ARHI SS 'LOVE AGAIN' PART-4 Page 26, 25/10

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shree10

@shree10

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

Wow Geeta !
This wa squite amazing! What a pleasant surprise. Liked ur twist to the events in the show.

Pl keep Khushi unmarried for Laat Governor!!

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1chilly

@1chilly

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Geeta, main kaan pakad ke maafi maaangti hoon.

I'm so sorry I went off and didn't read what you wrote on the CC.

Just came back and saw it.

Now I want PMs when you update please.

This was a wonderful surprise.

Loved reading it.

Interesting start.

The two are seperated and now meet again after two years.

Are Aakash and Payal married?

And is Shyam part of the story?

Is Anjali married to Shyam?

Waiting for the next part.

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Nidsubh007

@Nidsubh007

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+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Res

Will read & update my comment soon

Edit:

Geeta!!! Wow!!! OMG!!!

I'm just a tad bit excited. What a twist to the whole tale. Your Arnav & Khushi actually separate after the Mandir confrontation! Brilliant.

I'm very happy you have decided to wrote. Your first chapter has reeled me in and I'm so looking forward to the next part.

Also loved your twist to the almost Diwali kiss and payal scene.

Great job!

Edited by Nidsubh007 - 11 years ago

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lara3110

@lara3110

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

That was a great start and it brought back memories of a touching moment in the lives of Arnav and Khushi. I am happy that you are writing this SS based on IPK.

Just loved the way you depicted Arnav's innermost thoughts and his regret of what he said to Khushi on that day.

Looking forward to the next update on 6th Oct.

Great style of writing. Good Luck👏👍🏼

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Sasha

@sarunsashasingh

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+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Really really nice n interesting.

So after how many years is Arnav seeing Khushi??

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A, Anon, Nony, Anamika :)

@Anony_mous

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

First of all, let me congratulate you on your first writing endeavor :)

Coming to the story, I am glad that you skipped the messy parts of the show and branched out to something different altogether. No contract marriage and no sleeping by the poolside and no talking to the goat and no being the punching bag for everyone for poor Khushi here. I am guessing Khushi will be a strong character here, right?

Does that mean that Shyam situation is still unresolved? Or there is no Shyam in this story? Payal-Akash story, is it a part of this plot?

The feel and flow of the chapter is awesome. The basic story line is very strong. And you are treating it with utmost finnese. I am sure you will mold this piece into a great read for all us Arshi readers out there.

Waiting for the story to unfold :)

Edited by Anony_mous - 11 years ago

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@-Aria-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Edit -

"Naa tumhari shakal dekhni hai, Naa tumse baat karni hai, aur yeh definitely mere haath mein hai."

"aaj ke baad humhe bhi aapse kabhi nahi milna hai, Mr. Arnav Singh Raizada."

~~~

Of heart breaks...and lonely nights

"aur aap bhi ek baat yaad rakna ek din aisa aayega jab aapko pata chalega ki aapne apne liye jo kuch bhi likha hai who devi maiyya ne aapka haath pakdke kudh likhavaya hai aur jis din aapko yeah pata chalega uss din hum wahan nahi honge".

And then the light slowly fades into the darkness...oblivion... and all the colors fade away...

After few days he had Aman enquire about her whereabouts and what he found out further increased his suffering. She had moved to Lucknow with her family. He kept hoping that one day she will show up at his house, smiling in her colorful churidaars. With each passing day, month and year that hope reluctantly faded away.

and we are left with memories... and longing...and a list of what could have been...

...and empty seats...where you should have been...

Until that fateful day when that voice..like sweet music to my soul...swept me away...

Khushi... is that you?

... and just like that...light spread through the darkest nooks bringing to life the hope that had long died.

But I've written my own fate since I write destinies or so I've claimed... being happy is not part of it.

"Black beads around her neck; is that not the sign of marriage? She is married!!"

and its back to where it started from...

Khushi says...

I know what you are thinking... Arnavji, your eyes speak too, you know. And still you choose to think the worst of me... (ok so a part of me wants this desperately. in my view, ak belong to each other so i'm gonna hang on to that hope)

You never trusted me earlier, why would you now?

~~~

"Falling of Arnav Singh Raizada",

when you fall...you get to know yourself that much more...

~~~

I love, absolutely loved how you've incorporated the dialogues. and the setting too. i hope this crazy comment makes a tiny bit sense too😆 and not just appear as some random collection of pictures courtesy google uncle😆... i still want to hold on to that hope that ak will be together in the end. and with that now, i go on to read chapter 4.

lovely!

Edited by -Aria- - 11 years ago

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RizArshi

@RizArshi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#18

It was beautifully written. Loved it :)

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IPK007

@IPK007

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Posted: 11 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: IPK007
OMG..that was such a beautiful surprise, Geeta!!!

I remember telling you that you should write... 😃

More later..

I had always known that you would make a very good writer because of the kind of insightful, wonderfully expressed comments you write on stories. And I was not wrong :)) I loved the title of your story. 'Love Again'...so many lovely possibilities. The banner is so whimsically beautiful and I agree with Sami, what is missing from it is your name😊 I loved the first chapter. It was all about Arnav, his thoughts, his emotions, his conflicts, his mental barriers and you wrote it all wonderfully and in a way that was so easy to read too. Your prose has a very nice flow to it and it's hard to believe that it's your first attempt at writing a story. It was absolutely brilliant :)

You chose my two favorite scenes from the show...the Diwali almost kiss and the Mandir separation one and I really liked the way you presented them with your own little changes, which actually I liked a lot. Especially the little push, Khushi gave to him...!!

I can't wait to see what happens next and I'm sure it's going to a very enjoyable ride.

Happy writing,dear 🤗