MISTAKE - AR [mini] - PART 01 PG15 - IMP Note PG19 - Page 12

nice part lali.. :D AR bickering was too good,.. :D

Originally posted by: star_fan

Updated my post. Check out the comments ! :)

Originally posted by: star_fan

WOW that's what escape from my mouth when i have read the first paragraph, it's written amazingly.
I was thinking that i should stand and clap for writing but i didn't.....................................[Will complete the sentence in the end of my post.]

Let's see what i think after 1st paragraph.

Warning: Unlimited questions going to be shoot on you, be aware and i am hating to say this, even i can't say this but avoid to answer them as well. *Nahiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii* in dramatic way. 😒 And if it's going to little difference of length between your part and my post then don't mind it and to make the distance long, write more longer part.

Oh it's Riddhima's birthday, Happy Birthday to her and Happy 1st Anniversary on IF to you. 🤗

Ok get back to main work. For three characters relate to Riddhima are Shashank, Umar Kaka and Gloria. Ok now would like to tell what's cooking ? About what Gloria asking Shashank to tell Riddhima ? 😳

Hmm cake, i can have a little piece of it. lol 😉 Wow amazing gift, when i am going to have such birthday gifts. *sigh* 😔

Oh the excited girl forget to change her nightie even or did she ? If she did change it then you haven't mention it.

Uff she scare me, i thought accident going to happen and Shashank will be no more bit it didn't happen like this. When they got safe and there was a car in front and she got out of the car then my guess was right as it's Armaan, i am doubting it can be Rahul also but when it turn to be Armaan then i did jump imaginary with happiness.

Before moving feather, i like to say that after first paragraph, when she wake up to here, it's greatly written. I mean the way you write about her happiness, sadness, excitement and the first expression in car *exciting and thrilling* and then nearly accident one expressions *shocked and frightened*. Love it the way you have written all that. Superb done !

From Armaan's entry. Blue jean and red shirt, i love it. My blue eyes boy as always in naughty mood, mischievous smile and as usual world's naughtiest mind. Amazingly defined. Btw why he was hiding his tattoo, if he have made them ?

Finally Armaan and Riddhima such interesting interaction in part, Yippee ! 😆 You know what 'I LOVE IT'. It was just FANTASTIC. *Muahh* girl ! It was so interesting and FULL ON enjoyable.

Oh it's amazing, they were checking out each other. You did awesome job in writing that part.

When they all start conversation then it's so hilarious, ROCKING ! SUPERB !! Give a pat on your back for writing the dialogues and those names. They surely remind me of KaSh nok-jhoks. 🤣 This Pakka KaSh FF, written in so typical KaSh type. You know what I WANT TO THIS STORY ON MY TV SCREENS RIGHT NOW.

you stupid gavar.... dehathi he was cool dude through you description. She is calling with such words a cool dude.😆

Love it when he said oh that's great... toh I'll see you later and she like KYUN ? Poor girl irritate by him. 🤣

Haha Shashank stop her from hitting him. Calm down girl, he is your hero so be easy. But it's funnyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy 🤣

Ok now back to my questions, how he know her name and when she did told him ? Who is Jai uncle ? Armaan and Riddhima had met in childhood or fixed to marry each other ? 😳

Back in Gupta Residence Definitely it's written greatly. Well done job. 👍🏼 Aww Riddhima being cho chweet while saying to Gloria woh Armaan 'whatever' who the hell does he think he is' Gloria' it's only you who cares about me... I love you Gloria... I love you' happy birthday to you to

Btw why Happy Birthday to her too ? You didn't mention it before nor about the party in which Armaan had invited himself ? (See, you need to update fast so then you can escape from my such useless questions becoz it's going to uncover in next part and i can't wait for long and long.)

WOW a red (Armaan's favorite Sauce Wala Laal) suit, haha ! She will regret wearing that. woh bloody idiot' I'll see him tonight' you just declared a war Mr. Armaan Dehathi' Uff war but in true meaning she is waiting for their meeting. (See she is waiting eagerly so can you fulfill her wish and write the next part more soon) but awesomely written.

Armaan's house Aww so sweet brother and sister relation. I love it totally. You got full points in writing it and the dialogues are mind blowing.

Anjali ' did you GOT invited or did you invite YOURSELF? *MUAHAHAHAH* to this dialogue, i love all the dialogue but for this one you got extra marks. 🤣 She knows her brother so well.

Why meeting Shashank Gupta is a good news for both siblings ?
*Cough* *Cough* not you but I know uncle really well, what does it means and then secondly she mention Armaan being a stranger to Shashank ?
And why she ask how is Ridzi ? Can anyone tell me what's going on here ?

WOW chili powder love this name the most. 🤣 Totally suited. He knows she declared a war. Oh i am eagerly waiting to that war, coz i know it going to so interesting.

Armaan ' sweet my left foot's tiny winy little toe What's that ? 🤣 Hilarious line but definitely i love it.
enna raskala' mind it'Shahrukh Khan's duplicate! 🤣

Riddhima being Anjali's good friend, Can you explain it ?

Armaan's room: Red and White Combination, definitely it has to be my favorite (you know why ?). WOW perfect Sweet and Sexy. Love it ! I have to slut your mind. 👏. His room described amazingly. Wooh Basketball champ is here, is she also knows to play BB ?

Balcony part, do i even need to say that i completely love it. I am totally 'fida' like the way you written it. Beautiful and Brilliant !

Haha she going to hit him through towel. 🤣 Great, she realize the logical fact before using her energy. She must have killed him, if she was given a little chance. 😆 But you know i love it.

Again FANTASTIC conversation. Awesome dialogues and expressions greatly written. 🤣

Ok i am not going to mention the lines, as it getting longer. BUT i love the dialogues, LOVE IT ! LOVE IT ! LOVE IT ! Back to back conversation between them. You ROCKED !

I think should mention in short go.

not bad chili powder you remember my name hun'? 🤣 Hilarious, i can imagine him saying it in style.
what to do I don't have a bad memory like yours you see'. Its Riddhima not chili powder' 🤣Wonderful reply. LOVE it, totally her style.
oh my god wow' so now you're trying to be my favorite'. Impressive This definitely my most favorite. I knew he won't leave this chance but i wasn't hoping them to have a interaction before party so i thought she will wear in party but it's COOOL !

NAUGHTY Armaan wanna make a jealous. 🤣 well bye, bye Miss Chili Powder' my SWEETHEART is calling me for breakfast excuse me' He won this one with this line.

And and and the end Riddhima's confusion part, WOW it's best one...LOOVVVEEEE her confused state and you have written awesome.

Funny guy...sweetheart kaun girlfriends or wife'ARE YOU MAD! .... chimpanzee' drunk Riddhima! ....his jungle life' ARMAAN MAKHIJA! 🤣🤣🤣 CLASSIC !


Overall, the part is written amazingly and i totally love it. It's most interesting and enjoyable. You are writing brilliant here. I have already mention the things i love in it.
And so my things need to be unclosed soon. Don't know how many twist and turn have in your suspense full mind.

but i didn't..................................... But i wanna stand and clap for you for writing such awesome part with amazing writing talent. Give yourself a BIG HUG from me for your writing. 🤗LOVE IT !

Wanna read it very soon so for that you need to update it more soon. Please update Part 2 soon. I am waiting eagerly !

I know the length of my post is long, so sorry for that. 😳

Originally posted by: brainychild92

happy 1 year on IF. must be exciting..lol ridz reminds me of tia ahuja from remix.. actually a lot of this reminds me of remix.. im gonna like this..lol i'll catch up wtith all ff later as im really bzy but couldnt resist this..lol

Originally posted by: LaLi17

thanks i did will reply soon luv u for it not in that way 😆

Originally posted by: LaLi17

phew would atleast take me 2 days to reply

Originally posted by: star_fan

You welcome. Love you too..I know we don't do DOSTANA 😉
haha we never...
You should have read the warning. lol 😉
Well i didn't took me write the whole long post in 2 days then why it take 2 days for you to reply. 😆
Btw I am sorry for long post and bothering you. 😳 As i was excited and emotional wasn't in control so wanna write my full heart.
i red it no worries but i dont know which q to answer n which to not.. lols
lol mayb u were way to hyper n it was just coming out of ur fingers lol
hehe no thats because im a late latif too... take like months to do stuff 😆
no need for srry cause i love u when u write long post left a smile on my face for hours althoguh i do look like smiling maniac... lolz u dont need to kk cause the longer the comment is the more boost it gives me to update n then more comments too.. lolz