Kaarvan - AA & RK romance...pg 92 & 93 - Page 68

hey Pragzs its past midnite and i read the part but dont feel i can do justice with my comments right now to such a wonderfully written part...

so will edit tomorrow with my comments..

just wanted to say for now, the parts flowed like river... on a beautiful spring day...

robina

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Im so glad to see you after long time🤗 hope you felling better now 🤗

This part was excellent👏 i can imagine everything😳 it was so detailed👏👏 map explains the whole location lolz 👏 👏

Hopefully Gia's reason wont make a misunderstanding😕

Ajay turned around 73 times OMG🤣 🤣lolz awwwwwww both Ajay and Allana share the same feeling for eachothe😳r aww so cute😳

Temple part was so cute 😳Robbie is so sweet and naughty at the same moment lolz😆

FINALLY the spend a time together😆lolz

RoKa lying in eachothers arms😍 😍

But cliff hanger OMG no not again lolz 😆i hope Ajay dosnt see them😕

Take care of your health 😳and whenever you feeling better do continue😳

Originally posted by: yummys

I just read you were sick, I hope you feel better Hey Yams....I am doing much better now, Thank you! 😊

For this part...
It was the most romantic one yet, I loved the piano music you added!Yes, it was!! I figured its time for some romance! 😆

Aww..that's nice we have more than just 1 love story. 5 girl and 6 guys. Gia is so smart and sweet at the same time, it's nice to see Ka and Gia trust each other so much.Their's is a beautiful and deep friendship!! Something, that needs to be treasured!

Loved the last scene, why is it a shocker with Ajay only.True..... 😆 😆 😆 Maybe I will change it the next time 😉 😆

Three guys after Robbie and his love is just funny. Kasturi does seem very popular!!! 😆 It's awesome that you gave Alaana a very sweet character.I like Preeti Gupta.......the actor who plays Alaana, so I figured I will make her good in this FF!

Overall, this was a really romantic part especially the background music addition was a bonus!!Thanks Yams 😃 and wanted to mention that I had missed to post a small part of it yesterday night! I am not sure how I missed it......but while reviewing the part this morning, I noticed it and so now I have added it 😃

-Yams

Originally posted by: pop77

wow prags..really good part..i am speechless..sameeer to alana ke piche hi tha..73times ajay looked them.. Thank you Payal!!!! 😃 Sameer, Alaana ke peeche tph hai....lekin jaldi hi uskaa patta katt jaayega!! 😆 😆 And ofcourse Ajay is really getting interested in Alaana!
i don't have a word for robbie & kas..marvels..i really like ringing bell... Oh I am so glad you liked that part! 😆
did you like camping? i only like hiking..your campsite look like yasomite and grand canyon site.. I love camping........actually the campsite is more similar to the Rockies......that is where I went camping!
gia 😉 she always come out with idea.. Yes, she does!!! 😆 😆
ronuak really love robbie has friend..even their cousin knows his name that means he really means.. Yes he does but ab dekhna hai ke what he is going to say when he comes to know about Robbie and Kasturi!
i hope ajay don't see them.. You will know, in next part!

take care ..now again asking same..
waiting for next part.. Next part by Sunday evening!

And Payal and wanted to mention that I had missed to post a small part of it yesterday night! I am not sure how I missed it......but while reviewing the part this morning, I noticed it and so now I have added it 😃

Originally posted by: knumnum

Mujhe kuch nahin dikhaayi de rahi hai except for the last part😆 Aaaawwwww its beeeeeeeeeeeeeeennn so loooong since u wrote a romantic part😆 Thank you for the wonderful scene Ppp... Did you really like it Krishi, because I was not satisfied with it!! Ajayyyyy, wen is he going to talk to Alaana??? Very soon 😆 😆 😆 Duffer, hurry up man!!!😆 warnaa sameer will sweet her off her feet😆 He will open up soon!!!

Loved Robbie asking Kas not to tell Kaushi-Ajay's convo. He is THE man👏😆 He absolutely is!!!! Love this guy!

Ohhhh nnoooooo Gia said tat Robbie luvs her?? Y do I think tat this info is going to cost RK a lot in future I really hope this doesnt create any misunderstanding At this point I am not planning to use this for a misunderstanding but if the demand arises, then I will use it! 😉 😆 😆

Luving Ajay-Alaana, aawww he turned around 73 times????😆😆😆 Tats cute... Yes it is...........and just look at Ms.Alaana actually counting!!! 😲 😆

Chalo, please likh fastttttttttttttttttttt😃 and also do take care of ur health😳, woh sabse zyaada important hai mere liye😳 Thanks Krishi! Next part Sunday evening, for sure!

Krishi

And Krishi and wanted to mention that I had missed to post a small part of it yesterday night! I am not sure how I missed it......but while reviewing the part this morning, I noticed it and so now I have added it 😃

Robina and Mani...........will wait for your wonderful comments!!!! 😃

Originally posted by: *princess*15

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Im so glad to see you after long time🤗 hope you felling better now 🤗
Mani dear..........the pleasure is all mine! Am very glad to see you too!
This part was excellent👏 i can imagine everything😳 it was so detailed👏👏 map explains the whole location lolz 👏 👏 I am glad it worked out the way I had planned! Thanks much for liking it! 😃

Hopefully Gia's reason wont make a misunderstanding😕 Well, lets see how that shapes up........at this point it will not become serious!

Ajay turned around 73 times OMG🤣 🤣lolz awwwwwww both Ajay and Allana share the same feeling for eachothe😳r aww so cute😳 I could just imagine them looking so cute!

Temple part was so cute 😳Robbie is so sweet and naughty at the same moment lolz😆He sure is! And he is very unpredictable too!

FINALLY the spend a time together😆lolzHa Ha! That was long time coming RoKa lying in eachothers arms😍 😍 Ok.....I think you youngsters should stop reading at that!!! 😆

But cliff hanger OMG no not again lolz 😆i hope Ajay dosnt see them😕Well...............you will find out by tomorrow! Take care of your health 😳and whenever you feeling better do continue😳Thanks mani for your wonderful wishes! 🤗

hi pragal..huuummm..after reading robbie's magic i forgot every thing what i read 😳😳....cuz of the magic of ur writing👏👏.woffoo..i have to read again to write my comment...

i luv the way u explained ...out side the camp in the moon light when robbie sat beside kasturi on her right and u keep on narrating along with their position left ,right...that gave a very clear idea to the reader like me to imagine the scene..previously also in one of ur part....i dont remember which part it is..when robbie goes to meet kasturi while she was dancing...the way he sat down on the floor and kasturi sat beside him..ur narration along with left side right side pose was gud...once in the bus too when they r returning back from a village trip..👏👏👏

ajai turned and looked alaana 73 times...poor man he might have got sprain in his neck..i luv the way u portarying alaana..to be frank i like alaana more than kasturi...it is worth turning back and looking alaana 73 times...👏👏👏

if robbie want to carry kasturi to ring the bell let him carry her.we luv to read that... i hope that time she was wearing short skirt..😳😉😉...par isliyea thum nay kasturi ko shorty banadiya...poor kasturi..and u made robbie to tease her too🤣🤣.🤣.....hamaari serial ki kasturi ithnee bhee short nahee hai lol..she can ring the bell on her own...

u r camp panthan map was very gud and gave a clear picture of the location...i like the wooden hanging brigge between the temple and CS3.i would like to read a romantic part while robbie-kasturi,ajai-alaana have a 15min walk on it..

gia said to ajai she luv robbie...the saint said to kasturi...teraa raasta kaantnseh bhara hoga..these two things giving me an ill oman...to this story..

last but not the least robbie ka magic amazing...i hope he will show his magic frequently almost all the parts...no..no.. no..dont think like that... i am not at all greedy...😳😉😊

Ppp Kyaa part miss kiya tune??? Didnt understand.. Mujhe toh lagtha hai I read everything... Let me know wat u missed and where u posted it?? Can u highlight or do something to tat part?? it will be easier to spot it😆

Haan yaar, the romance was in right proportions... Iam fully satisfied with it, infact more than happy😳 Ahaaaa so u r not satisfied?? then y dont u write another part tat will both satisfy u and also me???😆