OS: Beautiful Girl - Page 22

Originally posted by: GeetHSP

I have no idea what its about but I love the title :) Here we go: title comes from a song...which i love!! 😳 the song is like my stories...the title is misleading 😛

- Ok, that intro was amazing! It grasped my attention immediately. With such a glamorous place like Los Angeles, add in Hollywood and a beautiful starry sky, Maan and Geet...its perfect... Geet? tujhe Geet kahaan se mili? 😉 though the setting is perfect! a coworker has a house in the Hollywood Hills...omg...i wanted to move in...the view alone!! killer!! 😲😲😲

- I love how you know so much about the topic you write about. So many details about the library and Maan being a business law major...its great as a reader. some of the stuff was made up...the floors and all...but i love adding the detail...gives the story depth...not just some floor in some library...it helps paint a picture for the readers 😳😳

- Awww this reminds me of the Mayank and Nupur scene in the library. Where she takes his wallet and runs around, I think she trips on the ladder or just trips and they have their first kiss. Cheek kiss obviously. Its a very sweet scene. aww...MJHT...that was a good show too...season 1...post leap..it crashed and burned!! the new people sucked...i didnt like them at all...😕😕😕

- "I tell you to hurry up and get the book but what do you do?" the girl asked as she gripped Geet's arm more tightly. "You decide to go and fall into the arms of a law school hunk."

You're amazing :P he he..i think Nandu was my fav character in this story!! 😆😆

- I like how you're still using the name of characters in the show. With Yash and Nandini, I think its really cool...it gives you this feeling that you know the character even if their personality is different from the show. yeah...i like doing that...using actual characters from the show but giving them a new identity...usually it works...though many nandini haters didnt like here here

- I really like this conversation with Maan and Nandini. With the Mr. Khurana and Ms. Malhotra thing. It almost sounds like they're teasing each other as friends. they are teasing...it wasnt a formal conversation or anything...in my mind they were totally pulling each others legs 😆😆😆

- I like how you described Geet as she was exiting the lecture hall. How her look his SO simple but she still looks pretty and Maan is speechless upon seeing her. And of course Geets a freshman, younger than Maan :) the boy was smitten with her...he noticed everything!! 😉😉

- HAHA to Adi saying "spiffy"! That was too funny. its a good comedy word no? 😉

- She's the sister I never hand? Had? 😲 lol...yes HAD!! 😆😆 major typo!! 😲

- I don't even know what to say. How did you think of a concept like that? Its incredible. Jaz hun, you've turned into a professional writer on me! I mean, feeling sad how Geet rejected Maan, Maan not realizing what he did wrong when it was right in front of him, Maan walking into the girls eating pizza and drinking soda...just subtly showing the contrast. It was amazing! this was actually a very important part of the story because this is what begins the change that i needed to further the story...😳😳😳 you'll see why 😉...because something major ties in with what happens on first date #2 😛

- Awww so there is a really Maan behind all the glitz :) there really is...and he's just a regular guy with pain, heart break and emotions...and just like a regular guy..he hides it...except from the one he loves 😳

- Hmmm interesting...I like how the both keep their goals and priorities aligned...putting school first like that. I wish I did that, put school first I mean...but then I wouldnt be commenting on this FF. :P tauba...now i feel bad...aagar teri kaam nahin hua toh? 😲😲😲 and i didnt have school first...but it was a close second 😆

- *cries* I hope I get into med school... you will...me is praying for you daily!! 🤗

- I like your Maan and Mark conversation. You're just full of good morals today! I feel like this is your way of telling all us kids to stay in school :P Who knows what handsome guy we might find in the library... you're happiness is cute..i can clearly tell you are writing as you read...hold that thought though..."good morals" and all 😆😆😆...and totally agree...who knows who you'll run into at the library 😉

- I should have said this a long time ago but I like how Maan calls her Angel instead of Geet but strangely, Geets never said anything about him calling her Angel. he he...you wont like the "angel" term for long 😉😉

- *Jas's not amused face* I'M TIRED and I have homework to do and three more updates to read and you give me THIS?! *NOT AMUSED*

Sigh, that was mean. and there it is!! 😆😆😆...i was just waiting for the reaction!! he he...

- Ahhh...so she admits to liking the nickname after all. I'm trying to ignore all the parts about cancer, its too depressing right now. No wonder he called her angel. Angels do their part and then they leave, they're not here to stay. What hurts the most is that she didnt even tell him...she just left. You know how hard that must have been for him? She leaves without telling him where shes going or when shes coming back and then he gets this stupid letter thats shes gone up to visit his mom. No goodbye. no nothing. but but but...she did it for him...remember...date #2...he said...he couldnt survive loosing another loved one...and she didnt want him to remember her that way...it hurt them both...but imagine...maan knowing she was suffering and in pain with nothing he could do...he'd die...but hearing about her death after the fact, was a shock but...just one quick blow...and not months of torture 😭😭

- You didnt say anything about this but I have this vision of Maan and Nandini ending up together. Because they were so alike and Geet kept on saying take good care of my Nandu. Great now I'm the horrible person! I always yell at you for not putting Maan and Geet together and pairing Maan off with Sameera and etc and here I am pairing Maan with Nandini myself! i did though..i did put Maan and Nandu together in the end...did you read the ending...im a bit surprised you didnt mention their engagement...or the last scene with the picture falling and the song lyrics 😲

Anyways...on to the next one. I feel like I'm trekking through mountains in terms of reading this updates...its so slow and takes so much time but you get to stop and enjoy the scenery for a while but then you fall... only to get up again and continue the journey...ok that was very strange... strange but i know what you mean 😆

Originally posted by: GeetHSP

That was my longest comment EVER! I'm SO PROUD of myself! :D

Originally posted by: Shimmerr

awesome dear!!
my mascara is smugged again, my eyes are red and tears are all over my face and the teasing from my family begins again!!
how do you do it that i cry on every story you write?!?!?
you make me sooo emotional during reading, that i always think twice of the time of reading them!!
you are awesome dear!!

keep it up!!

thanks hun!! been a while since ive seen you! how've you been? 😃...aww...i guess family teasing is the worst part...next time...read when no one is home!! 😉...just as a warning 😆...even if you think twice before reading my stuff...i hope you continue to read...😳..love you're comments!
JAZ