Originally posted by: star_fan
WOW that's what escape from my mouth when i have read the first paragraph, it's written amazingly.
I was thinking that i should stand and clap for writing but i didn't.....................................[Will complete the sentence in the end of my post.]
How sweet hehe aww ur cho chweet! thanks thanks thats practice thing for my english exam... just imagine if it was in ur tv wohow will be great!! the highest TRP haha lolz joks
Let's see what i think after 1st paragraph.
hmm intresting i wanna know!
Warning: Unlimited questions going to be shoot on you, be aware and i am hating to say this, even i can't say this but avoid to answer them as well. *Nahiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii* in dramatic way. 😒 And if it's going to little difference of length between your part and my post then don't mind it and to make the distance long, write more longer part.
warning taken but have no idea which type of questions u will ask whether sum will be like i need to answer or not if u know wat i mean...n i dont have any prob with ur length of comment i love it...
Oh it's Riddhima's birthday, Happy Birthday to her and Happy 1st Anniversary on IF to you. 🤗
Ok get back to main work. For three characters relate to Riddhima are Shashank, Umar Kaka and Gloria. Ok now would like to tell what's cooking ? About what Gloria asking Shashank to tell Riddhima ? 😳
Hmm cake, i can have a little piece of it. lol 😉 Wow amazing gift, when i am going to have such birthday gifts. *sigh* 😔
ofcourse see celebrations for my day n used it in the ff.. of course i wont tell u wats cooking.. cause even i havent figure t out yet well have a bit but havent thought much about it
NOOO its all for me me me.. lolz aww dont worry u will hopefully
Oh the excited girl forget to change her nightie even or did she ? If she did change it then you haven't mention it.
no she did forgot to change her nightie so i didnt missed anything
Uff she scare me, i thought accident going to happen and Shashank will be no more bit it didn't happen like this. When they got safe and there was a car in front and she got out of the car then my guess was right as it's Armaan, i am doubting it can be Rahul also but when it turn to be Armaan then i did jump imaginary with happiness.
i know scary init... no tragerdy wont happen that quickly..
haha lol yep it is see i learnt frm my mistake n they met on the first day no delays like in DKC
no rahul will be on next one.. will see it probably be rahul muski n atul's entry in the next part
lol i can imagine u doing that lol
Before moving feather, i like to say that after first paragraph, when she wake up to here, it's greatly written. I mean the way you write about her happiness, sadness, excitement and the first expression in car *exciting and thrilling* and then nearly accident one expressions *shocked and frightened*. Love it the way you have written all that. Superb done !
thanks i wanna say lots of thank u backs but im out of words i dont know urgh lol THANK U SOO MUCH!
aaawww hehe im a expression queen lol... i luv u a lot yaar soo sweet of u!
From Armaan's entry. Blue jean and red shirt, i love it. My blue eyes boy as always in naughty mood, mischievous smile and as usual world's naughtiest mind. Amazingly defined. Btw why he was hiding his tattoo, if he have made them ?
lol my blue eyes boy haha.. yeh he has the world's naughtiest mind! so true.. i dont know felt like saying that like u know i wanna make it look like he is careless person.. i like it when handsome boys have one sleeves rolled up n other just hanging.. just imagine n that too red n that too two top buttons opened n THAT TOO ARMAAN!! ksg!
Finally Armaan and Riddhima such interesting interaction in part, Yippee ! 😆 You know what 'I LOVE IT'. It was just FANTASTIC. *Muahh* girl ! It was so interesting and FULL ON enjoyable.
THANK U!! i full on enjoyed this.. i loved it i love ur comments soo sweet yaar dont give me too much compliments i will faint
Oh it's amazing, they were checking out each other. You did awesome job in writing that part.
haha thanks.. KaSh meets n they dont check eachother out.. never
When they all start conversation then it's so hilarious, ROCKING ! SUPERB !! Give a pat on your back for writing the dialogues and those names. They surely remind me of KaSh nok-jhoks. 🤣 This Pakka KaSh FF, written in so typical KaSh type. You know what I WANT TO THIS STORY ON MY TV SCREENS RIGHT NOW.
glad it worked i mean all these nok joks n stuff i can imagine cause i was doing the same reading it again n again.. thanks i did gave a pat on my back would have looked wired but then i did lol
wat u think i want to add sum lines that orginally said by KaSh in DMG in here do u think that will be alrite? i mean wont be like copying...? i wish i can show this on ur telly right now... well wat to do will need to wait for that
you stupid gavar.... dehathi he was cool dude through you description. She is calling with such words a cool dude.😆
so right she is.. u know no body is perfect front of her
Love it when he said oh that's great... toh I'll see you later and she like KYUN ? Poor girl irritate by him. 🤣
Haha Shashank stop her from hitting him. Calm down girl, he is your hero so be easy. But it's funnyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy 🤣
lol yeh inviting himself lolz good plan armaan to irritate ur newly found friend/naigbhour lolz... u see in this ff ridz is not a patient girl like typical riddhima lolz
Ok now back to my questions, how he know her name and when she did told him ? Who is Jai uncle ? Armaan and Riddhima had met in childhood or fixed to marry each other ? 😳
well i think it have given few hints how he knew her name.. she didnt told him.. thats why she was suprised... wait for it u'll get to know in next part... good guess but not quiet
Back in Gupta Residence Definitely it's written greatly. Well done job. 👍🏼 Aww Riddhima being cho chweet while saying to Gloria woh Armaan 'whatever' who the hell does he think he is' Gloria' it's only you who cares about me... I love you Gloria... I love you' happy birthday to you to
she is always sweet nno doubt abt that... n on emore thing she is so nice towards even her servaints not like some spoilt rich kid u see on dramas lol.. she is spoilt but she knows how to love... well u can say she immature too...
Btw why Happy Birthday to her too ? You didn't mention it before nor about the party in which Armaan had invited himself ? (See, you need to update fast so then you can escape from my such useless questions becoz it's going to uncover in next part and i can't wait for long and long.)
i mentioned sumthign like that when gloria was singing happy birthday in her bedroom didnt i... if u still have the q wait for the next part.. urm well a rich person's daughters party that too 21!! so must be a bash na... n its also kind of show how well he knows them sumhow..
WOW a red (Armaan's favorite Sauce Wala Laal) suit, haha ! She will regret wearing that. woh bloody idiot' I'll see him tonight' you just declared a war Mr. Armaan Dehathi' Uff war but in true meaning she is waiting for their meeting. (See she is waiting eagerly so can you fulfill her wish and write the next part more soon) but awesomely written.
hehe ur so right n u seen wat happened to her na.. now she will never wear a red thing ever again in her life n specially front of him... but she will choose a diffrent colour white.. wait n see wat will happen then lolz... lolz spot on.. without them even realising they r in love now they need to understand each other.. n etc
Armaan's house Aww so sweet brother and sister relation. I love it totally. You got full points in writing it and the dialogues are mind blowing.
thank u soo much glad it was good n yeh that too wasnt personal experience u know na me by my self
Anjali ' did you GOT invited or did you invite YOURSELF? *MUAHAHAHAH* to this dialogue, i love all the dialogue but for this one you got extra marks. 🤣 She knows her brother so well.
she should know him na lolz akhir they r twins who born NOT on the same day... armaan was a delay baby haha... i should write a diaoluge on that abt armaan being a delay baby.. n riddhima pulling his leg abt it..
Why meeting Shashank Gupta is a good news for both siblings ?
*Cough* *Cough* not you but I know uncle really well, what does it means and then secondly she mention Armaan being a stranger to Shashank ?
And why she ask how is Ridzi ? Can anyone tell me what's going on here ?
well if i tell u now what would be left for next part hun.. lolz i know i know u dont wont me to say n i wont tell u either im not that stupid haha... urm that she knows shashank.. n then shashank dont know armaan..
well wait karo yaar next part to update.. wat that saying sabar ka pal meeta hotha hai or sumthing
WOW chili powder love this name the most. 🤣 Totally suited. He knows she declared a war. Oh i am eagerly waiting to that war, coz i know it going to so interesting.
lol chilli powder in red lols🤣it suits he rna see me too getting good after armaan.. it will be soo interesting.. all the way it will be those haha
Armaan ' sweet my left foot's tiny winy little toe What's that ? 🤣 Hilarious line but definitely i love it.
enna raskala' mind it'Shahrukh Khan's duplicate! 🤣
look at ur left foot's the tiniest toe.. thats what he means.. mayb a foot dosent worth it lol... he is in a good way he is the badshaa in tellywood
Riddhima being Anjali's good friend, Can you explain it ?
will get to know in next part
Armaan's room: Red and White Combination, definitely it has to be my favorite (you know why ?). WOW perfect Sweet and Sexy. Love it ! I have to slut your mind. 👏. His room described amazingly. Wooh Basketball champ is here, is she also knows to play BB ?
yeh i love red n white too soo thought that up n i know its bit girly u know all red n white.. anyways abt sweet n sexy thats wat define him for me. he is sweet still sexy (irrestible) he got the both
haha beware boys the dude is here lols.. well for that u wait n see how she gona win over the basketball champ...
Balcony part, do i even need to say that i completely love it. I am totally 'fida' like the way you written it. Beautiful and Brilliant !
Haha she going to hit him through towel. 🤣 Great, she realize the logical fact before using her energy. She must have killed him, if she was given a little chance. 😆 But you know i love it.
THANK U! aww fida over it? soo sweet
yep she is not that stupid too lol bit mature then hehe
yeh thats why i think i shouldnt update the next part quickly cause they will be given a chance then... to bite each others head off
Again FANTASTIC conversation. Awesome dialogues and expressions greatly written. 🤣
Ok i am not going to mention the lines, as it getting longer. BUT i love the dialogues, LOVE IT ! LOVE IT ! LOVE IT ! Back to back conversation between them. You ROCKED !
yeh i dont want this riddhima to be shy all quiet girl she is open n know how to tackle everything... or mayb she just be like it front of him u know na u feel comfy fighting with sum1 u feel to be good with or u think u have the right to... thank u thank u thank u... i know rock on...
I think should mention in short go.
not bad chili powder you remember my name hun'? 🤣 Hilarious, i can imagine him saying it in style.
good thats what i want.. good girl lol
what to do I don't have a bad memory like yours you see'. Its Riddhima not chili powder' 🤣Wonderful reply. LOVE it, totally her style.
oh my god wow' so now you're trying to be my favorite'. Impressive This definitely my most favorite. I knew he won't leave this chance but i wasn't hoping them to have a interaction before party so i thought she will wear in party but it's COOOL !
he cant i mean such a pretty lady front of him looking irrestiable like him n cute n wearing RED n its Riddhima in red.. u see R.. how can he let go of it... lols.
na she will wear sumthign else to the party.. which make her think she needs to change her whole wardrobe cause of armaan.. they will have sum interaction before the party.. im still thinking the scene
NAUGHTY Armaan wanna make a jealous. 🤣 well bye, bye Miss Chili Powder' my SWEETHEART is calling me for breakfast excuse me' He won this one with this line.
And and and the end Riddhima's confusion part, WOW it's best one...LOOVVVEEEE her confused state and you have written awesome.
Funny guy...sweetheart kaun girlfriends or wife'ARE YOU MAD! .... chimpanzee' drunk Riddhima! ....his jungle life' ARMAAN MAKHIJA! 🤣🤣🤣 CLASSIC !
i know i love it too the guy make her jelouse then she is confused.. dont worry she'll take her revenge.. n mayb it will be BAD for him.. u see.. n then u will get wat i mean...
Overall, the part is written amazingly and i totally love it. It's most interesting and enjoyable. You are writing brilliant here. I have already mention the things i love in it.
And so my things need to be unclosed soon. Don't know how many twist and turn have in your suspense full mind.
lol OVERALL ha... thats wat u have said all the way..? no critizes common there should be i know this is not the perfect best one.. THANK U SOO MUCH overall then... lolz aww pinch ur cheeks for me will u! *no mahu pinch ur cheeks harder*
but i didn't..................................... But i wanna stand and clap for you for writing such awesome part with amazing writing talent. Give yourself a BIG HUG from me for your writing. 🤗LOVE IT !
Thank u i gave one when i came home or else in the library hugging myself would have looked wired na lolz... thank u soo much....
Wanna read it very soon so for that you need to update it more soon. Please update Part 2 soon. I am waiting eagerly !
no updates frm me this week srry.. although i have so many things (scenes) stuck having a traffic jam in my head then i have 4 days works to catch cause of my no internet then i have the english exam on comming monday n thurday so all that my life is a big mess so will be updating next week friday as im home most of the day or thursday afternoon cause im home all day lol no skl!!
I know the length of my post is long, so sorry for that. 😳
as i said earlier u dont need to be cause i like it this way!
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