FF-secrets of the heart-update pg33

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part 1

Jai Walia slowly walked down the crooked streets of Mumbai, drenched because of the pouring rain. Thunder roared loudly as tears streamed down his cheeks. Jai, a 22 year old in his last year of college, was a wealthy and very good-looking guy. All the girls in college would die to get just a glance of him. Oh how lucky he was. So lucky that he was walking alone on a stormy night oblivious to everything but his pain. The emptiness of his life echoed in his mind and heart. Everyday he would see his stepfather torture his mother and yet he could not do anything. He would see her tears in her weak eyes, those same eyes that had held such determination after becoming a widow with a 5 year old son, alone in this world. The same eyes that brimmed with hope for a beautiful future when she got married to Harsh Walia, the owner of the Walia Empire. He would see his mother getting spat on and attacked with harsh words of suspicion behind closed doors, yet kept quiet only because she urged him to. She was still beautiful and vibrant, which angered his stepfather so much that he always saw her with suspicion in his eyes. Jai's life had plunged into a web of darkness after his real father's death. Now he was the cool and ambitious rich kid who had the support and brains to make something out of himself. His parents, of course, wanted him to continue the great business of the Walias. Not wanted, EXPECTED. So what if he wanted to be a writer and travel the world? So what if he wanted to be freed from all these fake relationships and explore life' to LIVE life the way he wanted to? Why is it that he had to suppress his desires? Inside, Jai Walia was a tumbling tornado battling with himself, ultimately just ending up lonely.

His daze was broken by a sharp scream of a girl. He looked up to see a young girl soaked in a white salwar. He couldn't make out her face however. She was running towards him, followed by three men chasing after her. She was trying to escape.

Girl: Leave me alone! Koi mujhe bachao!

She looked back at the three angry men with lust filled eyes. When she frantically looked ahead, she made out the figure of another person and thought of him as her last hope. Jai was suddenly alerted of the serious situation as she hid behind him, hands on his shoulders.

Girl: plz, plz help me. Meri izzat'. Plz mujhe bachea!

Her voice was shaky and feeble. The three men came up to Jai, who wore a blank expression .

Man 1: Eh! Hat ja! Nahin to'

Jai: nahin to kya?

His voice was slow and sharp-- a volcano waiting to erupt.

Jai had found a punchbag to let out his anger on. Jai threw an aggressive punch at the deep-voiced man. They were trying to rape an innocent girl. Disgust and hatred filled him.

The other two scrambled off and soon after the man , still bleeding from the punch, scrambled after them. The girl let go of Jai and he turned to her. For the first time he looked at her carefully. She was a petite girl of about 18 with a cute almond cut face. But it was her eyes that captivated him. Those beautiful brown eyes that stared back at him with fear. She backed away from' shaking and scared.

Jai: Calm' calm down.

He found his own voice was trembling. Frantic she backed away from him quicker, afraid that he, too, might try to do the unthinkable. Suddenly she stopped. The world seemed to be moving round and round'. Nothing made sense anymore as all the lines became hazed and uncertain. Her hand moved to her head and she lost balance. Jai quickly caught her in his arms and held her. Despite the cold rain, she was warm' she made him feel warm. Jai swooped the unconcious figure up in his arms and started making his way back home. He couldn't just leave her there. And besides, he had a feeling that maybe, just maybe, this ajnabi was just as lonely and scared as he was.

ok guys-- wat did u think of the first part? this is my first ever fan fic so plz leave comments!!!😃 boring part but i promise --- the next one will be... VERY interesting😉

oh yea-- and guess who the AJNABI is😉😛

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Posted: 18 years ago
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yay the first one to comment!

bani!!! omg that was great! continue soon!!!

-pari
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Posted: 18 years ago
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omg is it bani..............i hope it is......awesome first part...continue soon

CK❤️
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Posted: 18 years ago
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preview:

jai brings her home. he calms her down and starts talking to her. they talk about luv, life, happiness... things that strike a chord at jai's heart. he is fascinated by her.

the electricity goes out 😲
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Posted: 18 years ago
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oooooooooo the electricity goes out.....i hope nothing bad happens.....

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Posted: 18 years ago
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oh man!!! thats really good!!! 👏

give you 2 thumbs up! 👏


please cont soon!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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hun, that's an AMAZING start!! seems really interesting...poor jai 🤗

ajnabi's definitely bani 😉
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Great beginning!!! awww, i feel so bad for Jai. Can't wait till the next part!!! the electricity goes out, eh? this should be interesting 😉 😆 please continue soon!!!

Love,
Godess
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Posted: 18 years ago
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part 2A
Jai brought her home. Once in the Walia mansion, questioning eyes stared at him. He was glad his dad had went out for an urgent and last minute business meeting. We wouldn't be able to put up with him now. Jai's stepsister put on a fake grin.

Jigyasa (his sis): wow bhai! Kya tareeka hai ghaar mein mehamaan lane ke liye! Have fun bhai!
With that she got up from the sofa and went up to her room. She could care less what her brother did. Jai had always received more attention then her, since he was the HEIR of the empire. She would be left with nothing, she was just another burden for her parents and she hated that thought. She was completely oblivious to how much her brother loved her and was hurt by her words.

Jai: Ma…

Mommy Walia: Jai yeh kya hai? She quickly ran to her son, puzzled.

Jai recited the story as he carried her to his room upstairs. He laid her gently down on his bed and asked his mother to arrange dry clothes for her. He had seen how weak she was and thought it was appropriate that she spent the night. His mother smiled at her son's big heart. She was always very proud of him.

Jai: Ma app Jigs se kapdre…
He frowned, realizing the weight of his words.
Jai: nahin, jigs ko bother karne ke zarurat nahin hai… aap mere kapde he dijeye.

Mommy walia nodded her head, hiding the tears in her eyes. Jai left the room as his mother put slowly stirred the girl and started undressing and dressing her again.

Jai waited outside patiently. This ajnabi had come into his life like a storm and it puzzled him. Who was she? Little did our hero know who was she GOING to be.

Mommy Walia came out with a sparkle in her eyes after a very long time. Jai stared at her, waiting.

Jai: toh…?
Mommy Walia: toh kya?
She smiled slyly.
Jai: did u wake her?
MW: yes. She was very scared when I did.. Poor thing. I helped her get into your clothes too. They were pretty big for her.
Jai: oh… ummm…who is she ma?
MW: I dun noe, ask her yourself.
MW said this with a knowing look in her eyes. Jai sensed something different in her. But he let it go. He was eager to meet this girl, very eager indeed. However, he couldn't quite make out the reason why.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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gr8 part plzzzzzz continue soon

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