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...janu...

@...janu...

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Posted: 11 years ago

#61

pallavi plz plz plz continue story i want to read what jalal do amd how jodha and all react after she get conscious plz continue and pm me plz

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Preet

@rishbala3018

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Posted: 11 years ago

#62

Wow awesome 👏 👏
Ijust read part 2 & 3 together and just cudnt stop blushing myself, what a lovely holi they had omg want to read again and again!! Too good dear, please write more and pm me whenver u do!!
Also if u can please continue from here how Jo reacted after waking up and how Jalaal made her confess her feelings!!

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Delphi

@Delphi-03

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Posted: 11 years ago

#63

Omg this srsly the cutest story I've ever read!!!
I LOVED drunk Jodha... I hope something like this happen in the show too!!😆

BTW, U r a really good writer!!!!👏👍🏼

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shahbhavini

@shahbhavini

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#64

PALLU I HAVE SAVED THIS THREE CHAPTER ON MY COMPUTER... I HAVE READ THIS AGAIN... I AM GONE CRAZY... HAPPY HAPPY HAPPY...LOVE U FOR THIS... HOW U HAVE THOUGHT ABOUT DRUNK JODHA ... SHE IS SO CUTE... AND POOR JALLU... USKI BAGIN KI PICHE PICHE... YAAR I HAVE NO WORDS... EVERY TIME I READ THIS STORY I AM GOING TO COMMENT...

GABBAR KUSH HOKE : ARE KALIYA...YE KISNE LIKHA HAI😲

SARDAR: YE TO PALLU DAILOGUE QUEEN NE LIKHA HAI

GABBAR: ABHI JAO... HUME US CHAMIYA KE HAATH CHUMNE HAI😲... JAO USKE HAATH LAKE AAO😆

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Pallavvi

@Pallavvi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: shahbhavini
PALLU I HAVE SAVED THIS THREE CHAPTER ON MY COMPUTER... I HAVE READ THIS AGAIN... I AM GONE CRAZY... HAPPY HAPPY HAPPY...LOVE U FOR THIS... HOW U HAVE THOUGHT ABOUT DRUNK JODHA ... SHE IS SO CUTE... AND POOR JALLU... USKI BAGIN KI PICHE PICHE... YAAR I HAVE NO WORDS... EVERY TIME I READ THIS STORY I AM GOING TO COMMENT...

GABBAR KUSH HOKE : ARE KALIYA...YE KISNE LIKHA HAI😲

SARDAR: YE TO PALLU DAILOGUE QUEEN NE LIKHA HAI

GABBAR: ABHI JAO... HUME US CHAMIYA KE HAATH CHUMNE HAI😲... JAO USKE HAATH LAKE AAO😆

aww...thanku so much 😉

ye lo...ye lo...dying for ur kiss janeman 😆

waise mere haath itte soft nahi hai...tere liye makeover karaya hai 😆

haaila 😲 CHAMIYA...☺️

Tujhe bhi bhaang chad gayi kya...meri duplicate Jo😆

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Mishika

@Mishika123

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Posted: 11 years ago

#66

OMG ! This TS was so cute and romantic ! 👏I am still shocked ! 😲

Pallavi di u write so so so so amazing stuff ! 👍🏼

Sorry for late review ! Was busy with my exams !

Read all the three parts in one go ! 😃n won't believe me that I was so damn shocked to read this one ! So different, so good , so interesting n so cute ! ❤️I was laughing like hell while reading the last chapter ! 🤣🤣Jodha's tantrums n hugs n nautanki was so cute ! 😉

The confession was cherry on the cake ! 👏

I am dumbstruck ! 😳 Awesome TS !

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mithrasayee

@mithrasayee

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#67

wow...wonderful...

wonderful,fabulous,lovely,COMEDY update...

she turned at once to look at the person...smiled playfully...and spoke out loud at once..."SHENSHAAHHH...!!!!"😆...almost singing out his name...For the first time in life...Jalal was terribly scared from someone...he made a really horrible face...not being able to guess what would she be doing with him now...??...Jodha slowly but steadily made her way towards Jalal...

i just started to laugh after reading these lines...

you are such a good writer...

just fabulous update...

will never forget this three shots...

no i have no words express my feelings...

WONDERFULLL...

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Soumya

@baubles

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#68

Superb TS Pallavi!!!!! Read the 2nd and 3rd part now and absolutely loved it!!! 🤗

Jo was in full form...totally unaware about all that was going on around her!! Loved this carefree Jo!

The two of them were adorable in the pond..childish and extremely cute and passionate at the same time!😳

And the confession was so sweet... Jo said it so simply and it was that much more shocking and amazing for Jalal!☺️

Loved it...😃

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Viji Sridhar

@vijisridhar

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#69

Hi Ms. Pallavi 👏🤗

Am overwhelmed right now... my hands are shaking, but still trying to type without mistakes.

I started reading the first chapter and just couldnt stop, so read all in one shot.

OMG... I was transported to Agra Palace and I was able to imagine the scenes in detail. Kash... JA ka CV aap hoti.

What a beautiful ending you gave... this is what it is. It had all the elements of romance, pining for love, happiness, joy, tears, laughter, nauthtiness, funny and really loud - like it should be.

Such a happy mixture of Holi.

Thanks for sharing an amazing write up here. Now, our expectations have gone sky high. Do keep writing. If, you are holding someother job, do think of quitting and take up writing as a profession. I have told this only to a few, you are one of them.

Just loved it... will never forget this story in a long time dear. Hats off.

Viji

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Pallavvi

@Pallavvi

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#70

Wow!!! My Pallu.. take a bow!!! Loved it.. loved it..!!!😳👏👏

First of all thank you so much for this amazing gift on Holi..!! Mwaah!!😳👏

I just loved how Jalal wanted to surprise his Jodha Begum!!! Uff.. You brought it out so so amazingly!! I am speechless yaar.. 😳⭐️😳⭐️

The way you describe the scenes is beyond appreciation..!!! Loved your Jo and Jalal here.. I so much wish ki aisa kuch serial mein hota..😳😃😭

mee too hope so nancy..but it doesnt look like it can happen before season 2😆...thanku so much my jadugarini 🤗

I loved the scene when Ja was gazing at his beauty like an idiot.😛😆😳 . and Jo was blushing...Hayye what a scene..!! Loved it..!!👏😳👏⭐️

hey thats one of my fav in this TS too...i was blushing really imagining that scene😳...i m glad...u too liked it dear...thanku 🤗

He gave her such a beautiful surprise..!! Masterstroke yaar..!!😳😃
These Maan singh and Mirza are upto some naughty things...!! Lol! Lets see what they do.!!!😆😉

thanku nannu my sonpari...actually i too love surprises...but never have one till now...so fulfilled my wish by writing😆

Cant wait for next chap.. I am gonna read part 2 now..😛😉

Thanks for this wonderful Three Shot my sherni..

Love you!!😳

AWW...LOVE YOU TOO JAAN🤗

Yipppeee first one to comment..!!

I LOVED THIS UPDATE TO CORE!!!!😳😳⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

CONGO BABY ON BEING THE FIRST ONE...YIPPEE..THANKS A TON😳

Jalal: - (nervous) ummm...Jodha begum...ek baat kahe aapse...??

Jodha: -(with smile) haan kahiye na shenshah...humse kuch bhi kehne ke liye anumati ki aavshyakta nahi hai aapko...

Jalal: -(hesitantly) ummm...agar aapko koi etraaz na ho to kya...hum...hum thoda sa rang laga sakte hai aapko...

Jodha: - (with a pleasantly surprised smile)...nisandeh shenshah...aapke atirikt koi aur hume aajka pehla rang lagaye...ye hum chahege bhi nahi...

(Jodha's words caused a million dollor smile on Jalal's face...she said those words with so much pride...with a rightful voice...that made him feel that she belongs to him only...that she is only and only his...Jalal took a pinch of red Gulal from the plate and first applied it on her forehead...filled her maang with proud...Jodha closed her eyes as it was the first time after their marriage when Jalal filled her maang like that...she was speechless at his gesture as she dint expect this from him...a lone tears escaped her eyes...as she opened her eyes to look in his again...Jalal returned her the same feeling that she made him feel a few moments ago...and smiled at her...then took some color and applied it on her cheek...saying..."HOLI MUBARAK HO JODHA BEGUM..."...Jodha too took some green color from the plate and applied it on his cheek...with deep care and affection...saying ..."AAPKO BHI SHENSHAH...")

This is my favourite bit...⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
oh glad my dear...u liked it..😃..but i forget one thing here...baad me yaaad aaya...Jodha was supposed to touch his feet first...will add now 😆

OMG OMG!!! I so much loved the passionate running and chasing game of JoJa.. Pallu you NAILED IT...
Loved it..!! They were lost in each other.. The way Jalal rubbed his cheeks against hers.. UFFF!!!😳😳
Yaar..kya scene tha..I am lost in akdhaland..

HEY...I TOO HAD GOOSE BUMPS WHILE WRITING THAT BEHIND PILLER SCENE..I JUST HOPE IF CV CAN COME UP WITH IT...GOSHH..I WILL BE MORE THAN DELIGHTED.😳..THANKS AGAIN JAAN😃

And Lol.. Jodha ne bhang pili..ab maza ayega...

Loved the update to bits.!!!⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Thank you for this update..!😳

UR WELCOME BAABU...AND THANKU FOR YOUR PRECIOUS REVIEW YAAR...MADE ME FEEL REALLY HAPPY...LOVE U NANCY😃

OMG!!!!!!!!Third chapter got me rofling 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣and

Beautiful yaar.. will comment in detail later...

I am so lost in the chapter..
will read it again..!

SAME HERE NANNU...THATS WHY I SAID I HELL ENJOYED WRITING THIS TS...I GOT TO WRITE VARIETY OF EMOTIONS IN A SINGLE CHAPTER...AND LOVED IT TO THE CORE...ME TOO READ IT MANY TIMES AFTER WRITING...HEHEH...UNRES THE LAST ONE SOON😃😉