PAYBACK - RTMC (Three Shot) Last part pg 8

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi guys!
I have been a RT-MC fan since PRC days and loved them in DV also. After being inspired by all the lovely FFs written on them, I finally decided to post something of my own.
I have written a small story, rather a three shot on them.
But before that a slight intro of the characters
I have taken the names from DV'.so my protagonists are Veer and Ananya
Veer is from a royal family but their family doesn't rule any place.
Nivritti is Veer's mother. She is a widow and volunteers in an orphanage.
Dharam & Veer are maternal cousins. Dharam is elder to Veer by two years and is married to Sia
In this story Veer and Ananya are married.
And also Veer-Ananya & Dharam-Sia used to study in the same college
A/N: Earlier I used to read a FF 'DV in 21st century' written by Anusha and absolutely loved it. Her writing mainly inspired me to write. So in the story you may find slight references to situations from that story or similar characterization'.but I've NOT COPIED anything.
If Anusha di ever reads this, I would like to thank her for writing such a beautiful story (though incomplete).
Sorry for the long ramble, so here's the 1st part. Hope you enjoy it!
INDEX
Part 1-pg1
Part 2-pg3
Part 3A-pg5
Last part-pg8
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PAYBACK
Part I
Her eyes fluttered open as the sunrays hit her eyes. She looked over at the clock beside the bed. It said "7.00 AM". Boy, he was late. Of course him, her lovely infuriating husband, Veer. She was never late. Well today there was no chance. There was no college. Yes, she was completing her MBA degree as she had wished and he had insisted on it. While he was working at an MNC with a handsome pay, just as he deserved. They could have put off the wedding until she finished her studies but they couldn't resist each other. They were madly in love with each other. But nonetheless, they equally enjoyed annoying each other.
Her chain of thoughts was broken as Veer cuddled into her and held her tighter. Oh! He looked so handsome and cute. Looking at him sleeping so soundly, she suddenly remembered something. She had yet to settle her scores with him.
He would certainly have to pay for drenching her with a bucketful of cold water to 'wake her up' when she was enjoying her beautiful Sunday slumber. How she hated waking up early on a Sunday and he knew it. When she was about to shout at him, he had smiled beautifully at her. She was baffled. He had come nearer, picked her up, headed towards the bathroom and dropped her in the filled bathtub. She was flabbergasted. He had quickly fled shouting, "Thought you needed a bath." When she had finally come out after drying herself, he was already busy with a client in the living room. He had spent rest of the day outside due to work. (Such a workaholic works on a Sunday!!!) So all she could do was nothing. Absolutely nothing!
But she was not Ananya for nothing. Just then a vicious thought fleeted in her mind. It was not as bad as his. But it would annoy him pretty fine.
Ananya again looked over at the clock. It was 7.30. Goodness she took up so much time thinking. But it would work better for her plan.
She slowly freed herself from Veer's arms and walked towards the kitchen. She took the pan and started making his favorite pasta for breakfast. Then she headed towards the cupboard and took the Nescafe jar. Oh how he loved her coffee. She took the carry tumbler and poured milk, added sugar and then four spoonful of coffee powder. "That should be bitter enough", she thought. Then she went to pack his lunch. Salty chapatti, uncooked rice, tasteless dal and extra spicy sabzi with dollops of red chili powder. She giggled thinking of how red he would become when he would eat his lunch. He hated it if there was anything wrong with his food. Today everything was. But he wouldn't be able to shout at her. He would be powerless and angry. How satisfying! She was tempted to go to his office and see his face but knew that she would be dead if she did so.
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Meanwhile in the bedroom Veer stretched his arms and turned to kiss his wife. When he found no one, he was surprised that she was already awake. Then he glanced at the clock."'8.15 AM'. His head quickly shot up. He was running extremely late. His usual wake up time was 6.00am as he went for a jog after that. He had slept late last night but how could he oversleep for two hours? Oh god! He had to receive the delegates today, and then discuss an important deal over lunch. He had no time to think why she didn't wake him up. He ran towards the shower and was ready in ten minutes.
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She turned around beaming as he walked in the living room and she said, "Morning, love." "Morning" "Hey, you look tensed! Guess you're running late. Here have your breakfast. I made your favorite pasta." She smartly didn't give him the time to respond or ask her anything about not waking him up.
He was pleasantly surprised. He quickly ate the sumptuous pasta. As he was about to leave, Ananya came rushing and handed him his lunch. "Here you go. I thought I would make lunch for you as I had no college today. And here's your coffee." She said as she gave him the tumbler.
And she smiled charmingly. Aww her smile just eased Veer of all his tension and he had that sudden urge to stay back with her all day. But he soon gathered himself up and with a quick peck rushed downstairs, shouting, "Love you. Bye!" Ananya yelled back, "Have a nice day". She was so sure he couldn't.
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He hurried along the road to catch a cab as he took a sip of his coffee. As soon as he sipped it, the bitter taste exploded in his mouth and he spat it all out. That was the worst coffee he had ever had. He instantaneously looked towards their balcony on the 5th floor. Ananya was standing there.
As she saw him looking at her, as expected, she waved to him. She couldn't resist seeing his shocked face. She laughed shamelessly and blew a kiss to him.
He couldn't understand why she had grinned. He looked down at the coffee as if it had some tranquilizer which had affected his mind. He turned to look back at Ananya trying to interpret the situation. But she was not there. He wondered if he was hallucinating.
Ananya couldn't control her laughter anymore. She had already rushed inside clutching her stomach. Now she was standing near the bedroom window behind the curtain. She saw him. He looked as if he had seen a ghost in the coffee and the balcony. She could understand as no one in his life had tampered with his food so badly and she was the least expected. She always cooked when she had to make it up to him, certainly not annoy him. But there is a first to everything, she thought and pitied him on how he would react after his "delicious" lunch.
Veer was still staring at the balcony. A honk broke his trance. He trashed the tumbler thinking that she had probably messed up as she must have rushed to make him coffee. He dismissed any further thoughts and quickly sat in the cab saying, "Santacruz airport".
Ananya saw him go and turned to complete her notes.
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So that was the 1st part!
Since it's my 1st time posting, I would really appreciate your comments.
If you have have any queries, confusion plz ask!
Thanks for reading!
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sweetsanyo thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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first n foremost...
since u r in india...
so i feel u r very comfortable wid hindi too...
if not, do let me noe...coz u may belong to south india too...

so i m giving ma comment in mixture of hindi english!!...

very very very very...important item

DO ACCEPT MA FRIEND REQUEST...
SINCE U R 18 N I M 16...
so i will call u DI...

bhot ho gyi bakwaas, ab mudde par aate h...

ud-
haye, aapki writing style dil ko bhaa gyi di...
loved ur writing style...
abhi ke liye tho aap jarur ek short story se kaam chalalo...

but main ab aapka picha nhi chodongi, jab tak aap ek FAN FICTION nahi start karte...

isliye jii lijiye aapne jingadi ki aazadi, coz bhot jaldi i will nt let u breath till u write a ff,
start thinking of the concept now!!...
it will help in future...

now pakka promise lets talk abt story...enough of future planning...

u noe di, i m damn fascinated abt veer-ananya/ rtmc marriage life...
i lov each n every ff having rtmc married...

this married couple here is awesome...
loved it like hell...
everything, flashback n present, on 5th floor, down on ground, bedroom n kitchen...
its all very nicely described...

ananya cooks for veer wenevr he is annoyed.
good she believes-PATI KE DIL KA RASTA USKE PET SE GHOZARTA H...

veer is lovely here...
prefect typical husband...

they married coz they were not able to resist each other...
haye main vaari javan...

but man, he is gone today,
itna sahi swadissht khana kabhi nhi khaya hoga bande ne...
band baaj jayegi...

but she is dead surely wen he returns...
awww...ma ananya's smile is luckycharm for him...

but hw cud he leave his such a beautiful wife alone, dat too on sunday...
hw cud he resist her...

u r danm soopergood in desc...
i loved reading that bathroom tub scene...
amazing...

plz check out ma friends list...
everyone there is rtmc fan...
they will hell like love ur ss just like me...
little less than me...
coz i declare maself as biggest fan of ur ss now, and also of ur fan-fiction on way...

plz plz say yes to fan fiction...plz plz...

or u make dis itself a fan fiction...

will lov to b friend wid u, talk to u...

even i m a damn solid fan of dv in 21st cen...

but surely content of ur story is different...so different n authentic.

i here by demand few hot n bold scenes...


ud sooper soon...
deing to read veer's rxn...

well i feel ananya's lov will not allow him to be rude to her...
after all he loves her, if she evn pretends innocence, he will fall for her...

ud sooper soon.
plz.

n yes pm every one in ma friends list, they almost all r rtmc fans...

lov u n ur story
Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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nice start...

poor veer...😆..will be in for a surprise at lunch as well...

continue soon...

thnx for PM...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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u wrote for the first time...but that was really amazing...👏
well u said u r inspired by the story DV IN 21 CEN. ...that story was damn good...but don't know why she stopped it...usme toh veer n anu ki love story bhi suru nahi hui thi...😒
ok now coming back to your story...
really nice...veer n anu were already married...oh really loved them...😍
but of no use...both love each other but didn't spare a chance to annoy each other...😆
veer throw cold water on her face...n that too on sunday...😲...n then pick her n dropped her in the bathtub...poor girl...kitana shaitan pati mila hai...😆
n the way she found to take her revenge...amazing...👍🏼
no one has ever eaten this type of delicious food ever...😆...really waiting to see the expression on veer's face when he would going to eat his lunch...😆
lunch hoga tho khayega na...🤣
well he has got his first hint of the day...with his amazing coffee... 😆
and anu is enjoying his wiered expression...me too...🤣
whatever u wrote in ur first part...by god...that was really amazing...👏
waiting to see when veer came back...😆
n thanx for the pm...do pm me whenever u update...
update soon...
luv u...😊
Edited by ridzzi - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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😆

Originally posted by: ridzzi

res...mera bhi...😆


mera aapka...
hum sabka pyaara res...

kyun ridzzi di...😆...

v all lov ur res.🤣
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice start!!!

Plz pm me from next time nd update soon.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetsanyo

😆


mera aapka...
hum sabka pyaara res...

kyun ridzzi di...😆...

v all lov ur res.🤣

absolutaly...humara res...
waise hum sab bahut res res khelte hai...
if pe hum sab ne ek naya game suru kia hai res-res...😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
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yay !!! new RT MC ss !!!
d concept is really nice n refreshng !!! 👏
i luvd it !!! ⭐️
both r njoyng marital bliss !!
par nok-jhok abhi cahl rahi hai !! oops...do u noe hindi ???
Veer ...is ...veer !!! 😆
so naughty !!!
well Ananya is also not less !! 😉
watng 2 c Veer's reactions !!
thnx 4 d PM !!!
Edited by sparksfly - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome story dear...
u have started it very well...
do pm me whenever u'll ud...
continue soon,,,,,
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hi dear...
the story was awesome ..so cute..😳
i was actuallly missing RTMC jodi these days.. gud to c this ff...:)

the story is gud.. the characters are so cute...😳
liked the way ananya is going to get back at veer for his prank..😆
pls do cont soon..
thanks for the pm ...:)😊

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