Crumb by Crumb: MP/NA FF Pt5 Pg12 - Page 6

Originally posted by: panache

DA...Sweetie..i really immersed myself when i read your ff..Brilliant piece...a totally unusual style of writing..i enjoyed it so much that I read the 3 parts almost 4 or 5 times... thank you! and it really means a lot that you read it four or five times :)

I like the shift in timelines... 👏 👏 thank you!Very beautiful writng with a touch of the dark undertones..the subtleness of the flow is brilliant... *bows down* thank you so much

I hope you wouldn't mind if say that there was bit of a confusion when i read it the first time around. i had to reread it once more to figure out the correct timelines..but overall beautiful... Lol, no it's okay, I know the shift in timelines is a little confusing, that's why part three doesnt have much change in it....but i feel that it flows better with the shift...

thanks so much and please continue reading!

Originally posted by: jinc118

Ok this part is much more clear. I guess because by now i am used to what your characters are like and also used to your writing 😃

I love Ayesha. 😃 Yay!
I love Neev. 😃 Double yay|
I love Milind. 😃 One and a half yay!
Prachi is still a mystery. I will write her next time, promise
Can i guess that you love Neev out of all of them. 😃 No brownie points for you for guessing the obvious, 😳, lol yea I love Neev...I think it has something to do with sad, despondent characters. Because..you know when I read Anna Karenina, I LOVED Karenin and played devil's advocate for him to EVERYONE...and I love Severus Snape, so definitely seeing a pattern there...

I absolutely love Neesha in this FF. I think you understand Neev extremely well and Ayesha too makes a lot of sense ( 😕 ) lol, why is that confusing?The reasons why she does things...well she doesn't give an explanation but the way she is, you don't seem to need an explanation. I hope she comes out of her self destructive state soon. she needs a lot of closure before she comes out of it, but yes I'm hoping she does too..

Milind's amnesia is beautifully portrayed. thank you!His melancholy and frustration at not remembering anything...very nice. So Neev doesn't want to be friends anymore. Wonder what happened. Was it because Milind married Prachi and tortured her. No, Neev doesn't exactly know that, I will tell the reason at some point, but that will come a little later

Awesome part. Loved it. I think the clarity also might have to do with the fact that its all in March 2008 😆 lol, aww thank you!

Till next time.
JC

Originally posted by: candyfloss

luved this part. 👏

Originally posted by: Heeba

hey...just read the last two part...i like the way you write...going back and forward in time...also the way u describe the emotions within the characters...Its a very different style of writing...nonetheless I'm really enjoying it

Thanks 😊

Originally posted by: Charmed...

Wow, really like the way you showed their emotions. I loved Ayesha's the most. Really interesting. Liking how your dealing with the PA.

Originally posted by: shabzc1

gr8 part 👏 i especially love the neev/ayesha confrontation, i really feel sorry for them.

Originally posted by: Nagina91

omg ur FF is gr8!!! 😃 👏 thanks!
love the way u skip through time! 👏 😃 thank you!
i didnt think urs wud follow the same suit as kayamath but it somehow fits right in! 😃 aww thank you so much
i felt treally bad for neev and millind both seem soo defeated!! 😭 😭 😭 so do i, they are both suffering
ayesha a witch as ever sort of surprising she has a heart (even if it is a tiny one) 😕 lol, i like to think so
nice to see she does have a shred of humanity in her even if it is for a second!! 😊
i got 1 question to ask your titles for each chapter are they all lyrics from songs? cause i know chapter 3 is save a life from fray yep, you're right. Chapter 1 is a song from Rufus Wainright, and the title of chapter 2 is a song called "Ain't no reason" by Brett Dennen, and chap 3 as you said is the fray. The title of the fic is also a song by Rufus Wainright.
anyway brill FF keep writing cant wait for the next chapter cont soon plz!! 😃 thank you! please continue reading!

Originally posted by: milindkidewani

love ur ff...u have a very unique way of writing the characters and how they feel..
Absolutely brillaint!! 👏 👏

Originally posted by: blind horizon

I think I feel pretty much like Milsi tonight absolutely dumbfounded. i hope thats a good thing 😳Thx for the great part hun atleast both timelines were in syc wat a relief. 😊 lol, well at least a little had to be in sync..Update soon darling I like your Neev wish he'd spit out the truth in the serial too.yeah, so do i. Thanks for reading!

Originally posted by: zcbcc34

ok terribly late on the comment unlike the first time😆 ..but just OUTSTANDING...really. I just love the way you're writing...please update soon!! Just beautiful...what can I say? I hope you know that I mean that!! 😆 😳

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