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Posted: 17 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: shabzc1

yay so u updated, like usual this part was brilliant 👏 ,thank you hun! i was actually quite taken back with this strong prachi, well, nowadays in the serial she is being pretty strong but alas this decision of hers has brought everyone back to square one indeed, it scares me how ekta kapoor-esque i'm being here..

good luck with ur remaining exams 😊 thank you!

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#83

Hey, I wanted to ask you something. I was wondering if you would like to be my beta? I promise I won't be annoying :p You seem to have a knack at analysis, and I thought you'd be great at it, plus I really need a beta, so..?
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Posted: 17 years ago
#84

Originally posted by: candyfloss

😆 ofcourse u dont like michi thats why u want mills out of the show.😆😆.what? when did I want him out of the show?.u even dont want shachi 2gether but jay-panchi🤢Again, are you sure you're not confusing me for someone else😕, i like just neev as a character... and I think jay-panchi could be cute in real life..but thats really not the point of this fic
honestly i dont like ur story only 4 one reason...np slept together n had affair inspite michi being marrieddon't worry, I love honesty, but I'm sorry to say you got it all wrong. MP slept together while MA were married..I thought that was pretty obvious? Michi never got married in my fic....this kinda ruined the concept...this is what i think....so even if u reunite michi it wont be quite acceptablebut they weren't even together to begin with, how would I reunite them?.....its better np get back.really?..i personally think prachs doesnt deserve mills.he's too good 4 her.i agree there
dont get offended just my thought. nope, I love honesty and I'm not offended at all. but you got slightly confused at the story hun😃, MA and NP got married, and MP slept together. I don't think NP have ever slept together, even in my story..np totally disgust me thats why i kinda got unpleasant feelings reading this.....lol no problems
conflict is fine but why adultery n illicit sex btwn np!again, read the story! there's so sex, illicit or otherwise between them! If you just skim for mentions of milind, you are missing the whole MPness of the fic. if i keep the real track in my mind its prachs who's a betrayer n a bad wife.....maybe 4 u its right np hving illicit relationshop but since i'm hard-core mills fan;its hard 4 me to digest.i'm just too too biased with mills😆
again, read the story! You've got it slightly (very) mixed up😆

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Posted: 17 years ago
#85

Originally posted by: devilangel


Hey, I wanted to ask you something. I was wondering if you would like to be my beta? I promise I won't be annoying :p You seem to have a knack at analysis, and I thought you'd be great at it, plus I really need a beta, so..? a bit surprised...u need a beta??? Why? Hope i don't disappoint you with my analytical skills.😃 At ur service.

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Posted: 17 years ago
#86
OK a question..i just read ur comment to candyfloss and it says that Michi were never married in ur Fic...

😕 Confussssssed. I thought there was a part in which Michi had sex (not when they were having an affair after MA got married) but when Prachi let him abuse her...i thought at that point they were married.

I think it was August 2007 but forgot which part.

"It feels like hell, it sounds like hell, it looks like hells, and he concludes it really must be hell. He'd married her for revenge and she'd married him for money but somewhere along the line she had saved his life and he had saved her sanity and now it's muddled up. "


Edited by jinc118 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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I do need a beta, well maybe not so much with spelling and stuff, but you can tell me if my characters are realistic enough or if the dialogues are realistic enough and stuff... yay!! *hugs you*..after my exams are over, I'll send you the future parts and stuff. Oh, and also, I see that you live in the States? Which means you get both ABC and FOX? Which means that you hopefully watch Grey's Anatomy and/or House? If you do, could you please please beta my fics for those too?😳 Believe me, those need serious beta-ing...

And you'll never disappoint me😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
#88

Originally posted by: devilangel



I do need a beta, well maybe not so much with spelling and stuff, but you can tell me if my characters are realistic enough or if the dialogues are realistic enough and stuff... yay!! *hugs you*..after my exams are over, I'll send you the future parts and stuff. Oh, and also, I see that you live in the States? Which means you get both ABC and FOX? Which means that you hopefully watch Grey's Anatomy and/or House? If you do, could you please please beta my fics for those too?😳 Believe me, those need serious beta-ing...

And you'll never disappoint me😳



Yes i do watch House, nothing else interests me in TV anymore. ...try to..but Grey's Anatomy i've been missing for some time. Its gotten boring now🤢 tho i must admit that i haven't watched the last season too religiously. Too busy with school myself. Don't know if i can help you with those...but I'd be interested in House😃..u can guess why. I think the reason i took a liking for this fic is because i watch House.😃 Does that make sense?


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Posted: 17 years ago
#89

Hun...I too thought you had abadoned your fic and like JC, am extremely glad you hadn't. It's different and intense in a way I absolutely love. As always and you'll tire of it but I'm going to say it anyway...beautifully written and amazing.

I hope you do not mind but something struck at me at the end of the fic and that was when you mentioned that their 30 year friendship had broken. But it seems to me that it is very firmly intact going on what Milind wishes for Ayesha; her happiness, if anything, it would have been their marriage that had. Could just be me being dense as usual...

But I thought it was a perfect portrayal of Ayesha's feelings when she said, "I thought I loved you..." or something like that. I think in the show, this is what her character believes and if she succeeded in getting Milind (fat chance) then for her it would be all too anti-climatic... she'll feel exactly like that...

I could have only wished it went on forever but will now be looking out for your updates... 👏 Thank you hun...

Edited by zcbcc34 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#90
I just read the whole thing now.... really liked it 👏

Its different and intense in a complicated way(that kinda makes it more interestin)

Do continue

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