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Posted: 13 years ago
#11
what a lovely ff😛
n what a lovely story😛

haaye...kay update tha...i loved it👏

really ur writing is mindblowing dear😊

veer or ananya ...❤️loved them yr

loved ur story tooo

sorry for short comment bhot saare update padne h dear😲

but i really love ur story...thanks ki u pm me...warna itna accha update miss kar deti😳

yr is ss ko ff mein convert kar do na plsss

btw whts ur name😲😲😲😲😲??????

pls update soon dear
luv u n luv ur ff
😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: tejjo

what a lovely ff😛


di sadly its a short story...😭...

but chinta mat karo...😳...

ek baar yeh ss khatam ho jaye...😆...

hum sab glossy ke piche lajayenge...😉...ff likhne ke liye...okay???

me too loved her wrting skill, itni aasani se nhi chodungi glossy ko...pakka!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#13
Congrats RMians on New FF
Thnx for starting it


Nice start
keep updating regularly

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Posted: 13 years ago
#14
Its ur first time and ITS JUS HILLARIOUS dear:-):-) I loved the concept:-) thanks a lot 4 the pm dear:-) cont soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#15
no wonder that was amazing...very nicely written...do continue soon dear...and thanks for pm...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#16
hey dear... it was an amazing start and loved the first part... well this is called tit for tat... well eagerly waiting for veer's ''horrifying'' expressionsss
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Posted: 13 years ago
#17
lovely start dear😃...
and thank you very much for a RT MC ss😃...
sorry i couldn't give a big comment like i always do due to short of time ...
next time surely will give it...pakka
luv u dear...
plz update soon...😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: sweetsanyo

first n foremost...

since u r in india...
so i feel u r very comfortable wid hindi too...
if not, do let me noe...coz u may belong to south india too...
i'm very much comfortable in eng, hindi, bengali...thodi bohot marathi, gujarati, assamese & sanskrit bhi aati hai...😉...toh jis bhi language main comment karna ho toh kar dena..

so i m giving ma comment in mixture of hindi english!!...

very very very very...important item

DO ACCEPT MA FRIEND REQUEST...already did
SINCE U R 18 N I M 16...
so i will call u DI...
i'm surprised..from ur comments i used to think u were in 12th std...well may be i was wrong!

bhot ho gyi bakwaas, ab mudde par aate h...

ud-
haye, aapki writing style dil ko bhaa gyi di...
loved ur writing style... thx so much
abhi ke liye tho aap jarur ek short story se kaam chalalo...

but main ab aapka picha nhi chodongi, jab tak aap ek FAN FICTION nahi start karte...

isliye jii lijiye aapne jingadi ki aazadi, coz bhot jaldi i will nt let u breath till u write a ff,
arre only a free mind is a creative mind don't u know?😉
start thinking of the concept now!!...
it will help in future...

now pakka promise lets talk abt story...enough of future planning...

u noe di, i m damn fascinated abt veer-ananya/ rtmc marriage life...
i lov each n every ff having rtmc married...me too😃

this married couple here is awesome...
loved it like hell...
everything, flashback n present, on 5th floor, down on ground, bedroom n kitchen...
its all very nicely described...shukriya😊

ananya cooks for veer wenevr he is annoyed.
good she believes-PATI KE DIL KA RASTA USKE PET SE GHOZARTA H...

veer is lovely here...
prefect typical husband...

they married coz they were not able to resist each other...
haye main vaari javan...😳

but man, he is gone today,
itna sahi swadissht khana kabhi nhi khaya hoga bande ne...
band baaj jayegi...haha...next part mein pata chal jaega

but she is dead surely wen he returns...
awww...ma ananya's smile is luckycharm for him...😳

but hw cud he leave his such a beautiful wife alone, dat too on sunday...
hw cud he resist her...
well if they wud have made up on Sunday itself toh main story kaise likhti? Plot hi nahi hota! Socho, socho??😆

u r danm soopergood in desc... thank u
i loved reading that bathroom tub scene...
amazing...

plz check out ma friends list...
everyone there is rtmc fan...
they will hell like love ur ss just like me...
little less than me...
coz i declare maself as biggest fan of ur ss now, and also of ur fan-fiction on way...so sweet of u😊

plz plz say yes to fan fiction...plz plz...

or u make dis itself a fan fiction...
For a FF u need time, plot and patience...mere paas teeno me se ek bhi nahi hai..😆

will lov to b friend wid u, talk to u...

even i m a damn solid fan of dv in 21st cen...

but surely content of ur story is different...so different n authentic.
u'l find a reference in the next part

i here by demand few hot n bold scenes...
actually maine alreday story likh li hai...so abhi toh i can't change anything...but married couple hai toh thoda romance toh hoga hi😉


ud sooper soon...
deing to read veer's rxn...

well i feel ananya's lov will not allow him to be rude to her...
after all he loves her, if she evn pretends innocence, he will fall for her...

ud sooper soon.
plz.

n yes pm every one in ma friends list, they almost all r rtmc fans...

lov u n ur story thank u sooo much...luv u too😊

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Posted: 13 years ago
#19
Thanks to all those you pressed the like button and/or commented!
Replies to comments:
@jyoti_I- thx so much for ur comments'urs was actually da 1st comment'.so ur a spl reader to me'well let's see who's in for a surprise';)
@ridzzi- thx so much for ur comments'well dis is not actually da 1st time I wrote'but yes it's my 1st VA story & 1st time posting a story'.even I was disappointed dat 'DV in 21st century' was discontinued'I was eagerly waiting to know anu's past'
Glad dat u liked VA'actually Veer didn't throw water on her'he threw her in the water'haha
Well Veer toh shaitan hai par Anu bhi kam nahi hai'well hope u'll like da nxt part too
@Samu_khamkar- thx so much for ur comments'. glad u r liking da story
@sparksfly-thx for reserving a post?!...well what can I say?...hope u like da story'btw did u keep ur id name based on dat taylor swift song'.i realy like it!
@mddmayuri- thx so much for ur comments'.glad you liked it
@sweetnandu- thx so much for ur comments'.even I miss RTMC'but sorry this is just a SS'glad u r liking da story
@tejjo- thx so much for ur comments'.i don't mind da short comment...aapne time nikalke padha wohi kafi hai mere liye'
Actually I've already written da story'.so it's just a SS'.not a FF
Btw I read ur FF'.it's absolutely amazing!!! '.I don't get to come online much isliye main comment nahi kar pati but I am a regular reader'kudos to u!
@BhartiKhushi909- thx so much for ur comments'.I came to know about ur FF much later'so I have ur FF on my Favourites list'but due to lack of time'I can't read and comment'sorry'but thx 4 da PM
@rashi.rose- thx so much for ur comments'actually I love reading romance and humor'so it's not possible for me to write something dats not at all funny'thx for liking da concept
@Freethinker- thx so much for ur comments'it means a lot to me'especially from a writer like you'I've read ur FF and it's great'wonder how come up with so many twists and turns':)
@neha_dubey1709- thx so much for ur comments'.ab tit for tat toh hoga hi..the name of the story is only payback'
@prahelika- thx so much for ur comments'.i don't mind short comments as long as u do read and comment'hope u'll like da nxt part
Edited by glossyglassy - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi Guys!
Thank you sooo much for your lovely comments! I was seriously not expecting it!
So everyone is eagerly awaiting Veer reaction on eating his lunch but I had already given a hint about that though no one caught it. No worries! Read and find out!
BTW this part has a slight reference to 'DV in 21st century''those who haven't read it needn't worry'you'll understand this story even without reading that FF
Here's the next part!
Part II
"Uff", Anu had messed up her notes for the third time. She was too restless with the whole affair and kept thinking about it. It wasn't as if that she had never played a prank on him but somehow this time her instinct told her what she had done wasn't the best way out. She ought to have a safeguard if he was too raged. "Umm, what should I do?" After a while it struck her. "Obviously, who better than Nivritti mom?" He could do nothing in front of her. Whoever he might be, he was still a Mamma's boy. She decided to call Veer's mother, her dearest mother-in law who always supported her and treated her like her(Nivi's) own daughter.
She walked towards the table and picked up the cordless. Dialing the number, she waited for Nivritti (N) to pick up the phone.
N: Hello
A: Hi mom, how are you?
N: Good gracious! It's you, Anu! I am absolutely fine. What about you both? How are you? What's the matter?
A: We both are fine. Mom, can't I call you without a reason? Well actually you guessed it right. There indeed is some matter.
N: I knew it. What happened? Did Veer say something?
A: No, he didn't. (He actually did something, she thought). We'll talk once you are here. Please come.
N: Ok, as you wish dear.
A: Fine then. I'm having today's lunch and dinner with my dearest mother-in-law.
N: No, your mom (she corrected).
A: Sorry, mom. Come quickly. I need to talk to you.
N: Don't worry. I'll put everything right. OK, Bye Anu.
A: Bye mom.
Ananya kept the phone satisfied that everything was in place now.
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Nothing was in place. He couldn't find his file. He yelled on the intercom, "Ruby, what is this? Where is my file? I have to discuss it with the delegates. Go find it." Ruby, Veer's asst. was a meek girl nevertheless efficient. She remembered placing the file on his desk. She was dead if it was lost. Though Veer was nice to her, she had heard of his occasional infamous temper from her colleagues. She was sure she would personally experience it today. She rallied herself up and knocked on his door. "Come in," came the brusque reply.
She entered the room with fright clearly etched on her face. She looked up to find Veer visibly annoyed and a mess on his table due to his searching. "I am extremely sorry, Sir. But I did keep it on your desk" she said meekly." "So did it fly away, Ruby? Forget it. Now help me find it."
Veer and Ruby began their frantic search. Veer was getting more and more annoyed as each second passed. Ruby knew that and silently prayed, "Oh god please help me. Save me please." "What are you doing? You have to open your eyes to find the file", Veer said clearly frustrated. "Sorry Sir. I was just praying" "Oh whatever." But he himself was pleading to god. It was one of the most important assignments for his firm.
After a few minutes, "Sir, is this the one?" Ruby asked him with a blue file in her hand. "Oh yes oh yes! This is the one! Thanks a ton! You saved me! Ruby" he said holding her hands. Ruby blushed slightly, and said, "This is my job Sir.", and silently thanked god for saving her.
"Since you have done an excellent job, I think you deserve something. So why don't you come along with me for lunch?" Veer asked her.
She was hesitant. Lunch? With her boss? Lunch with her exceedingly handsome and charming boss? "But, Sir..." "No buts. You're coming with me. Anyway, I'm already late for the meeting. The delegates shall be waiting. And as my PA you should be there." He then strode away to talk to their Head.
Then she realized. Of course, he was talking of his lunch meeting with the delegates. Not them alone. She also realized that he was a faithful man. Even though it was nothing more than a lunch, he would never do it. He loved his wife dearly. 'I hope someday I can find someone like him'. Ruby took the files and was about to leave when Veer returned. "Sir, aren't we going yet?" "Yes, we are. You go ahead. I'll be down in a few min." "OK Sir, I'll wait at the lobby."
When Ruby was gone and Veer was alone, he took out a photo of both the leading ladies in his life. His mom and Ananya. "Wish me luck" and kissed the photographs without realizing that someone was watching him. He took his coat and bag and walked towards the elevator. Completely forgetting about the special lunch his 'dearest wife' had cooked for him.
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*Ting tong* the doorbell rang. Ananya quickly went to open the door as she knew it was her Nivi mom. She opened the door to see Nivritti smiling at her. "Come in, mom. Nice to see you after a long time." she said welcoming Nivritti inside. "Nice to see you too, beta. And since you invited me here for the first time, I couldn't refuse. So here I am." Nivritti said coming inside. Ananya flushed with embarrassment," Mom, uhmm'we" Nivritti patted her cheek saying, "I was just joking. I know that you both remain busy. But I'm glad you called me today."
"Mom, I wanted to talk to you."Ananya said as she led her mom towards the sofa. But Nivi cut her off, "Before that, I want to see the house. I know I've seen the house when it was bought. But today, I want to see your home." "Ok mom, welcome home", Ananya said with a wave of hand. "Thank you, beta. Now show me around."
Ananya gave her a tour of the house while sharing all the stories about their arguments on buying that beautiful coffee table and how she had once tripped Veer and he had spilt coffee on the carpet. How they used to laze in their balcony overlooking the main road, on Sundays. How after long hours of quarrelling they had decided on black-white curtains, her choice and a light crme wall colour, his choice. The king-size golden bronze bed was also his choice. "Well, you have to consider his royal blood" Nivritti quipped in on hearing Ananya complain. "So I did" Ananya defended herself, "It's just that it's too big for us. Anyway he loves it. So it's okay." Nivritti smiled at her comment. "And lastly this is our kitchen. It's rather mine. Veer still doesn't cook." "So when are you going to change that doesn't to does?" Nivritti asked her. "I've been trying for the past seven months. I'll succeed soon." "I trust you" Nivritti replied laughing, "Good luck".
"So how did you like our home?"Ananya asked eagerly as they sat at the counter in the kitchen. "It's lovely. The care and effort you both have put in truly reflects." "Thank you, mom", said Ananya smiling at her remark. "And I must say you keep this place pretty clean. I won't believe you if you told me Veer lives here." "It's just that I live here too." she said shrugging her shoulders and added, "He's not that untidy actually, probably because I blackmail him to do his work." "I must congratulate you on that. I could never make him do that. Well I'm sure you have your own ways to threaten him which I couldn't have used." Nivritti said with a naughty glint. "Mom, it's nothing like that" Ananya whined while blushing. "I'll make you some tea." And Ananya turned in an attempt to hide the colour rising to her cheeks. It was getting worse because Nivritti had been exactly right about her ways and she couldn't help think about how Veer would grumble when she blackmailed him by not letting him touch her or completely ignoring him.
In an attempt to change the topic, she gave Nivi her cup of tea and asked "Mom, how come you're a little early? I thought you always visited the orphanage in the morning." "So am I not welcome?" Nivi asked teasingly. "Oh no no, Mom. I meant that was good. I was just...'"Anu hastened to reply. Nivi laughed looking at her flustered daughter-in-law. She kept her hand on Anu's and said, "Dear, I was just kidding." Anu smiled with relief. Nivi continued her explanation, "Actually, someone's sponsored a trip for the children to Essel World. So they have gone there. And I had not spent time with you for a long time. So, I thought I would get to stay for a longer time if I came early and I could also help you with lunch" Anu spoke "Mom, don't worry about lunch. I've already finished cooking" "So early?" "Actually, I cooked for Veer'..", then she trailed off remembering exactly why she had called her mom-in-law.
"Mom, I wanted to talk to you about Veer. It's rather like I need your help." Ananya said nervously. Nivi concernedly asked "What happened? Anything serious?"
"I have actually" she said gulping "badly messed with Veer's food." Nivritti looked at her daughter-in-law carefully. She couldn't help smiling at her guilty face. She humorously asked "And you have invited me to eat the same disastrous lunch?" "No!"Anu said quickly. Nivi rose an eyebrow, "Then why only Veer's?" Anu sighed and recounted the entire incident to her mom-in-law and concluded, "So this was my idea of payback. But I was a bit scared what if he is really angry?" Anu then turned towards her mom-in-law seeking help and saw her chuckling. "Mom", Anu said whiningly. Nivi controlled her laughter and said, "You two are such kids. I think it's time to have one. Then maybe you'll grow up." Ananya blushed. "Well that will be Veer's and your decision," Nivi smiled and continued, "but about the problem at hand, I think you'll have to please Veer."
"Appease Veer...but how?" she pondered aloud. "What do you usually do to please him after you have a fight or something?"Nivi asked her. "Usually'"she trailed off despondently. "What happened'?" Nivi probed. "Actually this won't work because usually I cook his favorite dishes." Anu replied. "Oh!" was all Nivi could manage to say. Both knew that this time food was definitely not the solution. They both returned to thinking of some good plan to wear off the after-effects of his terrible lunch. "Mom" Anu said after some moments. "Hmm" Nivi responded turning her face towards Anu. "What did you use to do when Veer was angry with you?"Anu asked hopefully. "Me? Generally it was the other way round and if he was upset with me, then Dharam would talk to him and pacify him. Or I would make his favourite kheer for him. So'my experience won't help here." Nivi told her and Anu nodded.
"So how would his friends placate him, especially girls or 'girlfriends?" Anu asked a bit uneasy at the end. Nivi chuckled, "He didn't tell me about his friends and their apologies but about girlfriends I know'" Nivi laughed loudly when she saw Anu flinching on news about the 'girlfriends'. "Dear, you're taking it the wrong way." "Meaning?" Anu asked Nivi perplexed. "I meant that I know that Veer never had any girlfriends." Anu was surprised, "Really? I expected him to have many girlfriends." "Actually, he may seem like a cool guy riding a bike and all but he was never interested in girls." Anu looked on excitedly to know more about Veer. "Do you know what Veer thought about girls earlier?" Nivi asked. "What?"Anu asked eagerly. "He thought that girls were like buses and trains. If one goes catch the other, it's no use running after them."Nivi disclosed. Anu's mouth was now open in astonishment on knowing Veer's views. 'I will definitely teach him a lesson' she thought to herself. But Nivi continued, "He even gave this priceless advice to Dharam trying to persuade him not to fall for Sia." Nivi laughed reminiscing, "Thankfully Dharam didn't budge and I gave Veer a good scolding for his stupid ideas." Anu grinned at the thought of him getting scolded by his Mom. She asked, "So...'did his view change?" Nivi smiled, "I don't think that scolding changed his views because then he would have certainly loathed girls since they were the cause behind his admonishment." Anu nodded while Nivi continued, "But I think he has finally found the right bus for his life and he would prefer sitting in it even when other buses are available."Nivi said with a smile and put her palm over Anu's hand. Anu smiled in return having understood the metaphor and said, "Mom, you can be rest assured that both of them (bus & V) are enjoying their journey and heading towards the right destination." "I know that dear, and am sure the road is pretty smooth except for hindrances like this." "True" Anu sighed.
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So here's the 2nd part.
You guys were waiting for Veer's reaction after eating his lunch but I didn't make him eat it only'actually I like Veer too much for his own good'couldn't put him through so much torture'kdng'but he won't be let off so easily'Ananya will have her payback!
Do tell me if you were disappointed or shocked with the twist and also whether you liked this part.
If you have any queries, confusion plz ask! Since I wrote it in paragraph form, you may have a little bit confusion about who said what'but I've tried to use inverted commas properly
If you have any queries, confusion plz ask!
BTW if you find loopholes in the story please excuse them, it's my 1st story':)
Thanks for reading!
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I've colourised the post to avoid confusion with dialogues...hope it helps!😃
Edited by glossyglassy - 13 years ago

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