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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -SupriyaluvsMN-

awesum update fiza... esp the past one! :))




thnks alot

Originally posted by: mayuloveu

very nice update fiza



thnku


Originally posted by: kheya-mayur

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too interested to know about present ...cont soon




thnaks...
but u have to wait




thnks




thnku



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Posted: 13 years ago

Rplyd to u all..thnku

For all of u I know u all are sumwhere to much in curiosity to know wht happened tht present is such..but this will all will be reveal later… mayank seeing Nupur is in 7 chapter n his reaction on everyone will b in 8th chapter.

I am so loving the fact that u all are not just reading this story yet living it and its on ur head …thank u so much for liking it that much

And a very Happy birthday to Vinan…

Enjoy the update

Pardon errors..

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Chapter: 6


Haal ( Present):

Mayank: tu mjhy kuch bata kyun nhi raha hai kya hua hai…

Samrat: kya batao tujhy ..

Mayank: nupur kaha hai…

Samrat: bus wahin chal rahy hain…

Mayank: Samrat teri khamsohi mjhy buhat kahl rahi hai…

He was silent yet he was extremely restless… he was fearing something very big.. Samrat can easily see his fear n restlessness.. and his pain was increasing.. knowing wht he will feel seeing her like this… and that he wasn't able to protect her ..the person he has always guarded so closely is now at the edge of….

He didn't want to even say the word… she is his sister his beloved sister after all… he control his tears knowing he has to be strong.. as sonce he is gonna face her .. there will be a tornate of emiotns cuming….

Mazzi:

Nupur: hello…. So tu kasi rahi apki picnic date… she touched gunjan's shoulder and teased her..us din ghar per tu moqa hi nhi mila pochny ka…dono k dono sir per jo sawar thy

Gunjan: nupur asi koi baat nhi hai.. kya bol rahi hoo

Nupur: dekho gunjan hum dost pehly hain… aur sirf islayn k Samrat humara bhai hai..pls tu humain yeah sab nhi batao gi kiya…

So yeah batein hum .. k kya chal raha hai..

Gunjan: matlab…

Nupur: aahy hay Sharma tu tum asay rahi hoo bhabi jasay mein ny tum se yeah poch liya k us din kya kya hua

Gunjan: NUPURR.. tum bhi nah… asa kuch nhi hai…

Nupur: tu itni barai muskurahat kyun… tumhain samrat pasand hai..trust me yeah baat Samrat tak nhi jay gi

Gunjan: pata nhi nupur.. humain khabi lagta hai k yeah sath se zayda behtar aur kuch nhi hosakta khabi lagta hai k asa kcuh bhi nhi hai…

Nupur: hm tu tum ko lagata hai Samrat tumharay se sath time pass ker raha hai

Gunjan: nhi.. mein janti hoon woh meri buhat izaat kerta hai .. maagr…

Nupur: agar bhai ny tum ko khabi propose kiya tu tum kya kaho gi

Gunjan: woh asa keray ga khabi..

Nupur: han ya na..

Gunjan: she smiled acha chalo ab bahr

Nupur: oyeee tu yeah haan sirf un k liyan maksoos( just for him) hai… wah.. wasy taiyaar hojao.. Samrat aur mayank aj chaht per Samrat ki koi muskil suljhany waly hain… aur bhai k aj kal har muskil aur har khushi gunjan se shoro hoti hai aur usi per khatam hojati hai

She blushed more…

Ab tu choti ami ny bhi uski tang khichna shoro kerdi hai…

Gunjan: kya… she giggle

Nupur: per ek baat han hum tum ko bata dain… ami wasi nhi hai jasay hum sab hain

Gunjan: hum sab janty hain nupur.. un ki har baat se humari waqifiyat ( known) hai… halaky kafi ajeeb sa lagta hai… magar phir bhi. Humain Samrat per zayda behroosa hai

Nupur: aay hay..sadiqay jao mein is ateibar per.. kya baat hai m

Gunjan: Nupurr.. tum baaz nhi aao gi…. Hmmm… wasy koi aur bhi date per tha…

Nupur: kaun adhiraj.. really meri jaan chute…wah

Gunjan: had hai nupur.. mein apki aur mayank ki baat ker rahi hoo

Nupur: KYA…. Pagal hoagie ho kiya… asa kuch nhi hai hum tu aksar asy jatay rehty hain.. aur khub maza kerti hain.. janti ho kal hum dono ny kya kiya.. ek couple…

She strt to narrate the story and gunjan was keenly observing her each n evry expression with a smile…

…………………

Samrat: tu meri baat samhj nhi raha hai

Mayank: mjhy koi baat samjhny ki zroorat bhi nhi hai… ek seedha sa muda ( matter ) hai us ko usi tarhaa suljha.. itna uljha kyun raha hai… Samrat phely jo hum ap se sawal ker rahain us ko seedha sa jawab chaiy humain

Samrat: kaun sa sawal….

Mayank: thik tu tu chahta hai mein seedhay seedhy pocho tu thik hai… tu gunjan se pyar kerta hai… han ya nah

Sirf han ya nah

Samrat: shayd…

Mayank: ab yeah shayd kya hai bhi…

Samrat: mjhy lagta tu hoo..

Mayank: sir peetlo kisi dewar se ja ker…. Tu ab masla kya hai….tujhy lagta hai tu ab us ko bhi tu laga.. masla kya hai…

Samrat: meri maa…

Mayank: hmm…. Gunjan k ghar waly …. Us k valdain(parents), woh log kya kertay hain kuch pata hai…

Samrat: mein ny buhat tafseel(detail) se tu khabi pocha nhi…

Mayank: zahir se baat hai… apki bato mein yeah sab tu kafi na munasib( irrelevant) lagta hoga nah ..hai nah… wasy sirf baatein hi hoti hai yaa….

Samrat: mayank tu sudhara ja… mazak maat ker yaar … us k aba koi business kertay hain…

Mayank: wasy woh middle class family ki tu nhi hai hai…

Samrat: tujhy kasay pata

Mayank: gunjan k elwa kuch dekhta tu tujhy pata chalta.. ek tu yeah course itna mahnga(expensive) hai k haar kisi ki pohach mein nhi… dosra us ki car.. us k roz mara k karachy…

Samrat: tu itna kyun dekhta hai…

Mayank: oye mein bhabi per line nhi marta.. Sharma ker… magar humain yeah detail chaiy… aur yeah sirf ek insaan ko pata hoga..

Samrat: kaun

Mayank: nupur.. ja us ko lay ker aay

Samart: mein ny jao ga tu ja…

Mayank: pagal hogaya hai kya itni raat horahi hai… apni behan ki nhi janta hai kya … shoro macha day gi… mein us ko call kerta hoon tab tak ja aur us ko lay ker aay…

Hello nupur.. Samrat tum ko laynay araha hai …chaht per ajao

Nupur: abhi…

Mayank: nhi agaly saaal isi waqt… abay han na… aur khuda k wasata ..tum dono shoor maat kerna.. mjhy tu abhi tak larki bhi nhi mili hai….tum dono kisis din mjhy zaroor behaswaoo gay…

Nupur: acha na.. ati hoon… she was too excited as it was the first time in there chaht adda talks they have called her to join… she knew today wht they are discussing and was very curious to know… though mayank promised he will tell her and she knew he will not miss any detail but still she wants to be there…

Nupur: hello… kya horaha hai

Mayank: ajao.. tumhary bhai k seeting ker rahy hain…

Samrat: bekar ki baatein maat kero..kam ki baaty kero

Nupur: kya baat hia bhai sehba itni betabbi haan…

Mayank: kahao tu gunjan ko bhi yahin bola lay

Samrat: tum dono chup nhi hosakty

Nupur: nhi nhi… uff… bhahi itna tu gunjan bhi nhi sharamti apky baray mein baat kertay haoy… kya baat hai…. Ek roomal la do moo per rekhny k liyan

Mayank n nupur were laughing

Samarat: yeah harkatein shadi ki liyan bacha ker rekho abhi pls kam ki baat kerain….

Mayank: ohhh ..tu janab ny shadi tak ka socha hua hai…

Nupur: aur kya kya socha hai… zara tafeseel se batao nah….

Samrat: yaar pls nah… tum dono asa kero gay tu kuch nhi hoga

Mayank: acha na roo kyun raha hai… nupur tumhain gujan ki family k baray mein kay pata hai..

Nupur: sab ..mein ny pori information nikal ker rekhi hai… woh ekloti (only child) hai …. Us k father k a huge machinery ki export k business hai….

Mayank: yeah tu buhat achi baat hai.. tai jaan k mayar(standard) per pora utarta hai…

Nupur: haan.. aur us kay ami baba buhat friendly tu usk ghar mein tu koi problem nhi hogai…

Samrat: yeah sab tumko kasay pata..

Nupur: agr us k ghar mein humari maa jasa koi hota tu… phir tu apko aur us ko shoro mein hi hum dono rukh laytay…

Samrat: hum dono??

Mayank: ankhein k sath sath nazar bhi di hai humain khuda nay… sab dekh raha tha aur woh bhi bht pehly se…

With eyes we do also have sight to see…

Smarat at them.. any thing can be better than having such siblings

Samrat: per abhi bhi ek baat wahin ki wahin hai…

Mayank: kya

Samrat: ami..

Nupur: bhai ami ki fikar kyun ker rahin hai app… .. hum gunjan ko un k samany pesh hi asay kerain ga k un k dil mein yeahi kayal aay ga… plus hum choti ami se baat kerain gay

Mayank: aur zaroorat pari tu taya jaan se mein baat kerlo ga…

Nupur: tum bulkily fikar mat kero… gunjan mein woh sab kuch hai jo ami ko apni bahu mein chaiy.. sab se behr ker ek unchi shaan …

Mayank: han … bus us ko ek baar ghar layna hai… tai jan se milwana hai…

Samrat: kasay hoga yeah…

Nupur: aray idea… she jump excitedly and they both asked her to be low…. Sorry… dekho humari company ki golden jubilee party arahi hai next month…. Us mein bolatay hain na… us ki family k sath..

Mayank: kamal hai nupur… deemgh chalta hai tumhara khabi khabi… us se pehly hum tai jaan k deemgh mein gunjan k pora imagine set kerday gay…

Samrat: aur baqi tu mein us ko smajha hi sakta hoon k us ko thora classy rehna paray ga ami k samny…. Great I love u guys

Mayank: tujhy nhi lagta in sab se pehly tuhj yeah bolan paray ga…

Samrat: kya

Nupur: bhai tum na…. gunjan ko propose tu kero… phir hi tu shahdi tak jay gay… bewaquff…

Samrat: aray haan… thik hai mein ja raha hoon sony … I need to think…meri behan ko sahi salmat kamray tak pocha….

Mayank: samrat.. yeah tumhara bahi nah….hello… ap kis k kayal mein kho gai…adhiraj mein asai koi baat nhi hai tum dono bhag ker shaadi kerlayna…donot worry mein kerado ga…

Nupur: she hit him… us se pehly mein us k khhon nhi kerdo gi…he chukled

Mayank: abhi Samrat ko samjha rahi ho k sab thik kerday ga… aur ab khud soch rahi hoo

Nupur: ab baat sirf samart ki nhi hai… is sab mein ab gunjan bhi shamil hai… aur tumhain pata hai .. hum ny us se pocha tha Samrat k baray mein… us ki shakal dekhny wali thi…

Mayank: sach mein.. is k matlab woh inkar nhi keray gi

Nupur: sawal hi nhi utha tha… bulkay us ko tu lagta hai Samrat khabi us se yeah baat keray ga hi nhi…

Mayank: yeah tu zabardast kahaber hai…

Nupur: ha ab tu mein us ko khub tang kero gi… Samrat ko baat kerny do… kitna maza aay ga nah.. meri dost meri bhabi..

Mayank: ab tum ek kam kero.. ami se baat kero… woh tumahri baat buhat arm se sunay gi

Nupur: mayankk choti ami sab ki baat buhat arm se sunti hain… tum bhi ker sakty hoo…

Mayank: nhi.. hum kerain gay tu woh humari bhi kerday gi…

She laughed… and they both went to their rooms..

………………..

Haal (Present):

The car stop infront of the hospital and mayank looked at Samrat with shock…

Samrat: chal.. he said in a choking voice…

And mayank closed his eyes n rested his head back… he hurdily moved out of the car.. and Samrat took him inside the hospital….he called gunjan to confirm his mothers position…. And mayank was feeling his heart will stop any moment ..knowing wht she can do to herself and what she must be going through all along he was feeling evry breath hard to take…

Samrat: gunjan ami kaha hai…

Gunjan: woh abhi abhi bahar gai hai … yaah koi nhi hai …

Samrat: mayank chal indhar se aay…

He was just silently following him, he has no strength to question him.. the few steps to her room were feeling like so heavy … it seems a lifetime he is gonna see her.. and that so here.. like this….

Edited by drfizaahmed - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
API..
Awesome update...Beautifully written...
loved der Past lodsss...
i wish i cud say something like dat for der Present too...
it felt horrible to think abt Mayank's reaction wen he will see her...Sigh!!!
so i will hv to wait for more 2updates to see his Reactions...sigh!!!!!!
loved der past...
hayeee...
wht i love abt dis ff is d Siblings bonding...
Bonding dat dey all share wid each other...
loved it to d coreee
m happy dat in dis Sequel SaJan r not bad as previous one...
n happy ke unke life mein at least MN ki tarha problems nhi honge...as Gunjan is qualified as per Tai jan's list...
hayeee...Mayank is soo Adorable n Fun..
loved d way MN teased Samrat..
n han loved d way Samrat said ke uski behen ko sahi salamat pohchadena...he is such an Adorable Bro...i loved him here of course as a Bro...😉
bt i want to ask something ke why Mayank always take Adhiraj's name as isse i feel like he has deffo to do something wid der Story...
kya pata Nupur ki shadi usse huyi ho ya uske liye Tai jan ne Nupur ki shadi Mayank se kar diya ho...
wht i love abt dis ff is it left U occupied to think abt it after u hv finished reading it...
Main n Paro na jane kitni dafa baat kar chukey hain FB mein ke iss ff ki kahani kya hain...🤣
so hatss off to my API for dis...👏⭐️👏
waiting eagerly for d next part...
loving it to BITS..😳
Love u API 🤗
Edited by -Anila- - 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Anila-

API...

ap itni raat gaye update kar rahi hain...as in main toh kabka jane wali thi n den yehi rook gayi...n han u wont blv bt sacchi main soch rahi thi ke ap "Parichey" kab update karogi...as in "MY" jo kar diya tha apne...😳
Love u API 🤗

Resss😳



mera irada nhi tha..but than mjhy yaad aya kal sister aay gi to stay...aur parsoo shab-e-barrat hai tu mein nhi aa shayd online dono din... tu aj hi kerdo...late hi sahi... per tum logo ko mil jay gi update

is ff ko tu mein aur jaldi update ker sakti hoon...but i m lazy... asa kfi haad tak its written


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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: drfizaahmed



mera irada nhi tha..but than mjhy yaad aya kal sister aay gi to stay...aur parsoo shab-e-barrat hai tu mein nhi aa shayd online dono din... tu aj hi kerdo...late hi sahi... per tum logo ko mil jay gi update

is ff ko tu mein aur jaldi update ker sakti hoon...but i m lazy... asa kfi haad tak its written



Awww...
hayeee shab-e-barrat a bhi gayi...main toh bhul hi gayi thi... den toh uss din main bhi nhi aungi... 🥱 n han ap Namaz parhogi toh mere liye Dua jaroor karna ohk...ke meri DUA puri ho jaye...😳😆😍 dekha jaha mauka mila nhi Demand karne lagti hoon...😳😆🤣
le toh kyun nhi karti...
karna chahiye nhi...😉 u know we all wait for it...n yeh kya ap meri jaan logi kya 8th chp per reaction...hayeee kitnaaa wait karwaogi...
bt i wud love to...😳
Love u lodsss API...🤗🤗🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -Anila-


Awww...
hayeee shab-e-barrat a bhi gayi...main toh bhul hi gayi thi... den toh uss din main bhi nhi aungi... 🥱 n han ap Namaz parhogi toh mere liye Dua jaroor karna ohk...ke meri DUA puri ho jaye...😳😆😍 dekha jaha mauka mila nhi Demand karne lagti hoon...😳😆🤣
le toh kyun nhi karti...
karna chahiye nhi...😉 u know we all wait for it...n yeh kya ap meri jaan logi kya 8th chp per reaction...hayeee kitnaaa wait karwaogi...
bt i wud love to...😳
Love u lodsss API...🤗🤗🤗



THIK HAI Dua kero gi... wasy yeah Dua hai kya... mjh bhi tu pata chaly... aur han mjhy hi yaad rekhna aj kal kafi zaroorat hai Dua ki khass k unlogo ki jo dil se kerty hain

haan na tu islyn tu update kerdiya...
bachy mein kya kero...yeah ff past mein zayda hai..atleast 15 chapters tak... cause mein ny abhi wahi tak likha hai... beech mein 2 updates mein tu present hai hi nhi.. but han next mein atlest mayank nupur k dekh lya gay us k pass hoga... baqo logo k woh kiya kerta hai woh 8 th mein hoga
actually 5 chpt nhi likha tha mein ny...add kiya hai last moment per.. so

lov ya too
n God bless you

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Posted: 13 years ago
n congrats on IF dazzler ... yeah tu mein ny abhi dekha


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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: drfizaahmed



THIK HAI Dua kero gi... wasy yeah Dua hai kya... mjh bhi tu pata chaly... aur han mjhy hi yaad rekhna aj kal kafi zaroorat hai Dua ki khass k unlogo ki jo dil se kerty hain

haan na tu islyn tu update kerdiya...
bachy mein kya kero...yeah ff past mein zayda hai..atleast 15 chapters tak... cause mein ny abhi wahi tak likha hai... beech mein 2 updates mein tu present hai hi nhi.. but han next mein atlest mayank nupur k dekh lya gay us k pass hoga... baqo logo k woh kiya kerta hai woh 8 th mein hoga
actually 5 chpt nhi likha tha mein ny...add kiya hai last moment per.. so

lov ya too
n God bless you



Ap DUA karna agar ALLAH ne apki sunli den ek na ek din apko bata hi dungi...😳😉 InshALLAH.
hmm...API...apke liye toh jaroor akhir meri API ke liye nhi karungi toh kiske liye n will hope ke koi Dua toh ALLAH sun hi le meri...😳 Ameen.
hayeee...koi nhi abhi jesa chal raha hain wahi BEST hain n mostly Captivating hain...i loved it to BITS..😍

Awww...Thank u..🤗
hmm...Akhir main IF Dazzler ban hi gayi...😎
sabse jyada ap hi ki wajah se hua hain yeh as in apke itne acche acche writings mein cmnt kar kar ke hi toh bani hoon...By God!!😳

Edited by -Anila- - 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Anila-



Ap DUA karna agar ALLAH ne apki sunli den ek na ek din apko bata hi dungi...😳😉 InshALLAH.
hmm...API...apke liye toh jaroor akhir meri API ke liye nhi karungi toh kiske liye n will hope ke koi Dua toh ALLAH sun hi le meri...😳 Ameen.
hayeee...koi nhi abhi jesa chal raha hain wahi BEST hain n mostly Captivating hain...i loved it to BITS..😍

Awww...Thank u..🤗
hmm...Akhir main IF Dazzler ban hi gayi...😎
sabse jyada ap hi ki wajah se hua hain yeh as in apke itne acche acche writings mein cmnt kar kar ke hi toh bani hoon...By God!!😳



thanks dear🤗🤗
jo tumhary haq mein best ho Allah woh sab tum ko ata keray Ameen..
wasy tum itni raat tak kya ker rahi hoo... kal jawab lo gi...

God bless you..
Good nite

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