SwaRon OS : Separations

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Hey guys I am back with another OS! I wanted to write one since a few days and I got this random idea in my head. So i just penned something down. I know the ending's really abrupt, I suck at ending stories. And some parts may not seemed connected. Sorry This was written in a hurry.

Please ignore the spelling mistakes or grammatical errors. I haven't read it.

This one's for you Sahiba😳
You know why girly


His left hand clasped her hand while his right hand was on the mouse. He moved the mouse and clicked the refresh button on the webpage

Inbox(O) it read. Just like it had earlier when he had refreshed it.

They had been told the acceptance/rejection letter would be sent at 5 pm Indian Standard Time. He looked at the clock ticking slowly above the computer.

4:59

Sharon's eyes were still closed. She was breathing heavily and her hands were trembling. She was muttering a prayer inaudibly. Swayam looked at her face and squeezed her hand, silently reassuring her that everything would be fine.

"Ladies first". He had told her when they were debating as to who would check their mail first at 5 pm. Plus, Sharon had been very hyper since the last 24 hours so he didn't want her to wait any longer. He was so sure the two of them would be together in this as well.

After all, they had received nearly equal marks in their GMAT exam. Of course, their entrance essays were more important but he had this strange feeling they would both be accepted.

Of course, they would.

5 pm and 27 seconds.

Swayam decided to refresh Sharon's inbox webpage again.

Inbox(1)

MBA Programme

It showed.

"Sharon, Sharon!" Swayam shouted loudly, he was overexcited. "You've got a mail from them!!"

Sharon opened her eyes and stared at the scene. She removed her hand from Swayam's clasp and frantically grabbed the mouse.

In her hurry to click on the email, she ended up clicking on the one below. Finally she managed to open the mail.

The two of them peered at the screen.

" Dear Student,

Thank you for sending your application in for the MBA programme at Standford University. We appreciate the time you took to apply. We have finalized our selection process and reviewed your application. While your qualifications were commendable, we could not include you in the programme. We hope you receive success in you life.

Sincerely,

Stanford University."

The two of them were numb. Sharon wasn't moving. Her eyes were still fixed on the screen. Swayam broke out of the daze and looked worriedly at Sharon.

"There must be some mistake Sharon. I am sure of it. Let's reply back asking them if they have sent the right mail. It has to be a mistake ."He said hastily, reaching over to close the webpage.

There was nothing he could say or do. No amount of words would be able to console her this time.

As soon as Swayam closed the webpage, Sharon burst into tears. Swayam reached over to her and cupped her face in his hands. But he didn't try to stop the tears.It was the only way she could let out her disappointment and sadness and he didn't want to stop her.

She kept crying like that, for more than 5 minutes until, there was just a runny nose left. She looked up at Swayam who was looking at her calmly, his hands still cupping her beautiful face. She removed his hands from her face, smiled faintly and nodded her hand sadly.

Suddenlt, she looked at him straight in the eye.

"Swayam! You haven't checked your mail yet!" She screeched loudly." It's almost 5:10 now!!"

She shoved him hard.

"What's the point, Sharon. If you weren't selected, why do you think I will be accepted?" He said in a calm,frank way.

"What do you mean Swayam! Everyone knows you had better prospects of getting in because of the double internship you did!" She said exasperatedly. All her disappointment seemed to have vanished into thin air. Now, she was angry.

"But sweetheart, who cares? Remember we had decided we would go only if BOTH of us got selected. So it makes no sense in seeing it." He said, looking into her eyes and pressing her hands softly.

She pushed his hand away harshly." Shut up, Swayam. If you aren't going to check it, atleast let me check it!" She said. She quickly opened up Swayam's email inbox. He had received an email.

It read

" Dear Student,

Thank you for sending your application in for the MBA programme at Standford University. We appreciate the time you took to apply. We have finalized our selection process and reviewed your application. Your qualificatiosn are excellent and we would be gald to include you in our MBA programme. Enclosed below is the Prospectus 2013 and the details regarding your VISA. Thank you.

Sincerely,

Stanford University."

Swayam was pretending to be busy looking out of the window, just to show his uninterest. On the inside. However his stomach was paining out of anxiety and nervousness.He so desperately wished to be selected. But he couldn't leave his Sharon. No.never.

"Swayam!" Sharon jumped up from her seat and hugged Swayam tightly." You got selected!"

Swayam could smell her beautiful scent as she hugged him. Even though they had been together for two years now, he still felt a warm current rush through his body when she said his name or even touched him.

"Sharon" He spoke into her hair."It doesn't make a difference." He said. Of course, it made a lot of difference to him. But Sharon was not to know that.

Sharon could make out the heaviness in his voice as he spoke. Even though he tried to disguise it, his disappointment was quite clear.

She stroked his slowly, still in his arms. "I know it does Swayam. And believe me, I would be the happiest person on this Earth if you went to Stanford! I mean come on..Stanford!!" She said, trying to be excited for him. She so didn't want him to go but she wanted him to live his dream.

"You have worked so hard for this! Remember when we had study dates! You used to tell me stuff I wasn't even aware of! You have to go Swayam!" She continued.

"Not without you Sharon." He said.

Sharon moved away from him and smiled teasingly.

"You have to go. Our marriage prospects will increase if you do. You never know ,my dad may get impressed by you thanks to this. Coz, let's face it. That's all you have to be proud of." She said, giggling.

That was it. He began chasing her around the room. She pelted him with pillows lying on the sofa. Finally he managed to grab her and they both fell on the sofa, laughing.

"I'm not joking." She said." There are far better suitors lined up for me than you. You really should consider this. " She winked at him.

"Suitors huh? And who are these suitors exactly? Don't they know that Sharon Rai Prakash is mine?" He said as he pulled her closer to him. She kissed him softly on his cheek.

"Swayam, please you have to go to study at Stanford. Do you know what a rare opportunity that is! I will be fine here. I can go to the Indian School of Business anyway. Remember we sent them on-hold applications and they instantly accepted? Plus, I love Bangalore." She said, trying to hide her sadness.

" 2 years! You think I can be away from you for two years? Two days is too much and you're telling me two years!" He half-shouted.

"There's Skype, there's Facebook, there are phone calls. We'll video chat everyday ok? Don't you worry, sweetheart. You just concentrate on getting there."

Swayam kissed Sharon's hand. He was the world's luckiest man , really.

He got up from the sofa." I'll think about it ok? " He said. " I have to talk this out with my parents.Which reminds me." He cringed as he removed his phone from his pocket.

6 missed calls.

They were going to blow a fuse today.

Sharon laughed gave him a peck on the lips.

Swayam smiled at her. " Remember, Out of sight, out of mind." He said, half smiling at her.

He turned to go out. She taped his shoulder.

"Huh?" He said, surprised by her gesture.

" But, Distance also makes the heart grow fonder" She said, grinning wickedly.

Swayam smiled and walked out of the door.


If you liked the OS , please hit the like button and comment😊Thank you.


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Posted: 12 years ago
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this was an awesome OS. was sad because sharon didnt get in bu swayams entry was like a compensation for it. it was very well penned down. i just loved it.
Edited by swaron09 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Swthrt🤗
Awesome OS dear..it was a feel good OS ..simple ...relatable ...so true for the current generation...they aspire for somethings in life and they have to leave other important things behind to achieve that...loved the excitement u have shown ...beautifully penned swaron...a different aspect...swayam is generally the studious one but here sharon is also so serious...about life...lovely...loved the light moments u hv shown...
I'm not joking." She said." There are far better suitors lined up for me than you. You really should consider this. " She winked at him.

"Suitors huh? And who are these suitors exactly? Don't they know that Sharon Rai Prakash is mine?" He said as he pulled her closer to him. She kissed him softly on his cheek.

Awww.so cute ...pure love..the conculsion was beautiful...the confidence in their love...

Swayam smiled at her. " Remember, Out of sight, out of mind." He said, half smiling at her.

He turned to go out. She taped his shoulder.

"Huh?" He said, surprised by her gesture.

" But, Distance also makes the heart grow fonder" She said, grinning wickedly.

Lovely OS dear...keeep them coming...😳
ps...i am really sorry for being so late in commenting...😭
Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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First things first. YOU DO NOT SUCK AT ENDINGS. GET THAT STRAIGHT IN THAT CRAZY HEAD OF YOURS. :)

Now, you got me at that title itself. I knew i'll be loving this one. And then you double triple got me when i saw this dedication. Thank you SO very much for it, sweetheart. It means a lot :)
The topic you chose is what anyone their age undergoes, and you churned it out beautifully. You portrayed their anxiety, the typical stress and pressure that we have loaded upon ourselves at times like these, their doubts, their decisions, all while never breaking off from the bond of exquisite love- love that wasn't shown in the underlayer, but it was the upper-layer i'd say.

You've included SUCH wonderful moments there which,consciously or deceivingly, give us a peep into the strong bond constituted of only and only unadulterated love and care for each other. I say 'peep' because i dont think i'll be able to fathom the depths of this love. Its tooo deep a depth. :)

LOVE the part where Sharon is in despair and is broken that she didnt get selected and starts crying like a baby, and then her Swayam holds her face in his hands and just lets her be. He's just there holding her, that warm, strong reassurance that you need in times like these. Her own personal reassurance. :)
Their dilemmas were very realistically shown. You managed to pull off amazing light-hearted moments and smart dialogues in the tense situation that was for both of them, and that my lady, is COMMENDABLE. 🤗

In short, I absolutely LOVE this piece. You have that natural talent for story telling and you should realize that as well.

You are fabulous, congratulations on that. :)

Keep writing, keep believing.
Love you. :)
Edited by D3fication - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome blossom OS dear loved it...keep writing more and thnkx for the PM...⭐️
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Sweet one neeti...
thanks for the pm...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Unres..
U hv wrttn it...so it had to be fabulous..
I lvd it 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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it was amazing one dear .i loved it .i loved sharon CONVERSATION with swayam .
thanx for pm .please continue writing
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awww neeti it was a wonderful and a very innovative OS.⭐️
separations...loved the title n the concept!!😉

so,swayam who can't live without his sharon even 4 two days!!!!...has got selected for this one-time opportunity!!😃 awww love their bond more coz of this. 😳
eheheheh loved the parts where sharon teased him!😆
keep writing.

Edited by Satluvsd3 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Ok . . . .I actually dont know from where to initiate as this whole OS gathered me Sharply in Awe . . . I'm just thoroughly stunned by the constitution of the concept. . . it was so Delicately Sumptuous yet so realistically "near-at-hand" vibe originator . . . . Gosh , I really can sneak into the setting & live in the moments SwaRon went through . . . camp on the doorstep of Post graduation degree . . . . How Authentically Realistic . . . .👏

The inception bit with the Absolutely Flawless description just hooked me like a magnet . . the agitations & the unfathomable restlessness with the nail biting clumsy quietness of SwaRon was so Breathtakingly Penned that I was getting jitters within me as if I were there applying for admission at that prestigious University .. . . It was so Aesthetically sketched . . . .

And the Swayam's flow of perplexity coated with disoriented denial and Sharon's heart-touching stride of being all gleefully composed with approachable inner turbulence . . . . And exuberance of their immaculately unadulterated & unblemished eternal LOVE for each other . . . . Neeti, U just BANGED it ON . . . . .👏

I'm literally numb at this moment , trust me , this OS mesmerized me from the core of my heart as I seriously can foresee myself dwell in its ambiance . . .

And Neeti . . . . Girl, get a grip on ur Splendidly Sparking Writingstyle . . . U are stunning . . . . . I'm speechless . . . . Hats off . . . .👏

P.S.- The dedication part- Neeti, u just Tremendously justified the heavenly bonding of U & Sahiba by radiating sparks in this story and dedicating this Master Piece to Sahiba . . . . God bless this Heart-melting bonding between my sisters . . . . touchwood . . . .
Edited by MagicalShantanu - 12 years ago

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