Unprecedented Ending!!(RN short ff) last part

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Posted: 16 years ago
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here is a short ff on RN which i wrote...the genre of this fic is pathos....i have also posted it in the RP FC...


PROLOGUE


DEATH- such a painful word...it only brings sorrow, agony and misery.

The pain of separation is too much for the living to bare...especially when we lose our loved ones. We often wish to bring them back, back from the dead, alter this law of nature, change the fact that once dead, nobody can come back, everyone has to die someday and each one has to die their own death.

Death is so cruel that it leaves a void, a pang of emptiness in the people who are left behind.

No one actually realizes that it also brings solace to the person enduring it. It removes him/ her from the worldly torture and transforms them into a different world where they r no longer mere beings but r entities..they r souls...

They do not have any kind of craving..any kind of lust...just they are pure souls, pure entities who look upon humans as puppets who dance accordingly as their strings are being pulled.

Well death is an inevitable guest who cannot be ignored. Surely no one actually wishes to pay heed to it but neither can they ignore it.

*****

"ahhhhh!!!" her shriek filled the whole academy.

******


the next part will be posted tomorrow....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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ye accha hai pehle khud hi hasaao...aur phir khud hi rulaaao bhi........its aint my fault ke baad ye ff....gr88888888....u hv described everything sooooooo well.....i mean i dont think anyone looks at the other side of death d way u hv described here....but even them when we think deeply we'll realise that its so true.....absolutely true....hats off to u dear......such deep thoughts..!!!!!!!!!! excellent....10 stars to u....cont soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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update was seriously very nice
u explained death so well
update soon

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Posted: 16 years ago
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that sounds so good
nice start
plz continue soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Too good!!!!!Awesome!!!!!
Death was very well described!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏
Why did Naina scream??😕 😕 😕
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hi
nice intro
sounds interesting
update sooooooooooooooooooooon
do pm me
luv soumya
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: watch rajeev

ye accha hai pehle khud hi hasaao...aur phir khud hi rulaaao bhi........its aint my fault ke baad ye ff....gr88888888....u hv described everything sooooooo well.....i mean i dont think anyone looks at the other side of death d way u hv described here....but even them when we think deeply we'll realise that its so true.....absolutely true....hats off to u dear......such deep thoughts..!!!!!!!!!! excellent....10 stars to u....cont soon



awww...this comment was so flattering😳....thanku for such a lovely comment and appreciating my work😊...


Originally posted by: rituka7

update was seriously very nice
u explained death so well
update soon



thanks rituka...


Originally posted by: prerna1

that sounds so good

nice start
plz continue soon



thanks prerna...


Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Too good!!!!!Awesome!!!!!

Death was very well described!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏
Why did Naina scream??😕 😕 😕




thanks shai...ab there is nothing too mysterious abt this fic...it s all abt their mindset and emotional turmoil...


Originally posted by: saridena

hi

nice intro
sounds interesting
update sooooooooooooooooooooon
do pm me
luv soumya



thanks soumya...


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Posted: 16 years ago
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@everyone...

thanku guys for reading it...now this fic may not turn out to be a fairytale...i am trying to make it as realistic as possible😊....

and yes all the pics for this fic has been provided by shaina......shai thanku so much😃🤗....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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PART-1

There was a buzz in the whole academy. There were a series of events taking place and no one had a clue as to what was happening.

The hearings had taken place and captain rajveer was declared a traitor. The favorite rajveer sir of the students of kma was declared a culprit and no body could prove against it. It seemed like Rajveer had also dropped his weapon.

He silently heard all the accusations.

His friendship with navin….

his favoritism towards the six cadets in particular…

his attatchment towards cadet naina 'ah' singh….

all these were brought under suspicion…..

The students wanted to protest….stop the lawyer from making false claims….stop the investigation….but….

He remained silent…..

Captain rajveer singh shekawat did not deny any of the accusations…..

Anyone not closely observing him would say that he had accepted defeat….but his eyes held something else…

pain…


pain of betrayal…

guilt of not seeing the visible truth for so many days….

His eyes were read by two people in that room….but each one interpreted it in a different way…..their own understanding…..

Naina and aalekh had seen that passing emotion in his eyes…

Naina(in her mind)- why sir!!! Why are u not denying these claims. Please atleast to protect ur honour, to maintain ur integrity, for once please deny that u ever loved me…please atleast once…please…


Aalekh(in his mind)- apun jaanta hai sir aapke saath dhoka hua hai…par kaun hai woh? Kisne kia yeh sab? Ek baar bol dijiye sir…apun jaan ki baazi lagake unhe saza dilwayega…

Finally the sentence was passed…he was court martialled and was to be sent on 14 years of imprisonment……

Before passing he stopped at the doorway and watched her for the last time…watched her as she cried her heart out on the shoulders of aalekh….

this was a painful goodbye…..




His eyes read….goodbye naina…..sorry that I failed….sorry…

****

"ahhhhhhh" she cried again as she laid in Dr.shalini's infirmary.

She was again given an injection and she slipped into unconsciousness.

She was surviving on sedatives for the last 2 days. Naina was uncontrollable in the past 2 days. After that terrible accident which took rajveer's life naina was not her own self…always lost…lost in thought and also in soul….

Her friends visited her daily as soon as their punishment was over. They were punished for helping or rather trying to help a traitor…

traitor….

oh how they detested that word when it was used for their mentor.

They took turns to look after her. All were terrified at her plight. She was not the same naina…..they all wanted to comfort her but could not gather up the courage to do so…

What were they suppose to tell her…

No one could replace her loss…

she lost her friend, her mentor, her guide, her love,

her……life.

Occasionally pooja would also cry at naina's condition. She was sorry for misunderstanding naina. Ali was there always to console pooja.

Yudi was again restless. He was in a confusion as to how he could do something…anything to reduce her pain….glad that there was shalini who understood his position…

Huda was now sure that naina never was his…she belonged to him, her rajveer sir…

their's was not just a physical attraction…they shared something more than that…something so pure that not even words could succumb….he was now detemined to help her in any way he could.

The only person who was as helpless as naina was aalekh…he was in a different turmoil…..naina ….his friend…the only person he considered as a family was now on the verge of a great break down….he wanted her to come back and he knew that would be possible only if 'he' comes back…..

That was not the only reason for his misery…the look in captain rajveer's eyes….that told volumes…something aalekh saw shook his world…the revenge that his eyes held…the agony of betrayal….aalekh recognized it coz it was something he had come across amongst his mates in jail…..

He knew something was out of place…

but wat?????????

wat was that loose end?????????

where should he start????????

whom should he turn to help???????

no one could be trusted…but he will try…he should try…for rajveer sir…for naina….for justice…..

****

the next night…

"pagalpan ki hadh hoti hai naina" he tried reasoning with her.

"mujhe jaana hoga aalekh...." she replied adamant as ever.

"tujhe pata hai kya bak rahi hai tu?" aalekh was furious after he heard her plan...

plan…she calls it a plan…it is nothing but madness….in her desperation to find him she has gone insane……

Naina was agonized after the accident. She refused to believe that he is no more.how can he leave without even meeting her properly, she had so much to tell him…they haven't even sorted out their feelings yet and now they claim all of a sudden that he is dead. Even that thought pained her to the core.

Even now the way he had hugged her once in his room and then the fatal final hug still remained in her memory… it was etched in her heart so much that even today as she thinks of him, his feel captivates her senses….

She had also realized the fact that he knew about the traitor. Only if…only if he had told her, given her a clue they could've fought back. They could've won this battle. They could've have survived….together!!!

But now as the truth is still hidden and he has gone 'missing, so she has taken it upon herself to bring him back…back even from death. She knows that she can do it coz as long as there is breath, there is hope and naina only wishes that his breath still remains and that she is not too late.

"pata hai…mujhe…main jaa rahi hoon aur tu mujhe rokne ki koshish bhi nahi karega..."

"toh tikk hai main bhi chal raha hoon tumhare saath…chal"

"nahi aalekh tu nahi chalega…tujhe abhi abhi punishment se chutkara mila hai aur main nahi chahthi ki tu dobara phase…islye main akhele jaoongi…"

"bakwaas mat kar…ye sab waise bhi apun ke liye naya nahi hai….main bhi chal raha hoon…"

"nahi…ye meri ladai hai aalekh…sirf meri….tu nahi aayega aur tu rajveer sir se kiye vaade ka paalan karega…is vardi ki maan rakhega…"

"par…"

"par var kuch nahi aalekh…tujhe meri kasam…main lautkar aaoongi aur unhe bhi saath laoongi…."

"apun ki baat toh sun yaar…naina! Naina!" well his screams fell on deaf ears. She was far from gone and reluctantly aalekh went back into the academy hoping that she would be alright.

When naina climbed the walls of kma in the night away from the sight of the orderlies and guards making her way into the jungle…all she thought of was 'this fight is far from over'.


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Posted: 16 years ago
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Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!!
Raj had been declared a traitor!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭O no!!!!
Raj's eyes held the pain of betrayal and guilt of not realising the truth!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭
Matlab Raj samaj agay tha ke usse kisne betray kiya hai!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 😔
Naina is thinking ke why is he not denying these claims and wants him to deny it!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
Aalekh has figured it out ke Raj ke saath dhoka huya hai and wants to find out ke woh kaun hai!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊Good for him!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊
The last time he looked at Naina that was sooo emotional!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭
Naina is uncontrollable!!!! She has lost everything!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭
Pooja ko sambhalne ke liye Ali hai aur Yudi ko samajne ke liye Shalini!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊Magar Naina ko samajne wala naa jaane kaha chala gaya!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭
Kam se kam Huda realised that Naina was never his and belonged to Raj only!!!!!
Aalekh wanted Naina to come back but that is possible only if Raj came back!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
Aalekh wants to find out and wants to help but how!!!!!😕 😕 😕 😕
Poor Naina!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭Maan he nahi paa rahi hai that he is no more and wants to go and find him!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
Naina has also realised that he knew about the traitor!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊
Raj ne kaha tha ke ek sipahi apne akri saans tak jung ladta hai aur jab tak woh ek saans baki rehti hai umeed baki rehti hai aur jab tak umeed baki rehti hai sipahi jung nahi chhoda karte!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
Naina Aalekh ko nahi leke gayi aur kaha ke woh wapas aayegi Raj ko lekar!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊Kya pyaar hai!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏
Edited by Shaina_b - 16 years ago

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