RKG CHAPTER 16 page 117 POSTED Oct 19th - Page 13

Originally posted by: sharmacatty

ohk😛

Originally posted by: lashy

Comments for 3/4/5

So, Moti's haalat was what started this all in the first place?

Or was it the mission?

So, here comes the challenge to self and to her

I will curb your pride and ego... you will lose your heart to Jalal... he smirks bitterly...

The heart always wants what it cannot have...

Not only Jalal but I would say Radha is feeling the same...

This girl she doesn't even care ... she didn't want to open her parda...

He started forgetting about his guilt because his guilt started with her... and will end with her! (just my guess!)

Hmmm... Really U think so?

Jalal's temper has always got to be tempting! Looks like Ruqs definitely enjoyed the side effects of it... oh la la ! [You have described the conflict of emotions very well in this... must have taken a lot of time (and a lot of guts) to pen this scene, Bhavu!]

The wild encounter of Ruku baby😳... Effect of Fifty🤣 may be... hehe

We know Jalal isn't heartless! Be it his decision over the old maid or his affection for Rahim!

Btw, these two loved playing hide and seek didn't they? By these two I meant 'Jalal and Radha'

I wouldn't deny that... even now they playing hide sick with their emotions.

Shehzade hume to koi itraz nahi hai par hume humari Radha begum se to puch le ki unhe humare sath rat bitana manjoor hai ki nahi...

What was a serious prose so far, completely twisted into humour at this point! Add to it, Jalal's mischief with her at the expense of Rahim!

I love his sarcastic humor😳 Hema is the best in writing sarcastic humor.

Unintentionally her eyes drool on his strong muscular shoulder ... He looked so adorable while cuddling Rahim in a sleep... His brimming innocence touched her heart for the first time... She never thought Shenshah e Hindustan... Heartless... cruel...womanizer... unkind... rude... Jalalludin Mohammad has humanity...

Ok...this was a delicious read - her realization!

She gradually perceiving his good side ...

As for the pooja, Radha was being quite clever, wasn't she? Trying to point out what was wrong without trying to make it sound wrong... but, she is stubborn...

Yap... She tried to conquest him by playing with his emotion. She very well knew that he is attracted towards her.

Poor Shehenshah!

One side her purity touched him and another side her stubbornness was making him angry...

This was well pointed out!

Rukaiya and badi ammi both do many things against my wish and sometimes against kanoon... I don't punish them... Jalal heart was feeling pain for his own decision... He had taken many cruel decisions...but never shaken like this...

That was the first time he wanted to bend rules for Radha.

Well-realized!

his heart never melted seeing their families' tears... When comes to law and justice, he doesn't tolerate any small crime... She was surprised to see his heart made with Iron is melting for Radha...

Hamida knows very well Jalal's inner state... She is very sharp lady, it didn't take her long to identify Jalal's different behavior towards Radha

It was so sweet how Jalal came to the rescue of Radha from Ruqs, in time... and then a bit more chum chum comes... You really love the chum chum don't you?

I did love chum chum in beginning...😆 kind of symbolic.

I loved this dialogue

Chote bachhe... bado se zid nahi karte...

Jalal suddenly words sleeped out his tongue in haste... Aur bade zid kar sakte hai...

And poor shehenshah's physique being ridiculed by Radha was hilarious!

That's cute way of trailing her... I think it was Radha first day of fasting...

Hameeda really really wants Radha as her bahu, doesn't she?

NO... NO WAY... she wanted Radha in Jalal's life but not as Bahu as his concubine.

Their discussion about Religion and worship was ! Very profound... well done!

I don't remember... religious worship? I will read it... Especially U said profound... I have to read.

As for the Surya character... I'm confused... she wants a husband braver than her, but she is worried about Surya Vadan? I'm a little confused here..

its pre-planned Surya will come to help her for the mission if everything works out as per plan.

I am worried... I have heard Raja Surya Vadan is very brave... and he might come here to meet me...

She is just planting the seeds with Hamida... and telling her that she is also from well cultured close to royal family...

By the end, we can see the slow progression in their relationship. Radha doesn't seem to hate him as much as she did in the beginning.. she can already see that she had exaggerated his faults... and he's fallen head over heels in love with her anyway...

She definitely enjoying the attention of ruthless king... After seeing his softer side, her heart is curving towards him. U know I believe very strongly... Love makes people weak and vulnerable and she is unknowingly falling for him and that is the main reason her tears betrayed when he is around. She is thinking from her heart ignoring the warning from her mind.

I loved loved loved loved loved (infinity) how you merged the world of Pari-Radha/Jodha (and not to forget the pun on the word Pari' here) and narrated her story through a not-so-fairytale!!!

Me blushing...

But did he only kiss her? Or was that Radha being decent because she can't speak worse in front of a kid like Rahim?

Only Jalllad can tell what he did? hehehe

I understand he wasn't in his whole senses what THAT happened (whatever happened) but he doesn't recollect ANYTHING? Even after the story?

I didn't get your question? hehe

I liked the Jalal's follow up to this story too!

Kyu Radha, Jallad ko insaan ban ne ka koi hakk nahi...

Radha with little angry tone: Ha nahi hai.

I am so happy to read your comment... Now it's so tempting... I am going to read the entire Rkg... doesn't matter how it is written. But I really enjoyed reading your comment. My all sweet memories evoked... At that time, I was too naive to give out many hints...hehehe

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Originally posted by: mickeymini

Congratulations for ur new thread di

Thank U 😛

Such a long and interesting update
Now I understand
Y its takes long u to update

Actually, I have only two hours to myself for reading and writing... so it is hard to post fast.😃

Here both jalal n jodha are two confusing souls
A minute they feel strong pull towards each but the other minute they hurt each other
Don't u think ur stretching it too much

I want their love to grow stronger so they don't break in a hard time.

I think now jalal should know who is jodha n what he has done to her family ??

In about two-three chapter mystery will reveal to readers... but not Jalal...

Move the story a bit fast
It's moving at a tortoise speed
Anyway just my opinion

Thanks for your genuine opinion...😃

Waiting for next update

Originally posted by: Ishitafan

Oh my god darling it was amazing , magical it is definetley the best chapter for me so far.

Thank U so much Ishita😛

Hamida and jalal part is surpraising even though it was very good .

I am glad U like that part.😃

i felt as eager as jalal to meet radha. But that conversation played a major role in the next part . and here comes the major part jalal and jodha. From the very first scene it was very clear before my eyes you made them alive and hug was peak.

😳 I agree... Hug was indeed my favourite.

Beautiful huggg. Pleasent the first ever beautiful moment where they both expressed true feelings with out any egos. After that there was little drop and monotonous feeling in the story because of continuous disagreement from both sides always fighting for their ego. But immediately you brought the major change by jalal provoking her about her true feelings.

I enjoy provoking their emotions UP and down😆

Finally slowly story is moving forward . jalal got some thing suspicious about jodha that was one more peak in the story.

Many readers didn't see that... Yes... Jalal first time reveal his suspicion on her... His six sense always warns him.

Finally jodha the poor soul completely charmed by his man and opened up herself before him that was beautiful.

Yap... JOdha can't control her emotions when he is around😕

Got little busy i will answer your later. Thank you very much for the update. Take care

Thanks😳

Originally posted by: Blacktulip

The best morning msg i have got ❤️

I was waiting for your update eagrly to the extent that I skipped my breakfast to read it .

Your one line made my day... I feel all my hard work pays off...😃

wonderful Chapter .. both of them are fighting with their own feelings ..Jalal is determined to get her but bothered also with the reactions if he took the decision to marry a maid ..he is sad for brusting his anger and frustration on ammijaan.

Jodha is in Delimma ..she loves him and fighting with her own feelings .. i think she is feeling guilty also for lying on him

She is confused... Guilty and anger at herself...

Please update soon the next chaptet :)

Originally posted by: Akdhalover6898

Many many congratulations for new thread di

Thank U so much😃

Amazing update di

😳

i just loved the whole encounter between jalal and jodha they both love each other but deny the truth because of ego.
And the way jalal ignore maham is really nice.
Ijust loved your writing style you know how to stike readers

Awww So sweet ... Thank U so much

and the answer of your question is
1. Don't change anything it is awesome story.

Thanks 😳

2. The peace of story is slow acording me you have to increase its speed little more if you are comfertable or else keep it as.

I really wanted to know honest opinion of the reader... I don't want readers to feel drag...

3. I love jodha's character because she is intelligent, brave, selfless, and very well know how to deal with any situation.

U Jodha's fan 👏

Eagerly waiting for next chappy...
Thanks for pm di.

Originally posted by: Monucute

Bhavu di🤗

OHHH MONU MY DEAR🤗

Uff... I can't have enough of your writing di... After your each chapter, curiosity of what happened next just increases manifolds... The way you shaping up the characters and storyline is outstanding👏👏

Thank U so much encouraging words... I don't know why but I was somewhat concerned how a story was shaping up...but glad to know for an amazing writer that U like the progress of the story.
Update was usual mind blowing...😃



Jalal's tolerance level is giving up... His boiling emotions has started to show up... Though very strongly he had held them... but seems like it not far when he will confess his feelings in front of all and Jodha...

I won't deny that... he is at the edge😃

And his jealousy uff me floored😆... and I think he somewhere knows that she is there to destroy him... I mean He's suspicious about her identity isn't he?...

He is too sharp and can read people easily... he is surely suspicious about her but his heart is not believing even though his mind warns him.

His anger towards hamida is justified but his retort is not...

He suppressed his resentment for years, but now it was a matter of his love... his lonely heart was unable to sustain any longer... he was evenly hurt when Hamida chose sultanate over him.


Jodha, how much she tries to keep her emotions to herself, but all her tries gave up in front Jalal... how easily her emotions were recognized by him... She is an open book to him... And though she is living like a maid in his palace then also royalty just oozes out of her every action.

That is what the problem is... Radha can't hide her emotions... She is not here to fall in love with the person who she supposed to destroy... She is an open book and Jalal is reading her each and every inner sentiments... he is feeling her pain... anger and love...

Hamida, like I told you before I seriously like her strong character... And she's right at her place as mariam makani but I think she should have understood her son's emotions...

I truly love her royal personality... I agree with you at some point ... I would say she picked wrong timing... when Jalal was already too frustrated... and instead of making him feel better she gave him more stress.

Just loved overall update
Thanks for the pm
love you di❤️

LOVE U SWEET HEART ... AND THANK U FOR SUCH A LOVELY COMMENT.😳

Originally posted by: Monucute

Answers to your questions

1. Nope... everything is perfect😃

2. I think it's perfectly right... This slow pace is giving a right effect on the storyline...

THANK U SO MUCH... 😃

3. I just love all characters because the way you have portrayed them so strongly... everybody have the charisma that a royal person carries... and all have their vital role...

Hope my answers satisfies you...😊

ABSOLUTELY

Originally posted by: alffim

A wonderful and such long-awaited continuation!

Thank U so much Zaana😳

Jalal and Jodha painted themselves into a stalemate (as in chess).

U HAVE described entire chapter in one line😃

He still cann't to yield to his ego in the open love, she cann't surrender, because she not trust his love,

I agree... even though he capitulate and apologized... but he didn't buckle down... He has his own majestic way...

and she is afraid of losing respect for him that which she has subconsciously and this will be her loss, defeat

no doubt she has began to build respect him subconsciously but not realizing it yet... and I agree this will be her defeat.

And Jalal has to rise to the selfless refusal itself in love to Jodha and he must became equal to her. They are now equal on their inner nobility, but there is no trust between them and secret destroys their relationship.

Like he said at the end of the chapter... his action will prove his love...

The first time I read your story on FB. It is also very exciting, but this story - a completely new qualitative leap you, as a writer. All the characters are more clear and prominent. And this Jalal is more holistic personality.

I agree... this Jalal is somewhat UNIQ...😳

Jalal in "H o L" is more like a nervous young man 20th century. Jodha more weaker. But your 39-chapter - absolutely amazing!!! There's quite a different Jalal - a wise, reliable and manly. I hope you will some day continue this story.

I also felt the same Zaana... Slowly I am learning how to define a character clearly. I have wrote two pages so far for that story... Mirza and Shivani part😳

In this story a very strong characters, very bright. I don't want to change anything in your chapter, but I would also like to more dynamic relations between Jalal and Jodha. 😃

The main reason for me to moving at the slow pace currently ... I want a strong bond between them... later on story will move faster once mystery reveal.

My preferences Jalal, Jodha. And Rahim - for the courage to protect his friend outside of social differences and against adults.

With great impatience I will wait and hope for a speedy continuation.

What a polish words for update request😆