh ur defo in 4 a surprise..😉wil b updating soon..😳wel daya wil anywy😆

thanks for the pm ur welcum..thnx 4 reading😳😳

be quick with next chapter pweezzz.tel daya dat 😛😆

tc u take care 2..thnkx 4 d lovely coment...ly.xoxo

xxx

Originally posted by: eternity_of_luv

fabulous dear but very short
love it
both nakku and dutta starting feeling something great
thanks for pm

Okay so I'm gonna do the poems first and then the actual chapter, okay, so bear with me.

Btw sorry 4posting dis here, it happened by mistake lol, but newyz I edited the other spot, here's the link...

Originally posted by: rainurubal

nice update...

loved they way you expressed feelings os Tasha

Originally posted by: tinkerbe11

Okay so I'm gonna do the poems first and then the actual chapter, okay, so bear with me. aww sweetie am totaly wit u..cnt wait 4 it😉

Thehre hue paani mein kankar na maar saanwre

mann mein hulchul si mach jaayegi baanwre

thehre hue paani mein kankar na maar

Okay for starters I luv the first line, it's like so...wots the word, er I can imagine the talaab they sit at with ripples running thorught them.

aww inih...u can also clearly see that d persona is referring 2 his pain that has nw turned into a scar...lekin agar phir chot paunche toh zakham phir taza ho jata hai...
And from the ripples formed by the force on the water the sound makes your heart do a fluttery thingy lol

ur soo right bout d fluttery feeling man..everytime u read dis bit...u can totaly imagine d whole watery scene nd d wierd feelin in ur heart...😳

tere liye hu main anjaani

mere liye hai tu begana

begaane ne anjaani ka

dard bhala kaisa pehchana

jo iss duniya ne na jaana

thehre hue paani mein kankar na maar saanwre

mann mein hulchul si mach jaayegi baanwre

thehre hue paani mein

You know I love how you choose the right words when its tasha in question, it really is weird how Dutta and Naku manage to always relate even when they first meet. They both always notice something about each other amongst crowds thats what I love about them.
It's like even in a crowd its only each other that they are always concerned about.aww thnx hun...i ges cuz wer so tasha deewanis..we can see tasha in everythng😉😳😆 .. but ur right...tasha can relate 2 so mny thngs...evn ordinary thngs but they mke em unique..😳😳

sab phoolon ke hai deewane

kaaton se dil kaun lagaye

bhole raahi main hu kaata

kyon apna daaman uljhaaye

rab tujhko kaaton se bachaye

thehre hue paani mein kankar na maar saanwre

mann mein hulchul si mach jaayegi baanwre

thehre hue paani mein

That is so true, everyone only notices the beauty of a rose, but no one wants to acknowledge the thorns, but the truth of the matter is no thorns no rose, just like Dutta, no sweet without the sour.
Naku is the rose and Dutta is the thorns, together they become one. Naku ko kaaton se bachaye, aur Dutta ko phoolon ka deewana banaye.

true..we only luk at the beauty of d flower but not d thing that made it so beautiful...its true that a rose is d beauty..but that beauty wouldnt exist witout d thorns cuz its d thorns that protect d rose from all😳

timhi bataao kaise basegi

dil ke armaanon ki basti

khwaab adhure reh jaayenge

mit jaayegi inki hasti

chalti nahi hai ret pe kashti

thehre hue paani mein kankar na maar saanwre

mann mein hulchul si mach jaayegi baanwre

thehre hue paani mein

It's like you're listing all the possbilities that state why their relationship won't work, almost like its trying to tell readers, that new answers will fill the gap.

sum gaps will be filled soon but d slower it fills d more thristy 1 gets😉baad mein iski keemat pata chalti hai...
haye haye haye haye I love the the 4th line, chalti nahi hai ret pe kashti, I like how you used this line to indicate that they're relationship is in the same boat.

gee thnx bbe...i jus love hw u point everythng out..disecting it so perfectly...nd yeh both r in d same boat...wich only suggests dat sum1 shud do somethng in order 2 cum 2 d dry land...out of their confusions...

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Gaalo ki laali dekh aaine mein

soch mein par gari main

aankhon me bhi yeh chamak kaisi

uljhan me par gayi main

Wow, now this is so different to the first one, it's like its totally contradicting the whole of the first poem, love the way you put this in between to show how the emotions are changing with time.
But you know this paragraph sounds like it's coming from Dutta's mind instead, althoug it's told from a lady's perspective.

yep it is contradictory..dat was d whole point...hmm actualy i ddn fote bout it in dat sense..it actualy suits him aswel but i hav a beter 1 instore 4 him😉

mann se poochi tujhe hua hai kya...

tan ko jala rahi baat hai kya...

yeh mujhe aaj hua hai kya..

soch mein par gayi main...

See I told you, I don't know why but it just seems so right from Dutta's point of view, it's like him noticing the change in Naku towards him.

ur right but den agen sinc wen r tasha seperate..😉 alag hoke bhi itne paas...different thoughts...different situations but same feeling and most certainly same paths..😳😳
The tan ko jala rahi hai... part went so well with Dutta's character. And let's face it is Dutta who's is soch mein para huwa.

here agen it can b applicable 2 both of dem..since evn naku is in denial...its true that she is less confused but even she believs all this feels impossible...4 naku d whole 'tan ko jala rahi hai' part can refer 2 hw shes currntly feeling but is helpless...

ek raat mein mujhe hua hai kya..

saanson mein meetha ehsaas hai kya..

yeh kahan kho gayi tujhe pata hai kya..

dil se puchi main...

Okay so I can say that this part applies to both of them. The meetha ehsaas however isn't just running through both of them, it's running through us too!

yup...even d reader is aware of this whole chnge nd meetha ehsaas..nd wants 2 kno wots gona happen nxt
Jahan bhi khoye ho...as long as your with Dutta, no location in the world can be better then being with him. And dil se kya poochna, yeh dil hi to hai, jo aag lagata hai!!

true...witout him..d most beautiful luxurious plce wud seem mundane..wit hm by d side..phuloon ki chuban k dard bhi ek meetha sa ehsaas baan jaye..yeh dil hi toh aaj lagata hai..nd it only gets worse..bas barakne ki der hai😉

kyun lag raha hai sab naya..

yeh mujhe aaj hua hai kya..

sawaalon mein uljha reh gayi main...

kyunki sab naya hi hai, so Dutta out with old and in with the new! yep but nt jus dutta..evn naku is geting strange sensations..
Ain't that great when new questions arise, thats when you find new answers, which only give you more questions, and that's when you know you're in love, kyunki love ko kisne samjha hai, aur kehta hai woh samajh gaya, usse abhi bohut kuch samajhna baaki hai.

yea das y in love der is no wrong or right path..das y dey say all is fair in love and war😉

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Dil ka dard ruk na payega,
Jo hui hulchul itefaak se bhi,
To ghamon ka paimana chhalak jayega

No! This bit just stinks of Supriya B*tch!l

mao!! it nice wen u ignore sups part but as soon as her thoughts cum in..it jus has a rely bad taste🤢
And the second line is so heart breaking, he's trying to overlook the little bit of feelings he felt towards Naku!!!

yeh but atleast he has realised and felt some kind of hulchul😉

Mat de hawa dabi hui un chingaariyon ko,
Warna tera bhi daaman is aag se jal jayega

Who cares this is me giving hawa full on, wait watch me go get a industrial fan to make the force stronger lool, Dutta woh aag ko to jalna hi hai...isiliye to hum yahan hai, aur jab aag bar jaye gi, tab hum Supriya ka swaha kardenge usme.

oohh bby i am soo wit u on dis 1!!! sups ko toh udha hi denge haha😉😆😆

Kaid hai jo dariya in aankhon mein,
Mat de usko aur ashko ke moti,
Nahi to woh bhi bewajah beh jayega

Nooo Dutta doesn't cry!!!!! aww ikno hate 2 him cry..tho he luks damn cute...

You know what the first line reminds me of, don't laugh, but it reminds me of 'cry me a river' by Timberlake LoL...hey how about Dutta sings that to Supriya, now that sounds better!

lmfao!!! hahaha but yeh he shud defo sing 4 her...tho id rather prefer if he sings suma nice 2 naku insted..y waste time on usless thngs😆

Kaise bhool pauga woh beete hue pal,
Kaise mita pauga uski yaadein is dil se,
Jab usi ka hi ehsaas meri har saans se ayega

Errrggghhh I hate the fact that this is all with Supriya in hindsight!! I mean itni achi and beautiful poem, and it's kalanked with Supriya's sari huwi yaadein! She's a closed chapter Dutta, forget her!!! Her yaadein will be deleted asap by Naku's new and improved software, and then you'll be like Supriys who...???

actualy wen i 1st read d poem i didnt hav sups in mind at all...jus dutta and his tanhai...haha i loved d way u put sups nd her sari hui yaadein LOL😆😆 yep he defo wil be...ur wish is my command..u jus wait nd watch😉😆😆😆

Yeh woh zakhm hai jo mile hai wafa ke badle,
Yeh woh tohfe hai jo uski nishaniyan hai,
Agar kahu usko bewafa to daag mohabbat pe lag jayega

Zakhm bar jaate hai, time is the greatest healer Dutta.

mayb yes..but if u beliv in dat den its bou time u act upon it..*hint*...u get me...😉😆

You call all those moments tofe!!! My foot!!!! She never deserved a hunk like you!! I'd like to give her some tofe in return...bleep bleep bleep

lmfao aise tofe ho toh .. *shudders*🤢🤢

Thank you now your talking, she is fully bewafa, and mohabbat ko badnaam har baar kyun karna parta hai?

ahh ikno mohabbat and sups rely dont go 2gether..yeh toh mohabbat shabd ki toheen hai!!

Chala jauga mehfilon se tanhai mein
Aur phir dhoondhuga mehfilon ko hi tanhai mein,
Shayad yehi ek aakhri mukaam zindagi mein ayega

Well this line has a lot of deeper meaning then I can say, 'cause the truth is somewhere along the lines everyone can relate to this. There's times in life when you choose to be alone, and when you are, you find yourself looking for crowds who won't notice the sadness beneath the skin. So hats off to you for such a meaningful poem babes, it makes you think of things in a different light.

2 ryt hun..any1 can relate 2 dis..das d beauty of it..and ukno wa bbe weneva u try 2 hide ur tanhai wit a fake smile..deep in ur heart ders a hope dat sum1 might jus understand u nd ur pain..dat person wnwt admit it at 1st but no matter wa d situation u always wud wnt sum1 hu wud luk way beyond ur forced smile...

Kyun bichha ke baithu main nigaahe uski raahon mein,
Kyun karoo aaj bhi intezaar uske aane ka
Waqt woh bhi na raha to waqt yeh bhi chala jayega

And bravo to these three lines, finally some realization. When someone has made it clear they don't want you, why wait around beg-friending lol, and the last line I love! When the good times don't last, then why would the bad ones last. This is something everyone should believe, this is one of the most meaningful reasons for life.

lol bet ur glad readin d 1st line 'kyun bichha ke baithu main nigaahe uski rahoon mein'!!😆 it defo brought a smile on my fce😉😆 yep d last line gives hope 2 nt only dutta but 2 d readers aswel who might hav cum across a difficult situation..dis line reminds me of a dialogue salman had sed in main aur mrs khanna...😳😳

Waqt woh bhi na raha to waqt yeh bhi chala jayega

Beautiful, beautiful use of imagination, simply outstanding hun. It's actually more nice to know that you proper go fishing around for these poems to make it perfect, your efforts are truly not wasted. You have a beautiful mind, and you choice of poems indicate that clearly. ahhh am flattered😳😳 thnku bbe😳😳

Btw sorry 4posting dis here, it happened by mistake lol, but newyz I edited the other spot, here's the link...

lol np bbe...chillax😉 ..wil jus go nd read it😳 😳

RES

Originally posted by: tinkerbe11

So now the actual update itself! Well well first we got Naku blushing herself to death lol,lmao! nw hu dus dat remind u off😆😆 and omg why on earth would u wanna get out of Dutta's embrace man...uski bahon mein faint hojaati to jaada acha hota, dats as good as the earth swallowing you lmfao. ROFL! ikno...damn..itni achi opportunity lost...tut tut😆😆

Okay so before I forget I have to say, I love the way you put (guest) in brackets...I dnt no why, but it made me laugh. LOL! i put dat so ppl dnt get confused cuz dey dnt rely play ny role ere..plus dey wudv 4get hu they are due 2 our updating speed lmao😆😆😆 But haye Naku ka sharmana, Baji ka satana, Dutta ka Naku mein kho jaana was just so cute! awh love d way u put it man...kya ho raha hai..yeh shayeri kab se shuru kar di😉😆😆

Oh Mish!! I love the way you described Naku's feelings and thoughts when she goes to bed, it was so imaginable, and the 'explosion' bit was so spot on, I now how she feels, dil mein patake pooting!ofc ud know it😉 nd thnx And you know while I was reading on I found 'that voice' in my head starting to sing that song from Sangharsh lol, but it went so well with the conversation at hand, I couldn't have picked better words myself. omg yeh dat song goes perfectly!! love dat trak man..! <3 Oh oh oh and replay was spot on, and the way you put Baji's lingo in her words to, that was a laid back and funny twist. hehe yeh i fote i beter strt d whole FB lyk dey do on tely😆😆

But the part I like best here is when Nake regardless of trying mega hard to stop herself from thinking about Dutta, she goes right back into drooling over him, that part was classic man!haha das me!!😉😆😆😆chahe kitni bhi koshish kar loonn tasha land se bahar aane ka naam hi nahi leti😳😆

awww that is super cute!!😳

And Dutta, he's also going crazy, wow, could we ask for more, I think not! haha now all he need is his bar LOL😆😆 But what's this, he's comparing his new found emotions with Sups...eugh...I need a vomit bag...quickly!ohh ikno...tumhe to parne mein aise feel hua..jus imagine mera kya hua hoga likhne mein🤢🤢 Oh god man I'm glad he stopped thinking, 'cause I could feel my fist clenching tighter, when I read Supriya's name, ew...eww ikno..lucky u ..wish i cud do d sme but i had 2 keep my thinkin cap on sum thngs u jus cnt get away wit ey... but still the fact that his thoughts ghuma phira ke end up on Naku eventually, makes you forget of that churail's presence. aww inih..u go bak 2 tashaland😳..only need 2 tink bout him nd all ghussa vanishes in thin air😳😳 But I love the way he's also trying to divert his thoughts elsewhere and ends up right back on Naku and her gorgeous looks, I like how he focuses on her simplicity, I hope Supriya was a tart lol...aww bless ikno das nakus speciality😉😆.. sups hmm nt thought bout dat much since daya wil get d pleasure of writing her part lmao!!😆😆dat way she prob dresses opposite to Naku, and den hopefull Dutta will realise he was dating a sket lol!!!! i hope so 2 lol but evn if she dsnt..naku wil always stand out in d crowd😉😳😳😳

awh luk at u all relaxd😆 or is it bored expression..?!??!!

But then it gets better, the way it goes into peotry, seriously Mish I had a smile on my face like THIS BIG, I was like omg Mish that is so you, I know you wrote that yourself!!!!!awww thnkuuu soo much bbe..i was actually waitin 2 see wa u tink bout dat😳😳 And it was awesome (spelt it right this time),lmfao!!! you are seriously and dangerously talented chick!!!! I'm serious!!!! WoW!!!! gee abhi toh sirf naku blush kar kar ke tomato jaise dikh rahi thi..i gues i shud jus join her...😆😆😆

Do you know that I find poetry one of the hardest things to write, I don't know why, but that kind of imagination seems out of reach for me, personally. it dus tke a bloody long time 2 write man...nd tbh wit u i dnt tink i can write it in english..neva tried 2 either... But the way yo wrote that small piece was really fantastic, you need to look into that and develop that further you know, I'm serious no lies, I wanna see what else you come up with, you truly shocked me with those lines, it's amazing to express thoughts the way you did with those words. *blush* hehe il see be..sinc am so lazy nd poetry tkes lots of thinkin..but i wil defo write suma 4 u[nt necessarily bout u tho..jus in case i write 1 nd its all lovey dovey..u myt get d wrong idea bout me LMAO!!]😆😆okay jokes apart...i wil try nd see wa i can do nxt time..spesh since u wil defo get a surprise afta d nxt update..wich wil b up 2day...my update is full of...beep beep ...ul find out soon😉😆

aww ukno i actualy neva understoond d connection b/n poetry nd rose.. but it dus go perfectly...ges it dsnt need ny wrds😳

Oh man like you said in your peom good things just don't last long enough, Dutta has to go and get angry at himself. And then he starts going down memory lane, with anger shooting up, and with every moment believe me my anger levels were rising too, not her again, she had to go and ruin the bloody moment. hmm ikno man lekin lekin...jus tink...wot dus his anger always lead 2...leme jus giv u a hint...sharab...and wa hapens after everytime he drinks.. 😉😉 okay i tink ive sed enuf..now id leav it 2 ur imagination😉😆

And then Dutta hits the pole...ouch...I wished for a second that was Supriya lol, imagine her getting puched by Dutta, now that's funny. lmao! i can so imagine..wish we had d luck 2 see dat onscreen😆 lekin isse pehle toh...kismat hi phut gayi ltl ki aur saat mein hamari pfftt What the hell was he thinking!!!! What the hell went too far Dutta abhi to kuch hua hi nahin and your debating with yourself of how far you let yourself go with Naku!!!!! At least do something that 'does actually mean going too far' LOL. areee dats our dutta..hes stil d typical gadha rmemba😆 nd u wil defo get 2 see how far...

OH goD NO!!! and its the end already, I proper scrolled down to read the next part, only to find the end : (. aww so sory bbe but ur getin d nxt dose of BER 2nyt itself😉😳

...And I thought you said it was long. aww ur so cute!! ikno i put dat on accidently...evn pooja asd me dat😆

So when you gonna update!!!???!!! lyk i sed ur wish is my command...so update wil be 2day!!..[now wil i get an update bak 4rm u..??]😳😳

Girls I love you both, but I'll love you more when I see the next update...aww i love ur more bbe but lyk i sed update 2nyt...now ill love u more if u update aswel..kya kehti ho?!?!😉😆😆

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mwahh

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