'Intikhaab' A MaYur FF -Completed (Epilogue pg103)

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Posted: 14 years ago

#131

Originally posted by: drfizaahmed

khuda gawa rhay aj humari alfaz ka unhonay bina mangay aj humain jaha day diya

yeah huamri gunaha gar ankhain kya dkh rahin hai janab....un ke tahreer woh bhi humaray naam......pehly is izzat afzai k shukriya....

apn ke tahree hamesha hamain kahin aur hi lay jati hai....as usual khubsoorat, jazbaat se bharpoor...

mayank ny char lines mein kai saal k fasaly saameat diyay....aur nupur ny kahin dafan tamam ehass phir se zinda kerdiya....

lovly ...though it was short....but u updated ..thts really a huge pleasnt surprise...thnku so much for doing so

aur hum umeed kertay hain k ap ab hamain yaha akhsar nazar ati rahin aur apni tahreero mein hamain shamil rkhy...

n BTW..i just loved ur signature

luv ya

wah...kya baat hai ji. humain apni tehreer ka itna gumaan nahi jitne apne readers k tabsira ka ghuroor hai. waqai me kabhi kabhi lagta hai k hum aap jaise readers k liye hi likhte hai 😊 saath dete rahiyega aur itne khubsoorat alfaz k liye shukriya 😊

-Neela

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Posted: 14 years ago

#132

Originally posted by: princez_94
Neeelaa ur back... 🤗

& Ressssssssssssssss...Will be back with probably a loong comment...😛

I soo want to read it NOW.. But i have Uni tomorrow so will read and comment tomorrow....

Editeed...

First of all thank u soooo much for the dedication... & yes i know why... 😛😳

Its really sweet especially a very special update like this... Bohat bohat Shukriya.... 🤗

Okay what do I say... I read it tthree time just to comepensate for ur absence... Every time felt like the first...😳 '

Neela what do i say... Koi alfazhe nahi hai bayaan karne ke liye... Bas yehi kahenge ke bohat bohat bohaaat accha tha... & Again ur my all time favorite writer... Aap ki na hazri mein bohat ff's parhey par koi aap jaisa likhta kahan...

For the story... I find it really cute... How Mayank knows her every little action before she does...😳 Matlab abhi bi dil se dil ka connection hai dono ka...😛 Neela just wow... Ur updates always leave me in awe...👏

This last paragraph was just....😳

kaise bataye aapko k aap hi ki intezar me humnain apne bachpan se jawani ki yeh safar tay kiya'kaise bataye k aap se pehle aur aap k baad kabhi kisi ka khayal bhi hamare dil k paas se nahi guzra'kaise samjhaye aapko k yeh aap hi ki yaadein hai jo ab tak hamare jeene ki sahara bana raha. shukriya..aap hamare zindagi me wapas laut aaye'welcome to Nupur's world Mr. Mayank Sharma"

One thing i noticed was that Mayank when he talks, he talks very freely but Nupur's write or talk she talks with lot of respect... Usually Mayank would be like that since he lives in Us...par bhi it cute...

Mayank say "Tum" Aur Nupur "Aap" 😳 it's really sweet, but one thing does she just give him respect and therfoe she says Aap yah yunhi kehti hai?

What more to say... update parhne ke baad koi comment likha he nahi jata... Just simply amaziing update..

Haan agli baar phir na apni koi dissappearing act karna... Will track u down & kidnap u and bring u back....😛

Waiting for next update already.... 😛 😍 Mayank reply....😳

-Laiba

and yes i'll unres all my other comment on the weekens InshAlllah... I would have done it in ur absence par i didn't want to... Adhura ff parrne ka vbilkul dil nahi tha... But ur back...

itne lamba comment 😃 My My....tum ne to apni tamam reserved comments ki kami bhi poori kar di. Thank you 🤗

About yeh 'Tum' aur 'Aap' ka chakkar...hmm pata chal jayega jald hi. Thanks and keep reading. Aur filhaal disappear honay ka iraada nahi koi. to prove this, next update coming up soon.

-Neela

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-SharNeela-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#133

Originally posted by: Favouriteofall
akhir kaar aap ne hamari tamanna puri kar hi di 😃
aap ne itni umda tehreer hamare naam ki us ke liye aap ka bohat bohat shukriya!

hum khush is liye bhi hain ke pehli baar kisi ne humain is qabil samjha hai.

ab itni umda tehreer ke baare mei hum kya kahein.....is ko parh kar to hamara dil khush ho gaya.

ab bus aap phir se ghayab na hon.........humain bilkul acha nahin lagta 😔

aise hi likhti rahein aur humain khush karti rahein

umeed karte hain is baar aap ka peighaan (msg) jald hi mile ga

tab tak ke liye Allah Hafiz 😊

shukriya ji shukriya! aap haqdar ho ji ...koi ahsaan nahi kiya 😊 bas aaj humnain pahel ki hai..Khuda kare yeh silsila aise hi jaari rahe. aur dua kijiye k phir se yeh naubat naa aaye k humain ghayeb hona parhe.

aap ki umeed ko barqarar rakhte hue...agli paigham bas aane hi wala hai.

-Neela

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Posted: 14 years ago

#134

Originally posted by: aancchal
wow amazing update .

Thank you for your comment. Keep reading..

Originally posted by: Nikita-Sharma
that was a really cute update! awwwwwww i love mayur😳
but it was short!!

anyways thnx fr d pm 😳n plz do cont soon hun😆

Thank you Niki. I know it was short...but I needed to warm up. Hopefully the others will be longer.

Originally posted by: mayur-ki-diwani
BEAUTIFUL PART

LOVED THE LETTER'S

CONTINUE SOON !!!!!!!!!!!

Thank you 😊 Glad you liked the letters...

Originally posted by: kheya-mayur
amazing update neela

doa kore next updte joldi koro

Kheyaaa...kemon acho tumi? Glad you're still there to read my work. tomar onurodh obosshoi rokkha korbo. Next update coming soon...

Originally posted by: anjus_kp
really cute update neela.
looking forward to the next parts.
continue soon

Thanks dear 😊 Keep reading...

Originally posted by: achoose
beautiful update dear.............

Thanks Aswathy...

Originally posted by: sariska_mnarti
Wow neela

finally ur back

superb update

loved their letters

cont soon

Thanks Sariska for the warm welcome. Glad you loved the update

Originally posted by: love.mayurarti
superb....
the letter part was mindblwing....jst luved their feelings n thoughts
loved mayur
cont soon dear

Thank you. Glad you can relate...keep reading

Originally posted by: tasfia123
kahin mai koi sapna to nahi dekh rahi na😲...neela laut ayi uo bhi update ke saath😲😲...jara koi mujhe pinch karo...🤣🤣
ok no more bakwaas😆....coming to the update.....
awesome like as usual...👏
kisne kaha ki ap story bhool gayin...hume to aisa kuch nahi laga.....😳
aww.....mayank laut aya...matlab letter to bheji na atleast.....😛
hayye.hume to aaj tak kisi ne ek fata ua paper bhi nahi bheja......🤣🥺
mayank memorie box😳.......aww.....nupur tum kitni sweet ho..par dekho neela par bharosa mat karna.humesha tum dono ko alag kar deti hai.....
nupur' reply was fab.....keep it up nupur.......😉
i hope jaldi se mayank wapas ajaye aur nupur ko doli me bitha ke le jaye........😍

and how can i forget to compliment those last lines....😳
just loved them......😳😳😳
i missed your shyari more that your update.....😆

pls continue soon😳
love
tashu

Tashu...tum woh pehli reader ho jisse update se zyada shayeri ka intezar hai😆 . kya zamana aagaya hai bhai...anyways...details me jawab nahi de sakti. warna update me late ho jayenge..Im sure even you don't want that. Scrap me milna..

Originally posted by: kirti123
😊wow neela finaly u updated
the letters were really nice
loved the part
thanks for the pm
hope u update soon next part
😊

Thank you Kirti. Next update coming soon..

Originally posted by: -Faria-

Heyyyyyyyyyy neela
Hai ALLAH tumi tou naki tomar bhoot.
]koi din porpor kothai udhau hoye jao boloto????
hmmmmmmm kuch tou baat hain - kyun ki ye gayeb ho jana humari nila bibi ki adat baan gayi hai
very bad habit yaar-kyun bechari readers ko wait karwati ho????

ok bahut hogayi shikayat- ab updtre k bade main kuch bole
hmmmmmm mayanks first letter to nups- it was very nice

hahahaha so maynk nups acchi tarase samjhti hai- kab wo blush kar rahe hai, kab wo kaisa expression de rahe hai - everything.
loved this letter
and abt nups reply- amar ki mone hoy jano ekhane nupurer kichu ovimaan meshano ase.
maynk j etodin ok bhule silo kono jogajog rakheni -eta nups k kisuta holeu koshto diyese

khub khub valo update koreso
kintu plz ei promo size update diye amader heart attack korio na
next time try to update soon

r ekta kotha eibar jodi kono vabe sad ff bananor chesta koro - tahole tomar khobor ase........
purapuri murder hoye jaba.........
tumi jano ei tension a ami tomat ff tjik moto porte parina
mone hoy ei bujhi kono sad type kisu thakbe
.accha jai hok onek kotha bole fellam-tumi tou jano ami abar kom kotha bolte bhalobashiiiiii.LOL

Thank you Faria. Details e uttor deyar shomoy pacchina bhai. maaf kore diyo. shomoy kore debo ne uttor. But thank you. amar mone hoy next update ta tomar aro bhalo lagbe

Originally posted by: Nirvrithi
Hey Neela,

Nice to see you back !!! Hope you had a nice break 😊

The update was really good ,though short..No problem. Sorry for delay in comment.. I have reduced my online time nowadays.

Don't know why - I can't believe that letter was written by Mayank.. Won't believe unless mayank really appears infront of Nupur and says the same thing!!!😉 Tumhara Mayank ka koi baroza nahin😆

Thanks Nivi. tumhari shakk karne ki aadat kab jaayegi. ab daal diya na mushkil me...Mayank ko kahan se laaoon 😆 intezar kar...doosra aayega 😆 😆

Originally posted by: ...Mahak...
Hey Neela,

Its great to see you back!

Yaar sabhi log letters padhkar, reactions guess kaise karte hain?? I always feel the same thing!

Wow.....mayank guesses her reactions so easily....same like me and my friends...

And i loved the entire update.....but the thing that stole away my heart was ur ending lines...

I mean Nupur's thoughts as well as four poetic lines.......they just somehow touched a chord in my heart....

I am glad that i could read such a fantastic work.

Miss you :)

-Mahak

Mahak...lol. A writer's feedback...ignore kaise kar sakte hai. to tumhari writings me bhi aisa hi hota hai kya?? Good...and about the 4 lines..errmmm well it starts from Qayenaat. Lots of readers loved the shayeris so I decided to continue the trend as part of my siggy after each part. Do quote if you love them. Thanks Mahak...missed you too

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-SharNeela-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#135

~~~~~~~Part 6: New Arrival~~~~~~~

It has been days since Nupur sent that letter to Mayank and there is no response yet. Nupur spends each and every moment lately pondering on what may have happened to the letter.

…abhi tak to pohunch jaana chahiye tha! itna waqt thori na lagta hai? kahi inn logon ne hamari letter goom to nahi kar di na! Rehmat chacha se poochna parega

and the next moment she is standing in a small office of the main post office. Rehmat is the post master and in charge of the post office in this town. And just like everyone else, he too is very affectionate towards Nupur since she was born.

N: Rehmat chacha!! aap ne hamare khat kya kiya?
R: arre bacchi pehle baith to zara! hamesha toofan ki tarha aati hai aur aandhi ki tarha chali jaati hai. Bhushan kaisa hai bataa. kahi din hogaye usse mila bhi nahi
N: (gets impatient) chachaaaa…aap humain batayye pehle khat ka kya kiyaaaaa
R: khat ka kya kiya matlab kya hai beta? post karne k liye diya tha to post kar diya hoga!
N: hoga!! hoga matlab kya chacha? aap thik se batayye..
R: arre mera matlab yehi hai k khat maine khud apne haathon se daal diya tha. kyun kya hua? aur yeh kya tu 2 din baad baad me aake khat ka poochti rehti hai. aakhir kya hai uss khat me ke itni fiker horahi hai tujhe
N: (now starts blushing…what is she doing!!! iss tarha se to saare sheher ko pata chal jayega Nupur ne Mayank ko khat likkha hai. So quickly making an excuse as if nothing happened…she leaves) accha chacha…chalte hain…ghar ayyega, baba aapka pooch rahe the

Back in college and Nupur continues to ramble…more like Nupur calling Nupur conversation..

N:…agar khat chala gaya hai aur usse mil bhi gaya toh!! woh kya soch raha hoga? kahi kuch ulta sidha nahi likh liya na tune Nupur
N: arre nahi…kitni daffa to woh khat parha maine. aisa kuch nahi tha
N: to phir jawab kyun nahi aaraha? zaroor woh upset hogaya hoga
N: arre upset kyun hoga? yeh kaho k janab k paas time nahi hai tumhe jawab dene k liye
N: time nahi..shayed usski zindagi me hamari koi ahmiyet hi nahi (she sighs)
N: haan…yehi baat hai. 10 saal baad kisiko koi itna bhi to yaad nahi rakhta na k usska ek khat aane se hi kudd k jawab de do
N: per Mayank aisa nahi hai
N: tumhe kaise pata!! 10 saal se to mili nahi ho usse
N: mili nahi to kya hua? humse accha usse aur koi nahi jaan sakta

While she was having this life time conversation with herself, completely oblivion of her surrounding, suddenly she gets a push and falls on the floor immediately.

N: abbay…kaun hai. dikhayi nahi deta!!!
..as she looks at the stranger who is busy collecting his pile of books from the floor
S: o madam! dikhayi to tumhe nahi de raha!! itna bara college ka corridor woh bhi khaali para hai…side me se nahi jaa sakti thee jo aake dhakka de diya!
N: humnain dhakka diya?? humnain??? (she is furious)
S: nahi ji…aapke bhatakti hui aatma ne dhakka diya. dekho kya kiya tumne!! mere saare notes idhar udhar hogaye
N: arre tum ho kaun? kaun ho? pehle to nahi dekha yahan..
S: dikhayi to abhi bhi nahi de raha hoon tumhe! 5'10" ka banda 6ft ka kitaabon ko dukaan leke saamne khara tha, dikha kya tumhe?
N: kya mussibat hai yaar! subhe subhe kis akroo se paala parh gaya. lagta hai poora din kharab jaayega
S: kuch kaha kya?
N: JEE NAHIII
S: aha..to khud se mohabbat bhari guftghu agar khatam hojaaye to madad karo meri. waise bhi pichle 1 ghante se library dhoond raha hoon. kisiko nahi pata…lagta hai yahan koi parhne nahi aata, mauj masti karne aata hai
N: oyee…zubaan sanbhal k baat karo. yeh shiksha ka mandir hai, yahan har koi parhne hi aata hai
S: accha! to meherbaani karke aap hi bata dijiye yeh library kahan milega humain?
N: apne aankhon se yeh chashma hatao aur saamne dekho…yeh hai library
S: arre yeh hai library!! per main to yahan se kahi baar guzra mujhe kyun nahi dikha?
N: aqal ki andhe ka koi ilaaj nahi
S: kya kaha?
N:nahi maine kaha shakal se to intelligent lagte ho…library nahi dhoond paaye!
S: ab tumhare yeh itna sa college ka itni si library agar aise kaune me para hua ho to kisiko dikhayi kaise dega..
N: abbay…(as she points her finger right next to his nose) hamare college k khilaaf agar ek aur lafz bhi bola na to shakal aur aqal dono se aandha kar denge hum tumhe
S: mujhe threat de rahe ho?? mujhe??…
N: haan..haan tumhe! andhe ho ..isi liye dikhayi nahi de raha shayed k yahan pe sirf tum hi ho
S: tumhe to main…rehne do..waise bhi dair hogayi hai mujhe

…and he rushes his way from there with his heavy load of books as Nupur watches him leave.

N: yeh kaise ajeeb kism k log ab college me dikhne lage hai…huh! dair hogayi humain bhi to..

She runs to her classroom and sits next to Diya. After the brief chitchat, the lecturer, Mr. Shukla enters and the class begins. But after 10 odd mins, someone interrupts the class.

S: May I come in sir?
Sh: kaun ho bhai?
S: Sir main yahan ka naya student hoon
Sh: (looks at his watch) naya chattra ho to itne bilamv se kaksh me aane ki karan samjhao
S: haan?
Sh: late kyun ho?
S: kya karoon sir, raaste me ek paghal ladki mil gayi. ussi ki wajah se itna late hogaya
Sh: aaj tumhara pratham divas hai isi liye kshama karta hoon. ab kripya apna aasan grahan karke humain kritarth kijiye
S: (enters the class mumbling to himself) yeh kahan aagaya! teacher se lekar student tak saaron ka screw dhila lag raha hai.

..and as he approaches the classroom he notices Nupur who looks furious as she blows her own hair from her forhead and the girl sitting next to her who is staring at him. All this gives him a chill..as he prays to God
- meri raksha karna iss paghalkhaane me!

After what seemed like a very long day, Nupur comes home to find that there is a letter waiting for her.

~~~~Neela~~~~~

aazamayishon ka daur hai…guzar hi jaayega
aap ko paane ka junoon…rooh pe utar jaayega
dasht e tanhai ka sabab door tak jaati hai
aap per bhi kabhi yeh asar kar jaayega

Edited by sharneel - 14 years ago

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.SilentPrincess

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Posted: 14 years ago

#136

Resss... Yay! First one to comment... Parh kar edit karon ghi...

Aur Neela itni jaldi... Hum Hairaan reh gaye hai... 😲

~~~~~

Neelaa... How do u do this every time?? 😳 😍

Amazing update... I really liked it, we got to see a different type of Nupur... The one In KAJ & Qayeenat was also differen but they had similarities i found thsi Nupur different... Mere khayal toh koi shy, reserved, quiet se hogi... Especially at the start... Lekin yahan wow... U surprised me Neela...😲

I loved her welcome gift to the new student... Awesome.... 👏 Btw hai kaun woh? S for Samrat or something else..? I'm actually looking forward to their encounters, it was fun reading their first convo... Simply amazing Neela...😆 👏😳

Aur ek aur letter... Finally Nupur ko chain ke saans lene ko miley ghi... Bechari ko kitna satathi ho Neela... Very bad haan...

But finally letter aya, dher sey sahi aya to sahi... I want his response, usski koi wapsi ki koi khabar?

Anyways Neela u don't need words to describe how a Fabulous writer u are... 😳 I always look forward to ur updates... Enjoy reading every word...

Aur aapki shayari bhi humne bohat yaad ki.... Itna accha update aur uppar se usse bhi acchi shayari... Uff... Wonderful... Bohat ala.... 😳

Waise I've this one very imp. Question.. Tumhe updates Letter's ke time par he kyun rokhne parta hai? 🤔😛

-Laiba

Aur haan... Be prepared to read such long speeches every time... 😆

Edited by princez_94 - 14 years ago

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manjeet

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Posted: 14 years ago

#137

awesome update

luved nupur talking to herself......luved nupur n dat strange person scene n whos dis guy???

cont soon

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fiza ahmed

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Posted: 14 years ago

#138

kya baat hai janab ...itna quick update...shukria app ka..

dasht e tanhai ka sabab door tak jaati hai
aap per bhi kabhi yeh asar kar jaayega

this is sooo awesum one of urs ...truly..

aur update ...gr8 one..pehli bar pata chala k neela comedy bhi likh sakti hai..😆.sab ko moo band..😉ap kahay koi neela ko tragedy queen...wasy pata nhi humain asa khabhi bhi nhi laga

anyways abt update....sweet loved the new arrival....gr8 ...nupur was soo sweet in this..special nose pointing wala part..

lovly...

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kirti123

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Posted: 14 years ago

#139

wow u updated early

nice part

thanks for the pm

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556195

Hibernated

Posted: 14 years ago

#140

hey neela..........🤗🤗
thanks so much ki tum pehle jaisi neela ban gayi jo fata fat update karti thi.....

now coming to the update.........😃
it was awesome as usual.......👏
fantastic.......
aww......nupur ti besabr horahi hai.................😳
mayank ne abhi tak reply nahi kiya...
dekho neela......i am warning you.........agar tumne is bar koi sad ending dene ka socha bhi nato mai na tumhara murder kar dungi........🤢

aur yea banda kaun hai.......samrat hai kya??😕
ya phir mayank........???⭐️par mayank ihan kaise asakta hai..........usne letter bheja to sahi😭
samrat hi hai na???
aur iski aisi entry......😲
i am sure tum last moment iski shadi nupur se karwa dogi😆
dekho mai tuhe yaad dila dun tumne kaha tha is bar ending ka faisla tumhare readers karenge.........😳

arey bohot dhamki de di na......
acha chalo aaj ke liye itni kafi hai............😳

aur uo last lines.......😆
hayye........kisi din na mai fidaa ho jaungi.......😍
awesome part as usual....😃

continue soon
love
tashu

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