Gulaal: What If chp 26(part II) upd Pg 57

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MR21

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Posted: 13 years ago

#21

res 😊

Aditi 🤗...just one word for this is awesome!!!

I just love that its gulaal who fond him rather any other person of the family...the the lake side is one of the best places we got so many excellent scenes between them na 😃...kesar talking very clearly abt what he is bothering n more over the confusion abt it...his own realization that he did a wrong thing but his determination to face them...his almost helpless words saying that he has to search some answers to his questions which were never answered by her or by anyone in the family considering him still as a kid n his decision to leave from here...me really felt bad for him here😭

Gulaal shock listening that her kesar wants to leave her n go away from her...her fear of losing him...her confusion why did he took this decision all of a sudden n what led him to this decision...her reasons for this change in her kesar n her bit realization thinking abt mB's words..this is excellently written...

wow...just loved these two paras 👏..."There she goes again..." n "Walking back in silence..."...I just love the way he thought that she did not want to know n ask why did he took this decision as always...n the fear of losing the unnamed relationship for the tag...loved that gulaal is thinking that may be in her choice to save the family she sacrificed a kid n his bhachpan...

Do you have to stop at that scene Aditi...how can I stay one week peacefully now...this is fab update n I am expecting the next update soon 😍...n sorry for my late unres...I was a bit busy this weekend...

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kalika.j

@kalika.j

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Posted: 13 years ago

#22

@Aditi, I am late but

for starting new SS.

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

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Posted: 13 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: minizz

I agree that the secret did destroy his childhood but DV also had a major role in it.After Vasant's death Kesar was starting to become uncontrollable but after DV he starts justifying his mistakes saying he is no longer a bacha...main bada ho gaya hoon...DV hua hai mera and stuff.So DV did mess with his mind...and good idea.revelation ko thoda time do.I want to see attraction and possessiveness re😳😆

Hi Mini,he started becoming uncontrollable as it would normally happen in that age,we all have gone through this isn't it and he sort an escape of this behaviour with the DV tag but the profound meaning of what this tag entailed was not understood till he grew up and felt that attraction or pull towards his wife,all I am trying to say is that the DV dis throw some unwanted remarks and stare in his direction and he was compelled to reflect on these but the samaj to actually understand the effect of dv only came after he grew up...

I feel in that Shaadi fiasco scene Kesar was talking about this DV only yaar.I don't think he was even thinking about Vasant's secret at that time.It struck me because this was the first and the only time that he had ever complained about Gulaal's decision so bluntly.remember he then goes on to talk about Vasant's mojris becoming shackles for him and all.
Aditi,you are making me all excited for the next chapter yaar.so post it soon😳

Yes completely agree and again it's only after growing up and being able to comprehend the meaning of what each vachan meant when taking those pheras he starts reflecting on what he had with Gulaal,the pheras actually proved to be a for him to analyse that pull he felt towards his wife and why...

I have updated Mini, hope you are not disappointed after you read through😭

Talli ki to main barabar band bajaungi,she irritated me so much and unlike Piyu I am not fan of her beauty either mere SS main uska producer friend bhi nahi hai uska role badhane ke liye to uski toh😉
hai I am waiting to see the band bajaofying of Talli Rani.yay

Sure I can't wait either😆

Thanks for your lovely comments partner, will update soon😊

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

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Posted: 13 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: minizz

Talli ki sundarta🤣Piu,You are becoming like Geeshu yaar.Talli ki buraai karo toh jaise Geeshu haazir ho jaati hai waise hi Talli ki sundarta ka varnan tujhe kheench laati hai😆

Talli has some special powers I tell you.First she mesmerized the CVs and now she is doing jaadu tona on the members of this forum.Hope we are not next to succumb Aditi😆

Aditi ache se band bajaana Talli ki😃

Mini, We won't succumb yaar,you know about our secret weapon na, yeah jaadu tona hamare chudu ke liye kaunsi muskil baat hai, all we have to do is call her and she will be here in a flash to bagao all these unwanted pakau and waste of screen space characters😆

Tu bus dekhti ja main kya karti hu😉

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minizz

@minizz

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Posted: 13 years ago

#25

Aditi🤗 this was beautiful.The continuation to the intro was natural and I loved that Gulaal found him sitting by the lakeside,where he always goes whenever he feels sad or angry and thank you so much for showing Gulaal finding that out.It really bothered me in the show that Talli would know about his hideout and that too a place where we had never seen him go before.To me the lakeside will always be the place where he went to pour out his anger,frustration and sadness.So thank you for placing the scene over there.

The conversation or the mini confrontation between them was so good.It felt so real.If I close my eyes I can see Manasi and Ali enact the scene.There is nothing jarring about it.Both the characters feel the way they should,speak the dialogues they would.It was perfect.That was marvellous yaar.The thing I liked most surprisingly was Gulaal's thoughts.That was described beautifully especially her fears about Kesar wanting to go away from her.She knows that he is changing and MB's words seem to make a mark in her sub-conscious but she is yet to feel the full impact of it,I guess.The portrayal of their exclusive bond from her perspective really impressed me.

I loved Golu's thought process.My fav part is the "There she goes again..."para.That was so Kesarish.I don't know how else to explain it.This is what he always wanted na-Gulaal's exclusive attention and he did want her to stop him,ask him his reasons for doing so,express her concern for him-awww that was really sweet.If only he knew that Gulaal was thinking just that.sigh...and before I forget,I loved how you put in that extending of his hand to help her up.To me it signified that he would always be there for her whenever she needed him and also it's a parallel to that orchard scene na.So I loved it.

Finally Gulaal does question whether she has done the right thing or not?I really wanted to see such a scene in the show.I mean it was understood that she did feel guilty about it but it was never explicitly shown and according to me it should have been there.That would have made so much difference.So I am glad you put that sentence in there.awww my heart went out to her here.She is so scared that she might have unwittingly weakened the one bond that had given her life any meaning after Vasant's death.I wanted to hug her.Aditi,I have to say you are bringing out Gulaal's POV beautifully yaar.

Good job👏

hawww you ended it at such a cliffhanger.ab aage kya hoga.waiting anxiously to read the next update.

This was a wonderful start.Very emotional yet at the same time very GKish.I enjoyed reading this a lot.Thank you for this wonderful alternate journey😳

sorry for my late comments.I could not come online last night as I had gone out and by the time I reached home It was too late and I was very sleepy..isliye deri ho gayi but what a pleasant read for me this morning.You made my sunday with this update😃

Take care...

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MR21

@MR21

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Posted: 13 years ago

#26

Aditi...unres done in pg-3😳

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Piu Chatterjee

@Transference

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Posted: 13 years ago

#27

Reswa👏

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Aditi.👏.First of all Take my huge huge hugs for trying out something so bold yet so beautiful.Who could have better justified it than a thought provoking writer like you.The first update is so emotional yet scaling new heights in th altered feelings and misunderstandings between Gulaal nad Kesar.A young teenage boy with so many unanswered questions sick of being patronised by Gulaal .You brought out the confusion and angst so beautifully.The river side confrontation and the different thought processes of these two has been absolutely brilliantly penned down.Aditi.👏.My haseen qatil..😳Thanks for the effort and the concept is brilliantly executed.I am ghappy and so proud of you.The way you are dealing with the subject isawesome.I am so looking forward to the next update ASAP🤗

Edited by manzilmukul - 13 years ago

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 13 years ago

#28

And final reserve here - Aditi - pukka pukka be back with a bang lamba comment taking on the new chapter next week... Sorry I didn't get to it already but between a crazy deadline and my increasing NBT distraction, I sort of didn't get around to being here on Gulaal in time - sorry?! But like you said in your reply, I'm totally sticking around not only with this SS< but with Gulaal as a show that has its own space in my heart ... ! Will definitely be around and actively to have a go at each chapter and the way you take this what if - which btw, should obviously be your take in your conviction unchanged by all of us - because that's the idea!!! 😊

JZee

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SHARMISHTA

@sharmishta

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#29

aww aditi🤗... wat a beautifl chappi, yaar.. so poignant.. it was a miniature versn of d lake side cnfrtatn scene na..

wat will b her reactn?? will she giv him a satisfctry answr or just snub him with her infamous dialogue "u r crssng ur limits, kesar" 😕🤔
update asap..plsshhh😳

🤔 ye le lots of hugsss 🤗

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Incense

@Incense

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Posted: 13 years ago

#30

lovely story aditi i always thought what if kesar was raised in front of her will gulaal be able to except him as her husband i know its tough and thats y i consider rano (i take this woman) more stronger than gulaal (sorry gals) where she had the courage to accept a boy that she raised since he was 2 year old baby as her husband not only she broke all the odd shackles of the society and herself but also proved to be a perfect loving and devotee wife for mangal

so here there are same circumstances for gulaal naa (if a guess it is in your mind)

kesar is not sent to hostel and he is raised infront of her so there is journey of gulalal from a his teen to man... hell complicated yet simple

lovely thought and coming to the chapii what to say anything that involves chota kesar and gullu instantly win my heart i so love his tantrums and gulaal being so submissive cat he he he its so strange naa that gulaal behaved as faithful devoted and goodie goodie wife infront of chota kesar and for bada kesar she was all stranger wild and tantrumy queen bascially kesar reamined the same but it was gulaal who changed later...

but seriously this is amazing story do update soon

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