The riddle of death... (end) - Page 20

Originally posted by: amitaprasad

u have a flair in writing mysterious plot..very well crafted but it is hard to remember too many characters with too many relationship..please make it easy for us.. i love jalal the way he handled inspector..and do not forget to update 'destined love'.

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

Thank you so much DI!!

For avoiding the reader's confusion with the relationships I have put a character list at the first page. Suggest me something which you find more helpful to make it easier...

I know I am too cruel with Destined Love. I am occupied with so many things now that there is hardly time to write fresh. (This one was written before😆) I am sitting with DL now.😃

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

Thank you so much DI!!

For avoiding the reader's confusion with the relationships I have put a character list at the first page. Suggest me something which you find more helpful to make it easier...

I know I am too cruel with Destined Love. I am occupied with so many things now that there is hardly time to write fresh. (This one was written before😆) I am sitting with DL now.😃

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

Thank you so much DI!!

For avoiding the reader's confusion with the relationships I have put a character list at the first page. Suggest me something which you find more helpful to make it easier...

I know I am too cruel with Destined Love. I am occupied with so many things now that there is hardly time to write fresh. (This one was written before😆) I am sitting with DL now.😃

Originally posted by: amitaprasad

u are the star⭐️...a big 🤗for DL..

Originally posted by: shailusri1983

Stuti since you wanted a suggestion, I will give my own two cents. If I was writing the same story, I would have begun with Raja Saab's murder and then jumped to your current chapter with the dynamics, interrogation and investigation between Jodha, Jalal and the inspector. Jodha's extended family would have come very gradually into the picture based on future incidents and happenings in the story.

As a thumb rule, I wouldn't have played with more than four or five major players in every chapter in a suspense intrigue like this. Similarly, I wouldn't have explained so much nor have been so descriptive. I would have left a lot of things dangling and hanging in the mid-air to maintain the suspense element. Of course, the loop would be closed as the FF proceeds but you must leave sufficient food for thought and intrigue in each chapter to the readers and not think up everything yourself.

That is the thrill of suspense novels. Minimum words and maximum impact! You could also use words which are open to multiple interpretations or meanings where you leave everyone guessing what the real meaning of the word is in the context of the mystery. Similarly, you could play with different points of view or perspectives of the same through the eyes of various characters. Keeping the characters of the leads layered and subtle also helps. But those layers should also be introduced one by one. I know telling all this is easy but actually doing it is difficult. I hope this helped.

Originally posted by: lashy

Stuti... when we watch people on TV it's easier for us to remember faces... but reading them in stories - they are just names and our mind needs longer to memorise them... which is why it's generally wiser to introduce characters slowly... at least, after the first set of 4-5 important characters are well-etched in our minds.

Yes it is. And here the family is so big that I myself get confused here. 😆

Another suggestion - sometimes it's just easier to do away with names and stick to relations (like chachi chacha mami mama - they don't need names and at the same time easier for us to place them in the family tree too)

😊

Okay... You mean Meenakshi as Jodha's mother, Nirmala as Jodha's chachi, Radhika as Jodha's chhoti-chachi like this? 😛

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

Thanks for your detailed suggestion as it will be very helpful for me, Di!

Maybe I would have put the the picture of the whole family gradually with the investigation, but somehow I felt maybe I will not be much comfortable with that and the readers will be more confused so put that part as an introduction... 😔

You know, it is very tough to maintain the suspense element throughout the story. Writing a descriptive emotional love-story is much more easier and I am much comfortable with that. 😛 😆 So as this one is my first trial, maybe in first chapters I am floating with descriptions and big explanations much... I am checking myself from now on. 😛 Also I have to read some more thrillers I think to grip the style. 😃

Originally posted by: ParijatDeewani

Res will comment in detail soon😆