OS :Just a shot of life -Across

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello people. This concept has been giving me sleepless nights and then I finally decided to scribble this up. I am not a writer hence please ignore the minor mistakes .Constructive criticism is always welcome!




"I will confess today "



She stood at the juncture of platform 5 , the very same platform which was the witness of her unattainable and unrequited predilection. The subject of her deep rumination was expected across her lair at sharp half past eight . The clock was stationed right before her undaunted eyes , for which is she was forever indebted lest she missed the impending arrival.



" Must be running late"



Her valiant adjuration flattered when it met the eyes of unfamiliar entities and failed to meet the desired destination. The hustle -bustle of the platform was immune to her disquietude. Indebtedness to the mighty clock turned into the pool of uncertainties and reservations. The whirlwind of emotions then started reasoning with the possibilities of the reason of delay. The infamous traffic was summoned to the court of late arrivals, unruly fights on the road were also not spared . While awaiting for the impatient judgement the advent of familiar face adjourned the decision to fools' land.



"Finally !"



She shook herself from the reverie and took determined steps to comply with her resolute undertaking. As soon as she neared her destination , she ceased and walked away from him.




"Not today , maybe tomorrow "




AN - this was all from my end now readers over to you hate it? Like it? You have all the freedom.


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Edited by cumberben - 8 years ago


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Posted: 8 years ago
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lovely OS! well written! she decides 2 confess n waits 4 him! she sees him n chickens out!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hate it ... Absolutely no!!!

It's lovely, i wish i had more time to admire n analyse ur eloquence, but would concentrate on the plot for now,

It's very difficult to give words to ur feelings sometimes, with the fear of words not being able to do proper justice to them, and then there's always a tomorrow! Only the fear of no tomorrow can make a person confess!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This one shot is true for all kinds of confessions no?

There are times we want to take a step ahead but we are too afraid of the outcome

NOT TODAY MAYBE TOMORROW

Absolutely loved it !
I have always admired writers who are able to tell volumes in just a few words.

Keep writing!

Hope to see you around more often.

PS- not a writer? Are you sure about that?



Edited by Commelina - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: khwaishfan

lovely OS! well written! she decides 2 confess n waits 4 him! she sees him n chickens out!


Thank u for such a warm response :)
being an amateur writer on a public forum,
I cherish your appreciation.
Edited by cumberben - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Cumberben? That sure ring bells. 😛
Awesome os! I want more of this .
Are u new to forums or just said goodbye to the veil? 😆
Hope to see you with more such stories.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: lizzy84

Cumberben? That sure ring bells. 😛

Awesome os! I want more of this .
Are u new to forums or just said goodbye to the veil? 😆
Hope to see you with more such stories.


Hahaha pretty sure it isn't me.

Although I feel obliged to say thank you, for thinking I'm capable of writing such an awesome piece.

To the author: Pretty intriguing start. This sounds like a story from my life. Lol. Not today, part. Because I'm lazy like that.

Keep up the good work.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: cumberben


Thank u for such a warm response :)
being an amateur writer on a public forum,
I cherish your appreciation.

u r welcome.
Amateur?? I dnt think so.
hmm do continue this OS...
looking forward 2 more stories frm u
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Chicken little's heart couldn't handle the sky falling on her that day. So she ran.
Totally empathize with her predicament though😆

Been there done that.

P.S Are you an English teacher by any chance?😛

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Veil


Hahaha pretty sure it isn't me.

Although I feel obliged to say thank you, for thinking I'm capable of writing such an awesome piece.

To the author: Pretty intriguing start. This sounds like a story from my life. Lol. Not today, part. Because I'm lazy like that.

Keep up the good work.

I am sure you are capable! Try it on


Ps-By veil I meant the author finally showed up with this piece .




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