~ Here Without You ~ ArHi OS'/SS Part7Page43 1/10 - Page 24

Originally posted by: inspiringstars

Can I first point out the two most important things in your update-

The first part where he realized after looking at the Mandap that it would be the same place Khushi would have waited and been devastated at being ditched buy him, at breaking his promise to her, her faith for him. The entire sentence written without even a single full stop, perfect flow, and perfect words, I mean its difficult to maintain the continuity, I don't know if you wrote it intentionally or it came out like that.

Similarly the one part where he feels bad about how Anjali feels she has not been a good mother and he goes into flashback to remember the innumerable instances where she had been more than a mother, and how she had always been with him despite of the ill fate playing out against them. All of this again in one sentence, believe me I have only a handful of times read such a long sentence with perfect flow of words.

Needless to say, I loved the update! And I really wish the Anjali of the show was even a ten percent of this one. Sigh.

Thanks for the PM

For a piece that's not even proof read, this is one heck of a brilliant piece of work. You are an excellent writer Rae, never stop!

Originally posted by: TRND86

This was heartbreaking 😭

It is so interesting that most FF writers have portrayed Anjali in such a different way that you feel her pain & her emotions as much as Arnav & Khushi's but it saddens me that Anjali in the show is continuously being shown as a character who is completely blind to reality 👎🏼

Originally posted by: Psychedelic

You've made my cry again Rae. All of them chapters were so heartbreaking. All the flashbacks of time spent together. The sequence in the third chapter like those memories were being rewound. He has experienced what life with her can be like but now he's given it up. Why Arnav why! :( The second chapter made me weep for him and this last one makes me want to hit him and comfort him at the same tim! :( And that dream. That oh so beautiful dream. and the futility of it all. Here without you is a song that moves me every time I listen to it. Heartbreaking Rae! But beautiful all the same. And yeah. Your Anjali was always more plausible, likable and definitely has better brains than the one on the show. I dont even want to think of what Khushi is going through! :( Fab writing as usual Rae.

Originally posted by: V323

Take a bow, Rae. Take a bow. 👏

I have nothing else to say. I think I know why the likes and comments are steadily decreasing.

Its because this SS is particularly poignant, and sad... that people choose to read po*n, as opposed to this beautiful, heart wrending piece of writing.

Thank you for the PM. I am rendered speechless EVERYTIME.

-V

Originally posted by: Arshiarnav1741

wow...fab updates!!!!!!!!

read all 3 4 n 5 2day!!!

All of the updates was superb'Arnav's pain, dejection hurt everything sooo perfectly symbolized'magnificent writing''I know I always say this but u interpret Arnav in the best way ever'..kudos!!!!!!!!!!

Originally posted by: ...Doctor...

I love this Anjali. She is sensible & understanding.

The update was mindblowing as always. I feel disappointed that Arnav left khushi like that, it was so insulting. She almost died because of him & she gets this in return. I know he's in trauma, he can't accept her et al but still, I felt really sad for khushi. She didn't deserve this. You wrote everything beautifully especially the part where he looks at the mandap & realizes that it's over. Sigh!

I'd like to add that though I don't like Anjali nowadays, to be precise I hate her but I felt really bad for Anjali here. The way she blamed herself for Arnav's upbringing. It was really painful, she must have felt so bad. Waiting to see reaction after knowing the truth.

Continue soon :)