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Posted: 16 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: manatated

hey nice update dear!

must say suspense is taking it's toll!
i hope yeh mishra naina ko phasa naa de and Raj yaa koi bhi ho par usse bacha le!
yaar in ur fic naina is soooo innocent that usske saath ab kuch bura ho to achcha nahi lagega!
And you....Update JAL JALDI kiya karo yaar.....yeh suspense raato ki neend le jata haišŸ˜‰



hey, thanks a lot.. Its a big compliment for the writer when you say the story has started to take a place in your daily activites.. 😊

Naina masoom zaroor hai.. lekin kamzor bilkul nahi hai.. I have not really given a character sketch as all characters reveal themselves in situations.. in later chapters, you will see Naina even stronger than probably Raj.........
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Posted: 16 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: Mahak Sinha

Hey i will take some time to reply



Sure.. looking forward to it!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#43

Originally posted by: prerna1

that was wonderful

let see what happen next
plz continue soon



Thank you.. second half of chapter 3 maybe put up tonight.. I am still pondering about it, as I am unsure about it.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Nice part. U wer ryt I got all my ans. But abhi iss situation se zyada mujhe Raj ki emotionless behaviour se bura lag raha hai. I'm missing his smile. I'm really eager to knw wat has happened to him. Lekin jo bhi ho I luv this character of his. When he said no innocent shud be punished-that was really nice of him n when he said-Good job cadets, I was feeling so happy dat he definitely knws to appreciate others.

Aalekh n Hudawer really nice. Specially Aalekh coz he understood Naina was not at fault. But that Dr. Mishra is interrogating Naina which is no gud thing. Now w8ing 4 the next part to cum up soon.



Thank you.. Raj bohuth akela hai. He has seen quite a bit in life and thinks its best to hide his emotions from everyone.. His past will also be revealed in due time.. Of course, there is someone who is going to teach him to live life šŸ˜‰

Alekh does feel that it was wrong to trap Naina just to make their plan a success. But still, he did not oppose Huda. That is another facet of Alekh's character, he is practical to a fault.. But someone will soon give a bigger challenge to him and he once again has to decide between his head and heart... 😊

Next part.... soon!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#45


In a couple of hours maybe..
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Posted: 16 years ago
#46

Originally posted by: himalayanyeti



In a couple of hours maybe..



Great...i can't wait..!!!😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Dhara_s



Great...i can't wait..!!!😃



Here you go......
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Posted: 16 years ago
#48
Hey all,
I am back with the next part of chapter 3. I cant believe I write each chapter so fast that there is an update almost every two days!!! šŸ˜›

This chapter is quite intense and personally I am unsure of how it will be received by my readers. Do comment on it and let me know if you feel I have gone over the top with it. I personally feel this chapter is needed to provide the background for the next 2-3 chapters.

Here we go with chapter 3B..........

Warning: This chapter contains mild violence. PG-16 advised.

Part 3b

Present…

Ganesh Ram was pacing restlessly in his room, thinking about everything that happened during the day. Hey bhagwan, yeh kya ho gaya? Bechari Naina, bohuth darr gayi hongi. Brigadier Chandook bhi KMA mein nahi hai. Uss khadoos Major Nair Naina ko nahi chodega. Kal jab uski interrogation hoga, woh Naina ko bohuth pareshan karega. Mein ek kaam kartha hoon, mein abhi Naina se miloonga. Uski himmat badaunga, hosla rakhne ko kahunga. Haan.. mein abhi KMA jaatha hoon.

***

50 minutes ago…

He leered at her and with a lecherous smile on his lips, extended his hand to her, "Hello pretty young thing. I am Lieutenant Dr.Mishra".

Naina watched him warily; he did not give out good vibes to her. She ignored his out-stretched hand and stared at him, waiting for him to start his enquiry. She kept looking at him, clutching the sheets and watched his eyes harden. He slowly came and stood next to her and placed his hand on her right hand. She visibly shivered, disgust rising in her due to his touch. He prised her hand roughly from the sheets, not bothering that he was hurting her. She looked up at him in shock. He then caught her hands in his and almost crushed her delicate palm in his handshake. "Jab mein haath badaa raha hoon, tujhe bhi wohi karna chahiye", he spelt out slowly in a chilling voice. She grimaced at the pain that shot up her arm and tried to twist her hand to free it from his hands, but he only crushed her hand harder. Unable to bear the pain, she cried out, "Chodiye hamara haath. Dard ho raha hai". He immediately left her hand and she wrung her hand to lessen the pain.

He sat on the bed quite close to her and Naina moved a bit, uncomfortable with his closeness, to put more distance between them. "So tell me. Who informed the guards of the weapons?", he asked. Naina looked up at him puzzled and replied earnestly, "I do not know. I don't even know who kept the weapons in my car in the first place. I have no idea what is going on here"

"Mein batha tha hoon. I kept the weapons in your car. My men would have then taken it from your car tonight and delivered it to the highest bidder. Lekin tuu ne…" he caught her hair and shook her violently, "tuu ne mera plan ko chaupad kiya. Bol… kaun hai tera aadmi? Kiske kehne par tu yeh sab kar rahi thi? Who do you work for? Bol"

Naina looked at him in shock. He was the traitor. He was the one who smuggled the weapons. She caught his hands and tried to get him to free her, but he only shook her more and more until her head spun and her teeth rattled. "Hume.. hume.. kuch.. nahi.. patha hai.. Hum.. begunaah.. hai..", she stuttered. He left her hair and slapped her hard, then again, and again and Naina tasted the coppery taste of her blood in her mouth. Tears streaming from her eyes, she folded her hands in front of him and pleaded, "Hume chodiye. Hum kuch bhi nahi kiya. I don't even understand what you are saying. I do not work with anybody".

He pulled her to her feet and caught her arms in a vice-like grip. "Bol kaun hai tera saathi? Kisko patha hai mere baare mein? How did you come to know that I am planning to smuggle the weapons in your car today? Bol…", he kept shaking her. "Hume.. kuch.. nahi patha hai.. Please leave me.. Humare Nanu intezar kar rahe honge", she pleaded once again. He slapped her again and tightened one of his beefy hands around her throat, the other clutched her hair tightly. "Dekh.. Mera time waste math kar. Jaldi bol. What did you guys think? You will stop my plan by getting arrested, stay here happily and tomorrow once I am caught, your partner will come and release you? Mein aisa nahi hone doongha.." She choked and coughed, trying to force the air through her throat. "Please.. please.. leave.. me.. I.. don't know.. any.. anything", she tried to force the words out of her mouth.

For the first time since the ordeal began, Naina experienced fear. Horrible, terrible, complete fear…

***

Present…

Raj unlocked the door to his quarters and immediately checked the thin thread he had tied from the handle to the door frame – one of the many small tricks taught by his mentor.

"Dekho Raj. Sometimes the safest place is where you live, but it doesn't take long for it to be become the most dangerous too. Usually a person is relaxed when he is home and it becomes very easy to surprise him then. A soldier should never be lax. He should always be on his toes, no matter on the battle-field or off. Samjhe?"

He could still clearly hear his mentor teaching him tricks of the trade while taking long hikes through the forested hills behind KMA. Not allowing his mind to get way-laid by the old memories, he quickly went over to the windows and checked them too. Sweeping his house for any signs of intrusion and checking the other small 'traps' he had placed throughout his house, Raj was finally done after a good ten minutes and allowed himself to sink into the couch in the living room, unbutton the top few buttons of his uniform and relax. It had been a long day and at last he was home.

***

20 minutes ago…

He left her throat and caught her wrist, twisting it behind her back. "Aaahhhh…", she screamed. "Kitna chillana hai chilla. Koi nahi ayega yahaan. Subah se pehle tu khudh maan logi ki tuu ne yeh smuggling ki. Bol kya kahogi..", he twisted her hand some more. "Aahhh.. Nahi.. Hum kuch nahi kiya.. Yeh galat ilzaam hai".

"Yeh mujhe patha hai, tujhe patha hai. Aur kisko patha? So tomorrow you will be accepting the charges. Whatever anyone says, you will accept every charge, even in the court. Bol karogi naa" he pushed her on the bed, her knees catching the edge of the bed and with a loud scream she crumpled on the floor.

He gripped her hair and pulled her up once more. "Bol, kal kya kehna hai?" "N.. nahi.. hum aisa nahi karenge" "Tu kahegi. Zaroor kahegi", he slapped her twice more and pushed her to one side. She stumbled and fell near the writing table, banging her forehead against the edge of the table. She held her head, praying to God to help her out of this and before she knew, the world blackened around her.

***

Present…

He was half-stretched on the couch, his eyes closed, his thumb and middle-finger pinching the bridge of his nose when he heard the quiet knock on the door. Raj crossed to the door, pulled the door open slightly and stepped aside to give way for Huda to enter. He shut the door behind him and waited for Huda to state his report. Before he could start, they heard another hurried knock. Raj opened the door to reveal Alekh.

"Sir, the whole day Dr.Mishra was in the infirmary. But a little birdie told me he looked very, very upset throughout the day", Huda chuckled. "What's the report, Cadet Alekh", Raj expressed his disinterest in Huda's usual gossip and directed the question at Alekh.

"Sir, apun ko lagtha hai, kuch gadbad hai. Uss ladki ka entry, log book mein nahi hai. Apun dono KMA aur main gates ke log books check kiya. Lekin entry nahi tha…"

Before he could continue, Huda cut in triumphantly, "Dekha.. She is also part of this operation. That's why she managed to fool the guards from making her entry". He fell silent at a single glance from Raj.

"Sir, kuch entry tha. Lekin kisine sabooth ko hata diya" explained Alekh. "How can you say for sure, Cadet Alekh?" asked Raj. In reply, Alekh just took out two notebooks from inside his uniform and opened today's page.

"Nishaan hai, sir. Kisine ek page ko nikal diya iss book se. Dekhiye" and showed the pen impressions to Raj. He glanced at Alekh once before turning his attention to the books, "I hope you have just borrowed the books for a short while, Cadet". "Ji, sir", Alekh replied with a straight face.

"Aur haan, woh ladki ko abhi cellar mein rakhe gaye hain", added Alekh.

"Sir, it could also be Dr.Mishra who had the page removed. As he did not want anyone to know about the girl coming to KMA today", argued Huda. "He could have also done that to frame her. Anyway, where is Mishra now?" Raj asked Huda.

"Sir, Dr.Mishra abhi apne quarters mein nahi hai. Meine doonda unhe. Kahin nazar nahi aaraha tha. I could not search the yard behind the staff quarters as there were a lot of guards around there. Lagtha hai shift change ka time hai", he shrugged his shoulders.

Raj glanced at his watch and immediately stood up, buttoning his shirt and ushering the cadets out of his quarters. "Shift change gyarah baje hota hai. Ab saade baara baje hai. Something is wrong"

***

10 minutes ago…

Naina drifted into conscious when she felt water splashed on her face. She moaned once, wondering if she had left her window open and gone to sleep and the rains have started. Or maybe Naren Kaka's sons were up to their usual mischief. She was feeling unnaturally tired. Her body ached everywhere and she only wished to turn over and go to sleep, but looked like someone had placed tonnes of weight over her head; her head pounded and hammered mercilessly. She moaned again, trying to open her eyes and jerked when she heard the cold irritated voice, "I can't keep waiting the whole night for you to wake up".

You are under arrest… Espionage against the nation… I am Lt. Dr.Mishra…

I am not yet out of my nightmare. Please God, save me from him! She implored the Savior, while the terror came rushing into her once again.

Try as she might, she could open only her left eye and that too, the vision was quite blurry. She tried blinking once, twice but it only served to increase the white-hot pain in her head. She became fully awake though, when Dr.Mishra slapped her hard. That was when she noticed herself, lying on her back on the bed, both her wrists handcuffed to the railing of the bed above her head. She looked up to see the outline of Dr.Mishra's face quite close to hers and turned her face sideways on impulse. He immediately grabbed her jaw and yanked her face back towards him.

He grinned lasciviously at her, "Maana padega. Kya cheez hai tuu". Fear clouded her eyes once more and it seemed to raise the kick for the evil Dr.Mishra. He pulled away her dupatta and ran his eyes over her curvaceous body. "So where were we? Oh yes, you were caught smuggling weapons out of KMA. Interrogation ke samay par, tuu ne apna julm kabool kiya. Aur tho aur, apna saathi ka naam bhi bataaya tuu ne. Wohi iss operation ka master-mind hai. Right?", he coolly stated, lighting his cigarette.

She did not answer; she did not know what to answer. The torture was killing her, but accepting taht she was a traitor will suck the soul out of her once and for all!

He brought the flame from the lighter very close to her eyes, so close she could feel the heat almost singing her lashes. She tried turning her face away to protect herself when he once again caught her jaw and held her face in place. "Right?" he repeated, switching off the lighter and crushing her jaw with his hands. Tears streamed down her eyes and ran into the sheet under her while she kept mum.

He left her jaw and towered over her, very close to her. "Ithna zidd seheth keliye acha nahi hai" and he ripped the kurta from her body. She screamed.

His eyes roamed over the exposed upper body and she closed her eyes in shame. She was disgusted with herself. Hey bagwaan, humari jaan lelo. Bas.. iss rakshas se hume bachao.

"So what do you say", he once again asked, coming close to her. She tried to mould herself further into the cot when she felt his breath on her face. He went mad with fury when she did not answer him; she had simply closed her eyes and there was no expression on her face. She was just waiting for the Lord to come and take her life to save her from this dishonor. He took the cigarette stub from his mouth and pressed it hard on her chest. Her eyes flew open but she did not scream. She did not have the energy to even scream.

He was getting impatient. "Well, if you are not going to say anything even during interrogation, it's fine. You will still be considered guilty and nobody will start digging in deeper. Fine with me, atleast let me have some fun for a while", he shrugged his shoulders and covered her body with his. Naina flinched when she felt his burden on her and felt like insects crawling over her wherever he touched. He ran his hands roughly along her curves and reached for her chudidhar knot when he froze.

"What do you think you are doing, Dr.Mishra", came the furious voice of Captain Rajveer.


~Yeti


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Posted: 16 years ago
#49
Hey nice update..šŸ‘
šŸ‘Hmmm.
Poor naina..
Finally naina and raj are meeting...

Keep writing dear..

Takecare
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Posted: 16 years ago
#50
God !! what an update!!! I was crushing my hanky while reading it,itna tense thi main ! So funally Raj's arrived.... Hope it's the end of Naina's ordeal for now atleast.... update soon...

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