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Geeshu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#41

Nice story line Alanta...i'm eagerly waiting for your updates.

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Piu Chatterjee

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Posted: 13 years ago

#42

Very nice update Alanta..So Finally KG meet and rewa is playing Sissy with nirja...Well I am liking this beautiful progress in the KG relationship...Eagerly waiting for the next update🤗

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alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: kiran_trudecent
alanta 🤗 very nice yar, i like it very much 😃 here gulaal's name neerja is used n she is fond of photography, but y dushyant is with her 😲 n chalo finally she met rewa, but kesar? had he seen her in the mela? 😲 it seems like he has, ok now me waiting for further updates to know that agay kya hoga 😃

Thanks a lot Kiran🤗...no yaar kesar has not met her in the mela..there is some other reason..will reveal in the next one...glad that u liked it😊

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alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: Kesar04
Main ajnabiyon ke story pe comment nahi karti kesar i love you sooo much that you are my You're my Honeybunch, Sugarplum
Pumpy-umpy-umpkin, You're my Sweetie Pie You're my Cuppycake, Gumdrop Snoogums-Boogums, You're the Apple of my Eye And I love you so and I want you to know That I'll always be right here And I love to sing sweet songs to you Because you are so dear. short poem just for you Kesar my dear and ill be nyce include alanta

lol i actually though you were refering to me there for a minute but then Kesar Kesar appeared

Kesar..thanks for commenting in this ajnabi's thread and hope u liked the update..😛

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alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: enchanted23

Hey Alanta, Yes I am Aditi, I really loved the start and was intrigued from the word go'and you have enhanced that intriguing start with this update'.

Nirja seems like someone who returning rather than visiting the place..'interesting'.I also liked the way she strikes friendship with Reva as if she has known her all along'It seems that she will be staying in the haveli for a while'Kesar and Reva both seems to recognise something about her that's connected to them ''I can't wait for her past to unfold'.

And that payal scence was so cute,Nirja seems like gal who knows how to get what she wants'even from someone who's considered akdu and gussail'

I am already hooked Alanta, and will be hovering over this thread..'..so please update soon'.Thanks

Aditi thanks a lot yaar, for ur detailed and lovely comments...yes u have caught it right...so glad that u liked it..will update soon..

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alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: chweetu
Nice story alanta...😃😃😃me really feeling embarrassed kyun ki..I never commented on ur thread...😕but its a lovely story yaar...😳😳luved d suspense...😃..n please bring d next chappie soon..dear...😳😳

Hey chweetu😳..glad to see u here dear and so happy that u liked it...iss mein embarrass hone ki kya baath hein..u commented and that it self means a lot...will update soon

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alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: Geeshani
Nice story line Alanta...i'm eagerly waiting for your updates.

Geeshu so happy to see u again after such a long time and glad that u liked it...will update soon

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Very nice update Alanta..So Finally KG meet and rewa is playing Sissy with nirja...Well I am liking this beautiful progress in the KG relationship...Eagerly waiting for the next update🤗

piu🤗..thanks dear..but please do tell me, if u didnt like it..pls dont hesitate...will update soon

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sauris

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Posted: 13 years ago

#49

Alanta waiting for the next chappi

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alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#50

If silence could ever speak part 2

[It was first Nirja, who headed in conversing with him, but as days passed, Kesar began to seek excuses to spent time with her, some times just to speak with her, some times just to greet her, some time just a bye or some other time just to steal a glimpse of her...and each passing day brought a new revelation for him, he was slowly digging in to the answers for those questions, that trespassed his thoughts, since the day he met her]

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(He was in his room, staring at the single anklet, whose pair was with her. He was contemplating all those moments, that he spent with her, and his thoughts returned to his a decade long memories...and at the end the question rebounced at him; Was she really a stranger..., her demeanour, her jesters , her manners...evidently echoed the answer to him;...a content smile blossomed on him)

Kesar( to himself, looking at the 'paayal'): Kya naam bathaaya tha??...Nirja..?

(he left the room with a strong determination)

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[Nirja walked with confused steps at the back yard of the haweli..and she found Kesar standing at a reasonable distance with his back facing her]

Nirja(confused and looked around):Kesar...Tu muje yahan kyun bulaya...woh bhi iss waqth..

(Her voice trembled a bit, as it was night and only a faint moon light was there for her slight solace)

[Kesar turned and walked slowly towards her, while his eyes held a numerous emotions; as he stared at her, the shine in his eyes were overpowering the faint moon light. they were stern and piercing yet, soft and delicate towards her, he walked and stood behind her, while wrapped her in a long red chunar, and also with in his arms...and pulled her towards him..she was amazed and mean while wholely shivered with his sudden intimacy..]

Kesar( huskily whispered in her ears): Gulaal...

(His voice turned to goosebumps all over her body and thrilled even her deeper soul, as it was contented with a true passion and endlesss yearning for her, as never before,..it was overwhelmed with a strange but yet so familiar longing..which she reciprocating while reading the language of his eyes)

Nirja(tenderly):Gulaal?

(Kesar desperately pulled her facing him, by her wrist)

Kesar:( in his painful voice): Kyun kar rahi hein aisa..kyun chupane ki koshish kar rahin hein..apne aapko..woh bhi (choking) apne Kesar se...

(She was freezed for a moment and couldnt utter a word, her inteention was never to hurt him..how could she..He was Kesar..her Kesar..but she was still feeling guilty,...

Kesar released her arm and turned back, while continued in an uncontrollable and teary voice)

Kesar: Tu kya samjegi Gulaal, tu hamare bachpan mein hi chali gayi thi na, apne maa- baap ke saath..muje..muje akela chodkar..bas tu hi ek akele dosth thi na meri..uss waqt muje nahin patha tha,,nahin patha tha ki, mere saare gharwale mere saath dhe..lekin phir bhi ithna akelapan kyun tha, kyun khush nahin reh patha tha..sirf ithna jaantha tha ki mein apni dosth se dur hein..dheere dheere muje samach main aaya ki,...(and turned towards her with his moist eyes; his look could even drill the deepest layer of her heart..while tears surfaced hers..)..ki,..mein sirf ek dosth ko nahin khoya tha..usse kahin.kahin zyaada(his voice broke), (longingly) Tu hamesha se meri zindgi ka ek hissa dhi Gulaal, lekin jaathe jaathe tu kab meri zindgi ban gayi..patha hi nahin chala...

(Her heart bounced with joy, as she heard her own wish, her desire, as he was echoing her heart, her thoughts, her feelings for him, Kesar neared her and cupped her face within his arms, while tears flowed her cheeks)

Kesar(while breathed heavily): muje pura barosa tha Gulaal,ki ek na ek din tu muje zaroor milegi..muje pura barosa tha Gulaal, apne...apne pyaar par..

(Her heart was rejoicing beyond all bounds, the moment stood as everything for her, her life, her heart beat had forgot its normal rhythm...and got sinked with his pacing breathe)

Gulaal( with raising curiousness): Aur agar Gulaal ne mana kiya tho..

Kesar( confidently): Woh apni Kesar ko kabhi mana nahin kar sakthi..

(She was elated seeing his belief in her)

Gulaal(thrilled): ithna barosa hein apni Gulaal par

Kesar( looked deep in to her eyes while moved closer and huskily): Tu andaza bhi nahin laga saktha..

(Gulaal ran out of his grip and laughed being ecastic, and paced towards the haweli, leaving him wondered for a moment to absorb the passed few seconds before him)

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Edited by alanta - 13 years ago

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