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shona-li

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Posted: 13 years ago

#71

I really like your writing. It feels more real and less melodramatic without ridding it of it's romantic appeal. What I really loved about this ficlet is that you didn't make anything sexual that would have cheapen the story line, and that even though Arnav is crying, you feel he is a better man for owning up to his faults. Beautiful! Looking forward to reading your works if you ever post them here. If you do, I would love to receive PMs from you :)

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Izza

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Posted: 13 years ago

#72

This was amazing! Loved it 😃

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#73

Originally posted by: Bunny_Bear
Rae it was fab. So very well written and i was stunned by the emotions. Fab yaar. Khushi taking a decision was wow. She needs to do that. And thanks for the pm.

Thank You, Bhavi! :)

I am glad you enjoyed it.

Originally posted by: ...Binny...
Rae.. Just Loved it to bits.. too adorable..:)

I was about to comment when I saw the second part.. Love you for finishing... since I will be gone for the next few weeks.. 🤗

Thank You, Binny! <3 :)

Awww! Good thinking, I guess! Lol! :)

Glad you enjoyed it.

Originally posted by: -Zara-
brilliantly written. greatly described. loved every word. displayed the picture perfectly and surprisingly it didnt disappoint me as i truely felt that arnav should suffer big time for what he did, but the way you wrote this has shown me that if THIS happened i would also have forgiven arnav too.
thank you
xxx

Thank You, Zara! :)

That means a lot, man! Even I think Arnav should repent like crazy but I am glad you felt my plot did justice! :)

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#74

Originally posted by: samiya.tas
That was mindblowing... totally loved it... :)

Thank You! :)

Glad you enjoyed it.

Originally posted by: livy
that was really good. well done. thanks.

Thank You! :)

Originally posted by: tina_1234
beautiful os..loved it

Thank You! :)

Glad it appealed to you.

Originally posted by: -_-harsh42
Wow, Rae...
I've told you before, and I'll tell you again... You're an amazing writer. Especially when it comes to angst...
But thank god you gave a hyappy ending for this... phew..
Or else I'd be scolding you properly for making me cry to sleep... :'(

Loved it, babe... :) :)
Thanks for the pm... <3 <3 <3

Harshu is praising me...I feel goood! ;) :D <3

Thank You, Harshu! And of course I made it happy...I saw Arnav in a sherwani, man! Lol! ;) :D

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#75

Originally posted by: lak4nithi
lloved it..it was amazing..

Awww! Thank You! :)

Originally posted by: LoveFairy2013
loved it... ❤️ one thing I hate about os is that they end so fast...😆

but it was a beautiful os... I could def. see Khushi and Arnav confession to be like this...😍

Hahahahaha! True that! ;) :D

Thank You sooo much! :)

Glad you could connect with it.

Originally posted by: saduf
beautiful
lovely
awesome

Thank You! :)

Originally posted by: -Saania-
That was adorable and beautifully written❤️

Thank You! :)

Glad you liked the plot and my writing style! :)

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#76

Originally posted by: Shruti_P
OMG rae u r just fantastic
now what is left u r a good siggy maker now a writer..
its just...😭...so emotional i had tears in my eyes
now i got the index of your work m gonna read them soon too

Lol! You make me blush! ☺️

Thank You sooo much! I am so glad you liked it but dont cry, yaar! Happy ending di na! :P :D

Originally posted by: smitar
Loved it!

The guy who never says sorry was full of it when she was leaving. Glad his love overpowered his ego!

Thank You! :)

Yep, love always overpowers everything stupid like ego. :D <3

Originally posted by: dumas
awesome beautifully emotionally filled heart breaking and a perfectly done and then the cloud part and hope is given loved that was perfectly written and emotionally felt the hurt the betrayal the anger the love awesome thank you so much for the english translations and the pm

Thank You! :)

I am so glad you enjoyed it!

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#77

Originally posted by: -Shobz.TaAnu-
RES
*comment tomorrow...Coz im yet to read part 2...Bt you know what id say.*
So a precap of my comment
Jahaanpanah tussi great ho.Tuffa kabul ho 🤗
*EDITED*
Ok...pehle to a small suggestion...Try adding the song kitni baatein from Lakshya
with the OS...it suits it amazing...Im saying kyunki I was listening to it. and reading.And beta srsky thodu effect deta hai that one song
Ok so coming to the OS now...
Yaar you make me rack my brains for the best word possible to descrbe your OS...vaise to dhaasu words yaad aate hain lekin while commenting..everything fussh dimaag se gayab.You made me so obsorbed with your OS...
Hayee...Its seriously amazinf from the very beginning till the end...
The moment I saw that it had 2 parts...i rem Hamesha...That one is like your epic.ill always love that more than anything..but this was close to those lines
You had me crying by the end of the part where you describe Arnav saying sorry.i felt like just going there and making them hug each other...But then Khushi did that job amazingly...And the way Arnav consoles himself sayng that shemust leave to be able to get better...that one line put me to the verge of crying out loudly...
The way Khushi handles the whole situation with so much of maturity and sooo much of tneder love it was amazing...Arnav's broken hearted response the way he hugs her and just blurts out everything like a tired and scared baby does it was amazingly scripted...I loved the words you used there...the whole stammering part...whoosh great seriously great
And the very ending...the promise they make to each other of now breaking their trusts and to love for eternity...(well Im guessing they do make this promise even without themseleves knowing) ad ofcourse to give each other the second chance to speak always...Just gave me the perfect ending...
You remember I love this types of ending naa...Not sooo happy not sooo sad...This was another one like that...Love you soo much rae🤗

You had me guffawing at the 'Tohfuu kabool karo' part! Lol! ;) :D

And thanks about the suggestion but I dunno how to add songs! Lol! And besides...I like that the readers have the freedom to choose whatever song they would like to hear as BG. :)

Awww! You still love Hamesha? So sweet! <3 <3 Thats like my ArHi baby! Lol! All of them are my babies but still... :)

I am so glad you liked the ArHi dialogue because that was the crux of this story...if you hadnt been affected by that, then this would have been an epic fail! Lol! :p

I am so happy for readers like you, Shobu! So involved with the work! THANK YOU! :) <3 🤗

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#78

Originally posted by: angelina_angel
good one

Thank You! :)

Originally posted by: Maddy1270
heart-breaking and heart-warming, at the same time... I've always wanted khushi to go away from arnav whether he realises the truth or not, but your version of the unfolding of events seemed so apt. I do commend you on your language and expression... sometimes the grammatical mistakes and incorrect spelling can put one off while reading a story, but loved your style!

Thank You so much!

I am humbled you felt that way. :)

I hope you didnt find any such mistakes here...I try to steer clear of them cos they are pretty irritating while reading...

Originally posted by: meenaluma
amazing os loved it to the core pls pm me for ur future updates

Awww! Thank You! :)

Originally posted by: mandymeggy
that was so beautifully written, thank you for that wonderful read. the characterization was spot on, so was the dialogue, emotions...everything! as per the current track, I would love for khushi to leave arnav and start a life of her own, but this arnav just totally melted my heart :p why can't we see him like this all the time :(

Hahahahaha! Even I cant see him like that!

I was constantly saying to myself while writing this - "Arnav baby! She aint leaving you!" Lol! ;) :D

Thank You sooo much for those kind words of appreciation! They mean a lot and make me really humbled. :)

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#79

Originally posted by: queenyuks
This was a very very nice OS. I loved reading it.
I would like to see the ASR facade crumble at least once in front of Khushi. If there's one person who deserves to see the man underneath the mask its her and this fic portrayed that moment beautifully

Yuks

Truly. Khushi deserves to see the real Arnav...after all she has seen the worst of ASR.

Thank You so much! Glad you enjoyed it. :)

Originally posted by: Inked
Really enjoyed reading it.

I loved how you wove their history of key moments into their present.
Ex. the original 'sorry' scene.

When I have a visceral response to a scene I always feel that the writer must have felt something in their heart when they wrote it. In your OS, this was the moment when we saw what Khushi did with the sindoor. That moment was emblematic.
Well done.

Thank You so much, Maya!

And you are right...this OS is actually pretty close to my heart, as is all my other work, because I just so want Arnav to show Khushi that he cares just once.

I am so glad you liked my work cos I love yours! Lol! :)

Originally posted by: PixieFlame
Amazing <3

Thank You! :)

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#80

Originally posted by: aishwarya_rox
Oh my god !!!! This one of the best best best heart touching os I hv read ...I'm wishing so badly for this to happen in the show !!!!! Hats off to this work !!! Hats off !!!! Do continue writing more oss' ...U're gr8 @ it 👍🏼 ...this is probably my longest comment on IF !!

Awww! You are too sweet! ☺️

Thank You sooo much! :)

I am so glad you enjoyed my work and stopped by to give in your absolutely wonderful humbling comments! Much appreciated. :)