Gulaal: What If chp 26(part II) upd Pg 57 - Page 2

Originally posted by: minizz

res😃

Aditi🤗The first part is simply wonderful.You picked the perfect scene to start off with.As I said earlier my fav part is the last paragraph.That is so,so good.It's like you got a peek into Golu's mind.I swear,I can see Ali act it out brilliantly.Even in the show his classmates had started teasing him regarding Gulaal and I am sure after a time this topic would have come up.I loved how Golu could not understand the meaning of his wife waiting for him-so cute and yet so poignant.It reminds me of Kesar's dialogue at the shaadi fiasco "mera bachpan chin gaya Gulaal...waqt se pehle hi mujhe pati bana diya gaya..."😭No one ever understood how deeply it would affect the psyche of a 12 year old kid,no one took time out and explain it to him.Everyone thought bacha hai and left it at that...Now how can you blame the kid when he grows up to have feelings for his own wife.

Mini🤗 thx for reviewing this partner and I am going to take up that offer writing from Gulaal's pov,you know na how bad I am seeing things from her side😆 Mini I wanted to bring in exactly the nuance you talked about where he is not sure why a tag by which their relationship was now identified in the public should actually cause any upheavals in his routine life for him this was just another thing he did that Gulaal asked him to,he is yet to comprehend the meaning of that tag and that's why the reflection on his classmates's remark and as far as his childhood was concerned Vasant's secret had a bigger role in in spoiling it than this DV at the time and that's why I am going to steer clear of revelation till next chapter or two and concentrate on the growing up pain with having this tag attached, I will try and put his growing attraction and possessiveness as result in next chapter...

I am glad you are picking up this point and I am looking forward to the rest of it especially how he deals with his changing feelings for Gulaal and how does Talli figure in all of this?waiting eagerly for the next installment😃😆

Talli ki to main barabar band bajaungi,she irritated me so much and unlike Piyu I am not fan of her beauty either mere SS main uska producer friend bhi nahi hai uska role badhane ke liye to uski toh😉

Thanks for your lovely comments partner, will update soon😊

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

Oh wow Aditi ⭐️..I want updates every hour RES👏

EDit

My Haseen Qatil⭐️...Tu sach mein mujhe jaan se maar degi yaar.👏

ha look who's talking😔, one superwoman who i tried imitating and failed miserably

First of all huge huge thanks for starting this😳..I always wanted to write something on this.Thanks for making my dream come true.Who will be a better person than you who can delve into the mind of Kesar -a growing one and bring out the tiniest details about his changing feelings for Gulaal.

Frankly speaking after reading all the comments and the interest and expectations from this "What If" I am now apprehensive posting my chapter, I hope I can meet the expectations as it is, I am walking on a tight rope with the precedence already set by the excellent screenplay and awesome portrayal in the show, so there is always fear of falling flat on your face trying to reach that bar which is set so high but I have knack of completing things I start, so I guess you will have to put up with it ….Not sure about reading Kesar's mind so much my idea is to bring about his conflict, apprehension, confusion, misconception to the surface as he takes his journey towards his destiny ,let's see how far I can achieve this w/o breaking expectations….

Aditi I agree with Mini...Kesar's statement was such a poignant one -"Mera bachpan chin gaya Gulaal.."

I think that bachpan chinna had more to do with that secret than this DV and her inability to share that secret with him,for him they were always equal in whatever they did,and he pride himself in being her kavach so the breaking point was revelation of that secret and him hearing it from someone else and not her….

Yes!! A 12 year old boy just matures overnight into a pati.This theme is so so gripping as Teenage is not merely about growing physically but a lot more changes occurs psychologically.No wonder Teens is a very tender age..which lays the foundation of your future.I am so desperately looking forward to the updates from now on...Coz I just can't wait anymore for the little details from you..My huge hugswa to you..🤗

Completely agree about teenage years,yes all rebellious and me first and world go to hell starts in these years and foundation of what you make of your life very much is laid here, I will try and update every weekend Piyu, with the current workload this is the best I can do,and please do not hesitate to point out any mistakes cause I started watching the show post leap and then went backwards to catch up on old episodes but haven't watched them in any order so if there is any assumptions or error please feel free to bring it up...

Please update pretty soon😍

Thanks for your lovely comments🤗 Will update soon

Originally posted by: MR21

Aditi 🤗

where was I...res 😃

Edit:

Aditi 🤗...this is an amazing concept...

Hi Ramya, Jzee came up with the suggestion so basically it's her idea😳

The way u started the first para...just wow...the questions he always have due to the way every one talk to him abt his rishtha with gulaal...his confusion abt every thing related to the relation they share except that he likes the naming tag they share...its this phase when gulaal stopped explaining him anything abt their relation...if she ever tried to let him knew then it would have never lead him to this confusion...2 years he never got those answers n so now he is not even asking her as his previous experience say that its no use in asking her abt this as she will never give any answers...kesar is missing n now she wants to talk to him abt this...typical gulaal...
The last para is my favorite 😳...the changes that he is facing now...whether mb wanting him to change his room, gulaal not liking him asking talli to be formal while entering their room, his comfort with gulaal n not the same with talli...n n n his final declaration thinking gulaal as his wife considering every one's words abt their relation...

Ramya the problem was that all his questions were just pushed away or were just answered in a way you will answer a child,idea is to explore what went through his mind when his classmates talked about things that were not such a common place in their lives but was expected in his...like for example Gulaal waiting for him was not something that was as a result of his DV it was just a routine for her but the way it was perceived by his classmates made him reflect on the tag that got attached to their bond because of this DV,for him wife tag meant nothing,all he wanted was Gulaal at his beck and call whatever name that came under would have been acceptable...

Excellent concept Aditi 👏...I am just loving the way u started it...I am looking forward to read the next update 😍...well I know we both r busy with lots of work these days...but u can try to update the chapter n I can try to comment on the update respectively 😉...your IT obsession...u r discussing IT logic here 😆...your love for IT is unbelievable!!!

Thanks Ramya,yes it's very busy at work and you are right about my obsession with IT I believed in that phrase make your passion your profession and you will never be bored but I am equally crazy about lot of other things in life😆 and Gulaal is one of them so yes I will find time to update this ss even within this mad schedule I have, you be ready for your side of bargain😉 Thanks for your lovely comments, will update soon🤗

Originally posted by: alanta

Aditi..🤗I always wanted to read an SS from u of Gulsar and esp from Kesar's POV...and when I came back from a short break,..this was really a surprise for me.😳..above all the concept and the instant from the show u chose for this really amazed me..I am so glad yaar,,really I am not getting the words..this particular concept needed more exploration than what we saw in the show..they gave it a conclusion by Kesar's out burst in the mandap..there was no any further discussion...it still remained as something which only bothered Kesar...in fact no one dared to speak about it to Kesar..

hey Alanta🤗 Chalo I am happy, I have fulfilled your wish😳 Oh I hope you like surprises,I love them especially expensive shoes or short trip😆 Alanta, suggestion for writing this SS came from Jzee who actually she should be credited with the concept idea Yes idea is to explore his conflict and dilemma in those growing up years where he had no one to sat down and talk to him about the meaning of DV and what did that entail why was he in the situation that was so unique for a teenager(as my story starts off from when he was 14) like him..I am not sure if I will be able to meet expectations generated by this concept but will try my best😊

Aditi u are doing an excellent job dear👏...I am waiting for the update😊

Thanks Alanta🤗 for the constant support and encouragement it means a lot I will update soon

Originally posted by: sharmishta

hi aditi... kya baath he.. new ss n dat too of pre leap days... good going yaar..👏. waitn 4 nxt chappi.. updt soon...
ye le tons of 🤗 for dis awsme cretn..

Thanks for the appreciation and hugs Sharmishta🤗 I hope I can keep up to the expectations this concept has generated, please keep reading and commenting. I will update soon😳

Originally posted by: JZephyr

Okay, back again - sorry MM got me carried away yesterday, too much, to come back and comment well - but agayi ab main 😃

Arrey yeah MM kya hai, only show I have caught up with is NBTNMKK so is it Megha and Mohan kya?chalo nice you came back to Gulaal world😊

For starters, I love the point you've picked up to start this what if from - there's still a few of those interesting instances to follow here on (within chronology of the show) where the whole Gulaal is Kesar's wife gets thrown at Kesar at odd times in odd ways that he has little experience to be comprehending of! What's interesting is also, the intrigue and unrest this causes in him - because what Gulaal and him have always had up to this point is very natural and intuitive, and very special at once! The fact that Kesar never really needed to name his bond with Gulaal stands out starkly at this point, where the relevance of names is anyway lost upon him, all the more so between Gulaal and him - because upto this point, it's never really been "talked about" beyond light jokes from all of the family about Kesar's taking to Gulaal...

And the way this entire "name the bond" thing plays with his mind, especially matters at this age. When he can't wrap the difference around his mind, yet it tricks his mind too much to not dwell on it! Because when you think of it, Gulaal was always doing all those things out of the way for Kesar - and Kesar was accepting them like they were his first right - but now he's countered with simple things like "wife waiting at home for you" - even though Gulaal always had a habit of waiting on him - and interestingly, even as Kesar finds himself unsure of why that is different, he does pick up on the "jargon" of the term that makes all the difference - his wife...

A great start Aditi - weekend updates are just fine, but please do that regularly - will look forward to each weeks offering!

xx

JZee

Thanks for your suggestion Jzee, but now after reading everyone's comment and expectations from this SS I am bit apprehensive, I wasn't part of this forum when show was on and though did manage to catch up on some discussions I wasn't aware that this "What If" analysis was hot topic at some point,now that I already put myself into hot spot, I am going to go with the flow….

You are right about him actually not comprehending the term "wife" but at the same time he was happy to call her exactly that given a chance he would not hesitate in emphasising the same, bhang incident being the point in case and also the one where she slaps him for getting too close to the fire in his anger, his only issue at that was not the slap but the slap in front of his mother from his wife so subconsciously he was aware of this change in equation that this tag entailed but just too young to be actually grasp anything beyond exertion of that right in getting his point across...

I will stay true to my statement about weekend update Jzee,I just hope I am able to match up to the hype this concept has generated. Thanks for your lovely comments🤗, always appreciated and please do not hesitate to point out any errors, I expect you to stay true to your GK phankagiri😆 and do justice to them

Ok Guys, I don't know what I have started here but it looks like lot of discussion have occurred around this "What If" scenario and there seems to be high expectations and a wide interest on the subject, I am now apprehensive about posting this as I really don't know if I will be able to do justice to this alternate journey that everyone so keen to read about...

Please feel free to express your opinions and point out any mistakes, your comments and likes are very important, and source of encouragement for me to keep going so don't be shy to blab, analyse, debate, challenge or disagree with any or all the content of the chapter, I may or may not change my view based on yours but that's what forum are for a medium to express our views

Chapter 1

growing up pains so familiar yet so uniquely different

Clock stuck 11.00pm increasing Gulaal's anxiety manifold, all her anger from the afternoon having read a note from Kesar's School Headmaster already thing of past, Worried and fearful about his whereabouts at this late hour, she decided to go and look out for him, overruling MB's order forbidding the same…..

Having searched all the known hideouts, her heartbeats were rising steadily with each failure, It was unlike Kesar not to come and seek answers to his questions, in all of last two years of knowing him this was the first time where he had decided to keep what happened in the school to himself, "Kaha ho tum Kesar, Hey bhagwaan mere Kesar ki raksha karna, main tumhare har sawal ka jawab dene ke tayar hu Kesar bus ghar wapas aa jao jaldi se"

Knowing Gulaal will not take kindly to his skirmish in the school and all his questions will meet the same fate as his past queries, he was hell bent on buying time away to reflect on all those inner turmoil that he had been experiencing off late which started from innocent remark from his classmate about having a beautiful wife anxiously awaiting his return from School, what did he really mean, and why did that other fellow smiled as if there was more to this remark and why did MB wanted him to move into a separate room now,He always slept with Gulaal since the day Vasant bha left both of them and went away never to return, Why did Gulaal get angry at his remark to Talli about not walking into their room unannounced, he has never been shy of changing clothes in front of Gulaal but that did not mean same rule applied to Talli, after all Gulaal was his wife, that's what everyone says right…..

Kesar tu yaha kya kar raha hai,tujhe pata bhi hai kitni der ho gayi hai

Gulaal heaved a sign of relief having finally spotted him sitting near the lake aimlessly starring into the flowing water, receiving no reply she just went and sat herself besides him and was about to enquire if he had any food but before she could even say a word Kesar blurted

Tu yaha kyun aayi hai itni raat ko,mujhe pata hai tujhse intezaar nahi ho raha hoga mujhe sabak shikhane ka na,waise bhi hamesha galti to meri hi hoti hai kyun hai na?

He knew he had crossed his limits by staying out so late without informing anyone at home and had fully prepared himself for the drama that awaited him on his return but he had not anticipated this confrontation with Gulaal before he could reach at some understanding with his inner conflicts….

Stunned at his sudden brattish attitude Gulaal went quiet for a minute or so and then decided to leave any confrontation till morning,

Kesar ghar chal raat bahut ho chuki hai,agar MB ko pata chalega to bahut naraz hoge chal uth

Nahi Gulaal tu ja,main khuch der mein aa jaunga,apne sawalo ke jawab to mujhe khud hi dudhne hai na,tu to mujhe kuch batayegi nahi,hamesha mera sawalo ko yuhi meri nadani samjhke tal deti hai Main ab chota baccha nahi hu 14 saal ka ho gaya hu sab samajh sakta hu per teri nazar mein kab bada hounga pata nahi, kher tune Principal sir ka note to padha hoga mein ab iss school mein nahi padhn chahta,kya tu MB se baat kar ke mujhe saher ki school mein dhkhila dilwa degi?

Gulaal was shocked and horrified hearing this, why did he want to change his school, there wasn't anything new in the school note, he had a fight with one of his classmate but that had happened before too, what prompted this sudden request, she had to get to bottom of this, It was not that he wanted to change school but he wanted to go so far away where he hardly knew anyone and how was he supposed to travel to and fro every day it will be too far won't it? Did he actually envisage living in the city away from all of us? Why?

Kesar tu itni dur kyun jana chahta hai padhne,aisi kya baat ho gayi hai,pichle kuch dino se tu itna chup sa rehta hai,mujhe bata aisa kya hua hai ke tu apni Gulaal ko chod ke itni dur jane ko tayar ho gaya,yeah bhi nahi socha ki main kaise rahungi akeli yaha tere bagar? thought Gulaal, She couldn't comprehend the sudden feeling of fear and anger that threatened to well up her eyes, did she fail in her duty to understand and care for him in anyway, did she create distance between them by being so strict and hard task master as far as studies were concerned or did snubbing him when he insisted on being served only by his wife actually was entailing this reaction out of him, or was it to do with MB's decision of moving him to his own room, she couldn't believe her Kesar wanted to live so far away from her, even her fake threat of going to her home for few days would drive him mad, there was something wrong, something had changed within him and for the first time in her life she felt helpless and clueless about her Kesar,MB's words echoed in her mind "jab Kesar bada ho jayega tab uske sawalo ka kaise talegi Gulaal,samaj to tumhare rishte ko pati,patni ke najar se hi dekhega Gulaal,aur jab yeah rishthe ke mayne samjhne lagega Kesar tab tu usse kya kahegi Gulaal" Kesar's throwing of stone into the still water and resultant splash disturbed Gulaal's deep thoughts and brought her back to present,She made a decision to have a detailed conversation with him in the morning and let the matter rest for time being..

Thik hai Kesar main MB se baat karungi subah,per bahut der ho chuki hai,hame ghar chalna chahiye

There she goes again, All she can think about is home, never even questioned about why the fight broke out in the school, or why I wanted to go so far away, how will I be able to live without her, nothing, sighed Kesar, and extended his hand towards Gulaal to help her get up…..

Walking back in silence both lost in their own thoughts contemplating how to get the answers they sought without explicitly stating those uneasy questions that only existed because of the forced action she had to take and he had to comply with, the resultant tag that was awarded to the unnamed relationship they shared, was that tag strong enough to break that unnamed bond, did she in her quest to protect the family and her honour sacrificed an innocent child? Did she impose that haq on him without thoroughly thinking what she was asking him to get into? Did she in severed the tie that was her only lifeline after Vasant's untimely death…

Kesar being himself and that too inquisitive, inquiring and restless teenager finally decided to break the silence

Gulaal ek baat puchu,aaj jab main school se bahar nikla to maine ek saadi pehne hue aadmi ko mere piche aate hue dekha woh shayad mujhse kuch baat karna chahta tha lekin achanak kahi se Dushyantbha aa gaye aur uss aadmi ko bhaga diya,woh aadmi jate jate Dushyantbha se keh raha tha ki "tere aur uss Gulaal ke beech mein kya chal raha hai main acchi tarah janta hu" woh kis vishay mein baat kar raha tha Gulaal,aisa kya hai jo sirf tu aur Dushyantbha jante hai aur main nahi?

They had reached home and Kesar failed to notice the effect of his question had on Gulaal, she had stopped in her track dumbfounded and shocked…..

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Originally posted by: enchanted23

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

Yahan Talli ki sundarta k vyakhan k barein mein kuch kahing kya😆