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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: --Ta_Sha--

Hey as said i m here at my night reading and commenting on ur Work
Part 1
I like the dream 😳
They in each other embrace awww
Then sharon wanting him back n thinking of advice was cute
I like the gifts she got
N swayam lol he was funny he got on the table 🤣
Sharon said to taani that she can call her bhabhu thats so sweet 😃
Loved it
N swayam knew it was from sharon
Majnu knows everything about his siren 😳
She cleaned her room like future wife 😉
Now going to read next part
Liked this one as usual 😊

Hey my dearest sister you need not be sorry you're forgiven as always..🤗.
Do actually need to express in words how I love your comments.. They make my day really angel love you.. Thank you for appreciating my work and yess I'll be posting sharon's POV cz a few people requested me for it so smile and spread cheers like you do always..🤗.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Firstly I'm sooo sorry Kashy di 😔 i took so long to actually read this but i have an excuse jo aapne already suna 😛

Part 1 - Awww... that's all I can say for this chapter 😉 Sharon's dream in the beginning was the cutest thing ever! And then when she tells Taani to call her Sharon Babhi 😳 and i loved the description of Sharon's hair, makeup and outfit when she's getting ready to see Swayam... Swayam's point of view was my favourite as usual...it was so cute and adorable and mushy... I just wish that this had actually happened on the show instead. Of course my favourite character, Vicky, had a pretty awesome part too with Nil and the teasing 😆

Part 2 - ummm WOW!! The starting where Swayam was describing Sharon... ☺️ this was me to whole time seriously! They were such beautiful thoughts and words and I don't know how you did it but the whole paragraph came together so beautifully. Sharon's confession was amazing... It said everything that the Sharon on the show needs to say to Swayam! And she said she LOVES Swayam and proposed!!! I swear my cheeks are going to get damaged from me smiling so much 😆 And then came the KISSING part!! Which was the BEST thing I have ever read! I won't comment too much on it otherwise I might start freaking out again 😛

So finally after reading all of that i have come to the conclusion that you my dearest di are the BEST writer in the world!! i don't know why you were so scared of writing because clearly you are incredibly talented and amazing at it! Now i just hope that you continue to write more and always remember your little sis who encouraged to write 😉

love you di,
Rae ❤️
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: u-me-aur-D3

Firstly I'm sooo sorry Kashy di 😔 i took so long to actually read this but i have an excuse jo aapne already suna 😛


Part 1 - Awww... that's all I can say for this chapter 😉 Sharon's dream in the beginning was the cutest thing ever! And then when she tells Taani to call her Sharon Babhi 😳 and i loved the description of Sharon's hair, makeup and outfit when she's getting ready to see Swayam... Swayam's point of view was my favourite as usual...it was so cute and adorable and mushy... I just wish that this had actually happened on the show instead. Of course my favourite character, Vicky, had a pretty awesome part too with Nil and the teasing 😆

Part 2 - ummm WOW!! The starting where Swayam was describing Sharon...☺️this was me to whole time seriously! They were such beautiful thoughts and words and I don't know how you did it but the whole paragraph came together so beautifully. Sharon's confession was amazing... It said everything that the Sharon on the show needs to say to Swayam! And she said she LOVES Swayam and proposed!!! I swear my cheeks are going to get damaged from me smiling so much 😆 And then came the KISSING part!! Which was the BEST thing I have ever read! I won't comment too much on it otherwise I might start freaking out again 😛

So finally after reading all of that i have come to the conclusion that you my dearest di are the BEST writer in the world!! i don't know why you were so scared of writing because clearly you are incredibly talented and amazing at it! Now i just hope that you continue to write more and always remember your little sis who encouraged to write 😉

love you di,
Rae ❤️

Awww my sweet lil sister you dunno how much you're comment made me happy..🤗. Ofcourse I'll never forget the encouragement you gave me..😊
I'm glad you liked sharon's this was something I had imagined on her..😃. Wow best writer hehehe thank you nugget love you and ur the bestest lil sister I could ask for..😳. I'm glad you liked my write up there is one more lined up will pm you the link when its ready.
Love,
Kashy di..❤️.
P.S- that's the longest comment I have received on my work thank you again rae..😊.
Edited by sweet16cash - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#64
Well on the request of my dear friend shilpa I'm posting Sharon's version of part 2 of this OS. Hope you all like it plzzz drop in your comments and lemme know how you'll liked it..😊-
Part 3
Sharon's POV
I saw him open the door & stand there with an expression oscillating between awe and shock. I mentally patted my back looking at him feeling my plan work. However, my happiness turned to anxiety as I got no response from him. He stood there looking at me from top to bottom which only made me blush more bringing a reddish tint to my cheek. If his gaze alone had that effect on me I would have no control on myself when I would be in proximity with him.
Maybe I had judged his expressions wrong? Maybe he has'nt liked my surprise? Maybe he isn't happy seeing me here?. That thought disappointed me too much nevertheless I asked him," Won't you say something swayam, don't you like it"?.
He replied without skipping a beat,"No sharon I loved it its beautiful. You look ravishing today. Bahut khoobsurat lag rahi ho tum aaj." I blushed beetroot red on getting a compliment from him. Now is the time to make it up to him I realised and mustering my courage up I said,"I love you swayam truly madly and deeply. You lived upto your promise. You made me fall in love with you and with the same intensity. These days without you were hard to spend, I craved for your love & care every living moment wanting to get back to us but my diva ego & attitude stopped me from doing so. I was back to being the calculative person that I was before you came along.
I hid my feelings behind a mask of anger & arrogance again thinking you would make it up to me like always completely forgetting in my selfishness-"
"No sharon you aren't selfish" swayam said.
Nevertheless I continued," Don't stop me swayam let me complete and also its a basic custom to never interrupt Sharon Raiprakash when she talks. I forgot in my selfishness that you are human too with a heart that beats and feels hurt when hurted. I signed the contract in a fit of anger because you would'nt talk to me, I was outside your home all night waiting for you to come home so that we could clear all the misunderstandings between us and you did'nt turn up which made me sick with worry and when you did come home I poured out all my frustration and worries in the form of anger. Yet again I lost my temper when you came home to patch up and clear the mess that was created & this fiasco was created. I am very very very sorry baby I feel extremely guilty of my behaviour with you. Forgive me my love. And come back to me. Life is void and empty without you & your love it feels meaningless to live if you aren't there swayam. I don't like it at all when we are "I" and "You" it feels heavenly when Sharon and Swayam are "SWARON".
Then I did something which I as Sharon Raiprakash would have never have done but today the person here is Swayam's Sharon and not the diva. I went down on my knees & proposed him," Will you Swayam Shekhawat take me Sharon Raiprakash as your girlfriend for a lifetime swearing to tackle me in my siren mode and bear with all my silly tantrums?". On hearing my proposal swayam's eyes increased to the size of buttons and I mentally smiled seeing his reaction to my proposal. He stood there shell shocked. I knew he would react like that and I was enjoying seeing him react like that. I was tired of being surprised by him it was always good to surprise him once in a while was'nt it?
A few seconds passed & he stood there thinking, contemplating and I patiently waited for his answer. Suddenly coming out his shocked self he dropped down on his knees in front of me, cupping my face in his palms he spoke,"Ohhh sharon, I love you, always have, always will. I can't believe you did all this just to get me back in your life. My shy & demure Sharon went out of the way to profess her love for me and I loved it. I just looked at him while he spoke taking in the depth and the meaning of his words.
He held me by my shoulders as we both stood up, looking into my eyes he said the words I had been dying to hear with utmost sincerity & devotion,"I love you Sharon and my love for you has only increased with time.. You make me feel complete sharon." Saying this he took me in the tightest hug swirling me around making me laugh in joy at the pleasure of being in his arms. Pulling out of the hug he looked at me for a second and his eyes held an expression like he has won a precious award in the form of me, Whereas for me it was the other way round I felt like I had struck a million dollar getting a lover like swayam he loved me like no one did and I knew no one ever would in the near future.. He again pulled me in for a hug after satisfying himself that all this was for real.
I basked in the happiness & completeness of the moment when he again hugged me. He was back, my life was back. My Swayam was back in my life. I never wanted this moment to ever end. I wished for it to last for an eternity. He moved towards the bed pulling me down along with him and we sat down in the same way like we had in my dream. Heaving a sigh I told him," Pata hai swayam aaj maine dream dekha tha where we both sat close to each other like this. I am so happy that my dream turned to reality."
He smiled & kissed my hair resting his head on mine he asked,"Ye sab tumne kiya kaise?? I was'nt there at home aur taani bahar gayi thi so tum andar kaise aayi?" I gave him a shock of his life with my reply saying," Pipe chadke andar aayi main tumahre room main swayam. Tumhare pyaar ne pipes bhi chadvaye mujhse" & I could'nt contain myself from laughing when I remembered that moment it seemed downright hillarious to me at the moment. He turned me around with a shocked expression on his face & asked,"Sach?? Tum pipe chadke aayi sharon??" & laughed harder then before looking at his curely shocked expression.
"Ofcourse chadke aayi how on earth am I inside the room then bolo??"
" Awww meri siren Sharon aaj tumne prove kar diya ke tum majnu ki laila ho kyunki pipe chadke andar aane ka copyright sirf mere paas hai" and we both burst out laughing at that statement of his.
"Tum pagal ho Swayam bilkul crazy".
"Haan totally crazy for you. Pagal hoon tumhaare liye tumhare pyaar main. Kuch bhi kar sakta hoon tumhari ek hasi ke liye". I could again see his undying passion& love for me being reflected in his eyes when he said this to me. My eyes welled up with silent tears and I placed my palm on his cheek and he placed a soft and gentle kiss on my palm and closed his eyes feeling content. In that moment I took in every aspect of his handsome face, his closed eyes, his strong jaw, perfect nose, his proud forehead and his kissable lips. He looked at me as I admired the love of my life and then he leaned in never breaking eye contact and gently placed his lips on mine. I closed my eyes and arched my neck up the moment his lips touched mine.
PURE is an understatement to describe the kiss we shared. It was beautiful , slow & gentle . I could feel his love & yearning for me as I poured out my love & yearning for him. His lips moving slowly & steadily against mine drove me over oblivion. We parted with our foreheads yet touching breathing heavily for a minute or so.
"I loved your gifts sharon, the roses, the chocolates & specially the pocketwatch it was beautiful" he said with my favourite smile playing on his lips. It would melt me withing seconds and make me blush, there was a certain naughtiness hidden in that smile.
"Wow Sharon blushing so much?? Waah beta swayam you made the diva, the Sharon Raiprakash blush?" and patted his back with a proud expression on his face. I blushed to the deepest shade of red hearing him say this. He was clearly enjoying at my expense, highly amused seeing me blush so much at his words.
"Swayam" I chided him gently with a shy smile on my lips. He leaned in kissed my red hot cheeks and moved down leaving a trail of his touch all over my jaw, my neck and my shoulder. I felt my skin burn where his lips had caressed me. However it was a pleasant feeling I welcomed the burn with joy & pleasure. The moment his lips had touch my skin I started loosing touch with my senses my body loosening up & my heart started beating at a crazy pace. I leaned back further on his chest for support & ruffled his hair running my fingers through them feeling their softness. I personally loved them they were an added perk to his already charming personality.
"I love your hair Swayam and you look cuter when they are all messed up. I love running my fingers through them"
"Achha?? So let's do something to mess them up further" he said with naughtiness glinting in his eyes.
" Nahi bilkul nahi" I said and laughed with glee running away and he ran behind me chasing me all over his home and in his room. We ran around the room like toddlers, throwing pillows at each other having a gala time in each others company laughing like complete nutcases. He finally caught hold off me by my wrist and we both fell down on the bed with a thud. I was lying down on the bed with Swayam's body plastered against mine. He lay flat over me his weight pushing me down on the bed. He again placed his lips on mine kissing me passionately and I responded back with equal fervour as I bodies practically moulded into one. He parted away from me aand putting his arms around me he pulled me closer while I rested my head on his chest and clutched his shirt crumpling it my grip. I felt his lips on my hair as I held me tighter and we both drifted to sleep in each others arms content and satisfied at being back to us again.

Woah I'm finally done posting part 3. Hope you'll like it. Do hit the like tab and drop in your precious comments they truly make my day I love sifting through them.. Thank you..😊.
Love,
Kashmi..🤗
Edited by sweet16cash - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#65
Cash yaaar u nailed it🤗
Tu itni awesome writer hai...
Wid every write up of urs ur getting better n better..
Am loving ur style of writing..
Ur write up has its own charm n feel gud atmosphere..
It makes me smile n smile like nutcase😆😆
Dis was a fab update..
Starting off wid sharon ka pov n den d part wen she spoke her heart out to swayam n proposed to him dat was bestest part for me..
Her feelings so purely so simply penned down..
Swayams shocked expressions on sharons proposal very cute i had similar expressions on dat statement😆
Uske baad swaron convo very very brilliantly written..
N d kiss ahem ahem it was ☺️☺️
Completely totally in love wid dis one...
👏👏👏

Bahot chota comment hai na😉😆
Mein speechless hun abhi aur pata nahi kya likhu
Edited by Shilpa_SwaRon - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#66
My My marr gaye ye kaunse century main unres hoga tu hi jaane palak..😆 😛. Jaldi unres kar liyo par plzzz..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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res 😊
sorry i guess i have not read dis SS before...will read all 3 parts and den comment together... 😊

finally i finished reading all three parts... 😃

kashmi all d aprts were simply amazing...i loved it... 😊

Sharon all tactics to get swayam back...bechari pipe pe bhi chad gayi...sachme pyaar mai kya kaya karna padta hai... 😆

den her gifts..chocolates and red roses...and swaym was not willing to share it with anyone dat was cute... 😳

sharon all efforts to decorate d house...trying her best to make him feel special...was defined perfectly... 😃

and den swaym reaction on dis...becharene expect nahi kiya sharon uske liye ye sabh kargi... 😳

den finally der patch up... 😃 swayam kafi naughty hai.. 😳

all together it was sweet...cute and romantic.. 😳
Edited by sweetdivya - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#68

Originally posted by: Shilpa_SwaRon

Cash yaaar u nailed it🤗

Tu itni awesome writer hai...
Wid every write up of urs ur getting better n better..
Am loving ur style of writing..
Ur write up has its own charm n feel gud atmosphere..
It makes me smile n smile like nutcase😆😆
Dis was a fab update..
Starting off wid sharon ka pov n den d part wen she spoke her heart out to swayam n proposed to him dat was bestest part for me..
Her feelings so purely so simply penned down..
Swayams shocked expressions on sharons proposal very cute i had similar expressions on dat statement😆
Uske baad swaron convo very very brilliantly written..
N d kiss ahem ahem it was☺️☺️
Completely totally in love wid dis one...
👏👏👏

Bahot chota comment hai na😉😆
Mein speechless hun abhi aur pata nahi kya likhu

Whoaa so much of appreciation my cheeks are as red as sharon's were..😛.
Thanx sooo much shilpu I'm glad you liked this part and you like my way of writing..😊.
For the record you gave me an analysis like you gave in the previous OS which you had told me to write for you..😆.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweet16cash

Whoaa so much of appreciation my cheeks are as red as sharon's were..😛.
Thanx sooo much shilpu I'm glad you liked this part and you like my way of writing..😊.
For the record you gave me an analysis like you gave in the previous OS which you had told me to write for you..😆.



😆 ya ya humara deal ha na. .
Tum mujhe os do mein tumhe analysis n big comment dongi 😉 🤣
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow girl!!!
You nailed it 👏
The way you penned down each and every emotion was just marvellous
I'm so so so impressed because with each update and write-up you turning into a great writer
Way to go Kashmi 👍🏼
You should write more often ya 😃

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