ARHI SS 'LOVE AGAIN' PART-4 Page 26, 25/10 - Page 3

Originally posted by: Nexus_13

OMG! Res!

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I am happy that you are writing C4S! Such awesome way of telling a story...👏

Here we have Arnav who does not like one bit that Khushi is away from him. He feels that he is lonely without her, Khushi and Khushi alone can bring back the colours in his life...

And there is a time gap between the payal incident and their meeting at the mall... What happened in these 2 years? Is Arnav ready to let go his ego to have his share of happiness back in his life?

I gather that Jadoo-hai-nasha-hai never happened in this story... Correct me if I am wrong...

Is this SS going to give us a redemption track which we never got in the show?

Why oh why did u stop the chapter there? Ab agle Sunday that wait karna padega... Hmph...!

Did I tell you that the banner is too good!? Well, it is!😃

Your pm was a surprise to me, a pleasant one at that... Looking forward to more stories on IF!❤️

Originally posted by: IPK007

OMG..that was such a beautiful surprise, Geeta!!!

I remember telling you that you should write... 😃

More later..

I had always known that you would make a very good writer because of the kind of insightful, wonderfully expressed comments you write on stories. And I was not wrong :)) I loved the title of your story. 'Love Again'...so many lovely possibilities. The banner is so whimsically beautiful and I agree with Sami, what is missing from it is your name😊 I loved the first chapter. It was all about Arnav, his thoughts, his emotions, his conflicts, his mental barriers and you wrote it all wonderfully and in a way that was so easy to read too. Your prose has a very nice flow to it and it's hard to believe that it's your first attempt at writing a story. It was absolutely brilliant :)

You chose my two favorite scenes from the show...the Diwali almost kiss and the Mandir separation one and I really liked the way you presented them with your own little changes, which actually I liked a lot. Especially the little push, Khushi gave to him...!!

I can't wait to see what happens next and I'm sure it's going to a very enjoyable ride.

Happy writing,dear 🤗

Originally posted by: ssyahoo

Sami

Awesome surprise 😊

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First of all great banner, but you should add your name to it as well!

Your first chapter was great. I was intrigued to see your take on Diwali night as he still has her payal. Diwali night was such a turning out point, in more ways than one.

Arnav as usual, says before he speaks and then later regrets. He controls his destiny, so he always boasted.

I loved your reference to red and how he associates his favorite color to Khushi, even in the smallest ways. Now that they have seperated I cant help but wonder what has events have taken place in Khushi's life.

One of my favorite spots in the show was the poolside, and I love how you mentioned that the one place where he always seemed to find solace, now is looming with emptiness.

I am looking forward to the first meeting.. Congratulations on your first story and looking forward to this being the first of many 😊

Originally posted by: InvisibleSmile

You know I think I remember reading your comment for the first time and thought this one can write. I don't know if I suggested you should but I have always thought you could. I was elated to find out you wrote a story and if you are reviving the old arnav and khushi again I am all ready for it.

Coming to the update, the start was nice, you took us back to the real IPK. Of course those moments also made me realize how much I miss them. The great irony of life is that repentance always comes a little too late and we are left with the pieces in the aftermath trying to glue them back together. Similar is the state of Arnav Singh Raizada, the words he uttered in complete ignorance have come back to haunt him. Words are very a powerful thing; they perceive how we see others and how others see us. They can either become us or we become them. In terms of Arnav...he let his anger get the best of him and caged himself in. Whereas Khushi had to deal with the backlash of what our broody hero could not handle, which is the fact that he is affected by her presence.

The payal scene for me was a step that brought them more closer compared to the almost-kiss. There was sincerity and affection in that scene. The silence said everything without even saying it. I was happy to see you re-create that but in alter setting that was still filled with an impact.

I wonder where this tale of two halves of a whole would lead. Intrigued to find out where they go from here. What has Khushi's life been like? There is much to tell and I will patiently wait for you to update!

Shiza,

Anything I say cannot match the support you been.

Thanks for the insightful comment. Agreed, Arnav always let his words take lead and took things for granted. Because he never saw things from others perspective and may be time for people to see things from his perspective.

He still has her payal and it's probably the reason why he is having hard time forgetting her. This is definitely a tale of two "halves" and time for Arnav to find his better halve.

Originally posted by: massu91

nyc start

Originally posted by: Anarocksick

Reserved. 😃

I'll come back with a comment soon!

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Oh my god, Geeta! Is it your first attempt at writing fiction/ fan-fic? 'coz if it is then you've got some real talent.

There are times (a lot of times) when I deeply dislike the way people rewrite/use original IPK classic scenes. This, however, was not one of those times. And how I'm glad.

You know, these two scenes are few of my very favourite from the show. They are almost sacred to me. And very precious.

Also, I love separations. Honestly, I feel all the greatest and epic love stories have had separation in them at some point. Because what's love without realization of the other's absence and how it pains to be away from the object of one's affection. I say affection because Arnav clearly seems to have accepted that she indeed meant something to him, and her colourful presence clearly made a difference in his dull life. With her gone, he was back to blacks and greys.

I liked how you made us go through his mind and thoughts, and how he went about his everyday life with a void constantly existing. It couldn't be helped of course. His ego must be a big one, but I love my ASR like that. (Reminds of Beyonce's and Kanye West's song. He's got a big ego... such a huge ego... la la la...).

Loved the flow of your writing. And I really can't wait to find out what happens next and her reaction to him.

P.S- The banner is cute!

Ana meri Jaana,

Thanks for such generous words.

Those scenes are my favorite too and was very nervous when writing it as I didn't want to spoil it but at the same time use it "as-is". Those scenes were suggested by the friend who gave me the concept.

I do not want to re-write IPK but want to look at other possibilities from it.

Affection it is! What Arnav feels it is really love? It can be attraction too!! Will see!! I wish there were more colors other than bright ones or blacks or greys.

I LOVE ASR too Ana!! And I promise this is his story.

I had to make a good banner, I wasn't sure about the story. Tho kuch tho achha hona chahiye naa!!

Originally posted by: shree10

Wow Geeta !
This wa squite amazing! What a pleasant surprise. Liked ur twist to the events in the show.

Pl keep Khushi unmarried for Laat Governor!!

Originally posted by: 1chilly

Geeta, main kaan pakad ke maafi maaangti hoon.

I'm so sorry I went off and didn't read what you wrote on the CC.

Just came back and saw it.

Now I want PMs when you update please.

This was a wonderful surprise.

Loved reading it.

Interesting start.

The two are seperated and now meet again after two years.

Are Aakash and Payal married?

And is Shyam part of the story?

Is Anjali married to Shyam?

Waiting for the next part.

Charu,

Thank for your comment and please don't be sorry dear.

I am glad you liked it. To answer your questions, well there is not much focus on any other characters. They make an appearance here and there, that's about it. This is the story of Arnav Singh Raizada.

Will definitely PM.

Originally posted by: Nidsubh007

Res

Will read & update my comment soon

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Geeta!!! Wow!!! OMG!!!

I'm just a tad bit excited. What a twist to the whole tale. Your Arnav & Khushi actually separate after the Mandir confrontation! Brilliant.

I'm very happy you have decided to wrote. Your first chapter has reeled me in and I'm so looking forward to the next part.

Also loved your twist to the almost Diwali kiss and payal scene.

Great job!

Originally posted by: lara3110

That was a great start and it brought back memories of a touching moment in the lives of Arnav and Khushi. I am happy that you are writing this SS based on IPK.

Just loved the way you depicted Arnav's innermost thoughts and his regret of what he said to Khushi on that day.

Looking forward to the next update on 6th Oct.

Great style of writing. Good Luck👏👍🏼

Hi Lara,

Thanks for taking time to read my story and comment too.

Well for now all I can say is, I am exploring some possibilities based on IPK and trying to see differently.

There is more to what we see right now. I hope you will continue to read this story.