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Downhill

@Downhill

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#211

wish i could see this anjali in the show...arnav's turmoil has been portrayed well, capturing each nuance...an emotionally charged update

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inspiringstars

@inspiringstars

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#212

Can I first point out the two most important things in your update-

The first part where he realized after looking at the Mandap that it would be the same place Khushi would have waited and been devastated at being ditched buy him, at breaking his promise to her, her faith for him. The entire sentence written without even a single full stop, perfect flow, and perfect words, I mean its difficult to maintain the continuity, I don't know if you wrote it intentionally or it came out like that.

Similarly the one part where he feels bad about how Anjali feels she has not been a good mother and he goes into flashback to remember the innumerable instances where she had been more than a mother, and how she had always been with him despite of the ill fate playing out against them. All of this again in one sentence, believe me I have only a handful of times read such a long sentence with perfect flow of words.

Needless to say, I loved the update! And I really wish the Anjali of the show was even a ten percent of this one. Sigh.

Thanks for the PM

For a piece that's not even proof read, this is one heck of a brilliant piece of work. You are an excellent writer Rae, never stop!

Edited by inspiringstars - 12 years ago

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Jammy-

@Jammy-

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#213

And o love this Anjali!! Asking all the questions and having the guts to withstand the answers!!! Intense interaction!

Brilliantly written, loved the last 2 lines alot!

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Dhara Singh

@Dhara_s

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#214

Awesome...Anjali was just amazing...!! Eager to know her reaction after what Arnav told her !!

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Reem

@TRND86

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#215

This was heartbreaking 😭

It is so interesting that most FF writers have portrayed Anjali in such a different way that you feel her pain & her emotions as much as Arnav & Khushi's but it saddens me that Anjali in the show is continuously being shown as a character who is completely blind to reality 👎🏼

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claireDD

@claireDD

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#216

so he abandoned her on their wedding day...
this indeed was a heart wrenching update..
i love this sensible anjali than the one onscreen...

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deviarshi

@deviarshi

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#217

Your Anjali is really nice but will she be the same after the bitter truth is out hopefully she will tell Arnav to leave the past & move ahead & now the other truth is he did ditch Khushi on her wedding day, how could he do that & Khushi I still hope she is alright.

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Varsha

@Psychedelic

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#218

You've made my cry again Rae. All of them chapters were so heartbreaking. All the flashbacks of time spent together. The sequence in the third chapter like those memories were being rewound. He has experienced what life with her can be like but now he's given it up. Why Arnav why! :( The second chapter made me weep for him and this last one makes me want to hit him and comfort him at the same tim! :( And that dream. That oh so beautiful dream. and the futility of it all. Here without you is a song that moves me every time I listen to it. Heartbreaking Rae! But beautiful all the same. And yeah. Your Anjali was always more plausible, likable and definitely has better brains than the one on the show. I dont even want to think of what Khushi is going through! :( Fab writing as usual Rae.