arshi ff: without you... #2, chapters 14 - 27 **completed**

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Cynthia Abruzzo DeSiena

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Posted: 11 years ago

#831

indi, this was so intense and more to come and be revealed. great idea for sleazy uncleji and shyam. It had me on the edge of my seat and waiting for him to talk to khushi felt his anguish trying to hide his pain with his gussa and strength of ASR. loved it i am going to have to reread it i am sure i am missing some more! excellent definitely pls write a book.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#832

Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules
This made me so sad! Does Arnav know about his father and Khushi's mother? If not will he find out in the next chapter? I wonder how Khushi will feel after finding out about her mother's past? I hope both Arnav and Khushi get out of Lucknow safely! You left us at a cliffhanger! Hope you update soon

hi bloomnskyrules,

arnav doesn't know yet... khushi doesn't have aclue... but perhaps it is time to really look at what happened in sheeshmahal. will update soon and thank you so much for reading. appreciate it.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#833

Originally posted by: cinthiann1758
indi, this was so intense and more to come and be revealed. great idea for sleazy uncleji and shyam. It had me on the edge of my seat and waiting for him to talk to khushi felt his anguish trying to hide his pain with his gussa and strength of ASR. loved it i am going to have to reread it i am sure i am missing some more! excellent definitely pls write a book.

hi cynthia,

i am thrilled you reacted deeply to this chapter.. i was exhausted writing this... how do the fiction writers of out world who entertain millions and more manage to keep themselves intact... i tell ya, you go with every character wherever they go and them all the mad amounts of thinking... ufff...
i can sense a terribly creepy man in pratap malik, perhaps even more creepy than shyam... read when you like... and if life ever lets me i would love to write my own story, for the time being, many tanks to asr and khushi and their creators.

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yoga123

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Posted: 11 years ago

#834

Amazing chapter... very touching ...thanks for the PM

Edited by yoga123 - 11 years ago

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Mysticaldivine

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Posted: 11 years ago

#835

Stillness in life is the most dangerous thing ever .He indeed has crosses millennium but the TIME which had been frozen in between those screams and seeing his mother going through everyday can't go or fade away that easily.

credit to maker

[Add this if you want to your chapter ]

BUT he has to cross this bridge and then burn it with the FIRE to emerge as a victorious in this reincarnation process.TIME has been haunted him and today again this killer has brought him right in front of the same door where he was standing couple of years ago.

This time his strength is KHUSHI and he wants to hear her to grab that pillar to shake the walls of every inch of this Sheesh Mahal to dig her in and he got it from her voice.

Chachaji is the worse than Shyam, his father was the worse than Shyam and now you are digging old graves...where we can find just bones , old bones , old connected joints which will connect the puzzles of his life BUT the strength of Vishwass , belief is going to be tested and this is not an ordinary love of Khushi and Arnav...this is ISHQ where these walls , these joints can't connect to make any shape to shake the strength of their BELIEF...

Love all the connected painful dots but with one clue you already gave the climax...He heard her VOICE..that connection has been crumbling all the connections so why bother...you should've kept that for next chapter...

You should know me by now , I am not an easy reader and can find clues easily...just kidding.

Really nice one Indi...it's been a while I read this one...I read two chapters together to connect for myself...

Edited by ArshiHamesha - 11 years ago

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#836

Originally posted by: yoga123
Amazing chapter... very touching ...thanks for the PM

thanks, yoga, really glad you liked.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#837

Originally posted by: ArshiHamesha
Stillness in life is the most dangerous thing ever .He indeed has crosses millennium but the TIME which had been frozen in between those screams and seeing his mother going through everyday can't go or fade away that easily.

credit to maker
[Add this if you want to your chapter ]

BUT he has to cross this bridge and then burn it with the FIRE to emerge as a victorious in this reincarnation process.TIME has been haunted him and today again this killer has brought him right in front of the same door where he was standing couple of years ago.

This time his strength is KHUSHI and he wants to hear her to grab that pillar to shake the walls of every inch of this Sheesh Mahal to dig her in and he got it from her voice.

Chachaji is the worse than Shyam, his father was the worse than Shyam and now you are digging old graves...where we can find just bones , old bones , old connected joints which will connect the puzzles of his life BUT the strength of Vishwass , belief is going to be tested and this is not an ordinary love of Khushi and Arnav...this is ISHQ where these walls , these joints can't connect to make any shape to shake the strength of their BELIEF...

Love all the connected painful dots but with one clue you already gave the climax...He heard her VOICE..that connection has been crumbling all the connections so why bother...you should've kept that for next chapter...

You should know me by now , I am not an easy reader and can find clues easily...just kidding.

Really nice one Indi...it's been a while I read this one...I read two chapters together to connect for myself...

faiqa,

i got goosebumps reading your take.

thank you.

the first line is a killer. yes, stillness is the worse thing and there is a frozen place in him. i feel if he doesn't look at it, it will kill him... it already has a stranglehold on a part of him but it can get him physically too.

that is why perhaps life gave him the chance of mitigating it, of conquering the stillness. it brought to him, quite out of nowhere a mad jhalli girl, a khushi. would he take the hint from life or not was the question. he makes his own life after all... and slowly through all his denial and everything he began to understand... he reached out and accepted her as a part of his forever...

once that was done, this stillness could be faced... could be obliterated.

without coming to sheeshmahal and seeing the power of that one act, how could this story have ended.

this indeed is ishq, this is the yearning of the heart for that which is eternal, the lover is eternal and is melded into oneself... there is power in ishq to surmount anything. because ishq is khuda.

let's see where we are headed.

you are the best reader ever. i write instinctively, no plans really, the voice came here... hopefully it will ring through what is to come.

chacha ji is really worse than shyam. much worse.

would love to put that gif but it has audio and might interfere with the other piece. let me see if i can do anything.

thank you and muaah muaah and more.

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amus5

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Posted: 11 years ago

#838

indiii... sorry for the late reply AD caught up and so read the update just today... i was literally palpitating seeing through the eyes of Arnav the whole scene unfolding ... i must say chacha- ji seems to be of the worst sort ... and all that jeering and sneering was felt here and if i was there in the place of arnav then i surely would have hit these two where it hurts the most (though i'm said to be quite a calm and composed person)

Arnav for his short temper is definitely holding his reins ... waiting for action to unfold...

thanx for the update...pls continue soon 😃

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#839

Originally posted by: amus5
indiii... sorry for the late reply AD caught up and so read the update just today... i was literally palpitating seeing through the eyes of Arnav the whole scene unfolding ... i must say chacha- ji seems to be of the worst sort ... and all that jeering and sneering was felt here and if i was there in the place of arnav then i surely would have hit these two where it hurts the most (though i'm said to be quite a calm and composed person)

Arnav for his short temper is definitely holding his reins ... waiting for action to unfold...

thanx for the update...pls continue soon 😃

hi amus,

good to see you, nah, no need to apoloigise... i just wanted to send you the link in case you wanted to read... yes this chacha ji is not inconsequential, he is much worse than shyam in a way... let's see what happens. hopefully the story will unfold with meaning and integrity... glad you enjoyed.

thanks and though i wanted to update midweek, don't think it's happening, weekend surely. see ya.