FF:Benaam Ek Rishta||discontinued|| - Page 55

Originally posted by: dhlgirl

hey enjoyed reading every bit of it - don't make us wait too long, want to read how they express their love for each other ---- so hurry!!!!!

So now the actual update itself! Well well first we got Naku blushing herself to death lol, and omg why on earth would u wanna get out of Dutta's embrace man...uski bahon mein faint hojaati to jaada acha hota, dats as good as the earth swallowing you lmfao.

Okay so before I forget I have to say, I love the way you put (guest) in brackets...I dnt no why, but it made me laugh. But haye Naku ka sharmana, Baji ka satana, Dutta ka Naku mein kho jaana was just so cute!

Oh Mish!! I love the way you described Naku's feelings and thoughts when she goes to bed, it was so imaginable, and the 'explosion' bit was so spot on, I now how she feels, dil mein patake pooting! And you know while I was reading on I found 'that voice' in my head starting to sing that song from Sangharsh lol, but it went so well with the conversation at hand, I couldn't have picked better words myself. Oh oh oh and replay was spot on, and the way you put Baji's lingo in her words to, that was a laid back and funny twist.

But the part I like best here is when Nake regardless of trying mega hard to stop herself from thinking about Dutta, she goes right back into drooling over him, that part was classic man!

And Dutta, he's also going crazy, wow, could we ask for more, I think not! But what's this, he's comparing his new found emotions with Sups...eugh...I need a vomit bag...quickly! Oh god man I'm glad he stopped thinking, 'cause I could feel my fist clenching tighter, when I read Supriya's name, ew...but still the fact that his thoughts ghuma phira ke end up on Naku eventually, makes you forget of that churail's presence. But I love the way he's also trying to divert his thoughts elsewhere and ends up right back on Naku and her gorgeous looks, I like how he focuses on her simplicity, I hope Supriya was a tart lol...dat way she prob dresses opposite to Naku, and den hopefull Dutta will realise he was dating a sket lol!!!!

Do you know that I find poetry one of the hardest things to write, I don't know why, but that kind of imagination seems out of reach for me, personally. But the way yo wrote that small piece was really fantastic, you need to look into that and develop that further you know, I'm serious no lies, I wanna see what else you come up with, you truly shocked me with those lines, it's amazing to express thoughts the way you did with those words.

Oh man like you said in your peom good things just don't last long enough, Dutta has to go and get angry at himself. And then he starts going down memory lane, with anger shooting up, and with every moment believe me my anger levels were rising too, not her again, she had to go and ruin the bloody moment.

And then Dutta hits the pole...ouch...I wished for a second that was Supriya lol, imagine her getting puched by Dutta, now that's funny. What the hell was he thinking!!!! What the hell went too far Dutta abhi to kuch hua hi nahin and your debating with yourself of how far you let yourself go with Naku!!!!! At least do something that 'does actually mean going too far' LOL.

OH goD NO!!! and its the end already, I proper scrolled down to read the next part, only to find the end : (.

...And I thought you said it was long.

So when you gonna update!!!???!!!

Girls I love you both, but I'll love you more when I see the next update...

Originally posted by: preety_219

Hey Missy🤗POOJA😃🤗🤗Loved the starting poem-Thahre hue paani me👏.

Loved the last poem as well.👏 aww thanku so much bbe.,.so happy u liked it😳

U have described both Nakku & Dutta's feeling so beautifully thru this poems.Its amazing how everytime u manage to come up with such beautiful poems👏& the best part is it gels with the story so well. yeh das y i use them..wen it cums 2 tasha...everythng is about emotions..so wats the best way 2 describe them but thru peotry😉😳😆

While Nakku is slowly experiencing this unexplained affection towards Dutta .Dutta on the other hand is falling for her,but that is reminding him of his past love,something which he is unable to forget till now & that is making him angry. lol so tru...nd without anger dutta isnt dutta😉 He is not liking this loss of control over his heart feelings. lol so typical of him..jus like in the show wen he didnt hav control he use2 turn in a khatarnaak sher lol😉😆😆

So far u & Daya have kept both Dutta & Nakku's past hidden,but i guess with their changing relations,& attraction towards each other,soon their past has to come out.How & when that only u girls know😉oh u definatly dont hav 2 wait 4 long at all now...bet u dat😉thohra sa aur sabar karo..but u aint gt long😆

Ur own lines about Dutta's feeling & inner conflict were so wonderful.I specially liked the line -

*unn bikhre hue tukdon ko phir se jinda kar diya ho jaise* hehe thnx hun🤗🤗...i wrote d poem n end mein jab post karne wali thi...yeh likh di😳

It clearly showed that his brain doesn't want to give one more chance to his heart,but kya kare dil hai ki maanata nahi😉 hmm jab gadhe ki tarah sochoge toh dil kaise sun sakta hai...aur hamara dutta toh gadhepan me champion hai😉😆😆😆

Now its Daya's turn i guess,so Daya u better come up with next update real soon.yeh its dayas turn n dw we definatly wont tkae as long as we tuk las time😆

Lots of love🤗🤗🤗

Pooja😊

luvya

xoxxo

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Originally posted by: suhana19

Hey dear Missy and Daya 🤗 Hey suhana!!😃🤗
Thanx alot for the wonderful updates and pm 🤗 loved it as always ...your welcum and thnku bbe😃
Loved both the poems ..beautifully written yaara ..geee cheer hun😳😳😳*blush*awww both are falling in love ..and thinking of each other ..but dutta get over his past ..but I hope naku's love will bring him out of the dark past and soon we will have a new beginning ...yep and yep agen...hmmm he wil eventually 😉 😆
Can't wait for the nxt part ...me neither😉 😆I know it's Daya"s turn ..so Missy dear u can relax 😆 *BIG SIGH* ofc im gona relax ... nt 4 long tho😆😆 but loved this update ...pls jaldi update karna ..u take care and see ya around thnx agen bbe...update wil b up rely early dis this...
Lots of love and hugs luv u2...xoxo
Suhana 🤗

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

EBR!

Hiya Mis ello sweetie🤗

Opening verse.. like the way u started it lol😉😆for me spell out Nakku's self expression of herself,stagnant ,standing waters as opposed to clear ,clean waters..standing still not flowing..who would want her upon her as seen face..the verses show her helplessness in concealing her true identity! still she is gravitatedtoards this complete strangerwho recognizes her quietunspoken hurt.In the wake of preference,it's the flower the world beholds first not the the thorns;the image of comparing impossible to fulfill dreams to rowing a boat on sand was a great metaphor! wow gurl cudnt hav put it better myself!!! completly agreeon it all..it rely givs u strnge feeling dsnt it

The sequence conjured up the atmosphere of PN some how,and the focus on Baji and his wise cracks was a welcoming bit in the update;between D/N Baji seemed to have lost his rightful glow..so great Missy you brought him in his typical dialouges spurting self😃,suited the situation! aww glad u enjoyd it .. baji is always der 2 lighten a scenario inih😉😳😆😆

The section when Nakku when relishes in her thoughts about her close dance with him and how she delves on his particular facial features ,his lips ,his smile,his eyes"that pull like a magnet in force"😍...the main features i wud normaly notice *ahem*😉😆and the complete following lines were so poetic and certainly Missy reflect not just Nakku's thoughts,but many women's thoughts including the writer herself!😉 thnx!!😃😳 tried 2 portray her fallin over dutta jus lyk any girl might..keep it real😉

" gaalo ki laali dekh aaine mein"...was so beautifully written in poetry ..I could really see Nakku blushing as part of her realization her baffling "meetha ehsas"for which she seks answers! how romantically put👏..word to word...it rely did fite wit situation n hw a nrml woman myt react...blushin n all😳😳

Yesss Dutta's bit..oh my word the man's actually thinking and that to poetically! "ye kaise jazbaat hain jo phirse zindagi mein chupke se laut rehe hain...wooh pyar mein kya kya badal jata hai...woh bhi toh ek insaan hi hai aakhir😉

waiting for him to short fuse! my favourite bit always!----haha lol ukno i jus knw at least ud lyk dat part!!😉😆 oh but look the lionhas been stung by the love bug! "dil ki dhadkan ko phir se kisi ne cher khani ki ho

jaise! yep...no goin bak now!!😉yeeeah knew it was Dutta you were talking about missy![last night] yep u wer right!! lol obv sinc naku hadnt fallen 4 any1 b4😆

poor cubby wubby ab to tu gya kaam se ! tu saala kaam se gaya😉 >> sory bt had 2 say dat😆😆 he's smitten and bitten by the lovely long locks of the lady!...lyk any nrmal guy wit a heart nd hamare dutta ka dil toh golden ka hai [nt literaly]😉😆 Iam waiting..waiting! yesss here comes our Sher"ye kya ho raha hai...Missy loved the way you described his facial expressions 👏aaad he finally did what I wanted "hit the pole"!😃 omg rely am i rely getin a complmnt 4rm hammie hus lyk 1 of dd best writer spesh wen it cumz 2 roaring dutta😉😳😆 ... i was actualy propa nervous while writing dat part...1st time ive eva wrote his angry side😳..btw do u kno wen he says 'yeh kya ho raha hai' i imagined 1 of his scneese wer he says it in so much anger dat evn hes shaking wit it...if u ko wa i mean...hope ppl gt d pic😳😳

The last bit "dil ka dard ruk na payega" ...the reference to "pai mana chalek jayega" an apt pointer to his drinking habits👏 ..the comparison of heart ache to the over flowing cup of alchoholwas really good--thnx hun evn i rely lyk dat refernce...spesh since sharab wa he nrmaly lives on lol😆 there was a sudden sad awe about in the words of the poetry..the floods of tears held captive in his eyes..the shunned loveror rather a man;his wallow in his sorrow rejection;his receding into the depths of his lonely world...and his existing eternal hopeof her return...Missy beautifully expressed in Urdu verse...me not a par on what you have written👏...you see the true essence is lost in translation gee am flattered *blush* thnx bbe😳😳 .. ur right bout his sadness...after his daydreams ... realisation hits him...nd hes always been big in denail...shws his gadhapan lol but i love it😉😆😆

So I said this to you before I say it again writing poettry is your strong point

that which I lack...In admiration xx hammie aww ur been far 2 kind *blush* ..thnku sooo much 4 such a flattering comment man much beter den d actual update😳 ... <3 u xoxo