Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#91

i want to see Advay defeat Indrani often now

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sudhalata1

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Posted: 7 years ago

#92

I am loving this story already . Chitra will be waiting for your updates now

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#93

if possible please update today

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#94

this update fascinated me so much

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ChitraGS

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Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#95

Originally posted by: amortentia15
Hiii chittu!
Well this is all that I was waiting for in the Show and what an absolutely brilliant piece of writing. Can I just say that this is just perfect... Your Advay in entrapment is what the Advay in that Ravan effigy burning promo and the dupatta burning promo/was! And after reading your writeup do I realise with even more clarity just to what extent his character had been diluted.
He is someone who will resort to chicanery to get to his goal, no matter how devastating it would be for his victims...he is honest and he is brutal which is completely justified keeping n mind the catastrophe he was not just an eyewitness to but was also a victim of the depredation that wiped away any remnants of the existence of the kashyap family!
He is an inferno and might I say I will take complete delight in this journey of his when he is going to annihilate every individual responsible for the lifeless soulless advay he has become today...looking forward to the journey.
I am extremely overwhelmed to read about dark advay because I wanted dark in the show... got god knows what kind of advay. So yes I am rubbing my hands in anticipation of what is to come...hope you don't make us wait long.
Lots of love and a tightwala bear hug to you
Juhi

Awwieiei mera bunny, so good to see u here, 🤗

Thanks jaan, ur reviews are like masterpieces in themselves, pata nahi when you will take my advise and start writing on a serious basis, need a Chadi to your backside, need to find you a Dom who will kill the little procastinating kitten within u, 😆

i know yaar, didnt we all want a dark advay, tho mine is not one that cud have ever seen the light of day ,on indian telly. HAHA this man only exists in Chitra land !!! in all his inglorious glory.

Well jsut the shell of the story is as per the premise, the rest is my own cooked up imagination

hope u like it, cant wait to hear ur thought abt it, tight wala jappi to u too meri jaan, 🤗

❤️ Chittu

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ChitraGS

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Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#96

Originally posted by: 2filmy
u had reserved one more positive
will u post another update ?

Nahi year, i will be posting next update later today, on a new page, I know i did two but didnt need that much space

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ChitraGS

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Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: mahin123
loved it. the sexual tension between them is so powerful. now after meeting her he had a change of heart. dark Advay is rising . he is going to use her to satisfy his fantasy. so excited for the upcoming parts.

HHAA yep he is not wasting time, will go straight in for his kill 😉, thats my man Advay , who gives me the chills and the shudders 😳

Yeh hope u like the next parts too , its a sweet story trust me on that BAS 😃

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ChitraGS

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Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#98

Originally posted by: Arshika_arshi
WHOA!! pehle mulakat mein hi Hone wala pati... Quite very fast I must!! Again what's going on his wicked head NOW??
I am excited to read more... Continue soon...

Here's a VM for ur refreshment.. ;)
Ae Dil Hai Mushkil

Haan, Rims, telling u he is faster than a bullet train HAHA😆😆, and the chemistry only gets steamier by the minute, so keep watching the space I am really glad u like it

OH and i loved Ae Dil HAi Mushkil, Guys do watch Rimi's VM;s they are incredible 👍🏼

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ChitraGS

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Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#99

Originally posted by: amortentia15
Chapter 2 review:
Wow chitra that was super fast!
I am totally hooked on to the story and under the spell of your Advay! Hehehe. Toh chandni kya cheez hai
Loved the pace of the second chapter...it is just like advay to not beat around the bush and come to the point directly...I know he will put his iniquitous plans to action very soon...and the wicked "an eye for an eye" side to me is waiting for him to maneuver his way into her family and take his revenge..
Chandni...your FL is not headless yayyy!!! Happy tears. It does make her wonder if that's her dev...but she shrugs off the doubt thinking that her dev couldn't be the way this man behaved...good going chandni...I hope she stands up to him and proves a formidable force in thwarting his plans of doing anything bad to her...
Also I am waiting for sasuma jamai interactions chittu
Keep writing.keep spreading the love
Love and hugs
Juhi

Awweii mera Bunny again, looks like me ijj in luck 😳

@bold honestly yaar, mee too.. I was reading some of the future parts at 2am in the morning last night , like seriously 😕, he is made me deewana. its not his darkness, but his intense love for her that makes my heart go all mmm mmm mmm,☺️

@bold, yeah he will make his way into the house, but revenge saga wont begin fro soemtime now, right now Chandini is the priority, revenge will take hold later in the story. I havent written it yet, but I have thought of a plot for that.

@bold, Hmm hmmm hmmm, I dont know, this is a diff take. But he wont do anything bad to her, thats also the point here.. and also when love prevails, then its the greatest strength IMO, a person with the power of love has the power of everyone. Hence why i introduces her with Lvoe as her middle name. That is her power, and he will succumb to it. But trust me he wont do anything terribly bad to her. ITs a deeply emotional story. Jsut keep reading for now.

Oh Sasuma, Jamai interactions are plenty ... enjoyed writing them thoroghly 😆😆

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ChitraGS

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Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#100

Originally posted by: 2filmy
the first time he came here after 16 years and entered the temple he was overwhelmed by his emotions
he was remembering everything from his childhood
I think he was recollecting each and every memory
he was going through all the details of his past life
everything was the same but the circumstances and situations were different now
he was back but his family was lost forever
he could never get back the old days again
I loved the way u described each and every thing he saw and felt seeing the temple and his surrounding

it was again proved how well Murli understands his brother and what a beautiful bond they share
murli gave him the moral support needed to go forward and Advay also took strength from his parents

Yep u nailed it girl, u have written every bit of that first scene in detail , really thanks for that my own little personal reviewer. I feel like a celebrity writer 😆😆, u make e feel special ,

LOVE U MERI JAAN 🤗

yeah his realtionship with Murli is amazing, its more like brothers than staff.