MaNan|| gaze. [au] - Page 3

Originally posted by: Mehar23

What the actual..? Sorry, I'm just lost for words right now. All I can say is that was beautiful 👏

Thank you 😳 Though I doubt it was a render-me-speechless kind of a piece 😆

Originally posted by: annboleyn

Mais I don't want to corrupt this by writing my inane stuff. I just want to savour this,save it, read it again in solitude.

DOC! You flatter me too much...the amount of reading you've done, seriously. The way you quote so many things and authors and people and here I am, just a bumbling mess who tries to string two words together..when someone like you gives me comment like these, I go all.. 😳

I am honored, truly honored.

Originally posted by: nyxx

"Chaap tilak sab cheen li re
Mose naina milai ke."

In the voice of Nusrat Fateh Ali Khan, and it sends a shiver through my spine, Mais. You dont know how much I love you for incorporating one of the finest piece's to this tale. What you've poured out, penned down, is something that requires one to just read each and every word, grasp them, understand them, and let them sink through - I dont want to say anything more or less than this, because what you've write is something I'll cherish...Sheer Brilliance...Poetic yet, something so tangible & organic...A piece of remembrance!

You are one of the finest writers on this forum, and this talent and hold that you have on words is so admirable! Words and you...yin and yang. Keep them with you, always and don't forget to share them with us on a timely basis...It gives a new dimension to MaNan...

NYXX! You know, I've always known these lines. They were always in my memory but not as something I paid much attention to. Then in the latest episode of Coke Studio, Rahet Fateh Ali Khan and Abida Parveen sang their version of this song and GOD! I fell in love. Such eargasm..the feels it gave me. Whenever the chorus of "chaap tilak" breaks in the song..I can't explain what I feel in that moment..this whole piece was just me trying to give words to the feelings I feel in those moments..

I'll be honest, I didn't know where to take this piece after she claims to be worshiped by him in one gaze. But the words just kept flowing. This is one piece I don't want to disown or anything..because I feel I said a lot in the lines..guess it does happen to someone after the feels are just too over whelming. This is something which looks better in final product and not just in my head..

As for what you said about me in the last paragraph...lemme go all, "Hain?!" at it because that is too much for me..too much O.O

MAISY! ❤️
I am in lou with this piece. Its something that I will bookmark and read again and again. I like tragedies that are written well. And this tou was beautiful in every way. I had goosebumps while reading, no kidding. :3
I love how even though it was AU, MaNan was still there, so so there. Nandu lost in his gaze, being marked by him. He died while looking at the eyes that gave a meaning to his life. She died having achieved and lost the person that gave her life,solace. The flow , the words, everything was asdfghjkl! ❤️
You create magic with your words. You be my awesome firefly. Never stop writing! <3

So dat was my reaction while reading dis..😳



N Since am kinda speechless..Dis is 4 U Mais..

Originally posted by: gujjupari

Why was I so happy while placing a "res"?

Some stories are just impossible, yet not? Some love stories are not just not meant to be. They do not have a name, as they are beyond just being confined to a title. They are more. More than what the common man can ever understand. Only those who experience it can understand the fire that is Ishq. It's too pure, too delicate, so consuming, too unknown, to be ever described in words.

Ishq? What is it even? If there is a way to define it, it would be this OS. Regardless of hopelessness, past, appearance, profession; ishq hua, it happened, it was nurtured, it sowed a seed in to the fertile lands of the heart. So much so, that it became her. Yes, if there is ever a way to define the paak Ishq this would be it.

You have magic in your fingers and thoughts Mais! And this truly shows in this OS! This is enchanting this OS! It works so finely on Ghalib's Seven Stages of Love, that you don't realise it as first. But as you re-read it all comes together! I just want to know; is this somehow based upon a real story? Or something that is somewhat similar?

What have you done to me Mais? Now I am reading Ghalib's poetry again:

Sarayy raah jo unsaay nazarr mili,
To naksh dil kay ubharr gayay,
Hum nazarr mila kar jhijhag gayay,
Woh nazarr jhukaa kar chalay gayay ...

I swear..I did not expect to get such a response 😳 Like I literally don't know how to reply to this. Really? You'd point them to this to if you had to define ishq? Like what the even..!? I know that it's not half bad but to get such praise..I am blown away.

I didn't base it off on any real story. But as they say, there's no such thing as a new thing only the way of talking about it makes them feel different. So you might think it's similar to some story. But now that I think about it, so many years ago I had this idea for a story where I envisioned the girl, who's a princess, kill a traitor to her kingdom. Like the public death..she pulls the lever which makes him hang to his death. Except the guy is someone whom she knows since her childhood and they love each other. Woah..I do have a twisted brain 😆

And aaahh! That poetry! I have this written in my diary 😳

Originally posted by: apardh_ba

Such a beautiful piece of writing. I dnt like tragedy maybe they will meet in d other world where there will be no restrictions and where they would belong to each other. awesome os. keep writing

I never intended to write a tragedy and this surely is not a tragedy. Think about it, tragedy would be her being with him and having a heartbreak when the light of his gaze began to grow weaker and weaker. But here, she stopped breathing after knowing what it feels like to be loved at the same level of being worshiped. It was a happy ending for her..

Originally posted by: Noorie30

Mais, my words of appreciation will not do any justice to the beauty of yours.❤️ But babe, I am in awe of this amazing piece of work *-*

Tragedy is usually my most disliked genre but today girl, you made me fall in love with it👏

The mesmerizing flow Yours eloquent words! Sheer brilliance. Hats off👏

Again, this wasn't meant as a tragedy 😆 But i am flattered by your comment, really 😳 Thank you!

Originally posted by: TheFaerieQueen

Beautiful Mais. 😊. And when you truly encounter something beautiful ...words just leave you. What remains is just feelings..and this is one of those moment.

Awww! Thank you so much! Makes me feel all happy 😳

Originally posted by: rubys07

UNRES

Edited

OMG Mais...I've got goosebumps all over..awesome-freaking-tastic👏👏👏 And those last lines

And her eyes met the brown eyes which had turned her life around with one gaze. She saw it all, she kept looking at the eyes which drank her in till the shine from it was all gone. She kept standing there long after the crowd disappeared, staring at the dead face of the stranger who made her feel alive.

"Nawab ko kehdo, apna rishta wapas le le. Main bikki hui cheez hun, uske kaam ke nahin. Mera aaqa ais dunya se gaya, ab ye dunya meri nahin rahi."

Those were the only words she said when she came back to the excited faces. Before they could ask her any questions, she locked herself in the room.

The next day she was found on her bed, completely in peace. No one knew if her death came in sleep or she slept like that because she died.

T__T

*runs away to find a corner* *dies*

Ishq mein fanaah hone wali feeling is just..WOW ❤️❤️❤️

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EEEPPPSS!! thank you thank you thank you! 😃😳