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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: sweet.dreamz

Ahem Ahem........wat a wonderful and exciting way to start an update........excellent arwa and this excellent is exclusively for the start.......hehehehe......if u begin giving such starting to every update,i guess dusri fanfics ko band karna padega........all readers of india-forums would be glued to ur fanfic........hehehehe😃 - thanks and oh no i wouldnt want that nahi to sab mera gala dabaenge hehehehe

........this was a hilarious part all over.......from rajveer's asking for shirt to his lisps while talking to naveen........hahaha😆 - i'm glad i was able t make u laugh

.....and i must say inke parivaar waale bade sahi hai.......now i'm in love with gehlot..........he,now that type.........u see respect.........i don't believe in dating such aged men........😛😛 - of course completely understand dear. I didnt want to make Gehlot the villain in this one too.

.......cumin back to start......u r going to make all ur readers day dream..........if i sat in my economics class, day dreaming it will be thoroughly ur fault.............hehehehe - well my dear thats what i do all the time so thought why shud i only suffer.😉

..........naina's nail marks were so deep that they actually hurt rajveer when he was with gehlot.........and definitely bahut exercise karli.....bechara bhaag bhi nahi pa raha tha.............this proves too much passion is bad for health..............hehehehe😃 hmmm a lot at one time can surely be too much

......and did naina tell everything to neelu......with everything i mean EVERYTHING............- well she didnt tell her the details but just the basic thing

and why was she acting so dumb......europe trip mein toh naina ko kaphi bold hona sikha rahi thi............ - are wo to sirf sikhaarahee thee lekin Naina ne to kar dikhaya

hehehe.....maybe she too needs an experiance with Aalekh...hehehehe......😉...unki love-story ka bhi kuch karo......... - yeh wil lsurely bring them up too

and to sum it all it was an excellent,mindblowing,fantastic,awesome.......etc etc. - thanks a lot dear.

........update.....looking forward to the next update...........take care...👏






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Posted: 17 years ago
Thank you very much nihatri and prerna1 for ur lovely comments.

Originally posted by: crackpots86

Gosh.... i just cant beleive i missed d previous update...so wen i started reading ch 16, i was like" wat d hell is happening...????" den i went back back back to see that i had missed part 15....- oh u did, i thought u already had commented. anyways im glad u read both now.

anyways...both d updates were full of Nautanki...sometimes i wonder whether u r d same person who writes Lost and Ek Ajnabi...and wen i read romantic scenes from both d fics, my doubt is cleared....seriously girl, u r a pro at them... - hehehe i also wonder sometimes. Thanks for appreciating my work so much
rajveer was just hilarious during d railing n d terrace part.......also after 'ahem ahem'..... - wat can i say he's just the best
well i expected his dad to be THE VILLAIN, but he sounds cool at present... - i cud see why but i thought of not makign it too dramatic anymore and just get them together now.

i just couldnt stop laughing while reading d whole navin- raj part....it was awesome... - thanks dear i'm glad i was able to make u laugh so much.
update soon...
love,
dhara....



Originally posted by: yyyy

This update was fantastic...my fav part till now... - thanks alot


Hey Bhagwaan yeh hamne kya kardiya....(pretending to feel really bad) Ek baar nahi do baar...Naina tumne mujhe kahi ka nahi chora
(he dramatically put his hand over his forehead) "

This dialogue was so funny..raj is just too much😆....the first half was passionate one and second part was hilarious....raj punched navin's face 😆..hehe...he was lucky navin didn't mind too much.... - i'm glad u found it hillarious and enoyed it.

But i seriously feel something might go wrong i hope not gehlot agreed to the proposal so quickly....that's strange but that jogging part reminded me of salman and twinkle movie.... - oh dont worry now things will only be good and nothing bad. Yeh i actullay did get the idea from that movie.

are u ending this fic??please continue soon - yep i'll be ending this soon.



Edited by arwa72 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
Arwa ,


update is fundooo !!! 😛 that Navin n Raj's part is hillarious😆 yaar kabhi kisine apne honewale saalesahab se aisi baat nahi ki hogi..........m happy that finally they r together.

n that jogging part is too good.so Mr.Gehlot r all set for Raj's marriage cool 😛😃 waaise Rajveer ji ke liye ek salah hai......

' Over exersise is injurious for health !' 😉

well i need to say that update asap..........
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: vvdn

Arwa ,


update is fundooo !!! 😛 that Navin n Raj's part is hillarious😆 yaar kabhi kisine apne honewale saalesahab se aisi baat nahi ki hogi..........m happy that finally they r together.

n that jogging part is too good.so Mr.Gehlot r all set for Raj's marriage cool 😛😃 waaise Rajveer ji ke liye ek salah hai......

' Over exersise is injurious for health !' 😉

well i need to say that update asap..........



hey thanks a lot

i'm glad u had a great laugh reading this part and yeh kisine nahi ki hogi hehehehehe

hmmmm yeh salah to har koi de raha hai ose 😆
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Posted: 17 years ago

awesome update again yaar.👏

Raj to Naina ko dekh kar jara bhi control nahi kar paata hai apne aap ko, 😳 that was so beautiful n romantic.😉

Raj k dad aur Naina ki mom ko dono par shak ho hi gaya 😉 aakhir aur Raj k dad ne keh hi diya ki pehle pata hota to kab ki shaadi ho chuki hoti dono ki aur ye sun kar Raj kitna khush ho gaya tha 😆. Raj ko us k dad ne acchi daud lagvai hai maza aa gaya.😆

Navin liked Raj after what happened,😆 nice yaaar.
update soon.
Edited by varshita - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: varshita

awesome update again yaar.👏 - thanks alot

Raj to Naina ko dekh kar jara bhi control nahi kar paata hai apne aap ko, 😳 that was so beautiful n romantic.😉 - ha bilkul nahi karpaata and i'm glad u liked the part

Raj k dad aur Naina ki mom ko dono par shak ho hi gaya 😉 aakhir aur Raj k dad ne keh hi diya ki pehle pata hota to kab ki shaadi ho chuki hoti dono ki aur ye sun kar Raj kitna khush ho gaya tha 😆. Raj ko us k dad ne acchi daud lagvai hai maza aa gaya.😆 - well parents are parents now arent they? hehehhee yeh his dad thought of teaching him a gud lesson.

Navin liked Raj after what happened,😆 nice yaaar. - thanks once for the appreciation
update soon.

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Posted: 17 years ago

Hello dear,😊

mai is baar bhi late hoon i know yaar par mai kya karoon mai yahan thi nahi na kaafi dino se.😕

Raj aur Naina ek doosre ko jalane me lage hain Archie aur Huda is kaam se hi Naina aur Raj k peeche lage hain.😉

I like the way Naina Raj ko finally jealous karna me sucessful ho gayi par kahin aisa na ho ki vo kisi musibat me fuss jaaye kyounki ye Huda bahut gira hua insaan hai.
Edited by desaiprachi07 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: desaiprachi07

Hello dear,😊

mai is baar bhi late hoon i know yaar par mai kya karoon mai yahan thi nahi na kaafi dino se.😕

Raj aur Naina ek doosre ko jalane me lage hain Archie aur Huda is kaam se hi Naina aur Raj k peeche lage hain.😉

I like the way Naina Raj ko finally jealous karna me sucessful ho gayi par kahin aisa na ho ki vo kisi musibat me fuss jaaye kyounki ye Huda bahut gira hua insaan hai.



hey thanks for reading and i can see how ur still at the beginning.

yeh yeh jalaane ka kissa to kaafi dore tak chalega im afraid
hmmm and it finally does work.

Wo to hai hee geeraa huwa
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!Mindblowing!!!! - thanks very much

Raj toh Naina ko paas mein naa pakar usse dhoondh raha hai!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 - cant stand the distance

Raj Naina ko sirf shirt mein dekhke just went mad!!!😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️He was staring at her beautiful and sexy legs!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ - hmmm aakhir yeh to bigra huwa Raj hai to wesa hee hoga na

Raj bahut naughty hai!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊Usko abhi uski shirt wapas chahiye!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 - just luvs being naughty

Naina is really feeling concious and trying to cover herself up!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 - modesty is still left in her

Raj and Naina are so romantic!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ - oooooh no doubt in that

The song is very nice and just perfect for the situation!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 - thank you

Well Raj ke saath bitaye huya raat ka nasha itni jaldi kaise jaa sakta hai!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ - of course not haiiiiiii

It was very hot and passionate!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ - hmmm yes it was

Naina is crying and trying to hide har guilt ridden face!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 - poor girl so much happened too fast

Raj ne kaha yeh humne kya kar diya ek baar nahi do baar aur Naina ne usse kahi ka nahi chhoda!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - he knows how to lighten up the air

I loved this dialogue!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏He is just too much!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳Ish situation mein bhi mazak kar raha hai!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 - i'm glad u did and yeh he can be serious very few times

I am glad this was not made melodramatic but was put in a light way!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 - yeh i wanted to make it light
Now Naina is hitting him but then he comforted her as he underatands what she is going through!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 - he is human after all

He said woh ek dusre se beintehaa mohabbat karte hai aur duniya ki koi takat unhe juda nahi kar sakti!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️Wow kya dialogue mara!!!!👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 - apna Raj hai hee dialogue maarne waala

He is right ke yeh usse mohabbat ka hissa hai and he does not care about the world!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 - haaaai pyar karne waala ho to aisa

Raj iske baad bhi keh raha hai ke Naina hamesha itni hot lagegi toh kaun waqt pe dhyan rakhega!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ - hehehhe nahi sudrega yeh

He is so naughty and funny!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆Iske baad bhi Naina ko chhodne ka naam hi nahi le raha hai!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 - ek number ka naughty baccha

Naina is right!!! 😊 😊 😊Woh besharm hai, badmaash hai aur zaalim bhi hai!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊But I still love him!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ - we all do honey

Naina jab chhodne ko kehti hai toh kehta hai kitni pyaari lagti hai aise!!!!!!😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️He is in no hurry at all!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 - ab itne mushkilo ke baad kilee hai to phir ose jee bhar ke jee le na

He is saying ab mere zulm sehne ki adat dalnee paregi!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️But Naina also knew how to outwit him and ran off!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - aakhir wo bhi to kuch kam nahi

Towel dene ke bahane ab bathroom mein bhi ghus gaya aur Naina ke saath nahana bhi chahta hai!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 - ab kya kare he has just not got enuf of her yet

He got aroused again when they had fallen into the bathtub but Naina is cleverer than him aur akhir bhaag hi gayi!!!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - heheheh that was just to escite al of u guys again and came the funny part

Neelu is shocked to hear that Naina spend the night with Rajveer at his flat!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲Kaha yeh qadam uthane se pehle soch sakti thi!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 - it defintiely was news for her

Neelu toh trip pe Naina ko bahut bold hone ki advice deti thi ab kya huya usse??😉 😉 😉 😉 😛 😛 😛 - hmmm she didnt expect her to be so bold to break all limits.

But then she understood ke yeh unka beintehaa pyaar tha and Naina and Raj really love each other a lot!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 - yeh finally she had to agree it was only love and nothing else

She agreed to help Naina out aur kaha ke hamesha uska saath degi!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊Neelu is really a true friend!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 - one she treasures

Raj toh khushi khushi ghar aa raha tha ,agar Gehlot ne pakad liya aur puccha ke kaha se tasreef la rahe hai sahabzade!!!!😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 - maza aaya aakhir baap ne ose pakar he liya itne dino ke baad

Raj toh pakda gaya!!!😛 😛 😛 😛Too bad!!! This is just like a movie!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj ne kaha woh aa nahi raha hai balki jogging karne jaa raha hai!!!!😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 - the best excuse ever

Gehlot ne kaha ke woh bhi saath aayenge!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲Raj toh phas gaya!!!! Bechara!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔Kapde bhi change karne nahi diye!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 - hehehhee well in a way he deserved it for lying

This reminds me of Salman Khan and Anupam Kher in Jab Pyaar Kisise Hota hai!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 - once again our minds think alike

Raj should have thought of a better excuse!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒He is tired and wants to sleep now!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊Poor Raj!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 - bechaara itne excersie karega to aisa hee hoga na

Raj ke dad toh jogging pe uski acchi waat laga rahe hai!!!!😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆Raj is just dragging himself along and thinking ke Gehlot usse todna chahte hai!!!! - aakhir wo bhi oska baap hai and knows everything

Raj tried to take the next step but fell into and muddy puddle and became the laughing stock of the children!!!😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆Poor Raj!!!! - yeh poor him but it was hillarious

Raj ne kal raat bahut exercise kar li thi ke ab kuch bacha hi nahi!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳Itni exercise ke baad toh koi bhi jog nahi kar sakta!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 - very true my dear

Ghehlot bhi sab samaj gaye ke raat bhar woh kisi ladki ke saath tha!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😛 - he is his father

Gehlot put his arms around Raj's shoulder and made Raj wince out in pain because Naina's nail marks were still quite fresh!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ - too bad

Raj tried to hide but Gehlot said ke agar bata dete toh ab tak shaadi bhi ho jaati tab Raj kood pada apni jagah se!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - too excited to wait

Pehle toh bahut na na kar raha tha aur ab pakda gaya!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😛Raj ko bahut jaldi hai shaadi ki!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊 - of course now he cant stay without Naina

Gehlot is the most understanding papa!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊And he agreed to the wedding without any chahos!!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊 - wonderful dad

He knew that Raj had spent the night with a girl but he was cool about it!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 - well Raj is old enuf and responsible to kya kare he had to agree

Its so embarrasing but at least he is ready to get him married to the girl of his choice!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊He is a gem!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 - he loves his son a lot

Magar he still made Raj complete his round of the park!!!!😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - yeh oskee saza thi

Naina's mom and dad are back!!!😛 😛 😛 😛Thats great!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 - yippeee

Mira is already suspecting something!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛She is too clever!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊Naina ke chehre ka glow is really giving her away but aleast even Mira is happy!!!! 😊 😊 😊 - hmmm yeh mothers are mothers after all

Naina's parents had come and now everything in her life is perfect just as it should have been!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 - yes it is

Naina shopping kum aur Raj ka inetzarr zyada kar rahi hai aur Raj soch raha hai ke woh sach much shopping kar rahi hai aur socha ke uski khabar lega!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 - hehhe two of a kind

Raj is now admiring her in a blue halter neck dress!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳Wow!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊Naina is really looking beautiful!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 - she sure is

This is the first time he saw her in that??😕 😕 😕 😕 - hmmm well yeah coz before she didnt reall ywear sich revealing dresses only after the europe trip

Navin manane ki koshish kar raha hai par Naina aur Ritu toh uski baat hi nahi sun rahe hai!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 - yeh they are pretty mad

Woh unke bulane pe nahi aaya magar Jenny ke bulane pe aa gaya!!!! Very bad!!!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒 - hehehe that was jusy funny

Raj ne socha ke Navin is stalking them and tried holding him and threatening him!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛This is too funny!!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 - it sure is and i can see u had a ball

Raj toh Navin ki ek baat bhi nahi sun raha hai aur yeh bhi keh diya ke Naina se dur rahe as she is his girl!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - go on Raj the possesive one

Navin bhi Raj ko ullu banake chala gaya!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😛 😛 😛Aur Naina ke paas bhagte bhagte gaya!!!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - or kya karta bechaara

Ab Raj punched Navin and people are staring and Naina came just then and is horrified to see all this!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲 - very bad of Raj

Bechara Raj!!!! Apne honewaale Brother-in-law ke saath aisi first meeting!!!!!!😕 😕 😕 😕 😕Poor him!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 - bechaara hamesha phas jaata hai

When he knew the truth not a single proper word was coming out of his mouth!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛How can he hit his brother-in-law!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 - phas gaya na

Raj ab Navin ko manane gaya toh Navin dono ko leke nikalne ke chakkar mein hai aur Naina ki baat hi nahi sun raha hai!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - the way Raj came onto him he was bound be scared of him

Naina told Navin she loved Raj and Navin was shocked and Raj then stumbled and fell just on top of Navin!!!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 - what a meeting

Raj is just so scared that he is stammering and Navin is just scaring him!!!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣Poor Raj!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 - hehehe Navin is having fun doing that

Naina ke saamne toh bahut badi badi baatein karta hai aur suke bhai ke saamne sitti pitti gum!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - come on kiskee nahi hogi after all wo Naina ka bhai hai or impression to bura hogaya na

Naina knew Navin will approve Rajveer because she loved him but she is hoping that Raj does not goof up!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 😆 😆 😆 😆 - yeh coz she knows he is famous for that

Raj apna naam bhi theek se nahi bol paa raha hai aur nahi kaam!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 - bechaara gaya kaam se

Phir Raj said everything in one breath and then Navin laughs and hugs him!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊So sweet!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 - hmmm it is sweet as he is a nice guy and can see nicness in people

Navin has to give the dramatic pause!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊 - it is there everywhere

Navin kehta hai agar uski behen ko kabhi bhi rulaya toh he will kill him!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 - just like a protective big brother

Raj laughed but then stopped seeing Navin's serious face and gave a sheepish look but then Navin also burst out laughing!!!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 - he loves this guy

Navin bhi naa!!!😛 😛 😛 😛Khamokha Raj ko darata rehta hai!!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 - ab bara bhai hai to robe to jama na hee hoga naa

The meeting of Raj with his would be brother-in-law was hillarious and just awesome!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 - thanks im glad u loved it and had a gr8 laugh

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Part 17

Rajveer was on the top of the world as everything was going as he wanted. His dad had agreed with the alliance and now Navin also was alright with it. Now all that needed was to convince Naina's parents which he thought won't be a big thing. He thought that the brother in law was quite easy to please then her parents would certainly be easy going people. After the shopping mall incident Naina was taken home by Navin and Rajveer wasn't able to talk to her since and now it was the middle of the night and he couldn't rest until he met her. He tried her phone but it kept coming switched off. Now he really had to meet her so he decided he would just go to her house.

Ahluwalia residence

Here Naina also lay in her bed wide awake thinking about Rajveer. She remembered everything from the beginning of how she had met him on the tour and he had been a stranger and then how she kept meeting him constantly as if it was destiny and soon she fell in love with him. Then she remembered the horrible stage of their relationship of how one small misunderstanding created such a big chaos and made both of their lives hell. Then she remembered how he made everything well again and finally they were together now. This is how she wanted to be always and she promised herself that she won't let anything crash their relation now. She would make sure she held onto Rajveer like super glue if she had to but she won't let him loose from her.

She got up and stood by the window and then looked out and got a fright.

Naina: Aaaaaaah! (held onto her heart and then intook breath) Rajveer tum! Yaha kya karahe ho? (she was shocked to see him sitting on the tree out of her room as if he was sitting on a comfortable sofa or something)

Rajveer: Computer claases ke liye aaya hu (made a face) Are tumse milne aaya hu

Naina: Raat ke dair baje hai or tum yaha mujhse milne aaye ho (looks around) Agar bhaiya ya ma papa ne tumhe dekh liya na to samjho sab kuch khatam. Tum jao yahase Raj…

Rajveer: Me tumse yaha pe milne aaya hu or tum mujhe yahase jaane ke liye kehrahee ho. Me tumhe jo kehne aaya hu wo keh bina nahi jaaunga

Naina: Raj please…dekho jo kehna hai wo mujhe kal keh dena lekin abhi please yahase jao (she was nervous as she could hear some shuffling noises out of her room)

Rajveer: Maine kaha na me jo kehne aaya hu wo keh bina nahi jaaunga (made a cute child like face)

Naina: (gave up seeing the face) theek hai jaldi batao kya kehna hai

Rajveer: Me yeh kehne aaya tha ke…tum aaj subhe aise hee kese chaleegayee? You didn't even call me once

Naina: yehi baat karne aaye the tum is waqt?

Rajveer: Lagta hai ab tumhe meree koi parwa hee nahi. (he sulked and kept acting like a kid who just lost his candy)

Naina: (laughed) tum bhi na Raj, koi bacche se kam nahi…Okays I'm sorry (held her ears) wo kya huwa ke jab me ghar aayee to mere phone kee battery khatam hogayee or oske baad me bhool gayee or…

Rajveer: Tumhaaree wajese me abhi tak chain se nahi betha hu or tum ho ke bhool hee gayee. Sach me tumhe ab meree koi parwa hee nahi

Naina: (leaned outside and was able to touch him and pulled both his cheeks just like of a chubby kid) Oh my poor baby, bohat naraaz ho kya?

Rajveer: (wrapped his arms around her neck) Wo to bus tumhe itne kareeb lane ke liye kiya tha. Ab koi problem nahi

Naina: Ek number ke deewaane ho tum jaante ho?

Rajveer: bachpan se! (he laughed and began getting closer to her to get a kiss when she heard her mother's voice)

Mira: Naina!

That alarmed both and Naina came inside quickly but Rajveer lost his balance and slipped off the branch and crashed down into the bush making a noise. She bit her lip and winced as she saw it must have hurt him a lot.

Mira: Kya huwa Naina, yeh awaaz kesee thee? (she was in her room now and heard the crashing noise in the bushes)

Naina: (turned towards her mother nervously and tried hiding the window so she wouldn't come and check) k…k..kuch nahi ma wo bus ek…ek kaala kawwa agaya tha ose bagha rahee thee

Mira: Kawwa? Raat ko?

Naina: Wahi to ma, me bhi wahi soch rahee thee ke wo yaha kese agaya isilye ose bhagha rahee thee. Lagta hai wo neeche gir gaya

Mira: (found the story strange but agreed to it anyhow) Theek hai tu khirkee seedhee tarhase band karde or soja itnee raat hogayee hai

Naina: Ji ma. (she waited for her to leave and then quickly looked down to find Rajveer) Raj…Raj! Tum theek to ho na?

Rajveer: (emerged from out from the bush with leaves stuck all over him) Ha me theek hu. Are Naina jo baat me kehne aaya tha wo keh hee nahi paaya.

Naina: Wo jo bhi hai kal kehna, please Raj is waqt tum jao warna ma phirse aajehgee or phir…

Rajveer: Naina ab hame koi alag nahi karsakta (he blew her a kiss and she smiled back at him for being so sweet)

Next morning

This morning both Rajveer and Naina felt as if they were reborn. Everything around them felt as if it was new and they were seeing it for the first time. They saw magic in the air and it was a new beginning.

As he woke up he felt like dancing and singing and as he did that he thought about Naina.

Rajveer: aatee hai wo aise chalke, jese jannat me rehtee hai

Dekhtee hai sabko aise jese sabko wo sehtee hai

Per ghusse me jab aaye, or aakhe jab dikhlaaye

Larte larte ghalti se muskaaye

He grabbed the pillow and hugged it and began swaying around with it

Rajveer: My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

Similar scenario was happening with Naina in her room where she also was dancing and singing around thinking about Rajveer.

Naina: Kartee hu jab osse baate, lagta hai sone waala hai

Soke jab jabhi wo jaage, lagta hair one waala

Per chupke se wo aaye, bina neend se mujhe jagaye

Le baaho me or khud hee girjaaye

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

Rajveer had a quick shower and once he was out he remained in a towel and began remembering all the incidents he had with Naina from the beginning. The first meeting with her, the constant fighting and then the cute encounters and then how it all turned into love. It was just amazing and he felt like on cloud nine. She certainly was different from everybody.

Rajveer: Ha wo na, na kartee hai, ha bara akar tee hai

Ha thori se ziddee hai, ha akkal se pitti hai

He went left and right in his room


Jaate hai sab baaye, daaye wo jaatee hai

Teree in baato se mujhe satatee hai

Her waqt se pehle aana, sunna na koi bahana

he checked his watch and saw he was getting pretty late and Naina would be waiting for him.

Per dekhna mera rasta rozaana

Then he began getting changed quickly

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

Naina was also getting ready quickly but she was finding a hard time choosing what to wear as she kept rejecting from Rajveer's point of view. Finally she decided on wearing black jeans and a red blouse knowing that he loved red.

Rajveer was all ready spick and span and he was giving himself final touches. He took the same amount of time getting ready as women and Sameera often teased him about it but he always replied that a man has to always look good on display. Now he only wanted to look good for Naina. As he looked in the mirror he got images of her as if he was watching a movie.

Rajveer: ha thori alag see hai, ha thori ghalat see hai

She also got images of him as she got changed

Naina: ha thora alag sa hai, ha thora ghalat sa hai

Rajveer: Aisee bhi hogi wo, aisa na socha tha

Naina: haaisa hee hoga wo, aisa hee socha tha

Kyu lagta hai yeh apna

Rajveer: yeh sach hai ya hai sapna

Naina: darr lagta hai kahi hona jaaye chuuuuuu

She collected her bag and did a silent prayer before leaving her room

When Rajveer came out he met Sameera on the way so he began dancing around with her twirling her around surprising her but she knew why he was so happy early in the morning.

Both: My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

As both of them were making their way to meet each other they could hear the whole world singing along with them.

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

My dil goes mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

When Naina crossed Navin's room she heard many noises inside so she went there and found him lying on the bed with her mother and Ritu fussing over him. She became worried and also went inside.

Naina: Kya huwa bhaiya ko?

Ritu: Are kuch nahi bus halka sa fever hai because someone was too smart and didn't listen to me

Navin: I didn't need to listen kyu ke maine jo kiya wo theek hee kiya. Or yeh oskee wajese nahi huwa or…(he coughed)

Naina: bhaiya aap ziada baat mat kijye. Aap ko aaraaam kee zaroorat hai

Mira: Aisee haalat me, me baahar nahi jaasakti. Aisa kartee hu ke yahi rehtee hu tere saath….

Navin: (panicked as if he was hiding something) Nahi…nahi…ma aap kyu rehtee hai. I'm fine or phir Ritu hai na mera khayaal rakhne ke liye.

Mira: Per beta yeh akele kitna kuch karegee or phir…

Navin squeezed Ritu's hand discretely to make her understand to make his mother leave. She winced slightly and then looked over at him with wide eyes as to what was he doing.

Navin: Ritu kaho na ma se tum mera khayaal acchee tarhase rakhogee (signalled with his eye to do as he said)

Ritu: (kept looking at Navin with disbelief as she understood he was doing this on purpose) ha..ha… ma me iska khayaal acchee tarhase rakhungee. Aap jaaye.

Naina saw their camaraderie and gave a mischievous grin. Navin certainly was a master in acting as he always had been doing it since childhood.

Naina: Ha or ma, me bhi hu na yaha to me bhi khayaal rakhungee bhaiya ka. Aap jaaye

She gave a wicked grin at Navin who glared back at her as he knew she also was teasing him on purpose.

Navin: Ab tujhe aisa karne kee kya zaroorat hai, mere liye Ritu kaafi hai, Tujhe yaha rehne kee koi zaroorat nahi

Naina: Aisa kese hosakta hai bhaiya, apakee tabiyat theek nahi or me aap ko chore ke chalee jao. Me yahee rahungee

Navin: (gave a weak smile and then pouted at Naina who just kept smiling) Me samajhta hu Naina per is baar mujhe itnee dekh baal kee zaroorat nahi. Me tera din kharaab nahi karna chahta. Tu jaa….

Mira: Navin, Naina theek kehrahee hai, is haalat me acha hai ke wo bhi yahi rahe. Ritu ko madad mil jaaehgee.

He was left with little choice and had to agree with the women. Once Mira left he sat up and charged on Naina.

Navin: Meree taang keech ne ke ilawa tere paas or koi kaam nahi?

Naina: Kaam to bohat hai bhaiya per aap wo karne hee nahi dete

Navin: (confused) ab kya kiya maine tere saath?

Naina: Me jaantee hu bhaiya kal aapne mujhe jaan bujke Rajveer ke paas nahi rehne diya or oske baad mujhe oske saath baat bhi nahi karne dee to phir how could I let you have fun?

Navin: Dekh meree Ritu ke saath mangni ho chukee hai or tera oske saath kuch bhi nahi

Naina: To iska matlab aapko license milgaya or mujhe nahi? Oh you'd be surprised what we've already done which gives us every right to be together… (she bit her lip realising she almost revealed something which she shouldn't have and she hoped Navin didn't recognise it)

Navin: Kya matlab hai tera? (got up and became tensed) Aisa kya kardiya hai tum dono ne? kahi tu ne….

Naina: What bhaiya yeh kese sawaal pooch rahe hai aap (she spoke quickly to hide her red cheeks) theek hai aap bhabhi ke saath akele rehna chahte hai to fine, I'm leaving.

She quickly leaves before Navin could interrogate her further and would see how blushed she had become and then her secret would be out. I mean telling her friend about it was alright but telling it to your brother was too embarrassing.

Navin: I'm sure wo mujhse kuch chupa rahee hai

Ritu: Tum bhi na Navin kese sawaal pooch rahe the osse. You made her so embarrassed.

Navin: Per maine aisa kya kaha?

Ritu: tum ne…(sees he is so confused that she drops it) Forget it, tum nahi samjhoge. Ab chalo me chaltee hu (stands up to leave)

Navin: (prevents her way) eh hello kaha jaarahee ho? Abhi abhi tumne meree ma se kaha ke tum mera acchee tarhase khayaal rakohgee

Ritu: (wraps arms around his neck) darling, maine onse onke beemaar bete ka acchee tarhase khayaal rakhne ka kaha tha, or mujhe to yaha koi beemaar nahi lagraha to…

Navin: kisne kaha ke koi beemaar nahi. You're seeing a sick man right in front of you.

Ritu: acha? Zara me pooch sakti hu ke kounsee beemaari hai janab ko?

Navin: is beemaari ka naam hai loveria or iska sirf ek hee ilaaj hai

He came forward and whispered something in her ear. She went red as a tomato and threw him back and ran out of the room teasing him. He followed her out.

Meanwhile Naina had returned back to her room and then her phone rang and when she saw it was Rajveer she bit her tongue as she forgot he was waiting for her and now he would be really mad.

Naina: ha Raj I'm really sorry wo…

Rajveer: kya yaar Naina me yaha tumhaara aadhe ghante se intezaar karaha hu. Mujhe laga tha ke mujhe aaj phirse madam kee daat paregee dair se aane ke liye or yaha pe to wo khud hee ghum

Naina: wo kya huwa Raj ke me nikal ne hee waalee thee or phir bhaiya ne…

Rajveer: Kya, to kya saale ne tujhe phirse roke liya?

Naina: Raj don't insult him

Rajveer: kya? Ab saale ko saala nahi bulaaunga to kya bulaaunga? Come on Naina me yaha intezaar karaha hu, kya tum osse nahi kehsakti

Naina: yeh baat nahi hai Raj meree puri baat to suno. Dekho bhaiya kee tabiyat kharaab thee to onhe bahaar nahi jaana tha or phir…

Rajveer: hello? Hello Naina? Tumhaaree awaaz cut horahee hai, mujhe kuch theek tarhase sunai nahi de raha

Naina: Raj mujhe bhi nahi sunai derahee, hello? Hello…. Dekho Raj is waqt bhaiya ghar pe akele hai to me onke saath hu or…

Rajveer: kya? Tum ghar pe akelee ho…(eyes beamed up) fantastic, pehle kyu nahi bataya. Me abhi aaraha hu

Naina: are nahi Rajveer…(panicked) bhaiya…hello? Hello? Raj? Hello?

The phone was cut as Rajveer's battary ran out. He cursed it but nevertheless he was happy with the thought of being alone with her at her house. It was dangerous and exciting. Naina on the other hand was pacing up and down worrying about Rajveer coming over and Navin finding him here alone with him. She couldn't understand how to prevent it. She tried calling him back but it went in vain. Now she just had to wait for him and then tell him to leave because Navin was here too.

Ritu was in the kitchen busily looking for something when Navin sneaked inside from behind and grabbed onto her waist. She shrieked and told him to let her go but he refused so she pushed him off behind landing him against the cabinets on the otherside. He began singing and pleading

Navin:
Aan milo ya milne se inkaar karo. aan milo ya milne se inkaar karo.
Faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo
Faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo
(he holds her but she keeps pushing him off) Dil me rekhar baat asar kho bethe gee(he holds her but she keeps pushing him off)
Dil me rekhar baat asar kho bethe gee
Dil me rekhar baat asar kho bethe gee
Hooth hai chup to aakho se ikraar karo
Hooth hai chup to aakho se ikraar karo


Ritu:
(smiled and waved the spatula in front of him) Khullam khulla na aise izhaar karo
Khullam khulla na aise izhaar karo
Chori chori jo karna hai yaar karo
Chori chori jo karna hai yaar karo
Deewaane ho deewaana pan karte ho
(she begins cooking something and pushing him off her) Deewaane ho deewaana pan karte ho
Deewaane ho deewaana pan karte ho
Jao jao aise na takraar karo
Jao jao aise na takraar karo


Navin: hey aan milo ya milne se inkaar karo.
Faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo
(he keeps coming in her way and preventing her from working.

She managed to push him out of the kitchen. A while later he comes through the kitchen window which is right next to the stove. Ritu has just finished cooking.

Navin:
Bechain me hu betaab tum ho
dekho na aise na na karo


Ritu: Samjho meri kya majbooriya hai
choro na aise aahe bharo
(she leaves the kitchen and he follows)

Navin: Dard e jigar kese sahoo
me tere bin kese rahoo.


Ritu is searching for the remote of the tv and Navin is watching her from a corner.

Ritu:
Aise chup chup ke na tum deedaar karo
ha aise chup chup ke na tum deedaar karo
thora thero phir jee bhar ke pyaar karo
ha thora thero phir jee bhar ke pyaar karo


Navin comes and grabs her and prevents her from doing anything.

Navin:
Dil me rekhar baat asar kho bethe gee
Dil me rekhar baat asar kho bethe gee
Dil me rekhar baat asar kho bethe gee
Hooth hai chup to aakho se ikraar karo


Ritu: Hmm chori chori jo karna hai yaar karo
(she pushes him off again and he follows)

Navin:
aan milo ya milne se inkaar karo

Ritu: Khullam khulla na aise izhaar karo


Meanwhile Rajveer arrives outside Ahluwalia residence and drives through the drive way and sees her in through her room window. he climbs up towards it and jumps in, hands her the flowers and gives her a kiss on the cheek.

She accepts it absent mindedly but after the kiss realises what happened and is shocked to find him already in her room.

She goes towards him in order to tell him to go but he grabs her waist tight

Naina:
Acha nahi hai itna satana
achee nahi yeh deewaanagi


Rajveer: Kese bhujao bhujti nahi hai
yeh pyaas kesee mann me jagee


Naina:
(manages to push him away) Paagal bare tum ho sanam (he tickles her) Chero na yu, tumko kasam

She is going but he grabs onto her hand and pulls her towards him on the bed

Rajveer:
Paas betho baate tum do chaar karo
Paas betho baate tum do chaar karo


Naina:
(gets up to leave the room) thora thero phir jee bhar ke pyaar karo ha

Rajveer: (follows her out) faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo

Naina: Deewaane ho deewaana pan karte ho
Deewaane ho deewaana pan karte ho
Deewaane ho deewaana pan karte ho
jao jao aise na takraar karo
are jao jao aise na takraar karo


Downstairs Navin is following Ritu around

Navin:
Aan milo ya milne se inkaar karo
faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo


Ritu: Khullam khulla na aise izhaar karo
chori chori jo karna hai yaar karo


Naina and Rajveer come downstairs

Rajveer:
Paas betho baate tum do chaar karo
faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo


Naina: Aise chup, chup ke na tum deedaar karo
thora thero phir jee bhar ke pyaar karo


Navin: are aan milo ya milne se inkaar karo
faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo


Ritu: Khullam khulla na aise izhaar karo
chori chori jo karna hai yaar karo


They walk through a room

Rajveer: faisla jo bhi karna ek baar karo

Naina: chori, chori jo karna hai yaar karo


Somehow Ritu and Naina get exchanged without knowing. By the end Rajveer hugs Ritu from the back and she thinks its Navin

Naina runs into Navin and is surprised that he's down there. Then they are surprised to find Rajveer hugging Ritu

Naina:
Rajveer!

Rajveer opens his eyes and finds a mortified Naina standing in front of him. He lets go of Ritu immediately going red with embarrassment and stands there awkwardly. All of them keep staring at each other as if asking what were you doing

Rajveer:
I think mujhe jaana chaheeye

He makes his way towards the door but unfortunately comes across Naina's parents

Rajveer: (absent mindedly)
Namaste

He's walking away when Naina's father catches his arm and holds him back

Father:
Kaun ho tum or yaha kya karahe ho?

Navin: (under his breath) margaye

Rajveer: ji...me...me...wo...me...

Ritu: (whispers) Navin jaake Rajveer ko bachao

Navin: Paagal hogayee ho agar ma ne mujhe yaha dekhliya to meree to aaj chuttee hogi hee or me Rajveer ke liye bhi kuch nahi karpaaoonga

Father: Yaha kya karahe ho tum?

Rajveer: Ji me wo... bij...bij...li dekhne aaya tha to wo...

Father: Bijli lekin hamne to koi complaint nahi kee thee

Rajveer: nahi...me...me...wo...bijli (thniks what to say ) bijli ba....ha beichne aaya tha.

Father: bijli beichne aaye the? (looks around) tumhaara saamaan to nahi dikhraha

Navin bursts out laughing Ritu gets annoyed at him

Rajveer: (panicks)
s...s... saammaan...ha saara...ch...chori hogaya

Father: (looks at him and senses something fishy) sach sach batao kaun ho tum

Naina: Papa wo ye...

Father: Maine sawaal isse poocha hai Naina. Tu beechme mat bole

Naina: lekin papa yeh...

Father: Bus Naina tu andar jaa

Naina has no choice, she gives Rajveer a sorry look and goes inside. Rajveer tries to escape but Naina's father is adamant.

Father:
Tum batate ho ke me police ko phone karu

Rajveer: Rajveer mera ji naam papa Gehlot ka naam beijhte bijli nahi bohat koi hamara Naina karobaar bara pyaar shaadi hai karta chahta karna hu

Father:
kya?

Rajveer: (gulped and spoke in one breath) Ji mera naam Rajveer hai or mere papa lala Gehlot hai or hum koi bijli nahi beichte hamara bara karobaar hai or me Naina se bohat pyaar karta hu or shaadi karna chahta hu

saying that he runs away from there before her father can blast him with anymore questions.

Both the parents are left standing there aghast at the young man's speech and couldn't believe their ears. They needed answers and shot a glance at Navin who stood with a guilty face.

End of part.

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