Khushi's OS: If Only - Page 3

Originally posted by: arshi_sravy

Very Well written! The way you described Khushi's pain is heartwrenching!!
I want to hit Arnav on his head hard so that he gets back his sense.😡

Convert this into a SS if possible..

Originally posted by: ssyahoo

Very well written OS!! I loved the IF Only ending part.. ASR can be ruthless indeed :(

Now that I am fully awake and my brain is functioning I wanted to add some comments. I loved how you mentioned her conscious about her hair vs. the fashionable hair in ASR's world.

The flower path scene was heartbreaking indeed. She's so scared of walking on the flowers vs. getting hurt. The scene where she feels her husbands presence and then only see that he has disgust in his eyes for her is quite sad indeed.

This definitely has potential for an SS.. Superb job!!

It was really painful to see Khushi in this state...😭 I hated Arnav for treating her this way in this OS and i hated him doing things to make her suffer in the show as well...

But in the show he suffered with Khushi too... and i would love to know what was he going though and what was he feeling when he treated her like that in this OS... and if you could write Arnav's OS: If Only??

It was heart wrenching but brilliant...👏

Originally posted by: deepti1906

It was really painful to see Khushi in this state...😭 I hated Arnav for treating her this way in this OS and i hated him doing things to make her suffer in the show as well...

But in the show he suffered with Khushi too... and i would love to know what was he going though and what was he feeling when he treated her like that in this OS... and if you could write Arnav's OS: If Only??

It was heart wrenching but brilliant...👏

That was heartbreakingly beautiful! Thanks for the pm!

Originally posted by: hmtxyz

OK

First of all, are you a mind reader?? 😛

Or maybe we are connected somehow. Soul sisters or something..

Because the EXACT same idea came to my head! 😆

I am weighing that option along with a potential SS, so I will let you know which wins.

Maybe I'll do a stand alone OS..

And the credit will be yours!!

Thanks for the comment and encouragement!! 😊

LOL i wish i was a mind reader..😆
and who knows *shrug* , if we WERE sisters in past life...😉
yes.. that's really a brilliant idea..👏 and i'll be eagerly waiting for whatever you come up with.. anything will do for me...😃

Wow this was quite a different take to what you normally write, all I can say amazing writing.

Originally posted by: hmtxyz

Hey Ana, (I'm calling you Pocahontas in my mind)

Thanks for reading this story, liking it and commenting too!

Well, Arnav's behaviour is slightly more explainable when we think of it from his point of view.. And you are absolutely right in that aspect.

However, there has been an error so I shall be posting the missing lines in purple. Hope you get the chance of reading them!

Regarding your suggestion, well.. I am going to rest this OS for some time (maybe as little as day or as long as a week) and will see if I get any ideas.

If I do write further, I will definitely let you know!

Please accept my buddy request regarding the same!!

Thanks a lot for the encouragement,

Helee

Hey, thanks for the message :-)
I read those missing lines.
And you're welcome, you deserved the praises. Will accept your buddy request.

Originally posted by: hmtxyz

Thanks a lot Komal!!

Armav is not stupid. He is just someone whose experiences in life have turned him into the worst kind of cynic. And he did not have anyone to correct his faults!!

Please go through the story, as there was an error and I have posted the missing lines in purple..

Sorry!!

Originally posted by: cheesemad

i know he isn't bad at all😳

would love to read his pov too...read those purple lines too...u write well sis👏