New York Times Part 31 Updated in Thread 2 - Page 18

Originally posted by: Onir

Oh! two updates... 😊

The Remains of the day : beautifully described... must say you really have your way with words the way you play with the character's thought processes takes me so much into the update... that once its done with I stil crave for the next...

So now her 10th floor becomes 29th... i wonder where are you planning to put him to stay at... so which floor is his penthouse gonna be now... 25th to... I'm also waiting to know how are you gonna describe the penthouse but i seriously hope you don't change it more... coz i was in love with that place the way you descibed it in the first version...😉

Last time round her day was just a gist... not much into it, but this version of it actually sounded so real... just as for a first time office goer - coming in contact with miles of info in a day... can't comment much on that as not a office goer... but now tid bits of it😆😆

Here too there was recollection of how she felt in his presence.

OH LAA LAA Here comes the famous " Blue" shirt😳😳 I see already a great big discussion has been on that... but seriously Oh he looks so damn breathtaking in that... just can't stop imagining about that😳😳😳

Her going over the day... so ... IDK no words to put it through... i just loved it... So less of the times in our busy lives do we really sitback to ponder about the day gone by...

her thoughts by pondering with patience, nervousness & eagerness... shows her vulnerable yet strongly emerging out of it... meaning from going over fron dev to finally closing on Maan's thoughts... aptly put by you as - something of him achieving lasting with whoever he'd expect her to be... 👏👏

The description of their first official meeting... he's delibrate avoidance yet that unresistable "pull" uff beautiful... they are gonna have so much more of this push - pull... looking forward to all those encounters...😍 also esply..how Dadi is gonna make him understand how to overcome the "pull" that update... was so good want to see the tubelight Maan... oh hwo I adore his embarrassment then...

Oh so now the Chat- Gym sitout is on the 37th floor ... you put it twenty floors up... you must be thinking I'm so damn fixated with these numbers... but can't help it read the whole FF few times ... & have made a visual picture of it... so when there are changes though very subtle they do make the picture a bit hazy... but at the same time makes it a challenge to view the whole scenario again from your POV as last time round there weren't many descriptions out there. This whole thing makes me want to reread & crave for what's next in line...

loved it 👏👏 ... but will read the next 1 & comment soon...

Originally posted by: jyoti_l

i am so in love with all the stories...all have a diff flavour...

i dont remember paheli n hamsafar though...🤔

Originally posted by: jyoti_l

there r some moments...some situation that r just mesmerizing...

the touch, the hug, the first breath of air, the clarity, the run in the valley...the moments that define...

Originally posted by: had2bu

Agree to your comment so much. I am totally understanding the numbers thing too. We are all addicts here and such a beautiful story so who would forget.

very true... but love the way she plays with the numbers...😆

H, I now know what you meant when you told me you were unhappy with the earlier version of NYT. As much as I loved that version, this new one almost makes it a new read. I am loving it...

@Ch5- My memory is horrible, thought this came much later! I remember Geet hurting herself but thats it, nontheless I love this version. It feels more real, I can't remember Geet being attracted to Maans body before it's apparant now. Who wouldn't be flustered seeing Maan in a shirtless state? 😆

I am so jealous of that picture you posted of the pool area...it's so pretty! And the view is great, my window view is of a cemetery :| But its open right? What happens when it rains? Or does it have glass panelling? And that doesn't look like a pool but then again you can't really tell the depth of water.

Edit: Looks like I missed chapter 4 😆 Silly me! Will go back to that now.

I knew I was missing when reading chapter five, felt incomplete. All makes much more sense now! You covered both their POVs this time...there weren't many loose ends but seems like your cleaning everything up to make it as neat as possible!

Onir...Loved your observations...🤗

And you are on a roll too...keep it up.

Hey!
I am so happy you are re-writing NY Times. It has been one of my most loved FFs.

Read the first 2 chapters... am loving it. Though I don't remember exactly, but there are slight changes in this version as you have also mentioned... it's making the read all the more enjoyable and exciting.

3 more to catch-up... will get to them tomorrow maybe.

Keep them coming.

They say that a journey of a thousand miles must begin with a single step... and I like to iterate the words from the ending...

Chekhov a famous short story writer once quoted..."There is nothing new in art except talent." And I believe you have the talent and the passion to look out the window and realize that the whole world is a story, and every moment is a miracle...

A toast to a new beginning...