OS: Beautiful Girl - Page 8

Originally posted by: Amiiish

Oh Jaz, I hate you right now, Im in tears and ma heart is in pain, seriously this was the most painful FF ever, and well penned, but still Jaz you love to torture us:p i do...what can i say...i LOVE to torture you guys!! im glad you liked it...or...at least read it...sorry for causing you pain...i love you!! 😳
When I started to read this I didnt thought it would be hurt this much while reading, though I knew something saddening is surely gonna happen. And when everything was going good, I was like omg Jaz is writing something light, I defo point out that, but that thought was not so long lived when suddenly Geet left. Omg I was crying, and it takes a lot of hard work to make me cry, brilliantly written. But still how could you kill her:( aww...im glad it fooled you for a bit...cuz that way the sadness is stronger...wow im horrible...lol...but i had to kill her...varna it didnt fit the song and story i had in my head!! 😉
You have to make up something for this saddening OS. i actually have something im working on...should be up next week 😛
But now that I see this OS overall, I cant say it was lovely but it was indeed a great piece of work. of course its not lovely...geet dies...that cant be lovely...but thanks for the comment

Originally posted by: aashluvsmaan

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Originally posted by: princess_xaini

amaxng OS...
Luv it so much..
U made me cry..
Beautifully wrttn..

Originally posted by: jnawaz

aashu...if you dont come back...ill KILL you and im sure Reya will help!! 😡
JAZ

Originally posted by: maankigeet4ever

okay...i am here now...so it's like 6 in the morning here...first i thought of reading at uni...but then i realized that i would be killing myself on purpose...if i have to cry a flood of tears at the uni library...and it's not like some dude will come up to me to ask me if i am okay 😆..lolz...here we go...i feel a little nervous..i know u wrote this especially for moi...and it's sad like i like my stories...but i don't know if i am ready for tears so early..but i can't wait anymore 😳😆 wow 6am 😲...what are you bloody doing up...yikes...and i was wondering where you were...i was like stalkerji soh gayi kya...and i was right!! ha ha...and yes...this was especially for you...the ideas have been in my head for a while...just took time to sort it all out...😳😳😳

hayyeee...even the poem is the beginning says so much...i loved it...but i don't know if it's urs not not...but either way...it's wonderful 👏 see..i know i forgot something...this was actually something i came across...its not mine...but when i read it...i was like this is perfect!! "beautiful angel" and all!! 😳

so this OS is quite long...and i feel like i will forget half the things i have to say...so i am gonna notice some of them down...😆 (all of this is to the point where he just took her out for dessert as the second chance she gave him) 😳 lol...i know...i told you it was long...i could never remember what i read...thats why i always comment as i go along 😃

You start with the OS with maan staring at the star lit sky and remembering the first time he met her...see...i am worried already ...cause Geet has very very very high chances of being dead...and but the hell is he doing getting engaged to someone else ?? lol...how'd you know it was someone else already? the beginning gave no hints...but then of course...you and i tend to think away from normal thinking...we get the mind working w/ very few hints if any at all 😆😆😆

Hayeee😳...the way he caught her from falling...me was singing mahiii...mahiii...mahiii...

so this Nandu chick is kinda interesting...i mean she loves and cares for geet and all...but let;s see later.. lol...mahi mahi...we got a sweet mahi moment today!! 😳

OMGGG...OMGGG...i loveee U 🤗 ...u brought my Yash back...that too in a postive role (hopefully)...but still...i grinned like a idiot when i read his intro... yes...yash for you...i originally wanted someone else...but lucky didnt fit...teji and brij were too old...so im like yash can be passed off as someone maan mentors 😛

they are talking abt death ..oh no...reya superly worried...he says he can't stand it if someone he loves dies...i know exactly what you are doing...but i won't say it...

okay...back to reading 😃 lol...see...what did i say...great minds think alike!!

okayyy...so i read more...and their realtionship grew...he finished his education...she got into med school😊...but then she seems distract...and then she comes to his room and they make love...i mean she wanted to wait but now...that had me worried already 😕...but then when she said Goodbye...i like...dude...something is seriously wrong and she is saying goodbye for good😭...that better not be the case...or i am going to screamm...bloody murder 😡 ha ha...should i cover my ears? 😆😆...im just saying...i dont want to go deaf!! ha ha...but yes yes...alas...that was one final goodbye...little did he know it as he snoozed

WHATTT THE BLODDY HELLL??? where did she go ? leaving him only a few words...my first thought is that she is suffering from some kind of disease..and is going to die but she doesn't want him to be there because of how he said he wouldn't be able to handle another death...ohhh goddd 😭 BINGO!! haye meri jaan BINGO!!!! 👏👏👏👏...glad you tied those things together 😛

okay...i am feeling so bad for Nandu too cause Geet was like a sister to her..and to lose a friend who is ur everything is so painful...😭.. im happy you arent hating on Nandu...unlike Sana...who nearly bit my head off for using her and not someone else 😭

my heart is sinking with each letter..😭..plz Babaji...plz let geet come back...plz...

OH LORDY...my heart just stopped...'if you are reading this letter, it means i am no longer here' 😭..u killed Handa...nooo jazzzyyy...NOOO 😭😭 aare...look at the pot calling the kettle black...you killed her too...but you killed her as Mrs. Khurana...worse...i dont know how...but it is!! *hmph* 😉

i can't believe i was right when i guessed earlier...oh how i wished i wasn't right 😭

nooo...nooo...nooo...plz no...i am tried of begging...he is going to get married to someone else...😭..cause of his Dadi's last wish...but how can he deny her that when she was the one who cared for him after his mother died...and i am pretty sure..she gave all the love possible...

ohhh Jazzy...i love you...really i do...i say this as tears are running down my cheeks...honestly baby,,,this OS was...i don't know...i can't find the exact word i want...but still...i am sorry i am little lost for words by the end of it...😕😭...but baby..plz know that i loved it so much...

Thank you so much for this one 🤗...Love u baby ❤️ aww!! love you too...glad you liked it...hope it met the standards you were expecting from me...😳😳😳...

Originally posted by: leverne

Aww.. What a beautiful and long os.. I loved reading it.. Had tears in ma eyes reading their love story.. Death is the most painful inevitable truth.. And it hurts..

Originally posted by: anuandavi

That was AWESOME. Another sad ending. Kya yaar. But that was heart touching.

Originally posted by: MsMovielover

ohhh jaz you made my hopes go up in the first parts & then BAM crush them & bury them under ground 😡

but i have to say very well written as usual...

Originally posted by: Razz22

Y R U SOO GUD!!!

here i am bawlin mt eyes out!! :'(

Originally posted by: punjabi.princes

yes your back with another amazing piece of work!

but why oh why must one of them always be dead?!?

loved this story and how they fell in love

i had a feeling that she would get sick after he told her about his mother and seeing a loved one dying

overall, another awesome OS!

Originally posted by: maan-ki-sanjana

That was an awesome story. thank you ji! 😳

I guess not all love stories have the typical "happy" endings. Happy is a relative thing anyways, it doesn't have to be what you expect. exactly...not everything is perfectly happy...and happy is how one sees things...this is a happy ending for geet...as she watched maan and nandu...she knows that they will be ok with each other...😊

I do feel for both Maan and Geet in this scenario...to distance yourself from the one you love because you can't see yourself dying through their eyes and for Maan, not being able to spend the last days of your lovers life with her. it was a double edged sword...no winners...just losers 😭

Originally posted by: mandymore

Its beautiful like geet,i like d way u describe d events n story n maintng d suspense also.luvd it

Originally posted by: Viji79

Tum sudhrogi nahi na!! Kya milta hai tumhe aise logon ko rulake? Ek pal ki bhi chein nahi milti tumhari OS padthey waqt. Par galti toh humari hain jo hum itne fida ho jathey hain tumhari writings se.

Originally posted by: seemamary

Nic eone but i dont understand why always you give sad OS .Anyways it was beautifully written.

Originally posted by: febinyusuff

Ho Jaz, you will never change... beautiful story but donno why tears are rolling down 😭

Originally posted by: shalini_s

Jaz... u made me cry... especially when I read Geet's last letter.. even though knowing what could've happened.. i had to wait for a couple of minutes to write this... standing ovation Jaz...