I am happy I came across your index just to check if u have written something new or not. I am back on India forums after a long time. Unfortunately it's an end of my journey here on IF. But happy to share my some last visits with u.
As I have previously commented ( in my old account ID)I love your work as it is always different and unique in content and short and sweet. I love it.
Coming to this fiction, I liked it too. Earlier I was wondering if Khushi is married to someone else but the way story progressed everything came into light. The concept was simple and yet refreshing to read.
Just recently I laughed at another arshi fiction written on arshi only but khushi has moved on with another man in it. Being an ardent fan of arshi I want to see arshi together and I am happy you gave us a happy ending. But I am not obsessed to see arshi together always .
Here , though the story is finished I still feel it's incomplete. I have never been able to read arshi fiction casually and I always feel each and every word author wrote on my dear couple.
After reading it , the reason why I feel incomplete is as many others pointed clearly is about Lavanya. Would ASR have realized his love for Khushi when Lavanya was still in his life? What would have happened then?? If asked I am sure he wouldn't have realized it in Lavanya's presence in his life. It just because Lavanya cheated him he came to reality otherwise as deeply in love with her he would have never thought about Khushi and his deeds. Their love would have any sense if only Lavanya's presence won't make any difference to them.
Another thing I have always told u is that I am little hesitant to like the ways you portray khushi in most of your fictions. Because honestly I feel those versions are mostly outdated now , even in our country in rural areas also it's difficult to find pure traditional desi girls. I don't think being traditional is bad or orthodoxy but it should come with wisdom. Khushi lacks that. For me its very tough to accept her. And I clearly didn't like the way she asked ASR to love her. Love isn't begging or pleadings or demanding, u know!! Any woman with self respect would want her man to love her by spontaneously. Arnav did it but I didn't feel it was enough to heal her wounds.
I also hated khushi for agreeing to remarry which in real life is next to impossible !! Most of the times khushi is a mix of confusion as u said there are always two coins. Two years when asr was happy with LA , khushi pinned for him . So obviously his punishment is not enough but the way u ended this story where khushi says "I am not as heartless as u are arnavji" won my heart. Hat's off to you for that!!
Loving someone unconditionally should be our strength and not a weakness. There are many instances where I didn't like Khushi being too traditional, submissive and also in those cases where she was an open book not able to hide her feelings.
I am not fan of love forever or unconditional love etc Themes. And mostly I wish things are realistic and practical. First it was hard for me to accept that khushi still loves such man even after divorce. It doesn't happen in reality mostly. Sensible people do move on. I am sure any practical girl in today's world will choose her self respect more than her physical attraction and love for the man . It's just my view.
It was a fantastic story but surely I would have loved to see ASR making all efforts possible to win khushi back and deserve her . But he got her easily.
Khushi should learn to say no , it gives strength to a person.
My one suggestion to u which I already gave u earlier also is please write a different version of Khushi who is today's girl , modern ( not western) , practical, strong, independent , ambitious and have her own dreams in life and live on her own terms, feel from heart but lives with head. It doesn't matter wha
t u write I will happily take whatever u write. It's just a request otherwise all your work is appreciated from me.
Edited by ItsmeAditi - 8 years ago
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