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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ...navina...

Hi Andy😊 , hi navi😃

as per promise ... I didn't post 2 nd comment by Saturday. Sorry about that , but since u were not around ... I took advantage of that opportunity😉. ah!! navi, i dont have any problem see iam replying only now. so it makes it even 😆
Okay , now back to commenting on the update. It was Sooo lovely😳. really??
I loved how u described Uday's entry into the mansion , that was so well written👏. All those tiny flashes he was getting , and the familiarity of the place ... it seemed so real😃. Well done with portraying that so beautifully👍🏼. navi i had to take many days to write that part , but since i had a huge time gap i could write it well
Next was the "meeting" with Giriraj. To be honest Andy , I expected Giriraj to BLAST Uday for spending time with Unnati no i wont allow it to happen... but I'm glad I was wrong , instead we got a beautiful conversation between the 2 men😊. It was a nice touch ... of Giriraj insisting that Uday call him "uncle" instead of "maharaj"👍🏼 . I liked that point😃. giriraj is good here, afterall uday deserves a good family after all the tortures he had to undergo due to manyta
Unnati showing Uday around the mansion was also cute. 1 very interesting part was, when she was explaining the inscription on the sheath of the Royal Sword. I really loved that part😳. Of-course ... the photo of little Uday was the show-stealer. ahhh!So glad that Uday saw that picture and even realised that he has a similar scar. Also that he has some doubts about his Baba's explanation for the scar. Hope he asks about it and not sit and ponder in silence😕. unfortunately he will not get the time to ask his baba, and i doubt he will be ever able to find it from his baba
Lastly Avantika's reaction to having her son close by. Ufff what a scene , I could picture the entire thing and it gave me goose-bumps 😳. Her heart-beat increased and tears escaped from her shut eyes ... JUST BEAUTIFUL!!!! Really hoping that she comes out of the 16 year long coma soon😛. and you helped me telling me about how peoplle in coma recover , so we can share the credit
There , that brings u to the end of this comment. alll good things have to end na😭
3rd and last comment will be posted once u reply to this comment😉.ok i replied so its your turn

navi thanks sooo much for this lovely comment
i simply loved it
thank you navi
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Posted: 12 years ago
i will update soon
maybe after 2 weeks😃
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Posted: 12 years ago

Hi Andy 😊 , remember me? I am the person u wrote these 3 updates for 😆!!!!

Finally I'm commenting on the third part😉.
What can i say😕?? Update was wonderful 👍🏼.
Firstly ... we have to commend Jai's plan ... it was flawless😳. Manyata was bound to fall hard there!!! What was it she said ... she'll get on his good side , he'll start begging before her and then she'll "snap him like a piece of useless wood!" HAHHH!!! ... as soon as I read that , I knew how bad her plan was going to back-fire😈 .
Awww , poor Uday was scared to go to work , fearing humiliation from Manyata (for fooling her😉). As it is , he's worried about those visions about the palace and to top that he can't ask his Baba anything😕 ... he's in a difficult predicament😭!
I liked Manyata FAKE niceness😆. And apart from talking so sweetly , she gave him a raise😲 ... lucky guy😳!
I loved all the moments that they spent together ... be it the late night "WORK" they did together , or the lunch they enjoyed with each other or Manyata forcing down his sugar-less coffee😆 ... IT WAS ALL SOOO CUTE😳!!!
Now the part that made me cry😭 ... WHY DID UDAY HAVE TO OVER-HEAR MANYATA'S TALKS😡??? I had already pictured how their evening would go ... BUT U RUINED IT ANDY😡??? Couldn't he have found out about the challenge , the next morning? Huh Andy ?... I'm waiting for an answer!!!! And OMG , the slap😲 ... when it happened , I held my cheek in pain😒!
Now , Manyata's anger will return TEN-FOLD ... and I'm afraid for Uday.
Altogether ... it was a great update (all 3 of them).
I loved it lots ... even though it had a sad ending🤢.
Please update soon😊!
Sorry for the delay!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ...navina...

Hi Andy 😊 hi navi😛, remember me? no, what is your name?I am the person u wrote these 3 updates for 😆!!!! ah!!!😆 now i remember😆

Finally I'm commenting on the third part😉. ya finally😆
What can i say😕?? Update was wonderful 👍🏼. ah!! thats so sweet of you
Firstly ... we have to commend Jai's plan ... it was flawless😳.yes she gets such foolproof plans Manyata was bound to fall hard there!!! What was it she said ... she'll get on his good side , he'll start begging before her and then she'll "snap him like a piece of useless wood!" HAHHH!!! ... as soon as I read that , I knew how bad her plan was going to back-fire😈 . she thinks she will get what she wants but she will fail😃 and she did, thanks to me, na
Awww , poor Uday was scared to go to work , fearing humiliation from Manyata (for fooling her😉). As it is , he's worried about those visions about the palace and to top that he can't ask his Baba anything😕 ... he's in a difficult predicament😭! really poor fellow!! when will his bad days end??
I liked Manyata FAKE niceness😆. And apart from talking so sweetly , she gave him a raise😲 ... lucky guy😳! he is lucky always😃
I loved all the moments that they spent together ... be it the late night "WORK" they did together , or the lunch they enjoyed with each other or Manyata forcing down his sugar-less coffee😆 ... IT WAS ALL SOOO CUTE😳!!!thanks navi, iam blushing now
Now the part that made me cry😭 ... WHY DID UDAY HAVE TO OVER-HEAR MANYATA'S TALKS😡??? because i made him do so, isnt it a simple answer??😆 I had already pictured how their evening would go like how navi?😃😳 ... BUT U RUINED IT ANDY😡??? did i?? poor me Couldn't he have found out about the challenge , the next morning?no it was not possible Huh Andy ?... I'm waiting for an answer!!!!what has to happen will happen navi, there is no need to cry over spilt milk😆 And OMG , the slap😲 ... when it happened , I held my cheek in pain😒! so are you miss manyta? glad to meet you? how is your enemy uday?
Now , Manyata's anger will return TEN-FOLD ... and I'm afraid for Uday.
so am i
Altogether ... it was a great update (all 3 of them).
I loved it lots ... even though it had a sad ending🤢. thanks navi😃
Please update soon😊! after 2 weeks
Sorry for the delay!!!!!!!!!! no problem

thanks so much navi for this lovely comment
i loved it loads😃
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Posted: 12 years ago

Chapter 15

Warning: this chap contains a few scenes of violence, please skip it if you don't like to read such stuff, its marked in blue colour

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Manyata was fuming, fuming was an understatement, she wanted to kill that bas***d uday with her own hands, how dare he slap her, rajkumari manyta. She wanted revenge. Maybe she should kill him. No that would be too small a punishment for him. So now what?😡

She should complain to the police that he had sexually harassed her. That was good. Wait!! That would bring her name in the newspaper and it was bad publicity for her, now what?🤔

Uday stole lakhs of rupees from her account. He being her PA knew her bank details and transferred money from her account to his account. She found about it and was filing a case for fraud. Yes!!! This was a good idea. Fraud. Her name would not come in between. It was between uday and the company. He can spend some time in jail. She laughed evilly thinking about her plan. There were no flaws. Perfect!!😈

Now to execute her work i.e. transfer the money from her account to his, without any evidence of foul play. The dates would be a problem. She then called sai raj a computer genius working in her company to do this dirty work, he agreed to do this and she brought his silence for 20 lakhs. Now all she had to do was wait for morning. Then she would complain to the police.

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Uday was awoken by a call. It was unnathi. She sounded so happy. He asked what the reason was. She refused to say, she wanted to tell him face to face. So she would be coming over to his house. Uday was not in a good mood today. Actually he was scared. Why? Why?why did he slap her last night? Oh!! Now he did not want to think of its consequences. God knows what would happen. He went to freshen himself

Unnathi came half an hour later and the first thing she did was hug uday😆

Un: dada, iam sooo happy. Ma has finally come out of coma.

U: what! That's good news, when did that happen?😃

Un:last night, now I do know whether to cy or be happy. It's the best day of my life and I wanted to share it with you

Un: dada?😕

U: yes chotti?

Un: what happened ? you look tensed. Tell me

U: its nothing unnathi, you are imagining it (he tried to keep a innocent face but failed)

Un: no dada, something is seriously wrong. I know. Spit it out

U: its just manyta😕

Un: what's with bhabhi?

Uday tell her what happened over the past few days including the slap last night

Un: my god!! Dada! What did you do? I am feeling so scared about you. Maybe I should tell dad

U; why chotthi, don't bother uncle for all this😕

Un: no, I think I should see dad now itself

She leaves the house. Uday's baba came forward holding 2 cups of tea. He did not know about what happened last night, neither did he hear uday unnathi conversation,

B: beta, unnathi left?

U: yes baba, she was in a hurry.

B: I had prepared tea for both of you, so what were youll talking?

U: its nothing baba, her mother has recovered from coma, she came to tell me about it.

B: was it only what you talked?

U: yes baba (he lied trying to look innocent)

There was a sound of police jeep outside their house and the next moment policemen barged into their home,

Officer: uday sinha you are under arrest

U: fo… for what sir?

B: sir you must have been mistaken, maybe this is the wrong uday

O: old man, stay away from this , I am warning you

U: sir, for what reason are you arresting me?

O: you are accused of fraud, you have transferred Rs 25 lakhs from the company's account to yours, here are your bank details. Now come with us

B: sir, please sir . my son won't do that sir, please don't take him sir

O: old man, move away from my way

B: please sir

He bends down to catch the officer's leg😭

The officer got irritated and kicked baba on his chest, baba fell back

Uday who was watching this got so mad that he hit the officer who kicked his father, he hit him on his face and gave a good blow in his sensitive point. The police officer stumbled back. the other officer's caught hold of uday before he could do more damage

The officer looked at uday with so much venom,

O: kill that bast**d.

He shouted. The police men started to hit uday. His baba who was seeing this clenched his chest with pain. Uday saw this but the police officers were beating him and dragging him to the jeep. He was helpless. The officer saw uday's baba in pain but ignored him and left the place. The last thing uday saw as he was taken in the jeep was his baba become unconscious.

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Manyta entered the police station with a sense of pride. She had asked the police to "treat" uday well. That fool deserved it. she was soon taken to the questioning room by a constable, there in the dark room illuminated by a single yellow bulb, its harsh light was nothing compared to the scene that was in front of her eyes

Uday was beaten left , right and centre by the police men, he was tied to the chair

He was shirtless, there were many fresh wounds on his body, blood was oozing through those wounds

There were several blue and black patches on his body, his left leg looked like it was broken

His pants were soiled and blood stained

His face was no longer visible under the blood and bruises. The handsome face of uday was replaced by a repulsive one.

Any person seeing the scene would feel like nauseating, it was too brutal.in the far corner of the room, she spotted many iron rods and lathi sticks

Manyata smiled seeing the scene in front of her. She looked really pleased. But was it enough? It was enough at the moment

M: so officer, you did teach him some manners, didn't you?

O: this son of a b***h hit me, he should be glad that he is still alive

M: can I talk to him in private?

O: oh yes mam, saying that the police men cleared that room

Manyta goes near uday, he was so weak, his left eye was blackened, he could not open it, she pulled his face up by his hair, a small "aaah" sound escaped from his mouth

That pleased manyta. She looked like a witch and spoke

M: uday, now you know what you would get if you play against me.

Uday did not say anything

M: I should have killed you, but you deserve even more brutal treatment. It's not over uday

Still no response from uday

M: catch hold of my feet and lick it, then I will forgive you

U: you…you… bi**h

Manyta got furious and kicked the chair it fell down, uday cried in pain, hearing the sound the officers came in.

Manyta said m:he is still not accepting his mistake

O: we will make him accept

Saying that they took the iron rod and started beating him, the floor was full of uday's blood

One officer kicked uday and uday fell on his stomach. Manyta saw the scar. It took a second for her to understand the meaning

She cried" stop"

The officers looked surprised , they were staring at her.

She bent down and touched the scar, the scar, udayveer's scar, in the same place the same shape.. the whole world felt silent for her. So was this udayveer?

Her udayveer? Oh!! God what did she do?

M: take him to the hospital, now😭

O: what??

M: take him to the hospital, please

Saying this she ran from that place.😭 She ran away as fast as her legs could carry her.

Finally she found udayveer.

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Promo

Uday is taken to his home. his mom and dad welcomes him

Uday and manyta- a big fight erupyts

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So guys how was this chap? 😕 was it any good?

Finally uday's common man days are over, he is now a royal

So what do you think?😃

What happened to uday's baba?

Will uday ever forgive manyta?

Will manveer ever love each other?

So many unanswered questions….

Thanks so much for reading

Do like please……

And don't forget to give your feedback… I will be waiting…..😳

Edited by andy.a - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
O My God!!! 😲

meray Uday ko Mara andy ki bachi. 😭

i feel like killing Manyata churail 😡

poor uday. Baba mar gya kiya?? 😕

Now Manyata is dead. Uday is much more powerful. 😃

Precap is good and scary.

Please update soon andy.

&

Thanks for the PM.
Edited by -Zina- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
res unres hate manyata she deserved to be slap wat kind of love is dis dat she did not melt after seeing uday in dis condition uday fell for wrong gal. i hope he teaches her a good lesson awesome words r too less to appreciate thx for da pm update asap sorry if i bothered u wid my comment hugss anni
Edited by annesha18 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
hey Andy 😃
Update was superb 👍🏼
loved it😳 beautifully written..

bechara uday
galti nahi ki firbhi jail jana pada... 😕 i jus hate dis manyata 😡 😡

anywayz... waitng for ur nxt update...
do continue soon 😉
n PM me 😃
Edited by rockingal09 - 12 years ago

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