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Posted: 13 years ago
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45 FRICKIN PAGES?! OMFG!! And I thought 5 pages was long. Are your fingers okay? Hope they are, they must be aching from all that typing. Okay now please kindly ignore my grammar/spelling errors, I'm sick and tired 😆

OMG OMG OMG!! <I only do this when I'm extremely happy or sad. It is the latter! My heart is literally aching. Literally! And this is a girl without a heart we're talking about here. You have made a hole hurt. That's not even possible.

So I opened this FF thinking it's going to be all happy shappy (the title, prologue and beginning are VERY misleading. Well even if it was...uhh...leading [😆] I'd still read it and then crib later) and what do you do?! You break my fragile little heart/hole thingy.

I must say I absolutely loved the beginning, it was as sweet as jelabi's 😆 Why is it all people meet in libraries? But I guess with your concept, it fits in the story but in other shows and stuff they just go to a library and knock their teeth out, get a concussion from banging their heads and stare into each others fricking eyes!! Doesn't dust ever get in them?! Okay I ace staring concepts, but for me in real life it's just freaky if two people stare into each others eyes 😆

I really like your Nandu, maybe even more than Geet. She is a fiery girl who lives on sarcasm and attitude. RAWR. Me likey! 😉😆 Ignore my pervishness 😆 But yeah...I've always preferred strong characters to girly girly ones. But that's just me. Maybe because am so vulgar and unsophisticated (not to mention a tad rude, I tend to lash out a lot 😆)

Wow that's a lot of laugh emotions for a sad story. This is me laughing at my own jokes, anyhoo...moving on...

Another thing I like about Nandu is that she is smart, she completely turned the tables on Maan when he was blackmailing her. Good going!

I'm not surprised Geet ditched him on the date! That was the most cliche thing ever. Like ever! Maan needs to read 'how to create an interesting date that won't offend your date and make you look like spoilt rich brat' 😆 I mean I get Maan, he was just trying to create the perfect atmosphere but the stupid little bwoi!! Did he turn deaf when N said G is a simple Indian woman! Well I guess he didn't take it literally. I really did feel like smacking him on the head then!

Geet is too nice, giving him a second chance! I would be like 'screw you sucker, you got your chance' 😆 I did say I'm heartless 😆 But then again if she didn't give him a second chance, we probably would've attacked you! The author never wins, sad, sad truth.

Now here comes the start of the 'sad phase'

Oh how terribly awful for M, he had to witness his mother passing away. I think watching a parent die is really the most traumatizing thing for a child. I really do feel for him. When my dad passed away I didn't know until a whole month later! He was on holiday with my mum and they didn't want me to find out when my mum wasn't there to support me lest I break.

Okay now I'm going to skip to the sad part and start my cribbing...

When she arrived at his apartment and they made love, I knew she was going away. First I thought she maybe going to a different medical school or something, I didn't guess she was sick! But when she said I'm having breakfast with Nandani and Goodbye I started to get my suspicions.

The letter made me teary, seriously. I was like 'NOOO DON'T GOOO GETT DON'T GOOO!' Not a pretty sight 😆 And it was all because of you! YOU YOU YOU! Evil lady :( Making innocent bacha's cry.

Uhh...I forgot what happened next. See I'm so upset I'm having short term memory loss *goes back to check*

It was really heartbreaking seeing (well reading) Maan so desperate to get her back. You could feel his pain and desperation in every word. very well written Jaz! But the thing I loved the most was he stood strong, he didn't break, didn't screw up- no, he went back to work and lived. And that is what I appreciate. Drowning your self in pity is a weakness.

However more than Maan, I felt sorry for Nandani. Maan knew G for a few years but N knew her for a nearly a lifetime. Nothing is stronger than the bond of friendship (and you explained this really well in your other OS) She was with her threw her good and bad, she knew her secrets and they shared such a special bond. Really do feel for them.

If the situation was different when M read the letter G gave N (see that's how tired I am, I'm writing initials instead) and it stated that did 'it', it would have been so awkward 😆. But like I said the situation.

Geet's love for M was so strong. She went through all that pain herself just so he doesn't suffer. She was a heck of a woman!

The last letter made me all teary eyed again, she wants to of her most loved to heal each other. Aww!! < That's a sad aww. It really touched me. She was absolutely correct about N being alone, if not a lover at least now she will have some support. The only other person who knows what she is going through.

Overall a completely epic, and heart-breaking OS. You have done it again Jaz, you have made this stone hearted girl teary eyed (I rarely cry when reading, so teary eyed is a big big thing) I can't get enough of you're writing, your just epic 🤗

Wow...this was long. My longest comment ever on I-F wow...! Well you deserved this, or should I say am honoured to write this.

Hate from,
Boogleton Schiz 🤗

P.S I so did not imagine MP as Nandu 😊

Edited by Boogleton.Schiz - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sindu555

haan haan beta great minds zara Reyu ka latest OS perh jab buckets bharay gi aur tissue ke boxes khali karay gi naa tab sara great mind beh jaye gaa 😆... aare...whats to complain about...i loved it...LOVED it...i think Reya did a bang up job!! 👏👏👏 toh kya hua if i used a few boxes of tissues 😭😭

... aray I know this character is awesome its just that last week mein Nandu ne itna torture kya hai that the name Nandini is black listed for now 😆 i know what you mean...i didnt realize that until you made the comment...then again i also explained that Paru would work for Pari either!! 😛

moi will be back soon .. waisay bhi marnay koi irada nahin hai mera teray haathon ... and khabardaar agar tum ne ye "Nandini" use kya again in any of ur writings ... at least till the time we are able to flush out the irritating Nandu from our system 😆 done...no more nandu in anything i do until i have approval form you!! i shall wait for your anger to clam down 😉
lub you 🤗

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Posted: 13 years ago
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why why why you always have to give a sad update 😭
sad but great though 👏
couldn't get off the chair until read the whole part 👍🏼
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Posted: 13 years ago
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@ niddzz: you bloody flooded my computer screen woman!! 😲 have you stopped yet? 😆
JAZ

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: crazy_niddzz

jaz di ...geet ko tapka dala aisa koi karta hai kya ???? 🤣 oh best COMMENT ever!! ha ha...but kya karoon..i cant help it!! 😆

mein last to last nyt hi toh baldi bhar bhar ke cry ki thi...HS padh ke aur aaj aapne mujhe fir roola diya...chote chote babies ko koi itna rulata hai kya ???😭😭😭 aare...but HS was happy happy tears no? end mein Armaan hi Maan hota hai...this one...yes...super sad...sorry...*jaz kaan pakering* 😉
loved the OS...it was just awesome...!!!!
loved maaneet relationship...!!!! thanks jaani!! 😃
loved nandu too...but uska naam...sowieee but i hate her in the show so yaha pe couldnt digest her ...but loved her character...loved how she whispered i love u in geets ears...how cute...loved geet-nandu bond...!!!!! sorry...name mein thodi mistake hogayi...wont happen next time...he he...but im glad you were able to see past it...and see the big picture...i wonder is Sana is over it yet?
loved maaneets togetherness...!!!
maujhe geet ke goodbye se hi daar laga tha and see next moment i was tapkaving mote mote aasu...!!!
i cried wid each letter she had written...!!!!! i actually had a blast writing the letters...im such a sadist!! 😕
they were so in love...!!!
loved their first date...!!!!
maan is such a sweetheart...!!!!
maans mom😭 😭 😭
loved nandu'd dehla on maans nehla...lol he he...i had to put in two first dates to get their story in the right place..and maan had it coming...nandu put up with geets yelling and it all went down the drain...men i tell ya 😡
geet was so happy wen she got into med skul...but fate has it all set...!!!! he he...yes...fate aka jaz 😈
maan getting engaged to nandu 4 dadi's sake ...!!!
i so wish dey were humesha saath...geet will always b der in his memories...in his heart but as a matter of fact she is no more besides him...!!!! yes...nandu and maan only for dadi...nothing else...no romantic love between them...and of course...like she said...she will watch over him always...😭
geets farewell gift to maan and herself...sumthn maan will always cherish ...!!!!
maan din search 4 her coz she wanted it dat way...!!!
geet din want him to go thru the pain of loosing her in front of his eyes and she had her reasons too...!!! she did...and i got a good part of this story after watching My Sisters Keeper...when Kate is in the hospital...looking so sickly...geet didnt want maan to remember like that 😭
OMG ...i m still crying...!!!!
loved it...!!!
keep rocking jaz di...!!! thanks niddzz!! love you!! 🤗

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: honeygrape

amazing os but a very very very sad sad one... i expected it to be a sad one, but still i couldnt stop myself from reading it...😭 was it neccessary to kill geeet??? 😭 os would have been beautiful even without that naa... loved it



sorry...h ehe...did you flood your house too? 😆😆...i cant help it...im glad you read it even though you figured it was a sad one!! props to you for that...a true fan!! thank you!!! and no...there is no story w/out her dying...that is the essence of the song and my story...😳
JAZ

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: acjanfeb1

jaz, I have no words to describe the my emotions undergoing now . firstpart i have taken in humour ,as i was reading sumthing very different from regular medical field . but as the story progressed i was numb .and now i am very emotional to digest the ending . fabulous os . can i ask u one question "aap kis chakki ka atta khati ho"(jokes apart) How such beautiful ideas cum up in ur mind and u beautiful web into emotional stories . kudos to u and god bless u and dua karti hun ki aap ki zindagi mein har khushiyan se sazi . love u jaz .



yes...this was not so heavily medical like my other things...there was some...but mostly it was about maneet's relationship and nothing more...😃😃😃...i dont know...my mind just works in funny ways...so many ideas but so little time to pen them down...some ideas i even forget...😆😆😆...and you are so sweet hun...love you!!
JAZ

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sarkh26

yr sad again 😭

but have to tell that was too emotional
beautifully described
luved it



sorry...sad is what i do best...thanks for reading it hun 😃
JAZ

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: jnawaz

@ niddzz: you bloody flooded my computer screen woman!! 😲 have you stopped yet? 😆
JAZ

Lolz...she cried pretty much the same amount of mine too...😆...poor nidz...all the crying she has to do..😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
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JAZ ,i knew u were gonna put him with nandu cause they had a nice kemestry since 1th time they met and maan himself said she is like geet 😉 Thanks 4 ur replay to my comment! Really enjoyed reading this!thousand thank you 👏 👏

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